Rejected Sheet Rosaline Keemerah Reysatra

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    Basic Information with Expansion


    Full Name:
    Rosaline Keemerah Reysatra, though she often shortens sher name to Rosa.
    Pronounced Rosa-lin Kem-orh-rahr Rey-sah-tra.
    Age: 32, born July the 4th of 272ac.
    Gender: Female
    Race: Possessed Altalar
    (Betrayal Possession)


    Main Ambition:
    Rosaline wants to learn everything humanly possible, she is on the hunt for knowledge of any and all sorts. Inspired by the events that she has witnessed throughout her life, she wants to be knowledgeable about all sorts and through this, she can prevent repeating the same mistakes of previous people. She will achieve this goal in anyway she can; if she wants to learn the feeling you feel as you murder somebody, there is only one true method of obtaining this feeling after all, you can do the math.


    Special Permission:
    Possession, which I will inquire about soon.

    Brief Residential Description
    Rosaline has lived in Regalia for some of her adult life though her home resides in the confines of Limans, Ithania. She was born and raised in the town in her house which was referred to as the 'Accueil de la sécurité' although the name confused her, being a house made from different generations and well, was not something to be proud of; for a brief description, it was a large manor that was caving in on itself, the central hallway had actually began to lose part of the staircase and even had a large hole through the roof before she left. She currently lives without a house due to her appearance and nature, feeling as if she was abandoned by people she trusted, she is currently trying to find new residence with the people of the sewers; maybe one of them may see potential in her and let her inside but then again, it'd be for a fee of course. Be that from coin to the more criminal encounters, murder and such. Something that one should not brag about as a technical profession.

    Brief Childhood Description
    Rosaline was the youngest child to Michael and Marilyn Reysatra, having two brothers and three sisters. Her immediate family are listen down below in a spoiler along with the key, due to the rather empty nature of Ithania and the fact that well, its not Regalia. In her town, you pretty much knew everybody very well, it was not very dense and was rather secluded, She was often raised around the industrial nature of the town and her parents different jobs; Naval Transportation and entertainment for the locals. Due to the racial and religious differences, she and her family were often shunned by the locals, criticised to a lot of verbal insults and even physical at times and this lead to her being afraid of who she is, what she is and what she believes in and well, this only worsened heavily with her possession taking affect. Due to this, a number of negative and positive traits were formed, be that a bond to her family and the more realistic understanding of emotional discomfort, the ability to be properly sympathetic to somebody while a history that she rather hates, disagrees with and now, she'd be happy to see that town burn to the ground, provided her family leaves of course.

    Secondary Goals
    Rosaline has her mind set on one goal and that is to be possibly one of the smartest people in Regalia, achieving this with a disregard for human safety around her and will willingly throw people under a metaphorical bus to achieve this, doing this maybe through trickery and such. She's always wanted to see if the Crimsons would flood the sewers again, she liked the anarchy. It reminded her of the time she felt useful, like she had power. Even if that power was swiftly taken away from her by something she considers an illness that cannot be fixed.

    Additional Information
    There are some overall strange things you can find about Rosaline and her family if you just ask, for starters; she has a niece named after her as her family was told she is dead or at least missing, she would attempt to re-establish contact but to herself she is a monster and yet sticks on a crossroads, she is tempted to go back to her family and flaunt the fact of who she is and what she has done for no logical reason yet she does not want to go back and make her parents bare the emotional pain that her daughter is well, a monster. Influenced by her technical illness and her past self, she often ignores the matter. Protecting herself by never investigating where they are, nor what they have done. If you think about it, its rather sad. Her realisation that she is a monster that one could have only imagined from a monster, even herself believed that possession was not real, just a fairy tale but now look at her, she is that fairy tale. In the end, she is the monster the hero must kill to save the day.

    Rosaline's Appearance

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    Painted inside the Mossy Pot by Candice Moore on July the 7th, 304ac.
    "Les ailes sont une expression, bien que les cornes sont très réel."


    Visual Information
    On paper, at least.

    Eye Color: Earth Green.
    Hair Color: Dirty Blonde.
    Skin Color: Pale white.

