Approved Sheet Sivo Sagh "the Wandering Warrior"

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    ~ Sivo Sagh ~

    "The Wandering Warrior"
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    Credit: Helen / HelsFantasyArt
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    Credit: Microwavemmm

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    "I'll be the last one standing
    Two hands in the air, I'm a champion"

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    Basic Information
    • Full Name: Sivo Sagh
    • Alias: María Cruz
    • Previous Name(s): Sivo Driss
    • Age: 46
    • Age Appearance: About 20
    • Gender: Female
    • Race: Brannon Ailor
    • Culture: Anglian / Daendroque
    • Sexuality: Straight
    • Status: Married to Rhys Sagh
    • Preferred Weapon: Steel shortsword.
    Inventory Information
    • Steel Shortsword, with a carving in the hilt saying "Nothing is truly real until one is willing to believe in it." It belonged to her father. It was also updated to have engravings of gears by Rhys.
    • Halfbody Shield made of Laqorian Steel and wood. The shield appears to have been painted and tainted to be black and purple with an engraving of a purple cog on the front.
    • Gauntlet with two yellow crystals on her hand.
    • A small satchel on her belt holding a small amount of coins.
    • A necklace around her neck that has an emblem of a replica of her shortsword and a red gem the shape of a blood drop on the end of it. It hides under her armor.
    • A ring hidden under her right gauntlet. Ring would have a red gem covered by a sword that looks like her father's.
    • Usually carries Regals on her in one pouch on her belt. "Don't put all your eggs in one basket" never occured to the Brannon Ailor.
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    "You'll be looking up at me when it's over.
    I live for the battle, I'm a soldier."
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    Skill Information

    Total Points: 50 Points, 10 Talent, 10 Hobby
    • Combat
    • 20 Sword Combat (+20 Proficiency Points)
    • 20 Shielding Combat (+15 Proficiency Points, +5 Brannon Prof Boost)
    • 10 Fist Combat (+10 Proficiency Points)
    • Command
    • 5 Frontline Command (+5 Proficiency Points)
    • Talents and Hobbies
    • 10 Dancing Art (+10 Hobby Points)
    • 5 Stealth Rogue (+5 Talent Points)
    • 5 Burgling Rogue (+5 Talent Points)

    Body Shape
    • 30 Physical Stat (Capped at 30, 55 without cap)
    • Muscular
    • Built Body Fat
    • 5'9
    • Weighs 160 Pounds
    Languages
    • Common (Learned from Childhood)
    • Daendroquin (Learned from Mother)
    • Faraddi (Learned from Rhys)

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    "I've been working my whole life.
    And now it's do or die"

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    Special Traits/Spells/Mutations

    Von Kërle Bloodline

    Common Bloodline Vampire Mutations
    • Immortal Aging - Does not age physically.
    • Belliard Monster - Hands and forearms immune to Puretek Shots
    • Drachenwald Cur - Can sense Dragon Warriors and Dragon Souls
    • Karmark Feeding - Partial paralysis on victim when feeding
    • Karmark Body - Phys Stat 30, Can eat/drink normal food, normal reproduction, red eyes+pale skin, can see in darkness, visible teeth at 3 blocks range.
    • Karmark Power - Immune to abilities that remove prof points or phys stat, can choose 1 spell to dispell per day, immune to toxins, acid, or poisons
    • Karmark Form - Mythic Shift (Vampire Form) - Also allows extension of claws to climb walls of any height, won't take fall damage if jumped off of willingly- even when not in beast form.
    5 Chosen Bloodline Mutations
    • Karmark Shroud - For every second attack made on the Vampire that draws blood, the Vampire can mend their wound with the blood or use the blood to create a throwing dagger.
    • Karmark Steel - Vampire can cut a bit of their flesh to cause blood to flow and create a suit of crimson-red armor out of it, it acts like normal steel armor although if pierced or damaged, it shatters.
    • Karmark Bones - Skeleton wall ward with spears that attack anyone near, but is immobile.
    • Karmark Shred - Mythic shift that changes legs and hands into beastly-looking, unable to wield weapons but claws can pierce armor up to chainmail. Can outrun any race besides Varran, matched speed. Can be used instantly but cannot be reused within 10 secs of being removed.
    • Karmark Song - Vampire can summon a blood sung weapon with the force of steel. If the weapon leaves their hand, it disappears and cannot be resummoned for 20 seconds. They can explode it, knocking everyone around the vampire within 8 blocks by 3. It will go on 1 hour cool down if exploded.

