Preserved Sheet Sone Vevveth

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Reaction score
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Points
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Character Information
  • Full Name: Sone Vevveth
    • Nicknames: ℜ, Elmnister, Seraph(Disguised Form name)
  • Race: Saivalthar
  • Age: 149
  • Sex: Male
  • Sexuality: Heterosexual
  • Eye Color: Dark Brown
Core Concept
  • Sone is a dark mage driven by his lust for everlasting power and immortality. He seeks to obtain the tools that allow him to control the night sky itself, allowing him to plunge the world into darkness under his own control. As a dread loyalist, one deeply engraved into the ancient dread empire arts and vows, he has no problem with going against morality and laws, so long as he may accomplish his goals. This also falls under going against the dragons so he may have access to eventually control the weather.
Proficiency Information


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«❅» Magic Point Buy {16} -={Tier Five}=-
Magic Bolts
Magic Snare
Magic Trip
Magic Distort
Magic Smog
Magic Curse

Magic Resist
Magic Cleanse
Magic Disengage
Magic Warp
Magic Feather
Magic Counter
Magic Shove

Invocation Point Buy
Deathless Invocation


FREE > KATHAR
Magic Isolate
Magic Summon


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« Common | (Taught by Parents) »
« Kathar/Pannorak | (Taught by Parents) »

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Appearance Information
  • Sone has no mutations but frequently carries a Bronze Horned Mask that contains only the right eye opening of the mask and a layer of black fabric to hide his actual eye.
  • Sone is a very slim person who stands at a height of 6'2 and wears Dread leather styles that were made nearly one hundred years back in the dread empire he grew up in, deciding to be covered entirely at all times. His hair color is black while his skin is pale and contains the features of a Divine Cult Kathar.
Life Story
  • Sone was born in the deep west under the Dread Empire. He were born under two Divine Cult Kathar who sought nothing but to make Sone their greatest creation.
  • Sone's teenage years were harsh as he underwent strict training in the art of Sorcery. He were forced to learn it and were beaten when performing under expectations. Sone heavily despised his parents but understood what needed to be done after he tasted the power of the Arcane.
  • Sone after growing into quite the sorcerer found himself stuck after reaching a limit on what he were capable of with Sorcery. He understood it could only go so far by learning new spells of Sorcery, though wanted something more and embarked on a journey of learning Casting Ranged Spells. He grew into fighting with such combat, efficiently making a name for himself in his homelands. After causing quite the problems for others, he decided to rename himself to in order to protect his identity from possible assassins or hitman.
  • Sone Gathered as much knowledge as he could with the Arcane and decided to make it his goal to spread that information and knowledge with everyone, wanting to be the sole Mentor of the Arcane itself.
  • Sone came to Regalia for two reasons. The first was he needed to get away from the Dread Empire in order to clear his name and start off fresh as until the time was right. The second was due to the status of Regalia's size and reputation. He felt it would be great to mentor many of those in Regalia and decided this would be the place he'd spend most of his life in.
Progression Information
  • Fifth Tier Mage
 
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Editted backstory. Also changed font and formatting.
 
Changed the core list to the question list.
 
@Koyote Hello! Here's my review:

Before I give you a full review, I want you to do the following:
- Place all non-required information in spoilers
- Significantly shorten your life story. As is is, it's very nicely written but it's an absolute wall of text, and when paired with your abundant use of archaic or generally difficult / uncommon adjectives, it makes it hard to read (sorry, my brain is small and I am monke). You can put the current life story in a spoiler, but please provide a non-loquacious bullet list of significant events in your character's lifetime so that's it's not only more palatable for me but other reviewers or readers in the future as well.
After you have done this, tag me.
 
@Lizmun Finished, made the requested changes by spoiling the non-required info. Made the Life Story a spoiler and summarized it in short for the non advanced readers.
 
@Koyote Here's my first round of reviews:

Basic Information
- No issues
Skill Information
- No issues
Visual Information
- No issues
Personality
- No issues
Life Story
- No issues

approved
 
@Koyote Almost! This is a mess up on my part, but, sorcery no longer has any limit on the number of spells you can buy (within reviewer discretion) and only cost 3 points instead of 4. Your current sorcery is set to 20 while you only have 5 abilities, with your current layout sorcery would only coast 15!

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@Lizmun Changed the points to fit the current abilities. It is a lot but I'm keeping my remaining points as 26 for future plans.
 
@Lizmun Changed a few fonts all out the app. Added an appearance spoiler. App is up for re-review since couldn't upload an image without going more into options
 
@Antimreoir Changed Sone to the reworked Kathar abilities. Spent the rest of the 26 points (Had trouble with rp due to the huge gap missing). App if up for Re-Review.
 
@Antimreoir Changed Dagger combat to Heavy ranged combat. App is up for re-review. Not sure if it were needed so did it just in case.
 
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@Koyote Hello, I've claimed this app for review and will get back to you within 48 hours.
 
Changed Shadow Curse 1 to Cursing Light 1. Unsure if the 1 change needed a re-review post?
 
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@Follower Hello, after some rp i've decided to change a few things around with Sone. Firstly i've decided to remove the +5 fist combat and give him 2 sorcery abilities, that being Light Mend 3 for a source of food, and Magic Sight 1. The intent I had for Sone was for him to gain more of a heavy experience in Sorcery whilst keeping some form of Archery, that being his crossbow with him. Removed any close combat features including Element Brand 5 which there is no longer a use for due to him being only ranged in order to keep close combat a pure weakness of his, and exchanged it for Magic Sight 3. App is up for re-review.
 
@Koyote Adjust the body stat to match the updated proficiency points, and you should be good to go.
 
@Follower The body shape has been adjusted to the correct shape, which is 14 Phy Stat.
 
@Follower Changed to the core list for sone. The previous one were just a mess and no one could understand it.
 
@Follower Sone has been infected and has received the Graal Bloodline. Added in the mini base kit.
 
@Follower Set the app to re-review for the overall changes on the past week that being the graal kit, core list on personalities and now a change in points lowering the amount of sorcery abilities down, focusing on range only and fixing a small part in the life story.
 
@Follower Hey! Small change,
- Element control 4 > 5.
- Power curse 1 > Element Control 3

Nothing too crazy.
 
Sone is also Cured of his Graal Bloodline
 
@Follower Scratch that, big update to the format and rework of overall abilities. Changed from heavy ranged to caster range as well, just the points switch.
 
@Koyote After reviewing your application, only a few things require correction:
  • Your character does not have 15 physical stat, since you have no proficiencies that contribute to physical stat. Please correct this.
  • Your Talents are currently listed incorrectly. You can at most have 3 Talent Points. As such, since Sorcery is higher and I'm assuming you desire a Sorcery and Warrior spread, it would be Sorcery 2, Warrior 1.
Once you have made the appropriate changes, tag me once more.