〚 ✗┇ ══════ - ‹ •◦ ✗ ◦• › - ══════ ┇✗ 〛 Decorations TO BE ADDED 〚 ✗┇ ══════ - ‹ •◦ ✗ ◦• › - ══════ ┇✗ 〛 ╓━━━━ « ⊙ » ━━━━╖ ╙━━━━ « ⊙ » ━━━━╜ 〚 ✗┇ ════════════════════════ - ‹ •◦ ✗ ◦• › -════════════════════════ ┇✗ 〛 ███████████████████████████████████████████████████████ ███████████████████████████████████████████████████████ 〚 ✗┇ ════════════════════════ - ‹ •◦ ✗ ◦• › -════════════════════════ ┇✗ 〛 〚 ✗┇ ══════════════════ - ‹ •◦ ✗ ◦• › - ══════════════════ ┇✗ 〛 〚 ✗┇ ══════════════════ - ‹ •◦ ✗ ◦• › - ══════════════════ ┇✗ 〛 Theme music TBA 《 ʙᴀsɪᴄ ɪɴғᴏʀᴍᴀᴛɪᴏɴ || to note one's identity. 》 « NAME » Lezosynzal Szlasnola « GUISES» Linella & Norwyn Faye Oloran « RACE » Slizzar « AGE » Twenty-Four « GENDER » Changes « SEXUALITY » Find out IC « Eye Color » Purple 〚 ✗┇ ═══════════════════════ - ‹ •◦ ✗ ◦• › -═══════════════════════ ┇✗ 〛 ██████████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████████ 〚 ✗┇ ═══════════════════════ - ‹ •◦ ✗ ◦• › -═══════════════════════ ┇✗ 〛 《 CORE CONCEPT || the idea. 》 A Slizzar who vaguely followers the Snake of Vanity, Kardissa, due to a love for the arts and experiencing the faith during childhood. Quiet, timid, skeptical yet prideful Slizzar who enjoys tinkering with mechanical (clockwork) music boxes and practicing/reading about naval tactics. While also sneaking off to be someone they aren't, in hopes to learn more about themselves and their place. 《 sᴋɪʟʟ ɪɴғᴏʀᴍᴀᴛɪᴏɴ || to harness one's skillset. 》 « POINTS ALLOCATION » +4 Rapier Combat (+4 Core) +10 Sailing Arts (+5 Hobby, +5 Core) +10 Perception (+5 Core +5 Racial) +15 Instrument Arts (+10 Core +5 Hobby) +12 Engineering (+12 Core) (Clockwork) (Weapon, Mending, Enviorment & Golem) +2 Theatre Arts (+2 Core) +6 Composition Arts (+6 Core) +6 Linguistics (+6 Core) (Ibeth and Altalar) « PHYSICAL STAT » 9. « CALCULATION » 4(RC) + 5 (SA) = 9. « LANGUAGES » Slizzar Language, Zorraana (Parental) Altalar (Linguistics) Ibeth (Linguistics) Common (Free) 《 Ability Information|| to utilize one's abilities. 》 Engineering Clockwork Descriptions - Spoiler: Descriptions Weapons - Utilizing the clockwork theme of gears, the theme of weapons used tends to be that of a music box. When folded it appears like a small music box that's about the size of an average palm, and when opened it begins to grow and turn into a weapon. In its weapon form, it continued to have 'bumps' lining it like a music box, but it doesn't play music despite its appearance of doing such. Golem - The golem is also clockwork and made of basic copper. It has a theme like the weapons; music boxes. The head of the golem is like a warrior's helmet with an unmovable visor covering many gears whirling and spinning about beneath. Mixed in with these gears are different music boxes that play a continuous tune that oddly uses the whirling gears like a metronome as it continues. The music is faint but it always remains consistent, unless the golem is damaged then it begins to sound like a mess. The head is the only fully covered portion of the golem as the rest is mostly exposed and covered by bits and pieces of scrap copper, the inner workings of it mostly visible. On its lower back are two flightless and small copper wings that come outward and resemble basic seabirds, like a seagull. Engraved on the scraps that are attached to it are different musical notes with no set theme or meaning. The golem is rather small, though still around 5'5" in height. Racial (Slizzar) - [Slizzar Shift 1], [Flux Shift 1], [Flux Shift 2], [Flux Shift 3], [Flux Shift 4], [Flux Shift 5], [Mind Surge 1], [Mind Surge 2], [Mind Surge 3], [Mind Surge 4], [Mind Surge 5], [Puppet Control 1] Engineering - Golem Pack, Enviorment Pack, Mending Pack and Weapon Pack. 