Rejected Sheet Zeriel Xotiko

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    The Steppe Giant
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    • ◄《 BASIC INFORMATION || Required 》►
      • « Full Name » Zeriel Xotiko
        • ↠ [ Adopted: Zeriel Cavven’karr ]
      • « Age » Thirty-Three.
        • ↠ [ Birthday: June 15th, 271 A.C. ]
        • ↠ [ Zodiac: Gemini ]
      • « Gender » Male.
      • « Race » Kathar.
        • ↠ [ Subrace: Shenathar ]
      • « Sexuality » Heterosexual.
        • ↠ [ Status: Taken ]
      • « Preferred Weapon » Polehammer.
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    • ◄《 BASIC INFORMATION EXPANSION || Optional 》►
      • [ Paragraph One | Upbringing & Position ]
        • Born within the Kathar Steppes to a rather large family sometime in summer, Zeriel has a number of siblings. His two most notable being his deceased older sister Myrathiel and his older brother Skotadi. Encaptured by the riches of Regalia and the chance to convert people to the void, Zeriel and his brother set sights on Regalia. It was there that Zeriel quickly found Kaahl Dzekh’aar. Now he lives within the Kaahl’s base and spends his time on a hunt to spread his faith.
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    |Some call me a master.. Others? An idiot. |
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    • ◄《 SKILL INFORMATION || Required 》►
      • « Total Points » 50 Proficiency Points & 10 Hobby Points.
        • 1 Unspent
        • Core Group Proficiencies:
          • +15 Two-Handed Blunt Combat [ +20 Invested ]
          • +5 Fist Combat [ +5 Invested ]
          • +4 Light Ranged Combat [ +4 Invested ]
        • Talent Proficiencies:
          • +10 Strength Training [ + 10 Invested]
        • Hobby Group Proficiencies:
          • +5 Hunting Art [ +5 Hobby ]
          • +2 Cooking Art [ +2 Hobby ]
          • +3 Wooden Art [ +3 Hobby ]
        • Point-Buy Group Proficiencies:
          • +6 Genetics [+6 Invested ]
          • +9 Sorcery [+9 Invested ]
      • « Body Shape » 25 Physical Stat.
        • ↬ [ Physical Stat: 15 Two-Handed + 5 Fist + 2 Light Ranged + 10 Strength = 32 total
        • ↬ [ Body Shape: Muscular ]
        • ↬ [ Body Fat: Average Body Fat ]
      • « Languages » 2 Total Languages.
        • ↬ [ Kathar Altalar: Upbringing (Fluent) ]
        • ↬ [ Common: Given (Proficient) ]
    • ◄《 SPECIAL TRAITS || Required 》►
      • « Racial » Shenathar.
        • ↬ [ Base: All Available ]
        • ↬ [ Chosen: Body Claws 1 (Primary) & Power curse 2 (Secondary) ]
        • ↬ [ Chosen: Empath Sense 1 & Body Scripture 1 ]
      • « Genetics » Lineage.
        • ↬ [ Inherited: Voluism & Herculean ]
      • « Special Training »
        • ↬ [ Mastered: Great Force I & Gate Smash I ]
      • « Sorcery »
        • ↬ [ Mastered: Super Self I & Element Brand I & Darkness 3 ]
      • « Vampirism » von Kerle Bloodline. - inactive ]
        • ↬ [ Base: All Available ]
        • ↬ [ Vampire Form: All Available ]
        • ↬ [ Vampire Form Description: Akin to a bipedal silverback gorilla, Zeriel’s muscularity and form enlarge. He becomes more beast like and hunched over, while his skin shifts from an ash color to a silver tone. Though his hair remains black and grows out down his shoulders, he does grow silver hair along his back and arms. His brow becomes thicker and more pronounced and his eyes turn into a deep red. His hands are more brutish and
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    |My vengeance is no longer a path. |
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    • ◄《 VISUAL INFORMATION || Required 》►
      • « Eye Color » Sapphire Blue.
      • « Hair Color » Naturally Snow White - Dyed Raven Black
      • « Hair Style » Long and waving hair, curlier towards the bottom..
      • « Skin Color » Ash Grey.
      • « Clothing » Simple Baggy Pants, Open Shoes & Bare Chest.
      • « Height » 7'8
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    |No blood? No party!|
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    • ◄《 PERSONALITY AND ABILITIES || Required 》►
      • [ Alignment | Chaotic Neutral ]
        • His vengeful, spontaneous and careless attitude thrust him down many dangerous paths, especially when he led a ferocious band of Kathar across the steppes to the west, burning all in his path trying to find those who wronged him, and caring little for the risks - or for the lives of his kaahl-mates, this entire mindset was birthed from a catastrophic event which happened early on in his life - ultimately controlling most of his decisions, however in recent months he mellowed, going to ridiculous lengths to get things done, but perhaps without hurting others as much.
