Fawzi Kra'zzla "Mmghkp." Spoiler: Theme Basic Information Full Name: Fawzi Kra'zzla Age: 54 | Born 17th of April 254 AC. Gender: Male Race: Yarran Varran Sexuality: Heterosexual Preferred Weapon: Unarmed Skill Information Proficiency Points: 71 (+46 Points, +10 Talent, +10 Hobby, +5 Yarran) 4 Unused Points Core 20 Fist Combat (+15 Points + 5 Yarran) 6 Linguistic Science (+6 Points) Talent 6 Captain Command (+2 Points, +4 Talent) 6 Strength Training (+6 Talent) 2 Bodycare Training (+2 Points) 1 Vocal Singing (+1 Points) Hobby 15 Sailing Art (+5 Points, +10 Hobby) 10 Drawing Art (+10 Points) 3 Fabric Art (+3 Points) 1 Cooking Art (+1 Points) 1 Husbandry Art (+1 Points) Body Shape Physical Stat: 35 (+20 Fist Combat, +6 Strength Training, +8 [{15/2}+o.5] Sailing Art, +1 [2/1] Bodycare Training) Build: Muscular Body Fat: Average Body Fat Languages Zcorr (Parent Language | Fluent) Sofaal (Homeland Language | Fluent) Daendroquin (Linguistic Points | Enough to get by) Braggan (Linguistic Points | Enough to get by) Common (Free Language | Capable Speaker ) Special Traits/Spells/Mutations None Visual Information Eye Colour: Golden Yellow Hair Colour: White Hair Style: Mane Fur Colour: White Clothing: Loose comfortable clothing, and some jewelry. Height: 6'6 Personality and Abilities Character Alignment Neutral Character Personality Type ISFJ-T | The Defender Character's Religion Faces of Baskarr | Devotion: 2 Life Story 0-12 On April 17th 254 AC, Fawzi is born into Slavery. He is the property of Songaskian Nobility on the north western coast of Farah'Deen. Fawzi's father had passed away before he was born, so he was raised by his mother Sitra. Sitra provided a basic education and often smuggled milk out of the palace kitchens for Fawzi to enjoy. Fawzi spent most of his childhood helping his mother with tasks around the Palace. When Fawzi reached the age of 12, he was put to labour in the lands around the palace. 12-24 When Fawzi turned 17, his mother passed away. This left him upset, and he began to pick fights with other slaves. After Fawzi is whipped repeatedly for his behavior, it is decided by his master that Fawzi would become a prize fighter. For seven years, Fawzi fought in pits and arenas throughout the Songaskian Masaya. As he was transferred from city to city, Fawzi learned how to navigate the dunes by using the stars. At around the age of 24, Fawzi received grievous injuries during match and was no longer a safe investment for his master. Fawzi was gifted to his master's youngest son, a young sea captain who set out on an expedition to all the states that made up the Magic Covenant. The captain took Fawzi as his bodyguard, and they sailed eastward. 24-27 They first visited the Yang-Tzu, before sailing westwards towards Ríë Rivaëlla. During his time at sea, Fawzi was able to learn the fundamentals of sea-faring and he began to take a liking to it. One night near the coast of Lusists, the ship was caught in a storm that subsequently caused it to capsize. Fawzi managed to survive and was washed up on the beach of a port town named Santigo. Fawzi woke up to find himself rescued by a Bragacao woman named of Isabel de Santigo. Due to the language barrier Isabel employed a linguist, a varran woman named Tyliss who helped translate their conversation. After Isabel learned about Fawzi's short background in sailing, she urged her then-husband, Alvaro de Santigo, to give Fawzi a place on his newly formed pirate crew. Alvaro reluctantly accepted, and Fawzi found himself sailing once again. 27-31 After a few more years at sea, Fawzi learned abit of common. He also improved his skills as a sailor, and eventually became the assistant navigator. When the crew docked back at Santigo to recuperate, they went to a tavern for food and a round of drinks. It was there that Fawzi met Tyliss again, learning that she worked there as a barmaid. Fawzi and Tyliss meet a few more times and Fawzi even meets Tyliss's son, Naseem. Eventually, Fawzi and Tyliss fall in love, and are soon married. Now a family man, Fawzi decided to leave Alvaro's crew and find work closer to home. Fawzi moved his family into an apartment, and had a child with Tyliss, a boy they named Beau. 31-34 Life was great for a few months up-until the family was ambushed by a group of robbers. Fawzi managed to kill one of them, but they had kidnapped Naseem. Two guards showed up, but rather than reporting the incident, they arrested Fawzi and sold him to a press-ganger. Fawzi was carted up to Portimao, and forced to work on a cargo ship. Fawzi made a few attempts to escape, but all were unsuccessful. Luckily, the cargo ship was attacked by varran pirates, and Fawzi was liberated. His saviours were the Kra'zzla, a varran pirate family that ran the ship, "Shakir's Watch." They dropped him off on the coast of Lusists, and Fawzi made his way back to Santigo to be reunited with his family. 