Character Sheet - Rosaria Holakin Brosseau -Basic Information- Full Name: Rosaria "Rose" Holakin Brosseau Age: 26 Gender: Female Race: Ailor, Ithanian Culture Main Ambition: Rose's main ambition is to learn to be more confident in herself and around others. Special Permission: None -Visual Information- Eye Color: Dark blue Hair Color: Midnight blue, Wu-long hair dye (original color, black) Hair Style: Long hair, side bang Skin Color: Peach and pale Clothing: Blue and silver formal clothing, typically. Height: Six feet Body Build: Thin Weapon of Choice: None -Personality and Abilities- Traits- • Funny + Rose knows how to be serious, but she prefers to have fun and act silly and goofy. She keeps things light and relaxed, and doesn't like to be stressed or tense. This may make her seem immature or childish, but really she just chooses to be more fun than serious. This makes her a good match for her more sullen and depressed husband, as she keeps him from being too dark. • Sweet + Rosaria is a very tender-hearted person, who cares for other people. She is also a passive person, who hates to hurt anyone or see anyone get hurt. Rose cares even more for those close to her, and she would do anything to help them and keep them safe. This comes from her losing most of the people she has ever cared about, which makes her more protective and caring towards the ones she still has left. • Cooperative + Rose is a very flexible person, she will do almost anything that will make the people she loves happy. Even if it's not something she wants to do, she doesn't complain and learns to enjoy whatever the new alternative is. This comes from the constant change in her lifestyle as a young adult and kid, and she constantly had to adapt to changes in her life. That made her good at adapting to alternatives and being okay with most everything. • Dependent - Rosaria depends on other people, usually Phillip, to help her. She doesn't do well on her own, without someone close to her to take care of her. Rose rarely even leaves the house on her own, due to hating to be alone and the common attacks she endures when out alone. The invasion by Freya has made her even less likely to leave the house without Phillip. • Shy - Rose isn't usually comfortable with new people, due to growing up in a cage or with only one person. She is intimidated by crowds or people she doesn't know getting too close to her. When Rose meets new people, she prefers it to be on her own terms, in a controlled situation, with someone she already knows nearby. This comes from the fact that most new people she meets have tried to kidnap her or attack her. • Unruly - Rosaria is a very excitable person. She tends to get disruptive at times which gets people very annoyed. She can not contain or control her excitement. For example, lets say she found an unusually pretty flower. Her eyes would glow with excitement and she would show all her friends what she found. Rose would not stop talking about it, till she got bored of the thing or object. Usually bringing it up randomly in conversations or just bugging people about it. • Adventurous +- Rose is a very adventurous and free-spirited person who loves to try new things. This can be a good thing, as it makes her more adaptable to new situations and more fun. Unfortunately, it can also be a bad thing, as it gets her into trouble and danger very often. Although she currently doesn't, she used to wander Regalia frequently and get herself into dangerous situations. Strengths • Influencing One of Rose's abilities is influencing people, either in a good or bad way. If someone makes her upset, she would try to guilt-trip them and make them feel horrible about it. She mostly uses this as a self defense mechanism. • Optimistic Helping people is probably the strongest of Rose's talents. She tries to talk to people and train them to think of the bright side of things instead of moping on their past. Rose tries to pass this positive thinking around as much as she can, to help people when they're not seeing the world bright enough. • Acting After Rose had known Phillip for a while, he started teaching her acting. She enjoys this, although it's more because she enjoys spending time with him than it is the acting itself, and has gotten quite good at it. She plans to use this to perform plays at the new dinner theatre she is opening with Phillip. Weaknesses • Focus Rose has trouble focusing on one task for a long time, or paying attention to things that bore her. She doesn't like to keep a routine or do the same thing for a long time. Rose also gets distracted very easily by things such as butterflies, birds, and small animals going by. This makes it hard