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    Basic Information
    • Full Name: Zzyralisza Zzen'zsivar
    • Age: 50
    • Gender: Female
    • Race: Wilder Slizzar
    • Sexuality: Bisexual
    • Preferred Weapon: Daggers
    Skill Information

    Total Points: 70/70 (20+ from hobby & talent)
    • 20+ Sorcery | from points.
    • 10+ Dextrous Rogue| from points.
    • 10+ Burgling Rogue | from points.
    • 10+ Dagger Combat | from points
    • 5+ Perception Training | from talent points.
    • 5+ Stealth Rogue | from talent points.
    • 5+ Cooking Art | from hobby points.
    • 5+ Husbandry Art | from hobby points.
    Body Shape
    • Body Stat: 10
    • Body Build: Athletic Body Shape
    • Body Fat: Average Body Fat
    Languages
    • Zasta | Native
    • Common | Fluent
    • Modern Altalar | Racial
    • Plains Elven | Racial
    Special Traits

    Racial Abilities (Always Active)
    • Slizzar Shift I
    • Flux Shift I
    • Flux Shift II
    • Flux Shift III
    • Flux Shift IV
    • Flux Shift V
    • Mind Surge I
    • Mind Surge II
    • Mind Surge III
    • Mind Surge IV
    • Mind Surge V
    • Puppet Control I
    Raprann Soul-line (Inactive) (Great Horned Owl with Orange and Amber colours)
    • Soul Drain
    • Halfbeast Shift
    • Flock Shift
    • Wisdom of the Raprann
    • Poise of the Heron
    • Song of the Glorybird
    Sorcery Spells (Active)
    • Element Control IV
    • Element Control III
    • Light Mend II
    • Light Mend I
    • True Path I
    Visual Information
    • Eye Colour: Black & Golden
    • Hair Colour: Red
    • Hair Style: Short
    • Skin Colour: White and Red Scales
    • Clothing: Dresses
    • Height: 6’3
    Personality and Abilities
    • Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
    • Personality: The Thinker
    • Religion: Faith of Estel - Ellea (7/10)
    Life Story

    Childhood
    • During the year of 241AC, a new Slizzar was born within the city of Sol Fazais named Zzyralisza
    • Zzyralisza started her life off slow, usually reading books and learning about the Slizzar culture, though it was difficult due to living outside of Slizzar society and ended up finding more interest in the Altalar one that she lived in
    • Due to House of Mentors being unavailable for the young Slizzar she had to learn how to properly shift and mimic other races through her parents, because of this Zzyralisza had a long and hard time learning
    • At around ten years old Zzyralisza finally perfected her shifting and took on a guise known as Lisaraye, a Solvaan Altalar
    Teen years
    • Zzyralisza though being shown different weapons she found most interest in shortswords and
    • One night whilst heading back to the city after exploring the local wilderness Zzyralisza was attacked by what seemed like a bear though not like the ones she had seen in the wild, the young Slizzar was fed from and infected by the Ursarr
    • Zzyralisza once fully turned often went out on various hunts for both animals and people, often putting hew new abilities to use
    • Whilst normally Slizzar would put faith into the Nessarassian Zzyralisza took to putting faith into the Faith of Estel, being influenced by both the Altalar society and her curse
    • Zzyralisza decided she needed a source of income and took to breaking into houses and pickpocketing the local residents, rarely ever getting caught
    Adult Years
    • Zzyralisza continued to train even into her adults years for awhile though took a break, choosing to learn the languages of various Nelfin races such as Modern Altalar and Plains Altalar.
    • After a few more years Zzyralisza took to learning something less mundane and took to learning sorcery
    • Eventually, though Zzyralisa decided to pack up and leave home and the city she had grown up in, saying her farewells to her parents before venturing off elsewhere
    • She eventually after many boat trips came across the Holy City of Regalia, deciding to remain there for however long she pleases, changing from guise to guise where she sees fit, and or just remaining as her Slizzar self
    Lisaraye
    • Race: Solvaan Altalar
    • Eye Color: Silver
    • Hair Color: Ginger
    • Hair Style: Long
    • Skin Colour: Peach
    • Clothing: Light Clothing
    • Height: 6'3
     
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    1/7/2020 - Reworked Character
    16/7/2020 - Cured Werebeatism, And Infected with Dorkath Bloodline
    7/8/2020 - Reworked 8 Auld Catharis Points.
    14/10/2020 - Removed Sorcery and put points into Ritualism, replaced burglary with bodycare
    8/2/2021 - Old Slizzar Update
    15/2/2021 - Another Slizzar Update
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    @Nesstro Hi so uhh... I decided before I started RPing her to make her a Slizzar in the guise of Vel'aane instead basically reworking the entire character so needs a re-review I think :>
     
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    @Nesstro Hi sorry for the tag but once again I reworked this app, the prior version of her I never really ended up playing at all and this character just collected dust but I plan on bringing them back!
    • Profs redone
    • Appearance changed slightly
    • Life story reworked to fit new changes
    • Added Raparann Soul-Line, included in backstory
     
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    @Nesstro Hi no changes except for being cured of Werebeastism and infected with Vampirism - Dorkarth line, added mutations and added 10 points from one of the mutations, it says which points are from the mutation to make it clear

    Also there is a changelog under my original post for all edits I do!

    Need Re-Review
     
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    @Nesstro I attack you with a ping brrrr needs re-review new prof overhaul stuff
     
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    @Nesstro Hi character rework sorta
    • Backstory
    • Profs
    • Werebeast
    • Ritualism changes
    • Lowered age
    • She is more of a lost Slizzar now, still knows how to shift though but cares less about identity
    Set to re-review, <3 P.S I hate small hitboxes
     
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    @Nesstro

    Tagging for Re-Review not much has changed this time moreso just updating the character to modern standards, aka Slizzar update
     
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    I will be taking this app for review!
     
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    • 5/10 for religiosity is too low for a character with maxed Ritualism, those who are Ritualists are devout to the point of willingly manifesting their faith.
    • Be sure to have their religion be Exist-influenced in some form if they're a Werebeast.
    Make changes in Green and tag me when finished.
     
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    Do I have to specify what exactly is different between normal Nessrassian and Exist Corrupted Nessrassian?

    If not then I've made the edit and upped her faith to 8/10
     
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    Nah, just needed to put it there.

    Also, approved.
     
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    @KrakenLord01 Set it back to Re-Review since Slizzar update o7
     
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    @KrakenLord01 Setting to re-review, snake became birdsnake, removed ritualism due the incoming update and added some spells
     
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