    Hair Style:
    She will often try to direct her hair backwards, to try and cover the bases of her horns. Her hair is about shoulder height and rather thick, due to the nature of her actual head and the fact that she has horns, she often tries to hide it, then again. They're bloody horns, they'll always been seen unless she wants to file them which she is too afraid to do.

    Clothing:
    Depending on the scenario, she will often wear different types of clothing which are shown down below:

    Day to Day
    She prefers to wear dresses or robes, often sticking to thicker clothing overtop though due to the cold confines of the sewers, inept to natural light and therefore does not continue the same heat, she will try and wear something to hide her horns, being rather self concious about them and too scared to have them removed and will often take precausions to hide them from others, be that through hoods or masks, she'll try her best though sometimes she will show them without question, after all; she can't deny what she looks like or who she is, can she?

    Sewer Transportation
    Rosaline is not somebody to chance her safety while exploring some of the most dangerous areas in Regalia, she often wears light armor such as leather and maybe some pieces of Iron if it comes to it, nothing fancy like full plate but just basic improvised. She would prefer to wear a light set of armor so she can at least stay in a fight longer and have the chance to run, which would be prevented if she wore the same kit as say, a Vigilant Shield Armored member.

    Criminal Persona
    Something she does not like to chance at all. She will wear as much bloody clothing as she can, trying to keep it light weight but hidden, protective. Sometimes resembling one of those very awkward people who walk around in a white and red hoodie and such, the ones resembling an idiot turned fashion master. She will often keep a mask on but try to keep the clothing more common to avoid raising suspicion, since if you are going to murder somebody, don't look like you actually did it. Just look like a normie, raise your chances of escaping without being noticed as much, incase you are covered in blood; then its rather hard to hide.

    Body Standards:

    Height: 6'4"
    Weight: 212 lbs

    Body Build:
    Ectomorph / Pear.

    Expanded Information

    Weapon of Choice:
    She'd prefer to carry something light and effective, most likely a knife though if she had the chance, she'd try and go for a Bow. Having far more training in a bow, which she sees as a superior skill than knife wielding, eliminate the target from a distance and sheight and you can have a much higher chance of escaping the situation alive and unchained.

    Body Description:
    Rosaline is not very muscular nor strong, though she is in a rather high physical state for a female elf. Having a built figure, a rather hidden but still there six pack, if one was to take notice; her fat is often stored towards her chest and thighs, hence assisting her hour glass figure. She has a number of scars up her right left and left wrist from different occassions, looking as if caused by sword marks and basic damage caused by the environment, say large scrapes that never healed over properly. She also has a number of personal details on her back, showing her name, date of birth, place of birth and her race. A rather weird thing to have but she has it for comfort of mind, to help herself feel a little bit more safe if somebody ever found her unconcious. Rather weird positioning though, as it'd be rather weird if they randomly undressed her. Not a very rather thought out plan.

    Expanded Fashion:
    Rosaline prefers to wear more thick clothing for a number of rather unknown reasons, to name one, she believes it adds a little bit more protection from a fist, acting as a cushion of some sort. For two, it helps her conceal armor and weaponry and well, those are the only two immediate answers she may answer with. She prefers to wear darker colors but will willingly wear house colors if it comes to it, say if she acts as a house guard or anything. Being very improvised with her more survival-influenced clothing, though she will often try to wear higher quality clothing she may 'borrow' from somebody who does not need it as much, sometimes this being done by muggings.

    Vocal Ability:
    Rosaline has an accent comparable to a D'Ithanie conversion to New Regalianish or rather a french tone to make it simple. Due to her beginning to learn Common very recently, she is not very good at speaking the language and therefore will cut mid sentance, constantly stutter or muddle words and say things that make largely no sense whatsoever. She will sometimes end sentances with her assumption for the question, say if she was confirming on a question, she'd say oui at the end. Although a rather weird tendancy, it is still there.

    She speaks these languages provided below:
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    New Regalianish, new to this language.
    D'Ithanie, fluent in this language.
    Common Elvish, fluent in this language.

