Valentino di Callegari The old Dressolini crossbow sniper priest Basic Information Name: Valentino Guido di Callegari Nicknames: Val, Il Ratto Age: 73 Gender: Male Race: Ailor Culture: Dressolini Lineage: Drahl Prefered Weapon: His modified crossbow Skill Information Total Points: 50 (skill cap) +20 Crossbow Combat +10 Raiper Combat +6 Linguistic Science +9 Writing Art +10 Frontline Command (+5 Points & +5 Drahl Boost) +10 Siege Command (Talent) +10 Cooking Art (Hobby) Body Shape Physical Stats: 30 stat Body Shape: Toned Body Fat: Moderate body fat Languages Dressalo: Native language. Genevaud Dialect: His mother's language. Common: Fluent, learnt during his education as a child. (Free) Khanehi: Learnt from 25 years in the desert (Linguistics) Faraddi: Learnt from 25 years in the desert (Linguistics) Special Traits/Spells/Mutations Drahl Lineage: Has a hawk named Birra. Il Riformato: With his 10 frontline command skill, Valentino leads an NPC battalion called the "Il Riformato". It consists of a combination of Qadir and Dressolini Helerian troops, a large portion of which were former Pavisa crossbowmen. Visual Information Eye Colour: Dark green Hair Colour: Grey/silver hair from old age Hair Style: Wavy hair usually slicked back Skin Colour: Generic Dressolini lightly tanned skin Clothing: The dark grey robes of a Vultarian curate. Height: 181cm or 5'11” Personality & Abilities Character Alignment: Chaotic neutral Character Personality Type: Virtuoso Character Religion: Vultarian Unionism: 9/10: As a Vultarian curate, his religion is very important to him. He will die for it or will retire to run his own little church. Life Story In the vineyards of Callegari Valentino was born in the hillside on Monatnia in his family's vineyard of Callegari. He was born into a long line of Pavisa warriors with his father Alonzo being a veteran Himself. He grew up with his brother Giacommo who was a few years older then him. Giacomo was in the making of become an ideal Pavisa and potentially a Maestro. Meanwhile Valentino found intrest in the crossbow but also in Unionist teachings. Studying at School of Pavisa As tradition in Valentino’s family, he was enrolled as a squire in the School of Pavisa in the main Chapter of Pavisa in Montania at age 14. Valentino found the Pavisa crossbow his sort of weapon and excelled in using it. But meanwhile he found the rest of his studies difficult including the other forms of combat the school taught. Early days as a Pavisa Warrior At age 24 Valentino graduated, becoming a Pavisa Warrior. During his early years a Pavisa Warrior he would join his local Scutari Commune defending thier part of Montania. After a disasterous defeat left his commune in a state of disaray, he decided to leave to see the world outside of Montania and to used his skills elswhere. The Deserts of Farha'deen He eventually found his way escorting a noble woman on their travels ot Farah'deen. As they travelled around the lands of the Qadir, they stayed with a wealthy Qadir merchant at their home near the city of Mooriye During the stay at the house, Valentino got into a relationship with the Qadir’s daughter, Rosana who was their translator. Valentino Would have to leave with the Noble Women on their journey but would return a year later to conitue his relationship with Rosana. He was now a mercenary in a company that helped the Qadir fend of the Songaskian Mayasa and do the odd job around the deserts. During this time he started comanding s A few years later he and Rosana had twin daughters. But all good things came to an end, Rosana succumb to a sickness and passed away, leaving Valentino with thier two daughters. As a mercenary, disaperaing into the desert every so often to make a living, he was not a suitable parent. He left his daughters with thier grandparents who would do a much better job caring for them. Back to the Vinyards After years of fighting in the desert and after taking up and adopting Azmir, a Qadir oprhan, he decided to return home to the hills of Montania and Vultaro, enrolling Azmir into the sanctri commune he attended and enroling himself in the school of Seminary in Lampeporta to attempt to furfil his late adulthood dream of becoming a Vultarian curate. Current situation Eight years later he got permisson to tempoarily leave the school to offer spiritual aid to an influx of Pavisa arriving in the city of Regalia, he acted as thier chaplin as he was no longer a Pavisa and still not yet a curate. he studied and followed the Pavisa around, training them and occasionally fighting and leading himself. He has since gained a small repuation as the old warrior that is relic of the wars with Songaskia. During the Dread war he managed to kill a Kathar on horse-back from around 200 yards away giving him a bit of a status as an old legend. x He returned to seminary school in Lampeporta and finally finished his studies becoming and ordained Vultarian Curate before arriving back into the city.
Hello, my dear! Here to give a little peer review. Hope you don't mind !<3 Profs look good! Though a personal suggestion would be to narrow down how many different combat skills he has. Having a bunch of only semi-trained combat skills can be a bit frustrating to roleplay out. Focusing on one or two to really invest your points in would be alot more useful. I would suggest adding in a sentence more on habits or things he experiences other than go tos. It's good to add these when thinking about the character's next actions. But i'd love to see a bit expressing more so physical or mental reactions. How he feels, how his body reacts to adrenaline. Things of that nature. Same thing I suggested above for this one! These are all personal nitpicks, and i'm about 80% sure you can get this app approved without edits. But there's always room for improvement. Good read!
Please make the following edits: You have 60 points, yet only spent 56. You have four extra points to spend, but this isn't required. Just wanted to mention this here. You need 6 points in linguistics to learn another language. I suggest you remove Khanehi from the languages section, and only mention it into the life story for aesthetics. Tag me once you've made the following edits in a color of your choosing.
@Naz_Cook Recheck your points, frontline isn't a proficiency anymore and doesn't give you points as it's not considered a combat proficiency, but rather a tactical proficiency
