Under Reconstruction TW: Epilepsy!!! ✯¸.•´*¨`*•✿ ✿•*`¨*`•.¸✯✯¸.•´*¨`*•✿ ✿•*`¨*`•.¸✯✯¸.•´*¨`*•✿ ✿•*`¨*`•.¸✯ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████ ◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦ ◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████ ✯¸.•´*¨`*•✿ ✿•*`¨*`•.¸✯✯¸.•´*¨`*•✿ ✿•*`¨*`•.¸✯✯¸.•´*¨`*•✿ ✿•*`¨*`•.¸✯ "Life is a Dancing mind, a loving heart, a caring soul, and wandering thoughts" ♫♪.ılılıll|̲̅̅●̲̅̅|̲̅̅=̲̅̅|̲̅̅●̲̅̅|llılılı.♫♪ 〘 Theme 〙 Spoiler: It Will Be | His Last Symphony ∘₊✧──────✧₊∘ ◎ Core Concept - ) Athm is first and foremost a social worker. Whether it be assisting a local family with financial difficulties, consoling a distressed soldier, or talking down a panicked attacker it is their purpose to help others. On one hand you may see them engage in idle chatter with almost anyone, on the other hand you may see them assist or interfere with an intense or violent situation. While mostly a force for good, and someone who is generally content, Athm is an emotional individual with an constantly shifting personality, which can make their behavior unpredictable and varied. ◎ Personality - ) To describe Athm in a few words would be to say "A being with too much Empathy". They love to help others and to make people happy because they feed off of others positive energy, And because it makes them feel rejuvenated. They also find treating others in a negative and mean way "Illogical" as they are unable to comprehend hurting innocents. Whenever someone they view as "Evil" does something bad to someone they view as "Good" or "Innocent", they become emotionally unstable. ◎ Religion - ) Athm's relationship with religion is quite complicated to say the least. While they have a district hatred for gods and other divine beings, as they believe they cause nothing but suffering and manipulation, they do see that religion can sometimes benefit others. They have seen the religious aid the poor and heal the sick, but they have also seen them slaughter passer-byes and go on bouts of zealous rage. Athm however is not non-religious, as they are a follower of Evolism, a religion that reflects them greatly. ◎ Culture - ) Athm was dreamed into existence by the Draconism god Daiana and given to an Anglian farmer couple of a Kissut Eronidas and Sentli Maquixtl. Athm has grown up with a kissut's love for community and a sentli's love for freedom. They grew up with all their wants and needs met while still being instilled with a respect for others and hard work, giving them a rich and positive culture. ◎ Politics - ) Athm is a staunch collectivist. As is with their "Treat others well" attitude, They have no preconceived hatred or biases towards anything affliction or occult, and is completely fine with them as long as they aren't doing something evil. They also believe that the populous should have more of a say in day to day life, as they despise oppression. ◎ Affliction - ) Athm is a mortisphage of the Gate Guards of the Architect. This affliction consequently could lead to a number of enemies, and as such, leads Athm to keep it secret from all but their most trusted individuals. Athm is motivated to stay a mortisphage for the wonderous powers it brings them, as well as its assistance in protecting themselves and others. ███████████████████████████████████████████████ ○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○ ○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○ ███████████████████████████████████████████████ Strength: 1 ❁ | Diving Tackle Pack ❁ | Steady Body Pack (Free) Constitution: 5❁ | Thick Hide Pack (Free) ❁ | Shield Cover Pack (Free) ❁ | Shield Block Pack ❁ | Shield Bunker Pack ❁ | Shield Slam Pack ❁ | Shield Deflect Pack ❁ | Shield Snare Pack Intelligence: 1❁ | Tech Exhaust ❁ | Leytech Branch ❁ | Necrotech Branch Wisdom: 0 ❁ | No Abilities Dexterity: 0 ❁ | No Abilities Faith: 0 ❁ | No Abilities Magic: 7❁ | Monster Invocation Pack ❁ | Deathless Invocation Pack ❁ | Magic Smog Pack ❁ | Magic Resist Pack ❁ | Magic Cleanse Pack ❁ | Magic Bolster Pack ❁ | Magic Warp Pack Languages❁ | Anglian ❁ | Vasar ❁ | Nātl ❁ | Common ███████████████████████████████████████████████ ○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○ ○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○ ███████████████████████████████████████████████ ꕥ Ability Information ~ 〙 ∘₊✧──────✧₊∘∘₊✧──────✧₊∘ Evolism: ❁ | Gifts of Catheron ❁ | Gifts of Morrlond ❁ | Gifts of Ravaal ❁ | Gifts of Gahan ❁ | Gifts of Ventra ❁ | Blessings of Triton ❁ | Golden tail of Apotheon Maquixtl-Eronidas: ❁ | "Eronidas can perform great feats of strength out of Combat (carry multiple people, throw boulders etc.). They also gain +5 in out of Combat dice roll Strength competitions." ❁ | "Maquixtl can (with OOC consent) read emotions from other Characters, and suppress their own from being read." ❁ | "Eronidas are barely affected by Alcohol that gets other people drunk, needing insanely high proof, and always being able to keep their drinks down." ❁ | "Eronidas have hardy physical digestive systems, capable of eating raw and spoiled foods and drinks without any issues or risk of illness." ❁ | "Eronidas have two independently beating hearts, meaning that even if one heart were to stop (damage/heart attack), the other would keep them alive." Mortisphage: ❁ | Common Mechanic One: Mortisphages can use a Court Glamor to hide their teeth and Green Eyes from anyone but fellow Mortisphages, except during feeding. This counts as a Disguise, but not to those who already know they are Mortisphage. ❁ | Common Mechanic Two: Mortisphages, if they have Disguising or Shapeshifting Magic, can hide their teeth and Green Eyes from anyone but Mortisphages, but all of their Proficiencies are set to 0, and they cannot use Abilities in Combat. ❁ | Common Mechanic Three: Mortisphages can use a Party Glamor at Server Events/Player Events (not Raids), which acts as a Disguise, until they leave the Event Venue. Cannot ever be used outside of Event Venues. ❁ | Common Mechanic Four: Mortisphages, when using Curses via Advanced Roleplay Mechanics can apply minor Curses that last for up to 12 Hours max, without OOC Consent, which count as having +1 Magic Stat for dispelling considerations. ❁ | Mechanic One: Gate Guard Mortisphages can manifest Wings (of any design: Fairy, Draconic, or Mechanical), which while not in Combat, allow (Elytra) flight (including the use of Rockets). Combat or Ability usage immediately disables flight. Additionally, any Ability they use is both Ordial and God Magic (Draconic) Aligned at the same time. Finally, they do not need to feed at all to survive, sustained by Gaia, but still feel the urge and compulsion, which they must resist. ❁ | Mechanic Two: Gate Guard Mortisphages can open an Ordial gateway to the Mortis Vault, a vast floating castle in the Beyond that acts as their Headquarters that no other Mortisphage can enter. They can take any (willing) person with them to the castle, and make use of its facilities there in the Beyond, but they cannot leave the boundaries of the castle's protection. This cannot be used in Combat. ❁ | Mechanic Three: Gate Guard Mortisphages can count on being attacked by both law enforcement and Mortisphages. While Gaia can't protect them from law enforcement, he can protect them from Mortisphages. Gate Guards have +2 Defense Stat (breaking cap to 9) while defending against other Mortisphages. Additionally, should they reach 0 HP in a fight with one, Gaia will Leyline teleport them to a safe location to prevent capture or death. ∘₊✧──────✧₊∘∘₊✧──────✧₊∘ Spoiler: Inventory ꕥ Inventory Information ~ 〙 ∘₊✧──────✧₊∘∘₊✧──────✧₊∘ ❁ | An Old Staff | My Third Arm ➫ An ancient staff, clade in the color black and decorated with an array of draconic markings and letters, it was one the many trinkets Athm picked up wandering the fields of their home. It makes a good walking stick. Spoiler: Visual Reference ❁ | A Scrap Necklace | A Memento ➫ A small but memorable necklace fashioned from leftover scrap from the fields of Anglia, it stands not only as a signifier of their leap into creation, but also a reminder of where they came from. It is an item that Athm holds dear. Spoiler: Visual Reference ❁ | A Worn Satchel | Trinkets & More ➫ A worn down leather satchel holding various knickknacks, scraps of metal and a small amount of regals. ꕥ Bestiary Information ~ 〙 ∘₊✧──────✧₊∘∘₊✧──────✧₊∘ ❁ | Berry | Mechanical Friend Berry is a small mechanical bird akin to a small parakeet created by Athm in their lonesome to help bypass the isolation they experienced during the civil war. Spoiler: Visual Reference ❁ | Bollo | Tiny Tin Man Bollo is a small 8cm golem created by Athm to help them with