- Do you think I could keep the Expansion sections out of the spoiler? I feel as if it'd ruin the look of the app, and it isn't that hard to manually scroll past. Regardless, I would much prefer if I could keep the Expansions in the app without any spoilers.Staff Review!
- Put all expansions in spoilers.
- Add learning ages and times for the discipline of carving in Val's life story.
- Add one more weakness of any sort to balance out Val's new skill.
Make all changes in my oh so loved shade of pink!
- Do you think I could keep the Expansion sections out of the spoiler? I feel as if it'd ruin the look of the app, and it isn't that hard to manually scroll past. Regardless, I would much prefer if I could keep the Expansions in the app without any spoilers.
- I've indirectly mentioned learning times in the life story already (The raid on his tribe in 295 A.C, which Valbrand took on his first serious lessons on woodcarving two months after as mentioned. He graduates both the School of Skagger and woodcarving around the same time, which is mentioned to be 301 A.C).
- I've added the weakness sardonic. I feel like two physical impediments are good enough as is, so here's a mental/personality-based one instead.
The edits have been made. I talked to you in PM about the life story.
- I'd like you to declare your proficiency total under skill.
Mark the edits in red and tag me when you have made the appropriate changes. @Jouster
- Condense your life story into bullet notes outlying the important events. You can just spoiler what you have currently as chronicles but its a little too long in its current state.
Make these changes in blue and tag me when you're done!
Personality and Abilities (Required)
Weaknesses (Optional)
- Please add another sentence to your second and fourth paragraph, seeing as each paragraph need to be between four to five sentences long.
- I suggest bolding your weakness headings.
- When it comes to your character's Scarred Midsection weakness, I would like you to add another sentence or two expanding on how this is actually a weakness that affects him in roleplay, much like how you did in the other.