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    "I am invincible, unbreakable
    Unstoppable, unshakeable.
    They knock me down, I get up again"

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    Visual Information
    • Eye Color: Crimson red
    • Hair Color: Dark brown
    • Hair Style: Short, normally tied back
    • Skin Color: Pale
    • Clothing: Wears a set of half-plate Blacksteel armor painted gold with a crimson cape clipped on her armor with a golden-painted cog. She has a clockwork gauntlet on both hands with two yellow cores.
    • Height: 5'9
    Karmark Form:
    • Eye Color: Red with black eye whites, slitted like tiger eyes.
    • Skin Color: Paler then usual, almost white with light grey 'tattoos' making a tiger-like pattern on the skin.
    • Other features:
      • Small spikes that form around the jawline, down the neck slightly.
      • Tiger-like appendages forming from the head, and a tiger-like tail but white with grey markings
      • Eyes are slitted like tiger eyes but still red.
      • Patch of white fur resembling her hair but shorter on the top of her head with light grey tiger stripe markings.
      • Large cat-like teeth replacing her own teeth, much like tiger teeth. However they only function like vampire teeth.
      • Light grey claws that are retractable.
      • When she shifts into Shred form, her hands appear more like Asha paws as they gain white tiger-striped fur with retractable claws, her legs become digigrade and covered in white tiger fur with light grey stripes, her feet become more paw-like with paw-pads but function like normal feet.
      • When Sivo makes a pained or angry noise, it normally sounds tiger-like, she's capable of roars, chuffs, and other tiger noises.
      • Unless Sivo is seen shifting to this form or is known in this form, she would not appear very recognizable in it.
      • [Picture Reference is used at the very top of the page, Sivo in Karmark form on the right.]

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    "I am the CHAMPION!"
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    Personality and Abilities

