Rejected Sheet Zelink Charater Sheet

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  1. Shawnifer16

    Shawnifer16

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    • Name Zelink hunterman
    • Age 18
    • Gender Male
    • Lineage woaden

      • Age Points - 50
        • 25 Heavy Ranged Combat
        • 25 Dagger Combat
      • Talent Points - 10
        • 10 stealth rouge
      • Hobby Points - 10
        • 5 Hunting Arts
        • 5 Cooking
    Languages
    • Common
    Special Traits/Spells/Mutations
    • Hunt Sense I
    • Wall Climb IV
    • Nature Gift I

    Visual Information (Required)
    • Eye Color: Blue
    • Hair Color: Brown
    • Hair Style: Medium length
    • Skin Color: White
    • Clothing: (Simple style description) Hunter clotes
    • Height: (Size in either feet and inches or cm) 5 ft 10

      • How would your character express Happiness and Contentedness?
        • Becomes more quiet and gives a smile
      • How would your character respond to experiencing Fear?
        • Runs away
        • How would your character respond to experiencing Stress?
        • Stops talking to everyone
      • How does your character view Law and Authorities?
        • Understand That there has to be laws but thinks people shouldnt be born in higher postions
      • How does your character feel about Races other than their own?
        • Thinks everyone should be treated equally
      • How does your character feel about Religion for themselves, and other faiths?
      Does not care for it it but can understand why others do
      • How does your character feel about the Arcane and Magical in the world?
      • Is intrested but has not messed with it yet
      • How does your character feel towards their family?
        • Hates them
      • What is your character the most proud of about themselves?
        • When he helps them.
      • What motivates your character to move forward and better their life?
        • Makes more friends and have a real family.
      • What is your character's biggest insecurity?
        • Losing everyone and everything he cares about again.
      • What is your character's biggest fear?
        • Not being loved by others
      • Weakness
      • Trusing in people to much
    • Likes
      Friends Lemonade and food

      Dislikes
      • Seeing other people get hurt. Being by himself


    • Life Story (Required)
      I was born in a different area when my mother died and i never had a father figure because he left i dont remember anything before the age of 5 and i moved with my cousins nobles kicked us out of are house and we lived in the streets my cousins owed someone money he killed them and stabbed me when people found my bleeding to death they brought me to the sewers and imp safe with the vampires now I spent a lot of time cooking because nobody else was there so i had to make food myself and with that I had to be able to get food so i learnt hunting arts and started using a bow To be able to get food for myself Zelink has been hanging out in the sewers with the vampires for a bit but now he spends most of his time at the nook because he has some friends there he is poor but is trying to get a job and he turned 18 recently he has been in some bad situations with some vampires recently and is wanting to be able to help his friends and he gets upset whenever some tries to help him because it makes him feel bad
     
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    Lizmun yeah Staff Member Lore1

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    @Shawnifer16 Hello! Your application is pretty short, and doesn't entirely follow the application format! The format can be found here, and all the parts not in blue need to be filled out. If you need help, feel free to make a ticket on the discord ticket bot (just send it a dm, and it'll open up a ticket automatically!) and I can guide you through the application process!
     
  4. Shawnifer16

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    @Lizmun Hi thank you for reviewing the sheet i have made the changes
     
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    Lizmun yeah Staff Member Lore1

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    @Shawnifer16 Here's my review:

    Basic Information

    - Please include the headings for the first section, such as Name: Race: etc.
    - Did you mean 'Woaden' lineage?​
    Skill Information
    - Please include the source of your abilities in parenthesis behind the abilities section, such as if it comes from a racial spell or not.​
    Visual Information
    - No issues​
    Personality
    - No issues​
    Life Story
    - Your life story is pretty short! Consider fleshing it out some, expand on your character's feelings on his place in life, and how events made him feel and how they shaped him. Additionally, you don't need to write it in the first person (Though if it's a stylistic choice, I understand!)​

    Please make your changes in a separate color then tag me!
     
  6. Shawnifer16

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    Ok thank you for the help with all of this
     
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    @Lizmun I think i fixed the sheet
     

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