Full Name: Alexander Felix de Silva Aliases: The Cursed Inquisitior Gender: Male Race: Ailor | Daendroque Age: 35 Religion: Unionism Sexuality: Strictly Heterosexual Star Sign: Sagittarius Weapon Of Choice: Halberd or Polesword Total Points: 35/35 Combat Proficiency: +10 Pole Combat Skill (10 From Points) +10 Extra Heavy Combat Skill (10 From Points) +5 Unarmed Combat Skill (5 From Points) Body Training: +5 Athletic Training (5 From Points) Special Race Proficiency: +20 Unionism Sanktism (15 From Race, 5 From Points) Body Shape: Body Shape: 10*2+5*2=30+10 = 40 Body Shape: Muscular Body Fat: Average Body Fat Languages Daendroque - Parental Tongue Anglian - Parental Tongue Common - Free Witchblood Mutations: Venator Repentance Venator Blades Protego Warding Venator Silence Eye Color: Glowing Green Hair Color: Coal Black Skin Color: Tanned Hair Style: Short and militaristic. Clothing: Basic sailor overcoat with black trousers Height: 6'4 Personality Alignment: Chaotic Good: Alexander aligns with the chaotic good, as he mainly functions as a man with good intentions but questionable methods. As he believes in the greater good of society, he will go to whatever limit it takes to do what he believes is right. As he finds it the easiest way to ascend the Ailor hierarchy. Personality Type The Commander: Alexander is seen as a Commander archetype due to his leadership and bold personality. As he is a creative problem solver and seeks to rally others around him. As he tries to create his own solution and rally those around him to victory. Character's Religion Unionism - 7/10 - REBORN Alexander's faith in Unionism has reborn, through finding himself with Commander Julius Peirgarteen. Returning to his previous devout worship to the Spirit. Alexander does anything it takes to spread The Great Way, and the word of the Spirit. Chapter One: Exotic Beginnings Alexander Felix de Silva was born December 19th, 278 A.C. to father Guillem Silva, the first of four, his mother completely unknown mother other than knowing she's an Anglian brothel worker who his father had a child with without wed. His father disappeared to Ithania and did not return have Alexander lack a father figure and lose his male role model. His used to sing with him at night when he was a child expanding to his love into music. Chapter Two: “Growing up is… Hard.” During this time, Alexander sought out to meet his mother and locate her. Not too long after he located them in a local tribal time in Daen, as he began to experience Avanthar life by storm. Inducted into the tribe as a halfling which he was shunned for, he picked up axe skills in combat. As he went along he gained the culture full frontal, gaining his first set of tattoos as a teenager. Chapter Three: “Stiff In The Armor” During this time he only maintained his diet and commonly worked out to keep himself in top shape. During this time, he frequented travel to Anglia spending a long time in the blue-collar society. After nine years of a House Guard Alexander quit the job due to lack of interest and general wear and tear on his body, as well as a pursuit in other works. Chapter Four: “This City Still Feels New.” As a twenty-nine-year-old Alexander found a contact to the du Ponts on their quick rise to fame. And became a Salamandra for them during these times, he’d bar bounce and sing around for the crowds for money. He still feels new and impartial to the city however it’s grown on him, he has met people like his brother Mateo Silva. Chapter Five: “Happily Ever After. Or so I thought.” Alexander on a late night, in the charter wars with the Black Guard, was shot in his midsection. Piercing his armor, as he nearly bled out. To this, he fell under the Phantasma curse, and searches for redemption.
Review time! The basic info expansion, likes and dislikes should all be inside a spoiler. His personality paragraphs don't fit the theme of each paragraph, they all sort of just list an aspect of his personality. You should rewrite these to better fit how strangers see him, how he sees himself, how friends and family see him and his morals. Blackmark fighting must be listed as a talent How could a natural born leader be easy to take advantage of? These seem to contradict so one must be removed. There are a number of typos and grammatical errors in the life story that should be addressed. It takes a minimum of 5 years to become a blackmark Make all edits in a different color and tag me once done!
Changed up character, Removed mention of previous family no longer family attached, Added music as main focus dropping combat mostly Added proficiency's Changed name @Rochelle_
Talk more about his family in the life story. Where did his father go? When did he leave? Does he have siblings? What is their social class? Speak about the impact his mother had on him! Family is important!
Quickly: The first paragraph was completely redone due to it being outdated with the character re brand.. The second paragraph was redone due to it being incorrectly done, it was family and insiders feelings rather then internal so I took it upon myself to fix it. Paragraph four has been redone, due to the following criteria for paragraph two, it was not morality related so I made it so it followed a chaotic neutral morality, with underlying variables determining true morality and freedom of decision. Tagging, @Rochelle_ since this would be considered major enough for a rereview.
Review time! Your proficiency points are off, as he has 37 points instead of 27. I do not think he is passionate enough about Unionism to be deserving of an aspect.
Hi! His eye color is still listed as glowing green, and he’s still wearing salamandra armour (which I believe is no longer used?) So just edit those and you’re good. But you’re still Approved!
Still meant to be a Phantasma who desires to be a witchblood. Salamandra Uniform is still actively worn by Wifre and him.
In a previous edit you removed Phantasma, so I would refrain from changing back/forth so often, and rather focus on getting him cured by IC means from now on! Otherwise, thanks for pointing out my mistakes!
@Rochelle_ Some more updates and tinkering in proficiency. Made Alexander half Avanthar Updated app to be more current and clear Requesting another review.
I'm so so so sorry but, Changed back to full Ailor as half-elf made little to no sense in rp, and did nothing to add to it, and it made little to no sense to his backstory. Shuffled points again, I'm so sorry.
@nath_n I have three small points of Review: A minor correction, but please change it to Daendroque Your calculation here is wrong, you're missing new combat skills in the Body Shape, so please recalculate the number. He still wears the uniform of a long-inactive noble house? That's a bit odd, I'd advise changing it, or explaining somewhere why he still wears the outfit. Tag me once the edits have been done in green