    The Core List

    • Choose your Character Alignment
      • Chaotic Neutral "Although chaotic neutral characters promote the ideals of freedom, it is their own freedom that comes first; good and evil come second to their need to be free."
    • Choose your Character Personality Type
      • The Commander "Decisive people who love momentum and accomplishment. They gather information to construct their creative visions but rarely hesitate for long before acting on them."
    • Choose your Character's Religion
      • None "I bow to no god because no one was there when I was at my lowest. Who needs them? I create my own luck. I create my own path."
    Personality Expansion
    • How would your character express Happiness and Contentedness?
      • Sivo would normally express happiness and contentedness in a very conserved manner, sometimes with a smile but she would normally be kept pretty calm. However, if she feels close/comfortable with who she's around, she would express it quite well, with a grin, a hug, and an appreciative tone.
    • How would your character respond to experiencing Fear?
      • In the highest amount of fear, Sivo would be panic stricken and would react irrationally, by fight- rather then flight. She would either injure or restrain those causing her the distress. In a moderate amount of fear, Sivo would appear calm but she would normally clench her fists, just as if she was angry, as if to almost 'recreate' a channel of anger to assist her by providing adrenaline if needed. In a very minor amount of fear, she would be uncomfortable, yet wouldn't act irrationally. Her responses would be short and to the point.
    • How would your character respond to experiencing Stress?
      • She handles stress pretty poorly, usually topped with anger. If stressed out to a good degree, she will fight back against those causing her stress. Her responses would be short, to the point, and her voice would raise. She would ball her hands up in a fist and prepare for a storm.
    • How does your character view Law and Authorities?
      • Law and authority means literally nothing to Sivo. She disrespects law and authority and would rather spit in their face then bow down. If it was an authority figure in her own coven- however- she would feel a drive to defend them against anything that may happen. She still would refuse to bow to an authority figure in her own coven. The only one able to properly manipulate her would be Rhys- or someone using Rhys as a tool to control her.
    • How does your character feel about Races other than their own?
      • She doesn't care about other /races/ persay, from Ailor to Qadir, to any other race. She is, however 'racist' towards humans, often speaking down to them like they mean no more to her then cattle. Recently, however, she gained a hatred towards Songaskians for what they did to Rhys' race, and Kathar for her poor history with them. She favors Qadir and Ailor.
    • How does your character feel about Religion for themselves, and other faiths?
      • Religion also means nothing to her. She knows there are greater powers but refuses to bow to them or praise them. She doesn't believe in luck or a 'path' in life. She believes life is chosen by the individual, not anything or anyone else.
    • How does your character feel about the Arcane and Magical in the world?
      • She isn't bothered by it, nor is she really that infatuated with it. She believes it is part of the natural world and doesn't really need to be addressed.
    • How does your character feel towards their family?
      • She was a lone child, but she loved her parents more then anything. They raised her well and she respected them and cared for them. When she was 16 and older, she believed they deserved protection from her, as they were getting older and weaker. She still blames herself for what happened to them.
    • What is your character the most proud of about themselves?
      • Sivo is most proud of her strength and ability in combat. She will always be proud of it, although she knows she can always improve: and she is doing so. She trains daily and makes sure she stays ready for anything. She can be a bit of a perfectionist or be known as harsh due to her methods.
    • What motivates your character to move forward and better their life?
      • What motivates Sivo is the fact that she wishes to be the best at combat she possibly can be. She trains and trains and works to better herself and her gear to her greatest ability. Now, her motivation is also driven by Rhys, who she works to better herself for him and herself, whatever it takes.
    • What is your character's biggest insecurity?
      • However, her biggest pride is also her biggest insecurity. She believes she is weak and needs to improve- constantly. If she loses a fight, she takes it to heart and works twice as hard. If she appears weak in another's eyes, she will work to fix that, no matter the cost at times.
    • What is your character's biggest fear?
      • Sivo's biggest fear, ironically, is Rhys. She fears clockwork and what it can (and has) done to him. She's afraid he might snap again one day and she would lose him, and possibly herself in the process. She also fears him in a degree of, she knows he is stronger then her by a longshot... And yet she tries to keep that to herself and tries to drill into his mind that she is stronger to prevent him taking advantage of her. In a way, manipulative, but mostly in fear of him turning on her as he is very close to her and could destroy her both mentally and physically if he wanted to.
    Best Reference for Sivo's personality (and build)
    Cara Dune from the Mandalorian

    Likes
    • She also likes to hunt and fight. She's a bit of an adrenaline junkie and fulfills those needs with combat.
    • Sivo loves a good challenge, sparring, and the strong. Anyone able to hold their own has a place for respect in her eyes.
    • Finally, Sivo also likes reading about military tactics, strategies, commands, and formations. She enjoys war and combat.
    Dislikes
    • Sivo hates slavers and slavery in general. Everyone deserves freedom in her eyes, except for 'lessers'. In turn, she highly dislikes most Songaskians.
    • She also hates cowards and somewhat dislikes the weak. Unless they have a reason to be.
    • Finally, like any other vampire, she hates were-beasts. She finds them to be smelly, animalistic, clumsy, and generally annoying. She hates them even more now that she was captured and tortured by them for weeks.

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    "You're gonna know my name
    You can't hurt me now"

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    Life Story

    Backstory In-Game Development

    Age 0 - 20
    It started with a love story. Her mother came from a Daendroque culture, and while her father was overseas, he fell in love with her. She came home to him to the farm in his Anglian lifestyle, and shortly after, Sivo was born. She was born in a small village, on farmland in Anglia, living an Anglian lifestyle. She helped on the farm, taking care of the animals they raised and sometimes tending to crops. Her mother, María Cruz, taught her acceptance and kindness, teaching her morals and made her take dancing lessons for grace,
    as well as her Native Language, Daendroque. Her father, Casper Driss, taught her how to defend herself and their farm, teaching her how to use a sword and a shield, although this was looked down upon in the Anglian culture since she was a woman.

