Thomas Sparce - Character Application

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    BASIC INFORMATION:

    Name - Thomas Sparce

    Age – 31

    Race - Ailor

    Parents
    – Nathan Sparce & Ellie Sparce

    Town of Birth –
    Regalia

    Current Town – Regalia/ Sewers

    Family Relations:
    - Nathan Sparce - Deceased – Father
    - Ellie Sparce – Deceased – Mother
    - Jacob Sparce – Missing (Presumed 29) – Brother

    House –No official house, sleeps in bushes and shacks sometimes. However, often sleeps in the Syndicate base. Sometimes his Co-workers might stay.

    Ambitions in Life – To make as much money in any way he can and to get off the street. To also have some kind of creative input into Syndicate, as he wants to be helpful.
    His main goal: To make up for what he lost as a child.

    VISUAL INFORMATION:

    Height - 110 Inches

    Fat/Weight Distribution - 12 Stone (Distributed Evenly)

    Noticeable Factors:
    • An ever so slight limp yo his left leg, however, this only occurs after running. This was caused by an accident when younger (Read more in Backstory.
    • -Left eyebrow and eye slightly deformed, missing parts and looking quite bruised, also caused due to accident.


    Skin Tone - Average, slightly tanned but hard to notice due too a build of dirt on his face, that has appeared to stain it slightly. This dirt comes from the bushes he has slept in and the grime in the sewer.


    Scares, Fingernails, Etc.:

    • -2 red scars across his face, caused by Accident. The scar is split between his nose and each part has a distinguishable red tint to it. (See picture)
    • Fingernails quit long a ragged, due to them being cut with blunt stones. Stones is the only thing he cuts his fingernails with, as he thinks a dagger is to dangerous.


    Body Hair - On his head and a small patch on his chest. The rest is to be expected. The hair on his chest is slightly more blond than on his head, due to it being covered up often and not exposed to dirt.


    HEAD DESCRIPTION/ART:

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    Shape of Face - Reasonably round, although the chin comes to a slight point. His temples are reasonable flat and strangely unnoticeable, although, his cheeks are quite skinny.


    Eye Colour - A faded blue, with a tint of grey. Sometimes in the light, they become more of a brighter colour.


    General Description:
    Thomas’ face is an average, stereotypical face. His nose is round with a large bridge and his right eye is in good shape, with a solid, sharp eyebrow. However, his left eye is slightly deformed, bending in slightly and his eyebrow seems to be missing parts. His mouth is large and his ears are a good shape being large and slightly pointed. He has very defined cheekbones, which may show him to be quite unhealthy. His hairline is high showing off a rather large forehead that bares half of his scar. The other half of the scar is on the right cheek, wrapping around his face, almost reaching the base of his ear. His neck is skinny and bones can clearly be seen.


    Hair Type and Colour – A dirty blond colour brushed backwards out of his dirty face, into a knotted, quiff-like structure. The dirt is collected from dirt he is near, and it has stained his hair.


    Teeth Condition – Tinted yellow with some baring spots of black.


    Clothing and Accessories:

    Thomas’ favorite piece of clothing is his long, moldy-green coat that reaches his knees. He wears a belt strapped over this, around his body and shoulder, to hold anything he needs. He wears a dirty ‘white’ tunic-shirt underneath the coat that buttons up and ties at the top. His trousers are a dark brown, tucked into his even darker brown boots, lined with fur. His trousers seem to be an alright fit, however, they are rather baggy around the ankles, covering the opening of his boots. His shirt fits perfectly, almost as if it had been made for him, but his coats sleeves are rolled up, signifying it is too long on the arms, even though it seems the rest of it fits fine.


    BEHAVIOR INFORMATION:


    Personality Traits:


    Positive:

    • Open-Minded - Always had his life decided for him when he was young, this means he is very open to other peoples ideas. This means he finds it hard to create his own Ideas. This causes him to be very shy when expressing ideas. However, it is also very handy to him, as he is better being led than a leader. This does sometimes get the better of him, as he can sometimes forget to input his opinion or even create one in the first place.