for her to work or accomplish things that take a long time unless they keep her interest, which is quite hard to do. • Passive Rose's timid and pacifist nature makes it hard for her to hurt others, even in self defense or defense of those she cares about. It also makes her more gullible or easy to order around or argue with, since she typically retreats and takes the easiest way out of the argument, which is usually giving in. Her Guided Sensation Hex complements this trait, making her able to defend herself without hurting people. She tends to cast a feeling of calm over someone angry at her, or a feeling of guilt over someone who is trying to hurt her, which gives her the feeling she isn't causing someone pain and keeps her conscience clear. Unfortunately, she is helpless when unable to cast or if this small defense mechanism fails. • Agliophobia Rose's biggest weakness is probably Agliophobia, this is a fear of pain. She gets scared if she gets cut or hurt, fearing that it could take her happiness away. She can not stop crying if she feels pain or gets hurt and gets absolutely teriffed. Even at the smallest bit of pain like a small cut causes her to freak out. Life Story (Required) Spoiler: Bio Early Life and Capture Rosaria grew up in the barony of Velenal, a predominantly Nelfin place in Vixhall. She lived in a keep with her father Oliver and mother Ramona, who was the Baroness of Velenal. Her half brother had been born to an elven man named Valda Holakin, but he had fallen ill and died. Rose's father was a greedy man who had only married her mother to become more rich, and hated her brother for inheriting his father's title, because he had wanted it. On Rose's twelfth birthday, the barony was attacked by a small gang, who kidnapped her and her mother, taking them to their hideout outside the town. Rose and her mother were tortured with water and lightning magic almost constantly and held for ransom underground, which her father refused to pay, happy to be taking charge of Velenal in her mother's place. This caused Rose to grow up blaming him for her suffering. Her mother was too sick and weak, that she died very quickly afterwards. Rose ended up in critical condition, causing the people in the gang to stop torturing her as much, locking her in a cage above ground and feeding her once a week, and giving her water once every two days. There, an older elven girl named Deveen was her cellmate, who became quick friends with Rose. This went on for a while until Rose was eighteen, and Deveen was moved and replaced by a new cell mate, a perfectly healthy Shendar named Leveon. Return to Velenal Leveon was nothing like Deveen. He was condescending, lewd, and abrasive. The man who led the gang was revealed to be Leveon's father, and Rose was going to be forced to marry Leveon to make his son the leader of Velenal since her father still hadn't paid the ransom. Rose was allowed to invite one person to the wedding, and she chose her half brother, Nathaniel, who was contacted in Regalia and he returned. He paid the ransom, at the anger of his stepfather, but the gang went back on the deal, refusing to release Rose. Nathaniel gathered several mages from the town and attacked the gang, killing all but Leveon, allowing him to live since he was young and had been influenced by his father. Their prisoners, including Deveen, were free, but after seeing her brother destroy the gang violently, Rose was never the same. She and Deveen were brought back to Velenal, to her unreceptive and angry father. He refused to allow Rose to return to the keep, causing her to simply retreat and give up, living with Deveen in a small house. Nathaniel became increasingly frustrated and angry with his stepfather, resulting in him snapping after years of stress and pressure, and attacking Nathaniel. Nathaniel easily defeated Oliver, resulting in him and Rosaria inheriting their titles and Oliver being locked away. Rose couldn't stand the violence that had happened in Velenal, and left for Regalia with Deveen. Deveen's Death and Pua While in Regalia, Deveen and Rose found a small group of secret Estel followers, and they joined them. The cult provided food and shelter for the two girls, and life was good for a short time, before the Violet Order found the cult. The guards asked each member, one at a time, if they followed Estel and not the Imperial Spirit, and each one until Rose and Deveen said yes, and the guards shackled them. When it was Deveen's turn, to Rose's horror, she said yes, and was taken away, leaving only Rose, who denied Estel and was not arrested. Rose was left homeless and jobless, and was forced to wander and beg for money. She was soon attacked