34-51 After returning to his family, Fawzi and Tyliss had a second child, a daughter named Nala. With another mouth to feed they struggled to keep food on the table. Fawzi's old employer had already replaced him, and the de Santigos weren't in town. Fawzi came into contact with the Kra'zzla and decided to join them. During his time with the Kra'zzla, Fawzi grew close to their captain, Shakir, and eventually adopted the Kra'zzla name. When Shakir died, Fawzi took up the helm until Shakir's son, Ri'az, came of age. A few more years of sailing and Fawzi retired, returning to his family in Lusists. 51-53 With the looming threat of the Avanthar horde, Fawzi decided to move his family to Regalia. There, the Santigos provided them with housing and financial support. Fawzi bounced between various guarding jobs until he was grievously injured, leading him to search for a more peaceful occupation. During this time, he and Tyliss adopted a varran orphan named Taraji. Now Currently, Fawzi works as a fisherman, providing food and regals to supplement his family. He has learned that the Shakir's Watch had sunk, and now many of the Kra'zzla youth are moving to Regalia in hopes of starting a new life. Now he works to provide the well being of his family, doing his best to make sure that they feel secure in Regalia.
Spoiler: Inventory Pockets Pouch (30-50 Regals) 4 1/2"x6" Leather Bound Notebook 3" Silver-Point Drawing Tool 3 1/2" Coal Drawing Tool 4 1/2" Shucker Knife (2" Blade) Accessories Plain brass wedding ring worn on left ring finger. Three plain brass earrings, one on right and two on left ear. Three living metal bracelets constantly in form-state. (Left leg) Waterskin worn on hip. (32 oz, usually filled with water.) Spoiler: Relationships WIP Spoiler: Family Tyliss | @IGutTheMidasTuch | Wife | Fearsome woman with gorgeous eyes. There's no one in the world that Fawzi loves more. Beau | @Pugsly10 | Son | Beau is a Chad. Nala | @HeyoBiggums | Daughter | A bubbly bundle of joy now happily married. She also happens to be Fawzi's favourite child. Fawzi misses dearly. Ri'az | @Voidemite | Nephew | Nenet Pieto Juzolias Spoiler: Voice Reference Spoiler: Close WIP! Isabel de Bosque | @Pugsly10:,( |Motherly Figure | She had deemed Fawzi the nickname "Floofy" and had provided him work for her then-husband, Alvaro d'Souza. She had made sure Fawzi was paid, well fed, and maintained. If it weren't for Isabel, Fawzi would never be where he is now. Alvaro d'Souza | @Belgrade | The Captain | Fawzi's Ol'Captain, they had sailed together for nineteen years. Alvaro once genuinely offered to have Fawzi put down when Fawzi was injured. Past this, they are now good friends. Keanu Hath | Best Ailor Friend | Reverend Ludwig | Mentor | Alec Dondario | Good Friend, Respects this guy | Spoiler: Likes WIP! Benjamin Journey | Neighbor, Patrol buddy | Vulmar Ravenstead | Boss | Relations are at a solid 20. Spoiler: Update Log 8/2/18 Huge Rewrite, As Fawzi's old application, was severely outdated. 10/2/18 @Rochelle_ Grammerlied Added a before birth in life story to explain how Fawzi's family was taken to Farah'Deen. 27/2/18 Replacing School information with the new Profienciey System! If the Husbandry Culture set was about being a good husband I would have pumped a bunch of points into that. 10/3/18 Added that new Varran Birth Specification. 11/3/18 Reworked the Life Story. Here's a Color Code. This Colour: For basic changes, just detail to keep the life story a bit more fluid. This Colour: Sort of important. Bits that are highlighted in his color are really there to explain how Fawzi had gotten experience and proficiencies in languages, combat, sailing, etc. This Colour: This color is used to the really important bits. Life Changing Events. 