    Rosalines Personality and Abilities

    Personality Traits

    • Adaptable: Rosaline will try and get a good feel of her scenario before adapting to it though well, she'd prefer to adapt it towards her standards but well, it works if she adapts. She does this due to a fear of being unprepared, a lot of her life is revolved around fear and this constantly puts her on edge, for example: Rosaline might try and pin a murder of an gang of Common Regalians, all she has to do is put on a very rough voice and such and thats rather it, she'd prefer to try and make the authorities believe she was assisting another group which could buy her time and possibly save her skin if said event went south.
    • Aggressive: Rosaline, the most friendliest person in all of Aloria. Literally the biggest joke you can shear in Regalia, it is so far from the truth that it should be counted as another galaxy. She will often be an asshole to everyone, swearing and such towards almost everybody of all statuses, though she knows her limits. Knowing when to back down and such, be that if she is talking to high nobility or the emperor if for some unbelievable reason that literally defines stupidity, she'd probably throw an insult their way in her own tongue, being unexperienced to properly insult them without sounding like an idiot.
    • Sarcastic: She isn't one to try and stay serious all the time, even though she is a dick about 90% of the time, she actually is rarely serious or at least as of recent events, any day a hostile military come invade Regalia she'll be as serious as Unionism which to her is pretty serious but yeah, she'll often crack off a lot of insulting jokes towards people about almost everything, sometimes going for full on multi-attacks. Though this has her limits, she isn't going to start insulting Unionism, she does know the extent of what she says can do. She is not interested in spending a few nights in an Crimson Inquisition Cell for insulting a rather large religion and empire. She has a brain or a partially working one, though sometimes insults slip out without question or reasoning.
    • Uninhibited: She does not trust Regalia, she does not believe in the jobs of the Vigilant Shield and Hammers of Hólmganga and does not want to risk having her throat slit by some half wit who wants to support Vampirism which to her is a bad idea but still, she'd love to see the aftermath of that prick. She often has an eye on her surroundings, the people she talks to, the people who eye her and the most likely candidate who may engage her and this is one shell of a significant trait to her, she is always on edge. The amount of things going through her head about escaping and engaging almost everything, she'd be prepared for herself to appear out of nowhere and try to fight her, that's how paranoid she is. Paranoid anything can happen.
    • Abrasive: Rosa is better described as a Sociopath but Abrasive is a good way to describe it, influenced by recent events. She could not give two literal shits about anybody she does not know, if somebody was hanging off the edge of a cliff who she ever met, she is more likely going to kick you off or bring you up to rob you, often only shelping people to make a profit or get something in return. Though this can be rather dealt with, if she ever met somebody she enjoys her experience with enough or actually loves somebody, she will share a rather normal emotion towards them, sometimes even being a loving emotion to them which is rather rare for her.
    • Whimsical: Though she is rather strange in her emotions, she is better confirmed as a bitch in all reality and well, often bounces from moods very quickly. For some time, she could be happy; as hard as that might be to believe. On the other time, she could be very depressing. This is a cycle that is rather disorganized, very fucked to be exact. It can make people believe that she is insane, something severely wrong with her thought process. Then again, she has two lovely horns, nobody really wants to question her mentallity. Usually something with that much of a physical difference tends to be different, you wouldn't compare a sanguines mentality with a non infected nor would you try to compare an ailor with a dakkar, physical differences can indicate mental.
    • Self-conscious: Due to the fact that she has two massive horns coming from her head, something that should never happen whatsoever. She does not feel safe in her own body, nor does she feel happy in it. She is scared of recieving insults from people of her appearance, be that related to her goat horns or knife ears, to be exact. She doesn't actually know how to respond to this, nor does she want too. Though her reaction is often met with her possession, her destructive feelings she has towards those who have wronged her.