    Age 20
    She came home from an exploration trip with her horse on a relaxing Sunday and found the farmhouse and the barn was in ash, loose fires scattered around the farmland. She hopped off her horse and fell to her knees. Everything she knew is gone. What happened? She thought. She believed it was her fault for leaving the farm to explore, as she could have been there to protect her family... Who she believed to be dead. Sivo hopped back on her horse and they ran. They ran as far as she could, with only her father's sword in its holster. Upon crying on horseback for hours, she eventually fell asleep. She woke up on her horse's back, Midnight, whom was feasting on some grass. She found she was surrounded by trees, no clue in the world where she was.


    Sivo continued exploring until she heard the clacking of horseshoes around her. Surrounded by people with cloaks and swords surrounded her. They charged at her, swiping their swords. She parried the first blow, but then the second blow from another sword knocked her off her horse. Bandits! Midnight, spooked, fled into the woods, leaving her master helpless on the ground. Sivo sheathed her sword, standing her ground. "Come on!" She screamed out, giving in to her rage and the cruel world around her.

    One of the men hopped off his horse, the others standing their ground around her. The midnight moon reflected off his iron armor. Sivo observed her surroundings, strategizing an escape as the man approached her. His armor clanked and creaked as he walked forth, his sword shining with ill intents. She stood her ground, her green eyes glowing in the night, holding her sword out defensively when - as if a sign from the gods, the sound of clanking echoed through the woods as another group cut through the bandits. They moved with great speed, ripping through the band of humans, blood stinking the area... What were these things? She was jumped by one of the humanoid creatures, feeling sharp teeth breaking through her skin. Sivo decided to fight off the attacker, but she couldn't, paralyzed in her place. Another approached her and clonked her on the head with the hilt of their sword and she fell unconscious.

    She found herself in a dark building on a soft bed, her head was pounding and she felt like she hasn't eaten or drank for months. She forced herself up and noticed her weapons still on the table beside her. She grabbed her sword, and opened the door to find a large open area, in almost a castle-like setting, surrounded in darkness. She decided to wandered around, to maybe find her captors.

    Age 20 - 23
    She met a few of the people who took her in, and found out she was cursed to live as a vampire, however she felt comfortable with the idea. With no where else to go she trained to defend her home... until yet again, it was taken from her. Hunters attacked the coven of Vampires and the home they lived in, and she fought fiercely against the group, but the overwhelming numbers forced her to flee. She watched many of the people she got to know- her friends- get slaughtered by the dozen. The screams still haunt her... The screams of the doomed. As she fled on foot into the woods, she took a cloak along with her, as well as a mask to hide her face - as she decided it was best to stay hidden from the eyes of hunters.


    Age 23 - 25
    Sivo, upon traveling, finally made it to Crookback. She liked the place and started observing the area for anyone she could feed on, as she was starving from traveling. She settled her sights on a young girl. She approached the girl and found the girl was named Illia and was looking for an Alchemy building. She was a healer. She pretended to know to get her alone and they ran into a person who was obviously a vampire. She decided to work with the man, whom she found was named Sylph. They worked all day to get the girl alone, and finally they succeeded. They knocked her out, took her somewhere private, and fed. Illia was aware of the experience.

    And as luck would have it, Sylph led a Coven and Sivo was invited as their warrior. Sivo proved her worth later down the line as she tried her hardest to defend Sylph against the guards as he got caught, eventually they got overwhelmed, resulting in Sivo's 2 broken arms and both of them getting cured. They eventually healed and got reinfected, and Sivo now spends her days defending the Coven and training to better herself day by day, in order to achieve being completely undefeatable.

    Upon even more recent events, Sivo met a man who wasn't infected who joined the Coven. His name was Rhys, and Sivo didn't care for him. He was all about his Clockwork and seemed weak physically, much like a scholar who keeps their noses in their books rather then breathing in the fresh air of life. However, as time went on, he was infected with vampirism. She heard it was the Cratos bloodline, and she didn't expect much from him, however hearing otherwise, she decided to spar Rhys.

