Rejected Sheet Titos Markellis

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  1. yusuf12323

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    Basic Information
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    • Full Name: Titos Makrellis

    • Age: 24

    • Gender: Male

    • Race: Ailor (Brannon)

    • Sexuality: Heterosexual
    Skill Information


    3+5+5+10+12+10 = 50 + 10 Hobby points = 60

    • 3 Roguery (3 Main Points)

    • 5 Perception (Main Points)
    • 12 One handed blunt combat (12 Main Points)

    • 10 Warlash Combat (10 Main Points)

    • 10 Shield Combat (10 Main Points)

    • 5 Cooking Arts (5 Hobby Points)
    • 10 Wine Making Art (10 Main Points)
    Body Shape

    • 10 Shield + 10 Warlash + 12 one-handed blunt = 32 Phys Stat

    • Muscular Body Shape

    • Low Body Fat

    Languages

    • Common - Learned in Childhood (10/10)

    • Etosian - Learned in Childhood - father (10/10)




    Special Traits/Spells/Mutations
    • Bunker Down 1 (Toggle Passive,Self)
    If wielding a shield, the Character can choose to “Bunker down”, requiring them in a kneeling position with a shield down in front of them (using a shield if mundane, if not mundane, a shield is not be required). While this stance is upheld, they become immune to any Mundane or Ability based harm effects from a 180 degree angle in front of them (Ability based effects besides damage still apply). There is enough room behind the user for 1 additional person to gain the benefit, with the user counting as an Obstacle. The user of this Ability cannot do anything but talk while bunkering down (they cannot even see past their shield), but the person behind them (if there is one) can move and use Abilities, Weapons, or Items.

    • Gate Smash 1 (Trigger Passive,Direct Touch)
    The Character can muster all their strength and smash through a metal or wooden gate or door that is locked or barred. This Ability also works on cell gates in the Regalian Prison. This Ability can be used once per day. And produces a lot of noise, thus requiring the actual Ability usage to be done in announce emote (+h). Because of the size and bulkiness of the Character however, they are also permanently incapable of dodging or side-stepping any Mundane or Ability based Projectile attacks.

    • Great Force 1 (Constant Passive,Self)
    If at any point within 7 blocks of the user heavy objects are falling (for example, a collapsing roof or beam, or a large boulder) the character can brace the falling objects and hold them up long enough for nearby others to escape or not be harmed, and also create an escape for themselves. This Ability cannot be used for any Combat advantage.

    • Rogue Gift 4 (Toggle Passive,Self)
    Items held (like Clockwork or weapons) and stationary items used (like doors and hatches) do not produce any sound when used by the Character, and the character no longer makes noise when attempting to remain silent. Additionally, the character does not produce audible footsteps on any surface. This Ability cannot be used while wearing armor heavier than a gambeson.






    Visual Information


    • Eye Color: Angry Ocean Blue

    • Hair Color: Dark Brown

    • Hair Style: Buzz Cut

    • Skin Color: Tanned

    • Clothing: Usually his knight armour

    • Height: 6’2

    Option Two: The Core List

    • Character Alignment
      • Lawful Neutral
    • Personality Type
    Executive ESTJ-A

    • Choose your Character's Religion
    Evintarian Unionism (9/10 belief)


    Life Story



    Titos was born to a retired Ward of Parthas father, and a maiden mother. They lived in Hessalios where he grew up happy, making friends, playing near the water, hunting and hiking through forests with his father. Till his 7th birthday, when his training to be a page would begin. Just before he was leaving his father pulled out a dusty wooden box coated in fine leather, Titos opened up the box and in it was his fathers golden flail, the handle made of a dark wood, the ball shined up perfectly. He then set out for training, he was paired with a mentor that took him up, for the next few years he sat through lectures, did chores teaching him humility and went on bounty trips, learning till the age of 14 when he became a squire. Titos started going on bounty hunts but instead of just watching his mentor taught him how to properly use his flail, bola aswell with a shield and whip, he taught him how to properly bind the wrists together. When Titos turned 21 he became a Bogatyr, he was allowed to venture on his own. His very first contract was that of a young man around his own age. He was lying in bed one dark and stormy night when a loud knocking came to his front door. He got up and opened the door, his mentor handed him a piece of parchment with a bounty on it. His mentor finally gave him a chance to collect one on his own, He set out the next morning, the bounty was last seen in daen shore so away he went. He finally got word in a local tavern that a man had been in with the same description. He set out searching homes, till he came across a farm, he slowly crept up to the house, he opened the door to reveal a horrible bloody scene. The entire family but one little girl lay motionless, he quickly ran to her side, holding her in his arms she gasped, blood pouring from her wounds, then went motionless. He heard a loud howl coming from behind the house he quickly leapt to his feet and out to the back where a barn was, as he got closer he could hear the dying bleats of sheep and goats. He entered the barn flail in hand, he saw the bloody mess of dead sheep, amidst it all was a large wolf like being, it snarled as it saw him, Titos threw a bola at the feet of it just missing, it charged at him, he had not the time to lift his shield it slashed him in the face, taking out his eye, it then ran off. For three days Titos tracked the beast through forests, not stopping till it was caught, finally when he caught up the beast had been cornered titos threw a bola snagging the feet of the beast, it fell to the ground, titos charged bringing the ball of his flail down upon the head of it knocking it out. Slowly the beast changed into his human form, Titos carried it back to Hessalios, where he was congratulated but due to not seeking medical attention he unfortunately lost his eye. Titos for showing his dedication, determination and honour to the bounty became a Warden a few years later. He set out to regalia hearing that bounties were plentiful there.
     
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  2. sonofthestars

    sonofthestars chaotic stupid Staff Member Lore2

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    Claimed for review. Expect a response soon.
     
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    sonofthestars chaotic stupid Staff Member Lore2

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    You are five points over the maximum allotted Core Points. Additionally, I'm requesting that you completely remove one of your combat proficiency weapons (I suggest Bola or Shielding) given that they take up the bulk of the character's skills and we consider that to be a symptom of min-maxing. Add some other Hobbies, try to flesh the character out more beyond just combat.

    Make edits in a separate color and tag me when done.
     
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    Caelamus Sir Honeybear the chronic druid main Staff Member Lore1

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    Due to language update you can only have one of these. Tag me when you're done.
     
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    Caelamus Sir Honeybear the chronic druid main Staff Member Lore1

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    Approved.
     

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