I have an idea for a new Lore race, but I am not a particularly  awesome writer.

My Idea is:

The Amegan are a race of chroniclers who are distinguished by silver tattoos round their left eyes. They are worshippers of the Void and have seven rituals:

DochMegan- At Birth, a small vial of blood is taken

Capbya- The first time an Amegan child picks up a pen.

Ingos- The first words

Selochi- A sacrifice performed every day.

Thereada- The holy song.

Torresci- Getting ready to leave the family

GogAnHiyle- Death.

They are hated in Aloria for these rituals and are persecuted on pain of death. They are all vegetarians.

They have pale skin, red eyes, and are very tall. They write in little booklets, and collect spoils of war.

They fight with two swords.

A little polishing? All I need is someone to give me constructive Criticism and a writer to help.

Thanks!

P.s below is an idea of a skin to use.