〚 ✗┇ ═══════════════════════ - ‹ •◦ ✗ ◦• › -═══════════════════════ ┇✗ 〛 ██████████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████████ 〚 ✗┇ ═══════════════════════ - ‹ •◦ ✗ ◦• › -═══════════════════════ ┇✗ 〛 〚 ✗┇ ═════════════ - ‹ •◦ ✗ ◦• › - ═════════════ ┇✗ 〛 〚 ✗┇ ═════════════ - ‹ •◦ ✗ ◦• › - ═════════════ ┇✗ 〛 « LANGUAGES » Slizzar Language, Zorraana (Parental) Altalar (Linguistics) Ibeth (Linguistics) Common (Free 《 ᴠɪsᴜᴀʟ ɪɴғᴏʀᴍᴀᴛɪᴏɴ || to show one's self. 》 Sterotypical Slizzar build and appearance, around 6'3" with an athletic build and reddish hair. Spoiler: Guise Descriptions Teleden Altalar with long golden blonde hair. They have light green eyes and stand 6'1" with a small muscular build. Feka with brown hair and eyes. They stand 5'5" with a toned build. 〚 ✗┇ ═══════════════════════ - ‹ •◦ ✗ ◦• › -═══════════════════════ ┇✗ 〛 ██████████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████████ 〚 ✗┇ ═══════════════════════ - ‹ •◦ ✗ ◦• › -═══════════════════════ ┇✗ 〛 《 ʟɪғᴇ sᴛᴏʀʏ || Norwyn's life.》 - Norwyn was born to Fraeya and Erolith. His twin is named Filinae. From a young age he had a love for music, and often practiced it, gradually getting better as they got older. He often disguised as a Teleden Altalar. - As Norwyn grew older his interests shifted slightly, and he liked the idea of sailing and the sea. He attended Zurmaaltaavan in Slizzar form. After graduation, and a couple of years later, they attended Talant Iiha-Faial Academy as an 'Altalar.' - After graduating from another school, his ambitions grew further. As a young adult, he traveled to the Kingdom of Nakhoor with a new guise, hoping to attend a naval school there. However, impulsive due to his young age (as well as it being expensive), he instead took lessons in engineering for the following few years, as well as being taught Ibeth. - Eventually, they returned home. He continued his lifestyle, sailing, music, and engineering. 《 Progression Information .》 Engineer 2, Admiral 1
Basic Information This is fine; not sure if you meant to list Rapiers twice but it’s there if that was a mistake. Skill Information Please remove your sorcery invested in Magic Bolt 1; the sorcery is not explained in your backstory and adds onto the "jack of all trades" point spread that I'm starting to see accumulate. Visual Information Be sure to describe birth form in your visual information, and if you want to describe guises put them in a spoiler underneath. Personality This is fine Life Story Explain how he got to Regalia, please. Tone down on the emphasis of being rich. That should cover it. Mark these changes in GREEN and tag me when you are done. @Beleiver
@Acosmism I think I fixed it all, didn't notice most of it beforehand. Did the edits in green as asked. Thanks! ^^
@Acosmism bOO Yo! I updated the app. Shuffled proficiency around, added more into engineering with leftover points from schooling, and took away some from combat. That's the only big change I can think of. Thanks!!!