    • Troublemaker: If you didn't realise, she is an annoyance to almost everybody she meets. She enjoys seeing things crumble; be that economical, physical or mentally. She enjoy its all and will try her best to replicate or aggravate it further, some things she may say are some of the more fucked up things you may hear in your lifetime. She'd purposely try to spread rumours of people, especially the respected as she sees them as a better challenge. Overall anything that could cause issues is fun to her, be that fighting or vandalism. Hell, she's not afraid to forcefully change the outcomes of things, be that hiring a prostitute for somebody in a marriage, see it crumble into pieces. The more damage, the better. Children being disowned, marriages dissolving due to to complications and the emotional harming of people.
    Strengths
    • Tactical Mindset: Rosa often has a plan for almost everything, along with contingencies to protect them. She often keeps stashes of equipment around the city in rather hard to reach places though she memorizes all of those spots though sometimes, she loses the equipment due to other pricks looking for a quick steal. To put it short, she always likes to have a plan and if she does not, you'd know. She'd try and avoid all contact and try to improvise, a rather weird yet useful trait.
    • Athletic: Rosaline often keeps in the best shape she can just to help deal with her fear of well, living. This puts her in a very strong state, being high in stamina and can throw a few heavy punches for a prolonged period of time, in theory; she could beat somebody of an average size and skill, maybe having a chance with more innovative fighters from say the Viridian Order or from Nicoloan Training Camps, though her chances of winning are rather slim, she is just good at gaining enough distance so she could maybe escape and survive that occasion.
    • Above-average Endurance: Rosalines endurance is actually rather high and this can be seen as both a pro and a con due to the very nature of it, sure she could push further and further than she should and this could easily increase the progress of muscle building but yet this could let her push too far, resulting in serious injuries. With this, she could stay in fights far longer but yet could endure far worse damage than somebody else, then again. Better to keep standing then to fall and have somebody kill you. Time and place for everything.
    Weaknesses
    • Short-Tempered: Rosa can be very angry at certain times, specifically around times that involve memories of her family and if she has recently killed somebody, as she often stays in a rather angry mood from that. Because of this, she can be a rather dick to anybody she meets, friendly or otherwise and well, this could cause issues. Maybe saying the odd insult and degrading a certain person, be that imperial or nobility. Also, fights. A lot of fights.
    • Zealous for knowledge: Though this is a rather useful trait infact, it can be very very bad in some circumstances. She wants to learn everything possible and well, Regalia isn't a place to learn everything or tollerate it, things such as if the emperor can be killed with a blade simply or what a brain fells like if she hit the skull hard enough for her to penetrate it. Regalia isn't very happy to deal with these things and would probably label her as some sort of insane person, though she is just one for knowledge of all sorts and will achieve this by any way possible.
    • Possession: She was posssessed by a Betrayal Vice on in her early thirties, within two years as this was written and suffers from those lovely personality side-effects, she's not the kindest and well, the effects of this are not nice. Due to Regalia absolutely loving those suffering from possession, she is absolutely loved by those who find her and never gets in any fights whatsoever, none at all. She suffers from the negative side effects from this, none actually useful unless she wants to replicate the stereotype viking helmets. For reference, the effects she is suffering from which are not immediate are listed below:
      • Compulsive behavior resulting in her to lick her teeth.
      • Paling of the skin, though she was rather pale before.
      • Horns growing out of the top of her head, not an appealing trait.
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    Thy Backstory of Rosaline.

