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In need of a reviewer, if anyone was familiar with Álvaro's app before I've changed the name back to de Santigo, fixed the proficiencies for this version and tweaked the life story a tad. Everything else remains the same.
You have Alvaro listed as a Lusitsian Ailor, but for sake of clarity and following the Proficiency Page's list of cultures, I'd mark him down as Daendroquin Ailor.
Visual Information
Go ahead and remove the Body Build bullet point from this section since the Skill Information section now includes this information.
Personality and Abilities
In your first paragraph, I would like for you to elaborate on the two sides of the coin here. List a couple of specific behaviors he might normally exhibit when in his laid back mood, and to draw a comparison, include some behaviors he might display when in his cranky mood. I would put these before the last sentence.
In your second paragraph, go ahead and elaborate on a couple of specific insecurities. This is just so we get a clearer image of what burdens him.
In your third paragraph, I'd like to see some more detail concerning his behavior towards his sons, since you especially list them as a singular factor that take a priority in his life. Think about how his personality and actions around them would vary greatly from how he behaves around anyone else.
Make your edits in a legible blueand tag me when you've completed them. @prem_
I did a 16p test for the new app format and I wanted to leave this here to remind myself that Álvaro is apparently 82% judging and 78% assertive and I thought it was funny what an ass hole he is
Main Ambition isn't a part of the template anymore. You can replace this with Sexuality if you so choose. You should move the Preferred Weapon of Choice point up to Basic Information.
You haven't included Body Stat, Shape, or Build under Skill Info. Please do so.
Make your edits in a different color and tag me when you're done. @fuithlug
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