    • Hard Working – Trying to impress his father, as he was told he was useless as a child. Luckily, this gave him a positive personality trait, although, he does get tired when he works a lot. His hardworking attitude is shown through anything he does, meaning he is tired a lot of the time. However, this means he worked effectively and to his full potential in anything he does. He does this even though he knows it will make him tired, showing his hard-working attitude in general.

    • Eager - Once again, this is caused by trying to impress his father at a young age, and has stuck with him as he has grown up. It may have also come from his need and willingness to help his Brother and Father. He eagerness is what pushes him through his bad times and tiredness, which really helps him with tasks that he is uncomfortable with. This paired with his 'Hard-working' trait is what gets him through life, mentally and physically. His mind, in a good situation, is completely focused on doing the best he can, at what ever cost. He carries on through life with his head held high and ready to face anything that comes his way.

    • Passionate - If he ever finds anything he likes, he will always be very passionate about it. This is because he had to be passionate in a lot of his sales, and he finds it natural now. This contradicts his shy idea process, as if he is truly inspired by an idea, he will become very excitable and his other traits will kick in: Hard working, eager. Passion is what fuels Thomas and his other traits, meaning if he is feeling glum, his positive traits will mostly be inactive. And when his positive traits are inactive, his personality can change in an instant. Meaning he often tries to keep himself occupied so he can avoid this personality change.


    Negative:

    • Easily Tempered - His childhood relationship with his father was a very heated one. With a lot of augments, Thomas is easily angered and can have sudden outbursts. These outbursts are usually hidden and the energy is channelled into his positive traits. However, if he is glum, this trait will take centre position due to his childhood sadness being remembered. This is a key reason for his Open-minded trait, as he doesn't want to get into conflict, hence avoiding his own opinions.

    • Lonely – Lack of family in his later years has caused him to feel quite lonely. This has affected his ability to make friends. This is a trait that appears often, it is usually what appears when the traits above are not 'active', which means it appears when his mind is empty. However when his mind is working and 'busy', this trait is not very obvious, although, it is still there.

    • Easily Confused – Education is something that Thomas missed out on. Although he is smart and aware of things, he can get easily confused on specialised subjects. This effects his social skills as he is sometimes scared to speak about things, incase he looks stupid. This means he sometimes agrees with other peoples statements, not even knowing if they are true. This is once again a cause for his Open-minded trait. This is a large reason for his next trait:

    • 'Follows Crowds' – Pressured by his father as a child means he has never followed his own instinct until recently. This means he often copied peoples actions or life choices. This trait makes him very Loyal, although he doesn't realise it. As it has already been stated, the another large reason for this is the last two sentences of the previous trait: "This effects his social skills as he is sometimes scared to speak about things, incase he looks stupid. This means he sometimes agrees with other peoples statements, not even knowing if they are true."

    Likes: (All of them follow a pattern: Things he missed as a child)


    • Protecting People – Taking on a ‘Father figure’ that he lacked as a child. He enjoys doing this as he thinks people deserve something that they shouldn't lose, like he did. This is one slight way he shows affection, but mainly the only way, as showing affection is a weakness of his.

    • Making Money - Was poor as a child and is eager to earn as much money as he can. This once again follows the pattern, as he never had much money as a child. This might also come from his hope to impress his father, as he is taking on the job his father once did, but Thomas is only earning money for himself, which makes him want a family, just to show his did he can handle it.

    • Doing Things He Shouldn't - He always followed rules, sometimes he likes to break them. Again, the pattern is shown here, as he didn't have much freedom as a child, always being bossed about by his father. He tries to make the most of his life while he can.

    • Having a Comfy Place to Sleep - He never had this as a child, so he values it highly. This really effects his moral, as he is so much happier when he has slept well, due to his hard work tiring him.


    Dislikes:

    • People Who Challenge Him - These people remind him of his father, and it is clear to see it is not a memory you want to remember.

    • His Past - All of his past makes him feel like a poor, un-loved sales man, and he hates thinking of that. These relate to his like: 'Making Money' as it is developed to destroy all 'poor' memories from his past.