      • [ Personality | Entrepreneur ]
        • His energetic lifestyle tainted by carelessness made him ready to risk anything for a thrill or for his own twisted vengeance, be it creating a clever way to infiltrate another kaahl and then squeezing it dry with an iron-like grip, or herding a group of shadow-bovine with his bare hands, he truly lives life on the edge.
      • [ Religion | Void Worship ]
        • It was a match made in heaven for Zeriel, to worship a god who desired blood to be spilt and offered up, it came easy to the Shenathar, when either raiding other kaahls or simply hunting for food, the giant would make sure to bleed his prey dry before killing them - all in the hopes of pleasing the Scarlet Scourge, after a while it became even more devout, drawing his own blood to give up for his master, and for such a huge being - he had oh so much to give.
        • (Woldemar, The Scarlet Scourge) 7/10
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    |The Scourge comes|
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    • LIFE STORY|| Required 》►
      • [ Paragraph One | Childhood ]
        • From birth much was expected of Zeriel, his mother happened to be the Matriarch of Kaahl Xotiko - and he was bred for a purpose, to create an leading warrior for the Kaahl, his father was chosen specifically by the Matriarch because of his genetic traits, thus creating the titanic Shenathar - however, he would be largely ignored by his Mother and Father, so he would have less attachments.
        • It was his elder sister; Myrathiel, who would raise the lost child, nurturing him and teaching him about lands he stood upon, and tales about places far across the sapphire ocean; she was essentially his mother, but it was not to last for long.
        • On the evening of a blistering day Kaahl Xotiko was careless, allowing Zeriel’s older sister; Myrathiel, to die… sparking a flame of hatred for his own kin within the young Shenathar, which only grew over the years.
      • [ Paragraph Two | Younger Years ]
        • Flourishing into a young adult, he had little choice of what he wanted to do, his mother pushed him into the primary raiding party of Kaahl Xotiko, after several successful assaults on far neighbouring settlements a name would be heard describing Zeriel - The Steppe Giant.
        • It was once he’d gotten a name for himself he confronted his chief tormentor, his own father, and so the Steppe Giant finally beat back his devils, only for the higher-ups of the Kaahl along with his mother to smirk from the sides, knowing what they had created.
      • [ Paragraph Three | Recent Years ]
        • Getting older he felt like he was trapped within the Kaahl’s lands, usually never returning for long before going off and raiding, so hearing Skotadi was leaving for Regalia on some sort of request from the higher-ups, Zeriel snuck onto the ship, ferrying his way to the Golden City.
     
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    @Caelamus added thingies for his Dorkarth vampirism on special abilities, is everything okay there?
     
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    @Caelamus tiniest change just made stealth talent piano music talent
     
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    @Caelamus Sorry.. I lost my approved tag while editing it..
     
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    @Caelamus I switched around his proficiencies to add more to sailing to fit his new reworked backstory, and I also shuffled a few of the points into different forms of combat, to show that during his life he learnt many of them whilst in constant Henates.
     
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    @Caelamus I took away shielding and some strength training to gain 6 points in ritualism, I've also added an insert into his backstory about how he got into worshipping Woldemar and began learning about ritualism, is this okay? -- the edits are in red
     
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    @Woodwork made some changes, added sorcery and took away dagger combat, put strength training into talent too
     
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    @Woodwork Zeriel became a Von Kerle vampire and I put the last 3 of unspent points into Wood art
     
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    Thanks ;P
     
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    Hello! Sorry to put this under review but I made a bit of a mistake.

    The max for a Kathar with voluism should be 7'8. Ping me whenever you're done.
     
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