Character Information Full Name: Saeviir Raazz’ël-ranvanokh Valiirn Mor-Seld Raz-Parthanaar Race: Kathar (Excess) Age: 42 Eye Color: Red Core Concept Self-serving, hedonistic, and cruel, the vampiric Kathar seeks for pleasure and power. With little to no guilt or shame, Saeviir gives into her whims and wants with little regards for her loved ones. The divine cannot sway her, though the Void Gods are an exception. Proficiencies Strength: 3 Unarmed Pack Blades Pack Flexible Weapon Pack Constitution: 1 Resilience Pack Wisdom: 0 Dexterity: 5 Trailing Pack Brittle Pack Parkour Skill Pack Stealth Skill Pack Disguise Skill Pack Magic: 3 (Void) Fire Magic Pack Flesh Magic Pack Blood Magic Pack Afflicted Predator Pack (Vampire Commutable) Afflicted Heartbeat Pack (Vampire Commutable) Afflicted Evasion Pack (Vampire Commutable) Charisma: 2 Pet Husbandry Pack Mount Husbandry Pack (Racial Mount) Abilities Blooded Vampire (Infection Pledge - Haqet) Languages Common (Free) Pannarokh (Katharic) Appearance Information Sae'viir's head is mutated and crowned with wicked, twisted horns. Her black nails are curled into sharp claws. A long scaled tail is usually wrapped around her waist and her blood runs unnaturally thick. Saeviir stands at a tall height with an average but strong build. Her black hair runs down at a great length but is usually tied. Her skin is gray, like most Kathar, and is nearly covered from neck to toe in feline-striped pattern tattoos. Plenty of piercings mark her face and body. Saeviir's vampire form sprouts out an extra arm that permanently keeps a half-mask in place against her face. Long, stainless robes of white and red adorned with sharp feathers flow from her body. The ends of her hair tapers off into shadow-like mists. Life Story Born in the Dread Empire, Saeviir was introduced into the world of Kathar cruelty and indulgence, something she would either grip with or be consumed by as the years went on. In classical Kathar fashion, Saeviir possessed a number of siblings from her parents. She lived in Parthanaar at a time, in the nicer areas of the massive city, yet even nice was something of an overstatement. Saeviir rarely saw her mother, as she was too busy dealing with priestess work, a rather driven occupation. However, she was constantly exposed to her father and began mimicking his antics. Her sadism was born, and began to truly grow as she aged and was exposed to more. Leaving home, Saeviir roamed the lands and the Kathar Steppes, spiraling into bouts of utter depravity and wanton vice. It wasn't until she left the Dreadlands did she happen across a calling that wasn't related to some sort of carnal sin. Travelling to Riviella, Saeviir came across a performing theatre troupe. Following a disaster, Saeviir felt aimless, but still kept her usual haunts and pastimes. It wasn't until she was eventually tracked own by some family of hers did she finally have something to do. Happy to find a new point to her life, Saeviir bustled off towards the Regalian Capital. Shoutout to Mooffins/Muffins for writing the stories, Macklemore could never beat you.
Please include a calcualtion as to how you came to this value. Please specify that these sorcery spells are from the Kathar Mageblooded ability. Other than that, everything else looks good! Please make these edits in Purple, and tag me when they're complete @SorryNari!
Hello @Mollymock , I need a re-review. Here are the major changes made, I labeled them in purple: Switched out chaos spell for darkness: umbra bolts Added another darkness spell at the cost of 4 proficiency points Switched +10 stealth into +6 anima care Minor changes: Added theme songs!
Ahoy @Mollymock ! Another re-review, I edited the changes in purple: I made some changes with the proficiencies. Took out a little bit out of her life story. Changed her alignment. Adjusted her religion.
Please state spending this proficiency in your proficiency list. Other than that, it looks good. However, this application shan't allowed re-reviewed again until May. So please be mindful of that. Make this edit and tag me when complete @SorryNari!
I’m a bit confused on how you want me to list it since it says +4 proficiency on the side. If you meant to add it with all the other proficiencies (like combat, culinary), how should I name it ? Thanks !
Mhmm! List it with the rest of your proficiencies. Listing it like this should be just fine: +4 Sorcery Spells
Hey, I know you said that the app wouldn't be re-reviewed until may, but what if my character has an affliction and I want to include in mutations? Would that bypass the no-review or do I have to tough it out and wait until may? @Mollymock
Hello @Mollymock , I would like a re-review: Edited: Proficiencies Physical stat Mutations Character alignment Added in aesthetics All changes are labeled in purple
Vampire time Added in 4 Von kerle mutations Added unarmed proficiencies due to Blackstrike mutation Edited eye color All changes are labeled in purple @Mollymock
Hey there @SorryNari! As it stands, no further Sorcery Spell changes may be permitted on this character until they are inactive for a while and then brought with some form of rewrite. I ask that you reverse this change and tag me when complete.
Major Edits: Added in Von Kerle Mutations Added in Karmark Form description Tweaked proficiencies Minor Edits: Added in art for the Karmark form @Mollymock
Major Edit: Changed the appearance and description of her Karmark form. Added a little more info into her recent years life story. Minor Edits: Dropped her surname. @Mollymock
Edits: Reworked the proficiencies. Swapped Karmark Howl for Karmark Beast Adjusted body stat. Changed ritualism. Changed sorcery - dropping elemental, investing only into darkness. Back in June, you stated that no further sorcery spell changes may be permitted on this character until they are inactive for a while and then brought with some form of rewrite. But since the proficiency overhaul is huge and also includes sorcery changes, then would it be fair that I drop the elemental spells and wholly invest into darkness sorcery? I needed to compensate for the ritualism since it affects the sorcery cap. Thank you! @Mollymock