    • Heights – Caused by accident, that was a fall from a high rooftop. Even though he used to love heights and adventure, he likes to avoid them now. Not because he has a fear of being hurt, because he has a fear of being useless.

    • His Scars – He thinks they are ugly, and is scared people judge him by them. This also effects his social skills.


    ABILITIES AND DISABILITIES :


    Strengths:

    • Hiding - As a child, when he explored, he would often have to hide from home owners who didn't like him running about. He enjoyed hiding and became passionate about it, making him improve the skill.

    • Climbing - He would always climb as a child, so he became very skilled at it. However, he fear of Heights usually stops him climbing to high.

    • Saying No (Deciding When Things Have Gone To Far) - He would often have to stop his father from hurting himself of his brother, this gave him a good sense of when things need to stop.


    Weaknesses: (All these traits make him feel useless and he hates it)

    • Running - His cracked leg never healed completely, meaning if he is to run, it will make his leg start to ache, causing him to limp. This makes him feel useless when his pain strikes, and he hates it with a passion, usually causing him to have an outburst.

    • Showing Affecting/Love - His childhood forced him to harden his 'shell', meaning he doesn't let most people see the real him. However, he does have a longing for love, due to him missing it for his childhood, although, he thinks it will never happen, due to his looks and intelligent.

    • Weak Sight Out of Left Eye - As he cut his face during his accident, it cut through his eye causing damage. Although he can see, in bad light it is harder to see through his left eye.

    • -Not Good With Weapons - He has never had a proper fight, meaning he never trained with weapons. Even though he has a small dagger, it is mainly for self defence.


    Combat Styles:

    -Tends not fight often, so just tries to block and stab when he thinks is right. He practices this sometimes, making sure he is well prepared on how the dagger works best, though, he still believes the heat of the moment will encourage him do do well. This means, when he does fight, he watches his enemy before he attacks, choosing specific attacks on their fighting. He also speaks to people in his local area, so he knows them well, just incase they ever get into a fight.


    Weapon of Choice – Small Dagger


    LIFE STORY:


    Thomas was born in the poor district of Regalia. His Mother (Ellie Sparce) and his Father (Nathan Sparce) met a few years before, after seeing each other in the Tavern. They were both quite intelligent and very loving. They were Thomas' only known family and struggled to support themselves, let alone a child. However, Nathan would often get involved with gang deals to make more money, even though Ellie was against the idea. Thomas’ life was pretty average for a poor family, he had a mother and father who loved him and just enough money to live. Sadly, when his brother (Jacob Sparce) was born, his mother died of illness just weeks after. She died when Thomas was only 2. From then on, Thomas’ father grew more and more aggressive, morning Ellie everyday, and treating the sons like dirt. He would beat them and shout at them, calling them horrible names and saying how terrible they were. Jacob was only little and could be hurt very easily, this meant Thomas would often take hits instead of Jacob, as he knew the danger. Thomas suddenly gained a lot of responsibility, causing him to have to 'grow up' more quickly.

    By the age of 4, Thomas was working on the streets, selling goods. He found out that he was quite charismatic, making most sales quite easy. He wouldn't earn a lot, but paired with his father's income, it was enough. He would look after his brother when his dad was away, and when he came back, made sure he was not hurt. This tired Thomas out, as he was balancing work with his home life, but he knew he had to push on, or his Father would hurt someone, and Thomas would feel useless. This is where his Hard-working trait came from. But in his spare time, when his father was settled and able to look after his brother, he would like to explore. Thomas was a very adventurous child and he would often explore and climb to distract him from his worries, kind of like what he does now: Keeping himself occupied to avoid sadness. He would climb around the poor district, swinging from fences and climbing rooftops. But when he was 6, he slipped and fell from a rooftop, landing on his left side. He had cut his face and eye open, and cracked his leg. He was bed ridden for a year, and his Father would always shout at him calling him useless. This has effected Thomas to this day, creating many of his character traits. When he was finally able to walk again, Thomas worked twice as hard, hoping to impress his father, even though it never worked.