    Rhys fought bravely and strong, she was highly impressed, and this was also the one time in her life as of now that she was lovestruck by any man. They shared combat skills, unable to best one another, and it excited her. As they spent more time together, she fell more and more for him until eventually, they decided to start being 'official'. They were the power couple, able to defend themselves against others in tough situations- and Sivo loved it. She found a purpose besides becoming the best at combat in life, and that purpose was Rhys... She would defend her purpose at all costs.

    Recently, Sivo has been investing a lot of her time with Rhys and further improving her combat. Rhys is teaching her his Native language, Faraddi, since the only language she knew was common. She is learning willfully, as the language interests her and she wishes to invest her time in learning a second language. Unfortunately, however Rhys and Sivo had broken up due to Sivo believing she was simply dragging him into her messes and she was tired of it. Sivo continued learning the language herself with books and a hired tutor. Sivo is currently focusing on her combat arts, putting herself out to Covens as a 'Von Kerle for hire' and also focusing on her practice in Faraddi. She is aligned to Scion currently, but an ally to most others.

    A couple months had past and Sivo decided Rhys wasn't getting any better- in fact he seemed to be getting worse. So they made up once more- under one condition, the relationship be kept a secret to the public view. That way, Rhys couldn't be pinned to her mistakes when she makes them. However, things got complicated as Sivo became pregnant with her new son, Rizu. They decided to 'officially' marry with the paperwork, but not hold a proper marriage to keep it hidden to the public eye, but not allow Rizu to be a 'bastard' by technical terms
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    Age 25 - 35
    Sivo had spent the last 14 years of her life raising Rizu to the boy he is now, as well as maintaining her relationship with her husband. She also spent time with her own combat, focusing her talents on her swordsmanship instead of her archery. The Von Kërle also took up learning how to properly use a shield, which to her surprise, she caught onto the skill fast. She had trained and trained, perfecting her skills to the best of her ability. She had also worked on her mentality, striving to rid of the blind anger that had engulfed her life... By giving in more and more to her bloodline, resulting in further loss of her humanity. She is on a downward spiral mentally... Feeling incapable of controlling her feelings anymore.

    Her husband, Rhys, snapped her out of her downward spiral and she learned to control her anger and emotions to some extent. She now focuses on mastering combat once more, by fighting for her coven and defending her title as Sivo Sagh, proud Von Kërle and Warrior of the Scion!

    Age 35 - CURRENT
    Sivo worked with the Scion for a few years. Within this time, her husband ended up departing from her coven to create his own. After Mirabella was captured and proved to be weak as an exchange was made for her safety with one of their coven members, Sivo decided to move on. She joined Rhys in her new coven, the Technocratic Collective. Sivo fit in well, as she automatically gained a pretty powerful position as she was married to the Desprince. She became the coven's new Combat Champion.

    As she spent time in the new coven, she decided to practice using unarmed combat to better protect herself in case things go awry. She trained and dueled as the Von Kërle learned to always do, and eventually became decently talented with her unarmed skill. After finally mastering, or at least close to mastering three different combative abilities, she finally feels confident in herself. However, the Von Kërle can never rest as she continues to better herself in her new coven, by her husband's side as the Champion she always hoped to be.

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    "I was made for this.
    I was born to win..."

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    Relationships
    Hated Disliked Neutral Liked Trusted Loved
    Respected: ★

    Rhys ★ : "Rhys is a great guy. He's very strong, and brave. I don't think I can ever stop loving him. He can be obsessive at times, but I can keep him in control of his actions if worse comes to worse."
    Rizu : "He is my child, I brought him into this world and I do care about him. Although as a teenager, he is drifting off on his own... I do notice these things, despite him thinking I do not. I will reiterate my point... I brought him into this world and I can take him out of it."

    Lock ★ : "He is my apprentice and I will do all I can to pass on my combat ability and discipline to him. I was assigned to him by Rhys and I accepted the challenge. He's a challenge indeed, but when he fails, it is not him failing me, it is me failing him."
    Firn : "An amusing ally and person, he is decent with combat from what I've seen and seems like an interesting character overall. He's a good comforter as well, if I'm feeling down, I seek him out. Firn may be a mundane, but he is my mundane."

