╔═══════-=tunelist=═══════╗ told you so. night in the brume. spiral of ants. abyss watchers (metal). the wings march. ╚═════════════════════╝ "Have mercy, have steadfast love; —and blot out my transgressions." Character Information Full Name: Vivana Fëallora Avalleia Bel Ant Avalla-Loseia Race: Solvaan Altalar Age: 90-something Sex: Female Eye Color: Ice Blue Core Concept A Pantheon-worshiper whose religiosity has dulled with the years, dismayed by the corruption of priests. Vivana is an Occult career soldier of noble birth, who later in life came to appreciate rule and command. Proficiency Information 15 Sword Combat 15 Gardening Art (+Hobby +Solvaan) 12 Linguistics 10 Perception Training 5 Bodycare Training 5 Strength Training 3 Roguery (Wall Climb) 30 Physical Stat Ability Information Magic Languages Common (Free) Altalar (Parent) Allorn (Linguistics) Suvial (Linguistics) Ancient Altalar (Free, Linguistics) Ithanian (Linguistics) Saan (Linguistics) Appearance Information Vivana is unmutated, save for the dark gray limbal rings around her eyes. Vivana is a tall, muscular Altalar with broad shoulders, a strong nose, and a furrowed brow. Her long blond hair is styled into a single braid, and she wears soft blue robes over dark underclothing. Life Story Vivana is the child of a stonemason and a minor Sollerian noblewoman. Her mother was keen to pass her over for her younger, Teledden brother Tehrathel, so she spent her time drilling and learning to fight. She grew into a wiry, scrappy young Altalar. When Vivana's magic showed itself, she went traveling. She made a name for herself in the sword-halls of Ivaëlle and Ilha Faial, trained students, and lived an heiress' life. Vivana made many allies during these years. In time, Vivana reconciled with her mother. Lost friends and tough years fighting the Kathar led her to study the ways of command and rule, not just soldiering. She led units of Altalar through several conflicts for and against Regalia. At her great-uncle Mälcarno's abdication, Vivana took the throne. For a time, she unified the Altalar of Solleria. Far more, as well: a Draconic Conduit, great wars, and beyond. In time, she herself abdicated to lead the Mist Wardens instead. And so her story ends.
Hello I will be claiming this for staff review, expect a response within the next 48 hours, I'm a bit tired right now but will get to it soon!
@OkaDoka Though everything checks out, when you re-do the points or were assigning the points from the magic tax return, you were meant to tag and notify your reviewer. Be sure to tag your reviewer to let them know when you make edits in the future.
@Caelamus Forgot, sorry-- most recent edits were just ironing out some stuff that dropped w/ the magic update, like the loss of Mavana due to the loss of Dragon Ritualism. I'll remember to tag in the future.
@Caelamus Vivana life story shortened to fit within the approved life story length. No other edits. Please clean this page of replies.
@Caelamus Edits made. Acquired 5 d'Ithanie and 1 point of Culinary Arts for 4 Points of Artifactism and 2 Rogue Stealth. Felt that with the fact I now rule and historically ruled a ton of Ithanians, it makes a lot of sense to speak their language. Also removed the spoiler on the life story, trimmed a few personality details, and edited the Naming and Titleage listings.
@Caelamus Notifying that I made a bunch of minor edits, like a piece of Life Story rephrasing and allocation of point refunds from proficiency reworks. Not sure if this requires re-review but pinging anyway.
@Caelamus I edited her backstory format. And other formatting, but now I have gone and changed actual content, so I am letting you know.
@Caelamus At last. Altalar update, my hands may now rest. Requesting re-review. Life story changed. Subrace too.
@Caelamus Oops! Proficiency Update. I'd like to remain with you as my reviewer, so take a look whenever you like.
@Caelamus Just letting you know that I've been doing formatting and music edits on here. Not a review request, just a note.
@Caelamus letting you know that i made like 15 edits to this page because i tried making one aesthetic edit but then it broke and i had to keep fixing it so then i edited a thing or two because i was here anyway
Needs re-review. (Racial Ability shift and point shift, 5 Perception & 1 Mixology --> 3 Plains Altalar & 3 Writing).
20 Sword & 18 Sorcery & Roguery seems somewhat excessive, I recommend cutting down some in at least one of these. Make changes and tag me when finished.