5/4/18 Fixed Grammar Errors. Redistributed proficiency points. (imo Body Care should be mandatory for all Varran.) Updated Relations. No more colour code. 17/4/18 17th of April is Fawzi's birthday, he is now 47 and points were added to his prof. 16/5/18 Points have been redistributed, lines have been added to a his life story as Fawzi is now a grandfather. 21/9/18 Updated to match new application template. 14/1/19 Updated proficiency 21/7/19 Updated proficiency Updated personality Trimmed some stuff 20/8/19 Added a "Now" section to the life story Trimmed Life Story to meet word limitations. 19/9/19 Updated proficiency 12/11/19 Updated proficiency. Increased sailing prof to obtain that sweet sweet astronomy skill 9/12/19 Updated proficiency to fit new changes as well as to make make use of those hobby points. 9/17/20 Updated proficiency to fit new rules. Left a few uninvested points for if Fawzi learns anything in the future. 9/25/20 Started Extended App. Starting with Inventory.
Peer Review! How can he be loyal and conflicted at the same time this really makes no sense, when you're loyal you do what you're told, when you're conflicted you're unsure and usually battle ng two decisions, I'd recommend squashing the conflicted. Center the word "Fawzi Kra'zzla" at the top Give a better example then he doesn't know his compass, if he sees someone murdering someone what does he do, or the classic bakery thief, expand on this I'd like to see more in this paragraph and a few more sentences in two and three. Other then that exceptional application.
Review time! White-haired Varran are normally found around Elven-Populated centers. I would say change his place of birth, to better fit this. Also, I noted some grammar/spelling mistakes in the life story. Try running it through grammarly real quick! Was it a family of Ailor that took him into slavery? Why Farah'Deen? Most Varran come from Ithania, and the little amount of Varran still in slavery, are owned by Nelfin. Make all edits in a new color and @ me in the comments below once done!
Changes Made: @Rochelle_ I put it through Grammarly Added a before birth section to explain how Fawzi was brought up into Farah'Deen in blue. His parents were both white furred and been taken to Sastana. I personally would not like to change his birthplace as I have already RPed him for a year and people have come to know him to be a white cat from Farah'Deen.
@Rochelle_ Done! Also added 6 points into short shield so Fawzi's got something to defend himself with.
@Rochelle_ Okaye. I updated Fawzi's Life Story since it still mentioned Walllar, I had also tried to shorten it the best I could. I also added some color coding. This Colour: For basic changes, just detail to keep the life story a bit more fluid. This Colour: Sort of important. Bits that are highlighted in his color are really there to explain how Fawzi had gotten experience and proficiencies in languages, combat, sailing, etc. This Colour: This color is used to the really important bits. Life Changjng Events.
@Rochelle_ Changes made in Orange. Fixed all the errors that Grammarly could find in my life story. Redistributed points. Updated Fawzi's Morality. Also, is it possible to stack school of Captaincy on top of a combat school? Considering the school of captaincy is mostly based off of personal experience, and he had trained in Graklak for twelve years and had sailed for nineteen years separately.
@Rochelle_ I've re-added Lusitian seeing that the Wiki still considers it to be a language, I have also added two new lines to Fawzi's life story. Also, Bump.
My Review: His myriad of Languages is no longer possible, as he has no points invested in Linguistics. Please limit them according to the rules visible on the Character Application Template. Please remove the statement of Body Build from the Visual Information section, that is no longer part of the Character Application Template. Tag me once the edits have been done in green @RightChat
@Re-Reviewer Updated the proficiencies to match the proficiency boosts. Updated personality and abilities. Trimmed a lot of the optional stuff out.
My sole point of review is to ask for an update to the end of his Life Story, to understand what he's back in the city doing or for. Additionally, it needs to be cut down to the 900 word limit. Tag me once the edits have been done in green @RightChat
@HydraLana Updated his Life Story, adding a "Now" portion. Also cut down the life story to 812 words.