    Lew : "I understand her pain but she also simply doesn't understand me and my ways. She has proven herself to me and she now falls under a friendship status."
    Zeriel ★ : "Zeriel has proven himself to be a powerful ally, in combat anyhow, as he has proven to even defeat me in a spar. However I do not trust him, due to our history, he is now on neutral terms with me... A truce persay."
    Donolin ★ : "He has saved my skin once or twice, assisted me in saving a Sanguine, and therefore he has gained my respect as a combatant and a person. He's a good addition to our coven."
    Clairess ★ : "She's a flirt. She's a little strange. But she helped me countless times and she's not a bad combatant despite her inferior bloodline."

    Amber : "She had betrayed Sanguine but she returned. I will keep a close eye on her. She already screwed up, she challenged me and Rhys both. She's not welcome in my eyes anymore. Archbloods can be cured, but their mentality cannot."
    The Sarcastic Zikiel : "He has a tongue on him and for that, he does gain a bit of respect from me. He also helped us re-capture a Sanguine using his fancy magic. He's helpful but he's an asshole... We may get along."
    Mirabella : "Combat-wise, she has yet to prove herself to me. As a leader, she is decent besides the fact that she needs to grow a backbone. Too peaceful in my eyes. She recently lost my respect as a coven leader as she proved to be far too weak as I suspected."
    Lyn : "She seems weak- but she tries. Therefore, I don't mind her existence but I have no will to fight for her. She has recently became a Von Kërle, thanks to me. I pray this makes her worthy of my time. She proved to be as weak as I feared... Not worth my time."
    Travai : "I met this guy at the Wraith, he didn't speak good common but I connected with him. He had a fighting spirit. I used to protect him, risking my own skin, but he insulted me and refused my protection. After all I did for him. A foolish mundane."
    Sylph : "He is full of himself and only cares for himself and Lew. He used Rhys and admitted to doing so. He is a fool, but a lucky fool. I care enough to not allow him to fall to the sword of justice that he likely deserves."

    Oldrich / Devourer of Souls ★ : "So... This is an interesting relationship. I have fought Oldrich, and he has fought me. I have protected Oldrich, and he has protected me. Highly a love hate relationship, but I do respect him as much as you could respect a shape shifting void creature that eats people
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    Daemon : "Strong and headstrong all the same. He stepped up to help me scare off Jamat and seemed like a viable combatant. He has broken my trust recently, and has proven to be no better then an animal."
    Meridian : "A coward. A weakling. A slizzar. He is worthless in every way and has injured Tyrian and distressed Rhys. I will bully him any chance I get. He is not worth the ground he slithers on. Merely a worm."

    Revna : "You make me sick. Capturing all my kin, and acting like you own the place. Someone ought to put /you/ in your place. Disgusting cow."
    Maya : "I may have trusted and respected you once. But now, with every inch of my soul do I hate you. You are a traitor and you injured Rhys. If I ever see you again, you'd better count your blessings I made a promise."


    Everyone Else

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    Sivo - Reroll
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    Sivo's Main Skin
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    Sivo's Karmark Form Skin
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    Reference of Sivo's Face (Hair is right shade of brown, however not correct length)
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    (Edit) Karmark Form of Sivo, heavily edited
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    Karmark Form of Sivo (right) and Rhys, her husband, in Tech Form (left) - Microwavemmm
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    Sivo in her usual gear, with Rhys, her husband. Both normal forms. - Helen/HelsFantasyArt
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    Cute little meme image of Sivo, Lock, and a few others created by hongkong.

