Rejected Sheet Yansa Cherokee Vopiscus

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  1. JustSomeAnimal

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    Name

    Yansa Cherokee Vospiscus - Fayden

    Alias

    Maiyun Fayden [Not in use]

    Ahyoka Suhi [Active]

    Age

    80

    Gender

    Female

    Race

    Fin'ullen Altalar


    Preferred Weapon

    Wooden Stave

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    Total Points

    50 + 10 Hobby + 10 Talent
    Combat Category

    + 10 Fist Combat Skill
    +9 Stave Combat

    Knowledge Category

    +6 Hunting Knowledge
    +5 Linguistic Knowledge

    Science Category

    +15 Alchemy

    Body Category

    +15 Perception

    +10 Hobby Points

    + 10 Theatre

    +10 Talent Points

    +10 Cooking

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    Physical Stats
    41 Body Stat (Capped at 50)

    +10 Theatre x .5 + 10 Fist + 9 Stave + 15 Perception x 2 = 41
    Body Build
    Athletic
    Body Fat
    Low Body Fat

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    Common
    7/10
    Modern Altalar
    10/10
    Kathar Elven
    6/10
    (Learned from her husband and friend.)

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    Uthurran Bloodline Mutations

    Mending Heal

    Howling Call

    Loyal Empathy

    Enduring Hunt​



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    Eye Colour

    Light Gray

    Hair Colour

    Sandy blonde

    Skin Colour

    Tan

    Clothing

    Second picture shown above

    Height

    5'3"

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    Character Alignment

    Chaotic Neutral

    Character Personality

    Defender

    Character Religion

    Old Gods (10/10)

    Yansa will mess with her clothing when she is nervous, along with twitching her nose when lying.
    She is an excellent cook for her age, but sadly, not a chef. She's pulling herself up to that stage, however.

    Likes
    Family
    Cooking
    Exploring

    Dislikes
    Strangers
    Threats against her family and Pack

    Love

    Tonybones | Velruin Savorn

    Family

    Mother

    Femboiizem | LavenderBay Vopiscus

    Father

    MidnightRey | Tanicius Speratus Vopiscus

    Siblings

    Diaprit | Morrighan Skadi Vopiscus
    Jenevieve| Narha Vopiscus



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    Yansa Vopiscus was born to Lavender Bay Vopiscus and Tanicius Speratus Vopiscus into the Undying Souls Pack, along with her two sisters, Morrighan Skadi Vopiscus and Narha Vopiscus. Being one of the three Uthurren triplets, she has become the most rowdy of them all; climbing trees, roughhousing with her sisters, and occasionally getting herself injured, only to be fine after 15-30 minutes, depending on the severity. As she grew older, she learned to respect the elders and laws of the pack, knowing that if she didn’t, she would either be the laughing stock of the pack, or be an outcast.

    As she grew to her teen years, she was taken in as an apprentice and learned how to fight. Since she was still learning her mutations, it took her some time to learn her own fighting style and her strength, as well as learning about herself as a whole. As she was training with her mentor, she finally figured out how to partially shift into her prowling shift. The mentor praised her, moving her to higher forms of training. It was then she learned how to spar, trying different kinds of weapons. The young Uthurren chose a wooden stick, or a stave, as her father called it, and sparred against the mentor, then her father. It was clear what her weapon of choice was then.

    As adulthood came into play, she grew more and more attentive to what was happening with her pack. Making her rounds, and checking up on the pack members, as well as her parents. She became more and more in tune with the pack, and eventually began to lead some of the hunts and fights.

    Once she turned to her 60s, it was like her entire life turned around, becoming more hellish, well, in her eyes, it did. Yansa had to make a week’s run, leaving the pack for some errands and explorations to be done. Little did she know, her pack had to make an emergency re-location, leaving her and only her behind.

    As she returned, she only found the deserted pack base, assuming it was a struggle. The place looked completely trashed and destroyed. She frantically searched through-out the base, shaking and calling out for anyone. It was then she knew they left her, unable to let her know where they were relocating to, and how to tell Yansa.

    After finding out the truth, she left, a lone wolf depending on herself. She spent years on her own, surviving, finding shelter, fending for herself. Yansa was changed then, becoming more isolated and almost passive-aggressive towards others. She also became more touchy with her items, not letting anyone touch them unless given approval, and even that is difficult. Yansa’s lost trust with most people, seeing as how she’s trusted them during her “lone-wolf” adventures.

    As she hit her late 70s, she ran into a pack, the Thrift Pack, seemingly defensive and unnerved. The Uthurren was offered a pack, and knowing Yansa, she was obviously going to say yes -- but her trust issues were impacting the decision. She had to have a long talk with herself, before finally agreeing.

    After joining, she began to trust the pack, becoming..less aggressive towards them, and more like her usual self. Granted, she was still an omega, she’s trying hard to pull herself up the ranks. Vagku, her Alpha, still manages to throw her ass to the ground, but she still tries to show she is at least trying to prove her worth to the pack. Now, she is working on bettering her mutations, and using them to her advantage, as well as the pack’s.

     
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  2. JustSomeAnimal

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    yetanotherbump
     
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    you’re meant to bump once a week not twice a day
     
  5. JustSomeAnimal

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    Shit sorry-
     
  6. Jonificus

    Jonificus The Jingoist Staff Member Lore2

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    Approved, but do note that Yansa wouldn't have access to her abilities at such a young age, so please remove them from the list. Age her up to 16 or so if you want to RP out the powers listed, but only then.
     
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    REEE Thank you! I’ll keep that in mind!!
     
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    Hate to say this, but re-review please!
     
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    aaaa nevermind! Don't re-review! I didn't read the wiki!
     
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    Jonificus The Jingoist Staff Member Lore2

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    Alright. Changed your tag for you.
     
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    Thank you so much!
     
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    Caelamus Sir Honeybear Staff Member Lore2

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    Please list whether it is active or inactive.

    Werebeasts/vampires harbor very little respect for religion. It is a bit strange to find someone with an exist affliction worshipping what is essentially a void religion.

    Another point of contention is the life story which I find incredibly lacking given how old the character is. Please try to summarize the details of their life in about five to four detailed paragraphs. My advice would be consider the schools that exist, background information, where they were born and who, what their family was like to mold them early on and justify why they have what proficiencies/beliefs. Tag me and highlight edits when you're done, sunshine.
     
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    I was working on the storyline as soon as I realized I forgot about it haha! My computer has been having a few problems lately, however, so it'll be maybe a day or two more. I will update these issues as soon as possible!
     
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    Caelamus Sir Honeybear Staff Member Lore2

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    Take whatever time you need sunshine, feel free to tag me when you're done.
     
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    @Caelamus We're good to go! Computer is fixed and finally got the story doctored up!
     
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    Caelamus Sir Honeybear Staff Member Lore2

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    Make sure to cover the other points which I made. The biggest point of contention is void worship on an exist afflicted character. Werebeasts do not really follow religion, with the exception of the wolf line which are more pagan leaning.
     
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    @Caelamus Just fixed it. I believe that is correct.
     
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    @Caelamus due to the point change, I need a re-review!
     
  21. JustSomeAnimal

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    I uh - shit it's rejected. @Caelamus ;-;
     
  22. Caelamus

    Caelamus Sir Honeybear Staff Member Lore2

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    proficiency update. go read it.
     
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    Like I updated it and everything just last night or the night before.
     

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