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Metalitra is a rare metal that can only be acquired through noble progressions. Please change this to another more accessible metal and please list the smith for the more expensive varieties.
@Caelamus Removed Racial abilities section Moved the Visual Informations of Guises to a Google doc, for logistic reasons. (And easier to edit those, without tagging you every time)
@Caelamus aged him up from 56 to 76, to reinforce the feeling of "too 'old' for this" increased his faith to 8 corrected a formatting error by the profs corrected the time of his bloodcast training to the correct 14 years
@Caelamus Added an backstory interaction with another character (in coordination with them), marked in blue again
-Your sorcery abilities and aesthetics are a smidge off, as it is currently it is not possible to have a mix of three darkness and one chaos aesthetics while also being two and two on abilities. I would suggest swapping a darkness aesthetic for a chaos one or combining them in another way you see fit. Beyond that everything seems to check out, mark changes in green and lemme know when you're all set! @Simslp
@Ded Jok Changed the darkness aesthetic Shadows Within to chaos aesthetic Look at Me (marked in green)
@Ded Jok Changed the sorcery according to the sorcery update added the Socialite bit according to the Slizzar update added Modern Altalar and Linguistic Science after ic acquisition added a lore bit with another character after ooc consent from both sides (marked in blue)
@Simslp Please change the font color to something readable. It's gonna be a lot harder for me and anyone in the future to read your app if they have to highlight everything to see what it says. Other than that everything seems to check out, so reapproved with the stipulation that readability is fixed.
Fixed. Sry for that, for some strange reason my browser showed it it normal black instead of the weird white color.
@Simslp Due to the Slizzar update a while ago, some parts of your backstory would need to be tweaked to accommodate. - You can still be born under an Ailor guise, but disguising as a younger Bloodcast is no longer feasible. Flux Shift II is only available once the Slizzar is 18, and cannot be used to disguise as someone younger than that. - Because of this, it's also difficult to imagine a Slizzar training for around 14 years or so under one Knightly order. I would recommend possibly infiltrating the Order at a later age under the alias of Lynmar. The second point is a bit more loose, but in general the backstory would need to be tweaked with the updated Slizzar lore. Apologies for being a smidge late on this request.
@Ded Jok Changes made in blue. Fixed the issue by making his Slizzar mentor also his Bloodcast mentor and shifting to the appearance of a 21 year old Lynmar during the meeting with the Grandmaster
@Ded Jok Changed it according to the update. Added some story parts because of it, they are marked in blue. Also removed a spell as I rarely used it and he soon will be cleansed of them anyways. Futhermore, added Zorraana as the dominant language of his parents and Slizzar society as a whole. Nevertheless, I would still use Zasta as the language of his homeland. Considering he grew and lived in the pre war Essa Empire and their relationship to the Allar. The last bit would be me replacing the Thräl'laniir's Academy with just an "unnamed" academy. Since it seems like it was replaced by the School of Vasty'naar and they don't accept Kathar.
@Ded Jok He got cleansed. So I removed his points from sorcery but still have the abilites on the app since he only will be able to learn them should he get sorcery again
@Simslp Hello! I'd say it's fine to relearn sorcery later down the line, but it would probably be better to axe the abilities until they are relearned proper.
