Charity Slivian

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    • Full Name: Charity Slivian

    • Age: 82

    • Gender: Female

    • Race: Altalar

    • Main Ambition: Popularity , Wealth and Adventure

    • Special Permission: Expert Bestial Speech , Caster Beast Possession
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    • Eye Color: Dark mystic blue, her eye shape is quite round big eyes her eyebrows are quite thin and have a slight arch in the center of her eyebrow.

    • Hair Color: Chairty has long wavy scruffy bleach blonde hair

    • Hair Style: Straight she has very thick hair that can easily be tangled. She has got a very odd fringe , her type of fringe is a very untrimmed one so it drapes over her face.

    • Skin Color: Chairty is very pale skinnes

    • Clothing: Chairty is not the most richest person so she just wears a strapless leafy dress that reaches to the top of her upper legs , being very short it lowers down slightly. at each of the end of the dress is slits that stretch and tighten to her skin to fit.

    • Height: 6'1

    • Weight: 140 pounds

    • Body Build: Charity has quite the slim figure.

    • Weapon of Choice: Caster and a mice she can easily communicate with

    • Visual Information (Expansion) Facial Structure
    • Charity has a round head and very soft light pink lips. Chairty also on her left eye has a slight lazy eye that is hardly noticeable unless looked closely. Charity most of the time has a very bright happy expression most of the time. As for nose she has quite a tiny nose and the tip of her nose is round. The bridge of her nose is quite long and slim. Charity also has white freckles all over her cheeks and nose bridge that match her hair colour.

    • Chairty for a quite a small person would have surprisingly have some muscle in her legs and arms from running about and climbing tree's. Also as she does not each much has a slim body. Charity has very tiny hips and is flat chest her body has a very tiny curve but most of it is a straight line.

    • Charity Is not much for fashion at all. She does not own any jewelry due to how poor she is and she prefers darker colours because of how they make her blend easier into the night as Charity likes to go unoticed.

    • Charity has a very shy quite voice ,but when speaking loud she normally sounds like a young child, Charity does not have any accent of the sort and speaks Elven better then common.
    Personality and Abilities


    Personality Traits

    • .Shy - She likes to talk and have a conversation with one person at a time , Along with also struggles to start a conversation. She will not blank someone if they talk to her she might say limited words depending on who the person is. Her shyness drives people around her away, so she is normally left alone making her feel lonely , and somewhat depressed witch would make her more brood and shy completely blocking the people around her and driving them completely away. Some people take her shy actions as rude and impolite as she does not reply with full sentences most of the time.

    • Kind - She is kind to all species and creatures when she is not agitated, Charity favours the more animalistic races like Maiar , Thylan and Dakkar. But she will be polite and kind to all races but , more open and play full with specific races. People who are acceptant will learn that Charity is quite a kind polite young lady. But most people are quick to judge Charity so little learn about her as a person. She feels more open and relaxed when she is kind to others , and people notice how calm she can be for such a strange girl raising more questions about her upbringing.

    • Understanding - She is understanding and will listen to anyone. She also has a good skill of cheering people up so she will always listen to anyones problem big or small. She has the determination to try and make peoples problems better she will go to any length to make a person smile. This brings out the caring kind behaviour of Charity that her friends and people around her like to see , and her friends especially try encourage her understanding behaviour instead of her animalistic behaviour. This also brings people closer to her , as in the area she remains in people are quite troubled so having somebody to listen draws them closer to Charity.

    • Strong Minded - No insult can break her that much and she could hold her part a verbal fight. She has been trained over the years by Derek her companion and guardian , that whatever people say most of the time is despiteful and cruel and that if someone is crude towards her that she should stand her ground mentally. This shows people that she might be weak in battle but she is a force to be reckoned with as her mental capability and intelligence is enough to trick someone into a trap or getting what she wants , so most people try not to upset her and can feel threatened but how somebody with an innocent persona (mostly) can be so strong minded. Making her friends weary when upsetting her.

    • Sneaky - She will do any act or trick to get what she wants. Most people actually see Charity as a child due to her apperance , and her innocent happy personality. She uses this as an advantage using her Innocence to guilttrip people into giving her food. Charity is also very short so it makes it easier for her to sneak around and hide in tight spaces.
    • .Mysterious - She is an odd girl with many questions asked about her lifestyle. Most people belittle Charity but question her animalistic behaviour and odd flaws. People mostly choose to blank her as her behaviour may desterb some citizens witch drives her to act more animalistic behaviour then civil. People become more suspicious of her and self aware , around her. She has so many questions asked about her people seem to be lured in and interested in her odd behaviour giving her the attention so loves
    • Intelligent - Charity has grown to be smart about her surroundings and what do to in certain situations. Growing up in a forest she has became a "Born Surviour" she is very good with finding and savoring food . So most of her Intelligence is to do with survival. Once people see this intelligence she has , people pose her more as a threat and not just some innocent soul and most even impressed and glory her for someone so animalistic can have such intelligence.