mundane tasks and to remind them of things they need to do. Bollo is a joyful and helpful addition to Athm's life. Spoiler: Visual Reference Art by bluespices97 on DeviantArt ꕥ Automaton Information ~ 〙 ∘₊✧──────✧₊∘∘₊✧──────✧₊∘ ❁ | Haell | Link Here Spoiler: Visual ❁ | Renn | Link Here Spoiler: Visual ███████████████████████████████████████████████ ○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○ ○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○◦━◦○ ███████████████████████████████████████████████ ꕥ Appearance Information ~ 〙 ∘₊✧──────✧₊∘∘₊✧──────✧₊∘ ◎ Demeanor: - ) ➫ Athm has a very uplifting and cheery demeanor. They often appear excited and bouncy, finding it hard to stay still. They often appear energetic and confidant, with a healthy posture. They appear oddly approachable and welcoming despite their imposing size, as they make up for it visually in more ways than one. ◎ Body Structure: - ) ➫ Athm stands at an abnormal height of 213.4cm or 7ft. Their body appears well defined, or as well defined as a bralona could appear despite their shifting appearance. While they may take on a more orcish height, they have distinctly nelfin ears, as well as a standard humanoid face. ◎ Visage: - ) ➫ Athm's skin appears as a shifting array of blue and pastel rainbow colors, ever changing and glowing. Metal plates float in their figure, giving a stark contrast to the simplicity of their attire. Their eye color appears to be a faintly glowing white pupil, with each iris having sectoral heterochromia colored green and purple. ◎ Clothing: - ) ➫ Athm wears a very modest set of clothing. They wear a very simple set of black pants, worn and tattered with age, accompanied by a fashionable toga, with brown accents near the bottom, a brown belt and a blue adornment. The Toga covers their legs completely while covering a majority of their torso and left shoulder. ◎ Tattoos: - ) ➫ Athm appears very decorated in the art of tattoos. Their back and arms are home to a plethora of messages and sayings written in dragonspeech. A small barely perceivable x marks the innings of their right hand, with ring markings on their fingers. A noticeable gear tattoo also is on their left ankle. ∘₊✧──────✧₊∘∘₊✧──────✧₊∘ Spoiler: Minecraft Skin Base Skin: TBA Current Iteration: TBA Spoiler: Forever | My Honeybee Spoiler: Yharim ☠️ | Invaded Ordial Spirit "The only thing I fear, is my creator" ☾⊰──────⊱☽☾⊰──────⊱☽ Full Name: Yharim Gender: Non-Binary | They/Them Occult: Ordial Mage ☾⊰──────⊱☽☾⊰──────⊱☽ Core Concept One half of the eternal struggle between the other 2 souls in Athm's body, Yharim represents the ordials desire of control over them. Yharim is a spirit under the jurisdiction of the Malefica, an evil ordial god bent on the destruction of all life, reflecting Yharim's goals for attempting control over Athm's Body. ☾⊰──────⊱☽☾⊰──────⊱☽ ❖ Magic: 14 ✲ | Duelist Invocation Pack ✲ | Magic Bolts Pack ✲ | Magic Snare pack ✲ | Magic Trip Pack ✲ | Magic Smog Pack ✲ | Magic Curse Pack ✲ | Magic Resist Pack ✲ | Magic Cleanse Pack ✲ | Magic Disengage Pack ✲ | Magic Isolate Pack ✲ | Magic Reduce Pack ✲ | Magic Shove Pack ✲ | Magic Summon Pack ✲ | Magic Revenge Pack ☾⊰──────⊱☽☾⊰──────⊱☽ Art by Asturisk on Deviant Art Thanks for Reading! Spoiler: Expand TBA Spoiler: Expand TBA Spoiler: Expand TBA Spoiler ◎ Voice Claim: FL4K ◎ Alignment: Neutral Good ◎ Personality: Protagonist (ENFJ-A) - Sorry for the long page ;-;
Here's a quick review. I might ask that you pull back on the aesthetics just a tad, and at least darken the font a shade or two. It is a bit hard to read as-is (though I like color aesthetic)! Given that the Bralona began as anti-theist as they are, I think it would be good to mention why this is the case. Make sure to specify which dimension they draw their magic from. Bralona did not leave their homeland Justinia before High Command did, and will have arrived in the outside world alongside High Command, or after High Command. I'd suggest you word it so that they left Justinia only following the Summer Occupation. Additionally, the details of the Rose-Quartz dragons and their conflict with the Bralona are pretty murky. It's fine as is, but expect that you might need to change some of it once the full Bralona page is released. Otherwise, you're looking good. Mark any changes in blue and @Tag me when you're all set!