by a Slither mage, and saved by another Altalar named Pua, who befriended her, took her in and taught her to speak Common more well. She lived with Pua for just over two years, but had to move out when Pua's daughter began growing older. Rosaria became homeless and hungry for several more years. Meeting Phillip While Rose was 26, she was out in the park, and she came across an Ailor man who was about to end his life. Normally she never would have spoken, but she had to save him from ending his life. She quickly stopped him, asking what was wrong. He told her his heart had been broken three times, and also that he had discovered something horrible about his own past. Although depressed, the man was quite outgoing, and did most of the talking when he first met Rose. She didn't talk much due to her shy nature, but allowed him to talk to her, which helped him and he continued to meet with her. Once she knew him much more well, she started talking to him and was less shy around him. She began to try to help the man, who had identified himself as Phillip Helgen, lose some of the pain temporarily. After they had known each other for a while, he eventually went back to his house with her. They shared a special fruit drink Phillip had made, before both of them passed out. This sort of situation happened several more times, before eventually she helped calm his drinking, and they went out to the park. While Phillip was getting them some food from the house for a picnic, someone tried to rob Rose, and when she didn't have any money, they held her head in the water and then pushed her in. Phillip came back out and saved her from drowning. When he asked why she didn't fight back, she had to explain her past and why she couldn't do it. She ended up telling him that it would have been better if she had drowned, which hurt Phillip greatly and he told her she was the only reason he was still alive. They returned to Phillip's home, Rose having moved into the guest bedroom by then, and they lived in peace for several weeks, spending time with each other at the house and the park. Eventually, Rose admitted to Phillip that she loved him, and he did the same. Leveon's Return One day, a Shendar came knocking on the door of Phillip and Rose's home. He introduced himself as Leveon, and Rosaria couldn't remember much about him other than that she knew him long ago, and she agreed to accompany him on a walk. Phillip, suspicious, sent one of his gang members to keep an eye on them, and he witnessed Leveon making death threats against Rose. Phillip was stabbed and the Shendar was killed, and an alchemist was able to heal Phillip. Unknownst to them, the man that died was really a double, the real Leveon waiting in the shadows. Vacation They soon after left for a vacation to Clourenze, a county in Ithania owned by Phillip but maintained by his uncle. Phillip had to return their annually to check on his companies, manage leadership of Clourenze, and generally manage things. He discovered that his uncle was sick and likely to die soon, causing Phillip to have to take up the title of Count of Clourenze, or risk losing it. He also proposed to Rose while they were there, and were married when they returned to Regalia. Revenge Plot A horrible woman from Phillip's past, his former lover Adeline Aellair, found out about the wedding, and broke into Phillip and Rose's house, stealing his journal. She used this to recruit several of their enemies to get revenge on them. A woman named Kally kidnapped Rose while Leveon and Adeline tricked Phillip and then brought him to Adeline's house with Rose. Rose was stabbed by Leveon, killing the child she was pregnant with, and then taken to the docks, but she was able to resist his commands and escape. Phillip was in a state of complete shock after losing the child and Rose, and he willingly left with Adeline to go back to Ithania. Rose, being chased by Leveon, found Phillip and Adeline on their way to the docks. Rose passed out from pain, blood loss, and exhaustion, while Phillip fought and brutally killed Leveon. He then forced Adeline to give up some medical supplies she carried to help Rose, in exchange for sparing her life. Rose survived, but back at their home, Phillip tried to leave her, saying he brought nothing but pain and tragedy to her. Rose was able to convince him to stay and they eventually recovered. Freya's Invasion About six months later, when Freya Lo invaded, Phillip and Rosaria briefly went into hiding, fearing for their lives, before finding out all they had to do to survive and prosper was declare loyalty to Freya Lo. They did this, and have now returned to a somewhat normal and peaceful life together.
