My Hero

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This for my 10th grade final English assignment about my hero i was wondering if i could get some criticism.

This is a story that's been a burden for me for a long time now. But I've decided that the Massivecraft community is the best place to go to get something off of my chest. Many years ago, I was exiled from my Indian village, Kankana where all the other villagers made fun of me for being gay. I was sent to America to start a new life, alone. I've been constantly bullied in school for being Indian since I was in 6th grade. And then I joined Massivecraft. And it changed everything.
But one person, above all others, was a huge influence on my life. And that person was Sevak. One night in teamspeak, I had just gotten home from an awful day of school, and I didn't even have to say anything. He knew how I was feeling. He helped talk me off the ledge and soothed me while playing mini games. For that, I will always be grateful to him.
 
Thanks man. Glad to see you're getting by in life despite all the hardships you've been through
 
I remember this assignment... even though I'm heading for 30.

I picked my dad.

This frustrated and confused my mother and she would just make grumpy faces at my dad. He brought it up for years after to annoy her. Priceless.