    • Skeptikal - Charity is always skeptikal of new people and even her friends now , once arriving to regalia she was judged heavily due to her animalistic behaviour this pushing her to live in the sewers. And soon adapted to the ways in the sewer like becomming skepitka with everybody. But being skepitcal has its advatages , it has saved her life by being skepitcal of random strangers in the sewers and not make contact with them , but on the disadavantage she has trouble fully trusting her friends. People dont normally relise Charity is skepitkal , they just pass it of as nervouse or anxiouse and try to help but she would most likely push them out
    • Coward - Charity is extremely cowardly , towards most people. If someone threatened to hurt her she would keep a strong mind , but become anxiouse. She is mostly coward towards physical threats then verball ones. This Cowardness pushes her to stay in the sewers where she is less likely to be judges or threatned because of her animalistic behaviour , People look down on her as a "dansel in distress" most of the time as she is to cowardly to protect herself and or friends.
    Strengths

    • .Climbing Tree's - Since she was a child , whenever she snuck out of the house to run wild in the forest. If she was not caring for animals or plants she would climb the tree's and scout the forest below. She likes to be able to look over the forest at night so for most of her life every night she would climb the highest tree to gaze at the stars dreaming of a life of adventure and popularity.

    • .Running - The forest she lived behind was quite large , and Charity wanted to explore all of it. Growing up she had a lot of spirit and energy and was excited to explore every corner of the forest so she ran as fast as her little legs could take her. When she finally was caring for an animals (Troop) she had to run most of the time to keep up with him , whenever the two travelled the woods and over the years got a long stamina for running.

    • Beast Magic Possession - Charity was being taught by a man who was Mage abilighted in beast magic , Charity was only taught Beast Magic for three years before the man who taught her died in the Baver Accident , She can communicate with cats , dogs , horses and other animals in that range but does not actually communicate with animals in that range. She only communicates to small animals and rodents having very easy controll over them.
    Weaknesses

    • .Throwing a punch - Charity in her life has never had a fighting lesson , she has never even thrown a punch not needing to . Whenever she has been involved in a fight she will run being incredibly fast , Trying to punch will be weak and do no damage most likely so the chance of her damaging someone with a punch is /very/ unlikely

    • .Kicking - Again Charity has not had a single fighting lesson in her lifetime and has never been in a real situation where she would needs to kick someone in defence or even in a fight, She has never had good aim so if she tried to kick a ball having a lazy eye making it somewhat difficult to see straight forward she would easily miss the ball.

    • .Lifting objects - The only "weight" she can lift is her own, and that is when she hoists herself up onto a branch or anything else. The heaviest thing she could maybe pick up is large sized rock
      even so she would most likely hold it for five seconds before dropping it.


    • .Fighting with Weapons - Charity has never held a weapon before, the only object she could use as a weapon is a stick , and she has horrible aim so she might not even swing in the right direction. But a sword or axe would most likely be to heavy for her to even pick up with the little strength and muscle she has.
    Personality and Abilities


    • Charity has quite a lot of quirks , and very strange behaviour a lot of people question. One quirk Charity has is nibbling her hair , when Charity is bored or lonely she will grab her long hair and nibble the ends of it as she likes the feeling of being tickled on the tongue along with being distracted from bordeness. Charity has odd behaviour and sometimes acts like an animal herself for example if someone was to threaten her she would lower herself onto all fours or sit on the floor trying to show she is weak and does not want to fight.

    • Charity has limited skills , such as Gardening. Charity has a green thumb and knows her plants really well she also finds joy out of taking care of something that will grow like a flower, Charity has a skill that would be seen as quite useless to some but she is pretty skilled at running , she has a high stamina from how much she runs away from threats/enemies
    Likes

    Animals - Grown up with Animals and Nature. When she was alone as a child she felt she could be herself with animals even if they did not understand her she felt less lonly.

    Nature - She finds peace in nature the sound of the leafs russling in the winds and the birds chirping is music to her ears as she is not to fond of heavily crowded places with loud noises.

    Singing - She loves to sing as it impresses the birds and animals. Charity does not have any special talents like fighting or art she does not even sing as well as most but impressing birds with her attempt at singing fills her with ambition.

    All species - She likes to come across new types of people herself being odd and weird other species might understand how she feels.


    Dislikes

    Bad Singing - Bad singing scares the birds away. And she is not the best singer her self but she cant stand awful loud annoying noises like bad singing and bad high notes.

    Scary Stories - She is very skittish and cowardly easily scared even by a myth. Charity is quite naive so she will believe the silliest of stories.

    Drunks - They are very rude and mean. She does not hate alcohol she dislikes how it changes people so quickly.

    Cages - She never wants to be held back. She does not want to be trapped anywhere and fears being held against her will for anything.