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Peer Review time.~ No salt intended. Basic Information: My only nitpick would be to specify what Ailor culture her Ailor parent was from, such as, since I'm assuming she's half Ithanian, Half-Ithanian Ailor, Half Altalar, Other than that, looks good here! Visual Information: Nothing really here, except maybe specify how adept she is at her Hex Magic, by either listing a level or years of experience. She's also dangerously underweight for her height- her bmi is 16.3, and to be qualified as a healthy weight she would need to be 18.5. I recommend making her 137 lbs instead. Personality Traits: All is fine here, nothing I can see that needs change. Strengths: I have a hard time imagining that someone who'd been tortured would be that optimistic, but I'll leave it to staff. Looks good here. Weaknesses: I feel like focus and fear of water are unlikely to come up in rp. Due to this, my personal recommendation would be to replace fear of water or add another weakness if you must keep it, and to add more common triggers for her lack of focus. Life Story: Not reviewing because I'm lazy lmao. Nice job aside from those little edits! :3
Still, phobias are frowned upon as weaknesses typically, since they would just run away from it or whatever. These are just suggestions, but I give advice taken straight from staff reviews I've seen in the past. If you're that set on keeping it, then maybe add an extra weakness? It would seen that you have no physical/combat weaknesses, maybe add an injury sustained from torture?
(this is a joint char app, that's why i'm replying to it) there is also only one combat strength, which isn't used for combat, like, ever. the obedience weakness is a /huge/ weakness in combat actually, although this char doesn't get involved in combat to much. also, i have a char approved who has fear/trauma as a main weakness. water doesn't make her run away, she kinda collapses and freezes, panics, that kinda thing, she can't simply run away. this character isn't made for combat RP, which is why their strengths and weaknesses aren't very combat related.
I understand that, everything I've said is only a suggestion. I'm not lore staff at all, just trying to help out here. Phobias and lack of focus are fine imo as long as they're written with common triggers that show up frequently in rp and actually debilitate the character, rather than being something easily ignored when convenient.
Yeah, I RP with this character (not playing them) and can say for sure they're played correctly, makes the char very interesting.
Here is my review! Anger seems to conflict with her Sweet and Funny personality. The later two seem to suggest she wouldn't ever want to hurt anyone and is general good natured, but the anger issues almost gives her an attack dog-like personality where if she is asked to attack someone she would. Replace the Anger trait to be more consistent. Her Focus weakness seems counter to her Observant strength. If she has such a hard time keeping Focus, wouldn't she fail to observe many things because she is distracted? One or the other of these would have to be replaced, doesn't matter which. If you keep the Focus weakness, more objective triggers would be needed than birds and butterflies since it would require somewhat of a God move on the part of another player to try to exploit this weakness on you as it is written. Obedience also has some logical inconsistencies, if she has this from her time in captivity I find it unlikely she would ever escape since escaping the captivity would be a disobedient act. Also, how would it ever play out? Do random strangers really ever ask you to attack someone? An out to the weakness is provided if somebody knows your character well enough to try to trigger the weakness. This weakness is salvageable if better triggers and slightly different consequences are used. Otherwise it would need to be replaced. Shendar tribes are not far from Shadow Isles which means that the Shendar tribe attack doesn't make sense unless you are in western Daendroc instead of Ithiania Why would they teach their prisoner magic? Wouldn't they just have one of their own accomplish this task for them? An alternate idea is that her sweet and funny personality in the midst of her imprisonment woos a less-than-loyal individual in the tribe to teach her in secret. This is also very disobedient though, so this path makes the obedience weakness even less feasible. If you have alternate ideas, you are free to implement them though and I can review it. She had been gone for 11 years when he returned home to reclaim her title, I doubt that some distant cousin or somebody related to them wouldn't have swooped in the claim their property, I don't find it likely that she could just go reclaim her title without any struggle. Expand on this a bit to fill this logic hole. The Phobia of Water would be very difficult to play out, in fact it doesn't even play out in your own life story. While at the park, where there is a pond, she overcomes her phobia and her shyness to engage Phillip. I say this needs to be replaced due to it being unlikely to play out in RP. Make some edits and then tag me @TheOverseer__
you should probably underline or make the edits a different color, also, maybe change Unruly to Excitable? cus that sounds more like what you described :)
Couple edits made to rip out the magic from it. Shouldn't neeed a review, asked on the page for the new magic rework.
Made more edits because I wanted to make her Ailor. Being part Altalar didn't add anything to her character except a pair of big ears. The edits shouldn't be enough for a re review or anything :3