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    Depiction of Sivo made on Picrew.
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    Sivo as depicted on Hero Forge

    (Best reference of armor, body shape, and weaponry)​

    EDIT CHANGE NOTES:
    -Removed poisonous berries.
    -Changed 60 Points to 28.
    -Fixed stats to add up to 28.
    -Changed physical stats from 55 to 28.
    -Removed a language.
    -Removed sunlight sensitivity from lifestory.
    -Reworded the story to better highlight vampires.
    -Updated the Proficiencies and Race to the new system.
    -Updated the life story to catch up to current events.
    -Updated Proficiencies once more due to training IRP, (OOC I didn't know we could have 10 free Talent points rather then 5, so I readjusted. I also didn't notice that Woaden have a +5 boost to light bow combat.)
    -Updated Phys Stat to reflect proficiency update.
    -Updated Life Story to reflect current events again.
    -Updated Inventory Info to reflect current events.
    -Added Age Appearance and specified a bloodline ability better.
    -Updated Appearance.
    -Updated Likes/Dislikes
    -Switched Karmark Step with Karmark Shred due to Karmark Step never being used.
    -Added Relationship Status and linked Rhys' profile.
    -Updated unused proficiencies from husbandry to dancing arts and changed the backstory very slightly to reflect it 'her mother made her take dancing lessons'.
    -Added Relationships and put Change Notes in their own section.
    -Updated Lifestory to be more realistic since it was rushed, also added last 2 paragraphs as the current events.
    -Updated Relationships.
    -Added Picture Drop for art + other media
    -Added Personality Expansion to get all my thoughts together in order, expanding her personality based on roleplay experience and drives.
    -Updated Relationships again.
    -Updated Life Story and Languages, Update in RED
    -Fixed Lifestory to include the culture Sivo derives from. This will make backstory questions a little easier to answer.
    -Updated Relationships again
    -Added some yummy new art
    -Age up! Fixed Proficiencies, updated relationship status, updated relationships, and current events.
    -Second Age up! Rhys aged up, so I balanced it by aging up both Rizu (her baby) and Sivo by 10 years. Fixed Proficiencies and age.
    -Updated Relationships and Life Story. Dropped some more pics.
    -Swapped out 5 Rapier combat with 5 Frontline Command due to recent IC studies and events
    -Woaden Ailor/Bow Update! No more prof boost. Removed Light Bow Proficiency. Added +5 Prof Points into Shielding Combat.
    -Changed Ailor type from Woaden to Brannon due to the update screwing up her stats. Fits her better anyways.
    -Swapped out Karmark Raven for Song due to the update kind of screwing it over.
    -Aged up 1 year to balance her 18 year old son's age with her own. Put 1 point in frontline.
    -Added Alias for her surface name.
    -Updated Languages to reflect mother's culture.
    -AGE UP (part 2)! (Rhys aged up so I aged up Sivo too.) +10 Unarmed , all else remains as is.
    -Updated Relationships... Still not even half way done. Good Lord.
    -Added +5 Burling Rogue for IC reasons.
    -Updated aesthetics and relationships.
    -Updated appearances based on her current events.
    -Made vampiric form sound better/just added more clarity to it.

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    Howdy there @DogVibes I'm going to be reviewing your character.
     
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    Alright @DogVibes this is what I have for you.
    • For your inventory information, typically we don't review them, but you cannot have poisoned berries or poison arrows for that matter.
    • As a twenty-three year old character you only have access to twenty-five proficiency points, so you'll have to cut back on what you have right now. You also have ten free points to use in the Arts Proficiency Category.
    • Ailor is not a language, the Szabadok do speak a language called Réginyelv if you would like to include that, that would be fine.
    • Life Story
      • I want you to understand that vampires in lore don't have a sensitivity to sunlight, it has no effect on them.
      • Additionally, they would have to feed on blood from actual people, not animals.
      • Vampirism also affects the mind to that they want to be vampires and don't have any issue with that lifestyle.
      • Besides that I don't see much else in terms of issue for the life story, just change those aspects of vampirism and how it affects them at the end.
    I would ask you to review the Proficiency article as well as the Vampirism article when you make these changes to your application. You make some assumptions, which is allowed to a degree, but I want you to make sure you understand the lore in place when you're out playing the character.
    https://wiki.massivecraft.com/Proficiency
    https://wiki.massivecraft.com/Vampirism

    I think you have a good start in terms of a character application, you just need to rework things to fit the proficiency system as well as the lore in place. Make the above changes in a color of your choice and tag myself once you're completed.
     