    Years past in his life and it was all the same; looking after his brother and father, then selling goods. As Thomas grew older, he was able to stand up to his dad more, protecting his brother more effectively. Sadly, this would often cause the fights to be more horrific and heated than before, but Thomas did not mind, as it was a chance to let out his anger. These fights happened often, forming Thomas into a very aggressive person, often lashing out at people that he could not sell to. However, when he was 17, his brother being 15, his Father never came home and was presumed dead. Thomas wasn't bothered, as he always knew that this day would come. But Jacob was distraught, and because of this, Thomas decided to stay in the house with him for a few more days, just incase their Father came home. He never did. After days of waiting, Thomas and Jacob decided to go their separate ways, Jacob wanting an education and Thomas wanting the stacks money he never had.

    He would continue to sell around Regalia and would sometimes get involved with gangs like his father. Currently, he has found a place to call home: Syndicate. He decided to join this group as it focuses around his previous work; Sales. He thinks he fits in nicely there, as he has been selling all his life. He is very happy working there, as people seem to congratulate him on his effort. It also means he can stay off the streets, although, sometimes he feels scared, and sleeps on the surface. Although he has had many chances to buy/rent a house, he didn't take them. This s because he is saving his money to buy the best house he can find, as he believes living in a house like he lived in when he was younger, isn't an achievement. He hopes that his Brother would show his face again so they could share the house. However, Thomas doesn't know that Jacob has gained a basic education, and his traveling with his new family in Teled Methen, studying the Ruins.


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    @Stark_Trek Hi! Here's a quick review:
    • You should stick more closely to the template in terms of formatting. Take some time to fix the spacing between lines, keep the traits bolded, and so on. The top half of your app is a bit hard to discern at the moment since it's oddly spaced out.
    • You need to also include his race in the Basic Info.
    • His Visual Descriptions need more detail, aim for at least 3-5 sentences like you did with his other traits.
     
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    Thank you for replying! I am sorry about my layout and I will get that fixed. I will also Add his race and extend his visual descriptions! Thank you!
     
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    @Enkiduu
    Thank you for your corrections, they should be fixed now! :)
     
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    @Enkiduu Hi, sorry for butting in, but while your corrections are not wrong, this thread is solely for staff to review within. Please refrain from commenting here on other people's applications.
     
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    Oh, whoops, must've thought it was in Peer Review. My bad!
     
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    @Lord_Immortal I have done the corrections that Enkiduu said, will a staff member be reviewing it soon?
     
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    Hey there @Stark_Trek

    /SO/ let me start off by saying this is a very good application first time around, even without the edits suggested Enkiduu, although they did help. It certainly seems well thought out, so I’ll go straight into edits now.

    • A nitpicky edit now would be to include his name in the basic information. It says it on the title, but it’s also good practice to include the full name, middle names and all there in the basic info.
    • Whilst your character doesn’t know where Jacob Sparce is, could you write oocly here where he is in a separate bullet point? It seems fairly important to Thomas so I figure this best to add.
    • Why doesn’t he have a house? He’s trying to make as much money as he can to get off of the street, but why can’t he afford one? You can rent very small flats for fairly cheap prices, so why hasn’t he managed it? Does he have to pay debts perhaps?
    • Could you flesh out your personality traits please? I’m looking for 5-7 sentences for each, so around double what you have written for ‘Eager’ etc.
    • I’d like you to go into much more detail in your life story please, flesh it out which notable points in his life. Tell me how he developed as a person, and how his development affected those around him. Mention things he did to help out, things his father did to him, how he came to meet this Syndicate.
    Tag me when you’re done with these!
     
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    Also please can you use bullet points? It's quite hard to read otherwise since all the headings look the same as the general points in terms of format. So work it like it's in the example app please and put some bullet points.
     
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    @Lord_Immortal I have completed those 'tasks' and hopefully they are to the standard you expect. :)
     
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    @Stark_Trek Please include the bullet points as they allow for an indent that makes it easier to differentiate between points.
     
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