Review In-Progress Viatrix De Kloet

Discussion in 'Character Applications' started by GhostMousie, Mar 23, 2021.

  1. GhostMousie

    GhostMousie Square Hammer by Ghost - listen.

    Joined:
    Aug 31, 2019
    Messages:
    100
    Likes Received:
    16

    [​IMG]







    [​IMG]







    [​IMG]
    Witch. The word drifted across his mind. We call such women so, because we have no other name.”
    - Katherine Arden, The Girl in the Tower





    [​IMG]





    [​IMG]





    Name: Viatrix de Kloet

    Nicknames : Via, Trix

    Age : 23 years

    Race : Akkadian Ailor

    Culture : Anglian, Akkerman.

    Gender : Female

    Sexuality : Bisexual

    Preferred Weapon: Magic, and fists if necessary.



    [​IMG]





    [​IMG]
    [​IMG]
    “Skills don't die; only people do.”




    Total Points : 23 + 10 Talent + 10 Hobby


    Sorcery : 20

    Fist Combat : 4

    Strength Training : 4


    Theatre Arts : 10 (Hobby)

    Alchemy Science : 10 ( Talent)



    [​IMG]





    [​IMG]




    Physical Stat : 13


    Body Shape : Athletic




    Body Fat : Moderate Body Fat



    [​IMG]







    [​IMG]

    “The limits of my language mean the limits of my world.”





    Anglian, Akkerman dialect: Learned from Childhood

    Common : Learned from Childhood







    [​IMG]







    [​IMG]

    [​IMG]

    "The dullard finds even wine tasteless, while the sorcerer is intoxicated by the mere sight of water."



    Sorcery


    Exist


    [[[Magic Bolt I [ Sorcery ] : 4 (Core Points)

    Darkness III [ Sorcery ] : 4 (Core Points)

    Power Curse III [ Sorcery ] : 4 (Core Points)

    Flux Shift VI [Sorcery] : 4 (Core Points)

    Light Mend II [Sorcery] : 4 (Core Points)]]]

    ALL INACTIVE FOR NOW

    Uthurren Werebeast Affliction

    Loyalty of the Uthurren
    Prowl of the Fox
    Violence of the Sabrewolf
    Leap of the Fossa







    [​IMG]



    [​IMG]

    [​IMG]

    “When your eyes show intellect, you will seem beautiful regardless of how you look.”




    Eye Colour : Blue



    Hair Colour : Dark Brown / Black



    Hair Style : Wavy mid-length



    Skin Colour : Pale Tan with some light pink around the face.



    Clothing : As shown above, although it has a few tears and rips on the edges due to some scuffles and fights.



    Height : 5'4"





    [​IMG]





    [​IMG]




    Character Alignment : Chaotic Neutral



    Character Personality Type : The Entrepreneur



    Character Religion : Dragon Worship - Black Desert Dragon 10/10





    [​IMG]





    [​IMG]

    The Kloet line was an unremarkable family descended of what was once a court jester, probably, perhaps, in a distant time. Viatrix, born within the family’s small farm deep within the Anglian heartland, was the youngest of two brothers and three daughters, to parents that were much too old to restrict her path in life. She found enjoyment in travelling the woods near her home with her elder siblings, and in taking care of the family Missier… alongside cleaning up its many rat-related mishaps.

    As is her lineage’s implication, Viatrix began to feel much like a clown as education came to pass. She wasn’t quite cut out for farmwork, never finding the same physical prowess as her sisters, and didn’t quite fit the embroidering passion of her eldest brother, nor the love for archery her father tried to drill to her.

    Yet she grew to love fables, of dutiful Haeksen and of defeated devils, and gained a surprisingly sharp distaste for some of the smaller things in life thanks to some very well-written Zondespael. Bookish as she was, it was not as if a life as an intellectual was her calling either.

    Thoroughly stuck, she broods on a family trip to Axford; from which she finds a discarded book that had fallen out from a rustling bar. In a rare bout of kleptomania, she plucks up the book and carries on as if it were hers; later noting its contents as related to the Altalar Pillars of Magic, and various spells of Sorcerous origin.

    Many a night is wasted away studying these spells and practicing them, healing the battle scars of her beloved cat and blasting away bottles with magical bolts. Given time, she feels so proud of this fact that she displays it to her parents, who did not in fact perceive her as one would a classical Haeksen. An argument ensues, and her parents assure that this is not the way of a good Anglian woman. So she claims she would rather not be an Anglian woman, and packs her things to head to Regalia proper; deciding its many magical faculties to be something better worth investigation… though she’s hardly prepared for the society of it all.

     
    • Winner Winner x 1
    #1 GhostMousie, Mar 23, 2021
    Last edited: Apr 5, 2021
  2. Follower

    Follower Returned to Monkey Staff Member Lore1

    Joined:
    May 17, 2019
    Messages:
    336
    Likes Received:
    84
    • Thank You! Thank You! x 1
  3. Follower

    Follower Returned to Monkey Staff Member Lore1

    Joined:
    May 17, 2019
    Messages:
    336
    Likes Received:
    84
    @GhostMousie After reviewing your application, there are just a few things that need correction.
    • Your current point allocation is incorrect, you have listed down that you have spent 32 points from your core, however with your characters age being 23 you could only spend 28 at maximum.
    • Your Body stat also seems to be incorrect by 1, please include the calculation with it as well.
    • You also have not specified whether you are an Exist or Void Sorcerer, please mark it down with your sorcery spells if you would be so kind.
    Once you have made these changes in a different color, tag me and I can review it once more.
     
  4. GhostMousie

    GhostMousie Square Hammer by Ghost - listen.

    Joined:
    Aug 31, 2019
    Messages:
    100
    Likes Received:
    16
  5. Follower

    Follower Returned to Monkey Staff Member Lore1

    Joined:
    May 17, 2019
    Messages:
    336
    Likes Received:
    84
    @GhostMousie Everything seems to be in order, Approved.
     
  6. GhostMousie

    GhostMousie Square Hammer by Ghost - listen.

    Joined:
    Aug 31, 2019
    Messages:
    100
    Likes Received:
    16
  7. Follower

    Follower Returned to Monkey Staff Member Lore1

    Joined:
    May 17, 2019
    Messages:
    336
    Likes Received:
    84
    @GhostMousie After reviewing your application, it seems you have mischosen your Werebeast fusions, you may only take four steps, starting from Werebeast Infection. As it stands, You appear to have skipped over certain steps to take combinations normally not allowed, please refer to the chart on the Werebeast page located here: https://wiki.massivecraft.com/Werebeast#Fusions

    You must also include a description of your Werebeast aesthetic through the fusions in a 'Werebeast Shift' Section.

    Please change your religion to also not be currently following the Black Dragon, considering the mental influence of werebeastism.
    Once you have done this, tag me again and I will re-review it.
     

Share This Page