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    @DogVibes
    • Pardon, I mistyped. You have 28 points available. In my head I wrote out you have access to five more.
    • You will also need to adjust your Physical Stat to reflect your new points.
    • For your Life Story, it is impossible for a vampire to fight the mental need to feed. They don't view it as a moral question, they just do it naturally. Any care for life goes away completely. So simply removing that aspect is fine.
    Make the above edits and tag myself and you should be all set.
     
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    @Wumpatron Fixed
    Also I'm keeping the physical stats as is. It's locked to 55 due to Vampire Mutation: Von Kërle Body.
     
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    @DogVibes that would be the physical stat limit, it doesn't auto lock to that level, you still need proficiencies or mutations to get you to reach that limit. As it stands your investments only reach 28, so you will have to change it. Once you do that you'll be all set for approval.
     
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    -- Added Karmark form in appearance, fixed all bloodline traits. Ready for review.
     
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    @HydraLana Updated again, sorry I didn't know I could have 10 free talent and hobby points. I put the changes in the newest 3 change notes in the lifestory. (Last 3 notes), so it should be an easy read.
     
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    Re-Approved.
     
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    @HydraLana Updated, in update notes... switched out a vampiric ability with another due to it being unused and worthless to me, highlighted it in purple.
     
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    I will allow that this time, but know that we don't really like Vampires or similar characters changing their abilities around. It creates issues with voiding, complicates combat and other issues. I advise you stick with your powers as much as possible going forward.
     
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    Of course. Thank you, I'll leave her vampire abilities alone now, just wanted to fix one that I never personally used ever.
     
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    @HydraLana Hate to bother you again, I promise this is my last change for a while. I put it into the change notes but I swapped proficiencies from an unused one to one that reflects my character a little more. I also updated a small bit into the backstory to reflect the change slightly.
     
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    @HydraLana I wasn't sure if this is allowed but I made a ticket asking if it was and they said it depends on the reviewer. So, since Sivo knows no languages besides Common, I wanted to use a single free language to learn Faraddi, which is being taught to her IC by another character. Would this be allowed?

    If so, I marked all changes in red to make your life easier. Only in Languages and Life Story. Hopefully it's allowed, since Sivo sort of wishes to know a second language, she feels left out.
     
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    @HydraLana
    Hate to bother you again, but I had an idea to age her up on the 10th so here we are. Aged her up 2 years though since I have yet to age her up for 6 OOC months. I highlighted all changes in red to make it easier. I simply changed her age and a few proficiencies.

    Changes are marked in red to make your life easier.
     
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    @Mollymock
    Hello, I hope you're having a wonderful day today! I aged up Sivo again. Reason was Rhys aged up by 10 years so I balanced it by aging up both Sivo and her baby, Rizu. I only changed her Age and Proficiencies.

    Thank you for taking the time to re-review!
     
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    I removed her light bow proficiency because of the update, and added 5 into shielding combat. Since it is only 5 points, I was told I don't need a re-review so I'm just putting this out here.
     
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    @Mollymock
    Hate to have an update this soon after my last, but the bow profs changed as well as my Ailor type. So because of everything kind of screwing up my stats, I have changed from Woaden to Brannon, updating a few of my prof stats and a little bit in my lifestory, but that's minor stuff that won't really need looking over.

    All changes are made in red. Hope this makes things quick and easy for you!
     
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    Approved, but please refrain from large changes for the next wee while.
     
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    @Mollymock Swapped out Karmark Raven with Song if allowed due to the update. Marked in red. If this is not approved, I will swap it back without argument. I just don't care for it anymore from the update.
     
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    Updated languages to reflect her mother's culture. (Daendroque)
    All changes made in red.

    Minor change, just fleshing out the backstory a little more as well as gave her her mother's language, making it more lore compliant.
     
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    @DogVibes Everything checks out homie. Reapproved.
     
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    Age up! All edits marked in blue.
    Rhys aged up so I aged up Sivo to match.
     
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    @Ded Jok Very very minor edits. Removed 5 General Command and added 5 Burling Rogue for IC reasons. (Learned IC)
    Just pinging you to let you know, despite it being a very small edit.
     
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