Thanks so much! I've shaded it to a darker gray so hopefully its more visible. Specified changes were made in blue. @ezalB
I would include the mention of Rennli's magic dimension in the Proficiency Information section too! As for life story, Bralona prior to the Occupation were at least marginally loyal or adjacent to High Command. I would cut out the part about being directly outcast for their views, and instead just have Rennli minding their own business on the fringes of the War without being openly rebellious until after the Occupation had occurred. Also make sure this is "After" High Command took over Regalia, not "When", if they are to have traveled around! Same as before! Blue'n'tag.
Update ~! :D Changes: Added Culture Proficiency rearrangement New magic Stuffs Core concept Changed Added history to include Demon weapon @ezalB
Boom, Bam Massive Update O.o Changes: Made core concept bigger Proficiency Rework (Engineer Update Yay!) Added a Ghost Recall Personality (Thought it would be interesting, Apologies for the extra work) Added a bit in history to reflect the addition of the ghost recall personality @ezalB
Beep Boop, Bralona Update! Changes: Some Proficiency Tweaks Updated Bralona Abilities and Specials Updated Life Story Accordingly @ChapterDeath
Changes: Nix's Personality was updated to better fit the "Good" character theme Nix's Proficiencies were rearranged due too some not making sense or restrictions such as Bralona not being able to have demonology. Fixed BBcode Errors @ChapterDeath
Also I was wondering if reply clears are still a thing? I wanna reserve a reply under my application for various writing purposes.
Sorry I was out of town for the Thanksgiving Holiday in the United States. Re-approved, and uhh I can try to figure it out @gioem, not sure if you'll get the slot.
Much needed Update! I mostly wanted to flesh out the character so a lot has been added. Also proficiencies were outdated Pretty much everything needs reviewed besides Nix, They weren't changed. @ChapterDeath
Woop Woop, Update time! Changes: I realized I didn't have a section in core concept that actually explains what rennli does as a character and that I only explained his personality, so I labeled the old "Core concept" section of core concept personality and added some new stuff under a new "core concept" section of core concept. Add inventory and bestiary/creations sections under an inventory spoiler in the ability information part of the application Removed stupid luck from Nix's proficiency Formatting and Grammar fixes @ChapterDeath
Nothing that needs approval just QoL update Changes: New clothing! Grammar fixes Minecraft Skin images
Cool new visuals :D Changes: Visual Information Overhaul New Minecraft Skin (See Minecraft Skin Spoiler) @ChapterDeath
I think the forums didn't ping you, so I'm pinging you again just in case. I wanted to wait a bit just incase so I'm not spamming your notifs. @ChapterDeath
Proficiency Update for both Rennli & Nix, Mercy Pack is a perfect addition for Renlli's Build :D Changes: Proficiency changes for Rennli, Removed Tussling Pack, Added Mercy, Stimboost & Automaton Packs Proficiency Rework for Nix, Moved some points around, Spent some unused Points, Mindblock & Automaton packs added, Dexterity has more points and packs now @ChapterDeath
Tagging you again cause its been a few days, I know pings can get lost when you get so many XD @ChapterDeath