Played Character Vedrfolnir Berdalfsson

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  1. BRBKing

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    @Wumpatron this is official notice of me having rewritten part of my app.
     
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    Ved's been working out more, now muscular.
     
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    #46 BRBKing, Jul 9, 2018
    Last edited: Jul 11, 2018
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    My prior reviewers are all no longer staff.
     
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    @A_r_e_s
    I'll be taking over this app for review.
     
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    @A_r_e_s

    • You have too many languages. At thirty years old, you have two to choose from, excluding Common, as it is no longer a free language.
    • I'd like you to add more onto his life story. It's a bit short.
    Make these changes in blue and tag me when you're done!
     
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    Alright, I'll fix the languages, and what in it would you like expanded upon?
     
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    @A_r_e_s

    Add in a few experiences that shaped his personality, interactions with people that have had impacts on his life, etc.
     
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    Massive took the backburner, will take a bit longer.
     
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    Edits in Blue, @Athelois , tell me if they're sufficient, also, congratulations on staff
     
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    Good enough!
    Re-approved!

    also thank you! ♥
     
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    Thank you kindly!
     
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    With the new Skagger paths, Ved is going to be redone in part, @Athelois
     
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    Done. in this blue.
     
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    WONDERFUL!
     
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    With the release of new Velheim and Skagger lore bits, as well as the new Frontline Combat proficiency, I updated Ved's ambition, and reshuffled his points a tad, in this orangish-brown color.
    @Athelois
     
    #60 BRBKing, Jan 27, 2019
    Last edited: Jan 27, 2019
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    Might want to change some stuff since the Clinton's assault on the noble and his death have been voided for a while.
     
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    Updated points from the recent Ailor buff
     
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    @Athelois As per God King Marty's orders, I ask for a review.
     
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    Claimed for review.
     
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    Here is my review:
    • Your body stat calculation is correct, but what body build are you selecting? Slim? Athletic? Muscular?
    • Your languages are only free in the case of a homeland language, language of the parents, and common. All else require points. Since the languages of Nordskag are Tunge and Common, assuming Ved's parents are from Nordskag, the languages he would be permitted to know without cost would be Tunge and Common. Both Skodje and Daen would require +10 in linguistic. Please correct this.
    Once you have made the adjustments, tag me with @AlphaInsomnia .
     
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    Changing some things,
    One is point reshuffle
    two is inactive soul-line
    Highlighted in spooky pumpkin Orange
    @AlphaInsomnia
     
    #71 BRBKing, Oct 10, 2019
    Last edited: Oct 10, 2019
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    Removed Tunge, because Hydra said to, and with that, those linguistic points are being shuffled, 2 to pagan and 3 to athletics
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    New developments. Ved is now a an active werebeast.
    @AlphaInsomnia
     
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    Body stat is a bit wonky. Might want to double check that.

    Either way, approved.
     
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    "That's my Uncle!" - Seán Phillip Parlow, 307 AC
     
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    @AlphaInsomnia

    hey man, I decided to update Ved as I'm getting back into massive, and there have been updates to various things in the mean time.
     
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    Looks good. The only issue I see is in the life story. An explosion in a ring fort? The north lacks modern artillery, so there would be no explosive storage, and the Imperial Army would know to not push any artillery into the fort, nor to fire at it with their own men inside for risk of blue on blue casualties.
     
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    The majority of his more recent backstory is in need of an update. I'll keep that in mind while I do so, thank you.

    @AlphaInsomnia
     

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