    Life Story

    She was born and raised in Ceardia being a single child. Chairty's parents hoped and prayed for her to be male. This upset her parents knowing she could not spread the family name. Growing up Charity never really had any personal friends or relationships with her parents, at the age of four her parents had already started to neglect her and make her do all the chores and hard work, This neglection and little contact with human people. This drove Charity to sneak out into the forest she lived behind and get away from the screams and cries of heated arguments between her parents



    As years went on as the same routine Charity would go out in the woods every night play and care for animals and plants as it was the only satisfaction she found in life, After awhile she noticed a homeless man living in the woods she thought nothing of it untill one day she decided to give him the left over bread she called 'Dinner" this instantly became a friendship between the man and Charity .Days turn to months and months turn to a years Charity and her new friend Derek could not of been happier, she knew all about Derek and his adventures and the magic he uses. Eventually Charity had become extremely sick of all the arguments and hard work she had to live with and decided to pack her bags and run away, The only place she could go was with Derek and since the day the two wonder around Ceardia’s Forests and Derek being a Beast mage , seeing how much Charity loved animals decided to teach her all he knew.


    Derek and Charity never lived in a home they use to just survive in the forest and forge their own food , now growing up in this forest Derek decided to make sure to teach her manners. Derek looked down on Charity as the child he never had.Charity always wondered what it was like to live in the city to live like a normal human as Derek taught her growing up about how horrible and nasty humans really are telling her story's about hand how cruel humans are most of those stories being lies , also telling her she should never try and go into the city to befriend any of these horrible humans. This burned into her mind that she may of been human but she did not belong with them and was convinced for along time that all humans are scary evil monsters . Over the years Derek did tell Charity a little about humans and how they act making her curious and not as judgmental on humans and even curious to if they all are really as evil as Derek said they are. But this is the most on what Charity knows. Derek only did all this as he knew not all people are horrible but he did not want her to see the truth about the horrible people out in the city or to be hurt.


    . One of Charity's happiest memories is the day she turned fifteen, On her memorable fifteenth birthday Derek decided she was old enough to care for an animal and also an Animal she could become very connected to. So she was given a newborn orphan doe she called Blossom, Charity was extremely happy as Derek has a what he said was a best friend / partner in crime who was a wolf named wolf, And Charity never having a best friend apart from Derek she now had one. Growing up Charity was raised to never have a 'pet' and having a pet was wrong and if people thought of any animals of her pets she would be offended. Charity and Blossom grew up together happily and soon when Blossom the Doe was soon to have a newborn deer Charity over the moon, and when the time came for Blossom to give birth this was another happy memory as this was the first animal she 'midwifed'. Sadly during the birth Blossom being seven the near death of a doe , her body did not survive but managed to give birth to a healthy newborn elk. This did sadden Charity and decided to care and raise the newborn elk herself and she named the newborn Troop. not so much memorable moment but a question she had always had until this day, The question was when will she find her lover or will she ever find her lover. Growing up Derek did not teach her much about human life but he did teach her about , relationships and love but in an odd way. Derek always taught her that she one day will find a lover someone who will claim her and would love her forever this made Charity more tempted to learn more about her own race.Sadly Charity only got three years of Magic training as once the Baver attacked happened upon Ceardia and Derek was a victim along with Troop who was killed in the incident as for Charity she barely survived and fled to regalia by boat , and becoming a Refugee. Now she only tries to communicate with rodents and smaller animals as she finds it easier and even has a trusty mouse companion.

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    Review!

    First and foremost, you state Charity to be a Talar. Yet she retains white hair and dark skin? The only races able to have white hair within the Elven spectrum are the Isldar, who have fair skin, the Drowdar, who have purple skin and finally the Shendar, who have grey skin. Take a more expansive look through the Elven lore please.

    In the case of your personality traits, strengths and weaknesses - whilst you have stated as to just what each of them are, you've gone into no detail whatsoever. All in all, I have little to review in all three sections. I would suggest you took a look at more approved character sheets to get a better grasp on what is it you're meant to be writing in these sections.

    In conclusion, though I won't reject your application - as you've put considerable effort into the life story, I'd like you to really assess the points above to improve your application's quality. You certainly don't lack grammatical skill, so I have faith in your ability to do better! Feel free to PM me any questions you have regarding help, and we could go through this step by step as well!

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    @TheBioverse I have made the Changes you asked and put more detail in the sections you wanted me to put in , I appreciate the comment about my Life Style I am pleased that you noticed my dedication to the the characters life story
     
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    This was a great improvement from the last rendition of the application, and we have only a few changes to make!

    My concern stems around your personality traits. The detail you've added in is good, but even then you've only expanded on what Charity's personality traits are, and how they effect her. I'd like you to go into deeper detail as to how they might affect others around her.

    Furthermore, there are no inherently negative personality traits that she has. Try adding in two more negative personality traits , from anger to possible dips of depression - anything to make the character more 'human', in a sense.

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    I tried my best with the changes
     
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    Isldar have very pale skin.
     
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    thank you for pointing that out ^^
     
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    Accepted!~
     
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    @TheBioverse Could I re-work her app due to lore changes and pits I want to add?
     
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    Sure!
     
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    Could you change the colour of any edits for me? @FlossyBerry
     
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    done
     
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    Despite only learning Beast Magic for 3 years, you mention that she's Mage level in both subschools? That would take approximately 25 years. It would be far more reasonable to say she was Caster level for both subforms. @FlossyBerry
     
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    I changed the edit's to one subschool
     
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    @TheBioverse I apologise for all these updates, but another one! I have asked permission for Expert Bestial Speech , Caster Beast Possession
     

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