Basic Information(being edited!) Full Name: Crowly Drake (crow) Age:25 Gender: Male Race: Ailor | Brannon Lineage | Is part of Warmlands Culture Skill Information Total Points: 50 / 10 / 5 Core: +20 Shield Combat Training (+15 Core, +5 Racial) +8 Heavy Ranged Combat (+8 Core) +4 Spear Combat Training (+4 Core) Talent: +5 Perception Training (+5 Core) Hobby: +10 Hunting Arts (+10 Hobby) Body Shape: 20 + 8 + 4 = 32 Physical Stat Average Body Fat, Muscular Languages Common Special Traits/Spells/Mutations Great force, gate smash, Bunker down Visual Information Eye Color: Dark brown Hair Color: Darkbrown Hair Style: Short and wavy Skin Color:Light Tan Clothing: Height: 5’10 Personality How would your character express Happiness and Contentedness? They would be casual, expressing gratitude, joy, or thankfulness. Not often cheering, mostly reserves them for victory shouts How would your character respond to experiencing Fear? Reacts with Anger, someone who dedicated their life to protect others should be ashamed of allowing fear to strike How would your character respond to experiencing Stress? They always compare stress with force against their shield, and to relieve it is to retaliate. Which he feels it the best way to handle stress is to push the stress of themselves How does your character view Law and Authorities? Thinks them to be nothing but glory seekers, often using their positions to benefit themselves. How does your character feel about Races other than their own? They all have their own beautys and flaws, no one is perfect. How does your character feel about Religion for themselves, and other faiths? It is fine for one to believe in such things but not for them to expect miracles, or problems to resolve themselves by praying. How does your character feel about the Arcane and Magical in the world? Magic is a useful tool, the countless possibilities it has to further better the world is too great to pass. He hopes to further understand it. How does your character feel towards their family? Never really knew them, often wonders what would’ve been but never wishes to experience it. What is your character the most proud of about themselves? It would be their strength but for the fact of the amount of people they can help, What motivates your character to move forward and better their life? To become more immovable, their sole goal is to not deter against any force. If they are to fail in this they must work harder. What is your character's biggest insecurity? Their inability to pick up on the culture and social norms that he isn’t yet familiar with. What is your character's biggest fear? The Ocean, it's such a unforgiving places, tides, waves, and the creatures that lay within are should be respected as much as they are to be feared Life Story In the vast deserts of Farah’deen amongst its warridden lands was a small child roaming alone. Till coming upon a Village in the sands, desperate for food and water the child stole from the crops, stuffing as much as he could into his shirt. Not long after he was caught by one of the farmers. He embraced for the worse, but found instead to be lectured of stealing, having to earn what theirs. On that day he was adopted by that Farmer he will call father, who was known by most as Mathias, and a strict yet caring Mother Demandra. They named the boy Crowly mostly because of how they found him, he’s grown to be a helpful hand around the village, at first taking his fathers words to earn more food and water. The more useful you are, the more you’re taken care of. Though he came to realize the more the crops thrived and the more water that was brought back everyone still benefits from his hard work. So when he came of age was eager to join the hunting parties. wasn’t the best at hunting bigger game up close often relying on his fellow hunters to finish it off, but learned quickly that it was easier to strike them from afar by throwing his spear, injuring them and finishing them off as it tries to get away. Over time Crowly has learned to better track, often asking advice from the veteran hunters that were part of the hunting party who were not to keen on sharing their wisdom as they felt its knowledge to be earned, but was convinced that it would be better for all to know how to properly hunt. As the boy grew older reaching the age of becoming a man, the village grew to know him as a Man of the people, often giving his earned food and water to the more malnourished folk, and offering to do more of the chores so there were more hands to do other tasks around the village, it was at this time where they started to be noticed by a war group, who often overlooked them because they had little resources to offer, as well as weak people. Finally they approach the village demanding either a supply of food each month or 2 of their healthiest workers. This of course enraged Crowly, as they did not work for the food they demanded, and then daring to take the people who gave him a home. He will not take this lying down. Over the next two weeks Crowly and those who volunteered to aid him fight off the war band. Knowing their foes not only had more experience, but also better tools to harm them with, the small group came up with the plan to use their spears to keep the enemy at bay as well as using shields to keep themselves more protected. They have grown to be well trained in shielding themselves and fighting afar with their spears, that each time that they fought off the war band they returned with less number, thinking that they have won. To only find that in their absence the village was raided. In that moment Crowly picked up a broken shield and any left over scraps and squashed crops to find the leader of the same war band to end them for good.
Basic Information I would include Crowly's culture besides "Ailor" and "Brannon Lineage." Visual Information Ailors do not have any blue colors as a natural form of hair. However, you can add mutations or by using alchemy. You do not need to invest any points to have mutations written into your character, but you still have to mention them under "Special Traits/Spells/Mutations." For alchemy, it is recommended you find an alchemist in roleplay to give your character any hair color-altering alchemy. For Brannon Ailor, it is impossible to reach 6'5" in height unless you invest in the Point-Buy Genetics Voluism. Personality This is a minor formatting issue. You may want to fix this just so that it's easier to read. For "Insecurity," look at what I said for "Visual Information." You can have blue hair through those two methods, but you, unfortunately, can't hide it on the application itself! Life Story For the sake of making your Life Story make sense with Crowly's proficiencies, write how he learned the various proficiencies he knows today. For example, talk about how he's such a good shield user and a good hunter. That is all I have to point out. The application was a good read, especially for it being your first application! You have 2-3 weeks to complete these edits. Once you edit your application, change the edited text to another color and tag me in another post.
I don't know if you mean to just reply to you or, post a sperate thread with the edited application, but I'll do this first so I don't end up having someone else come around
@InkyCR0w You did it correctly. With this said and done, your application is approved! You're free to revert the colored text back to default. Also, as a side note, there are five Warmland Cultures that you can pick from if you want to be more specific about it.