    Rosaline was born in an Ithanian town on the 4th of July, 272AC to Marylin and Michael Reysatra in an improvised house, built by her grandfather and was the last child born in her family, she was raised in a poor family and therefore was not taught to waste, more to conserve. To her, she feels that she was more developed than higher class citizens or commoners, having to look out for her and her family. though during the time of her birth they were onboard the S.S. Reliance, a ship devoted to transporting ice using saw dust as an insulator.

    Due to racial and religious tension between the locals, they would have been in a state similair to somebody of little with no money, being refused by locals in the commercial sector, meaning they could neither sell nor buy and this did not end well, if nobody sells food to them, they can't eat, they starve. If nobody sells them water, they die of dehydration. Due to this, she was refused education from the locals and only at sixteen when she was capable of attending education, being taught by the captain of the S.S. Reliance as she began learning the basics to enlist on the ship in a matter of years, as she 'grew up a little more.'

    As she turned seventeen, she had become skilled enough to be a useful member of the Reliance and began voyaging on the ship with her brother and mother alongside as workers, her mother serving as medical with her brother serving as an assistance, she worked as an engineer towards keeping the ship apart, the Reliance crashed on an unknown place to her in New Ceardia away from civilisation, during this time. During this crash which was influenced by an unknown ship, heavy cannon fire as the ship was defenceless which caused it to sink and retreat into a storm in an attempt to lose them which well, did not end very well. This ended in the majority of the crew dead, along with her father and brother and this broke her, the fact that she did not know how to save them, the fact that she did not know they could be taken so easily.

    During that time of being lost, she was found by a fishing vessel that was navigating the coast to find a more decent area to fish and was brought back to civilisation where contact was made with the employers and they were sent back, after she worked off the debt that was made bringing her and her mother back, by nineteen. She had began going into a rather unliked practise but she saw it as a method of making money and that was prostitution, something even she regrets as she looks back on it now though to her, it was her only method of making money after her father died. She continues this for two years and a half years until she turned twenty, beginning to try and find a better idea for herself. With her siblings and mother finding new love to try and keep themselves alive, she failed to follow the same footsteps.

    Trying to find work after all she had encountered, she decided to sign up for the S.S. Odyseuss to try and gain her confidence back of the sea. After everything that happened with her brother and father, she wanted to make them proud beyond death and well, she believed she had completed that. She stuck with the ship for around seven years until it encountered some rather unusual creature which she failed to see, center of the middle of the sea with a leaking hull they attempted to make it back to the nearest land possible and were met with the harshness of Jorrhild. During this, a significant amount of the crew died from environmental hazards and well, from the eighty manned ship she was on, only eleven made it out. Including herself, after this, she moved to Regalia at 27 in hopes for a new and better life, which she did recieve. She began working in a bar and everything was going well for her until the Qadir siege of Regalia.

    She originally fled to the sewers with a few friends, avoiding all immediate fights and trying to not be taken down by hostiles and well, she found a rather unstable group constantly losing their leader due to the common ravages of the sewers. It is during this time she was actually posssessed due to the mass killings in Regalia, possessed by a betrayal vice. This led to a lot of arguments throughout the group and often conflicted with her role as a medic for the wounded from supply runs or even the attack itself. Eventually, the group fell into disarray as people of the group were being infected with Vampirism and nobody was fit to command the team, being saved as order was restored later on. Though some of them were executed for war crimes, she avoided almost everybody after she initially found out, for her and others safety.

    After the war fell, she was too afraid to be considered for her appearance and rarely strayed up to the surface, only if required for herself and others. Disowned by her co-workers and family, she has stayed in the sewers ever since, hoping to be of some use to somebody. No matter what she looks like, what she feels like, she still believes she can help people deep down under all that hate, all that aggression.

    Thy Extended Backstory of Rosaline.


    Rosaline Keemerah Reysatra, the youngest child in her line of siblings was born on the fourth of July, 272AC in Limans, Ithania. She was born into a small household of Altalar that worshipped the Faith of Estale which caused a very large problem with the locals of the small village, as they had supported Unionism. She was abused verbally and physically as she grew up in the area which lead to her becoming rather self concious about what she looked like and who she believed in. Bringing doubts on why her parents had brought her to such a foul place, to people who speak such heresy towards Estel. She was rather scared to do anything as a child and often stayed inside due to this, allowing her to learn some more useful things. Such as the language of her ancestors or at least close ancestors and to get a better understanding of D'Ithanian.

    If one was to delve deeper into the trade of her parents, they would discover that her father was a navigator for the S.S. Reliance, a ship owned by Miorrsen, a shipping-orientated company owned by an early adaptation of the Wolfshowls, before vampirism became the usual to them. The S.S. Reliance was commanded by Jonathan J. Wolfshowl who was a former Regalian Naval Officer who resigned after fourty years of service, from what she heard, him and her father were good friends and were actually planning to form a sort of business coalition with each families though that never saw the light of day, sadly. Her mother was quite simply a bartender for a tavern named The Reading Pixy that served as an inn and watering hole for the influx of sailors that returned from long haul trips, her boss was Andrew O'Shian who was a Northerne man of a very small size, a midget more or less. Rather funny actually, besides the fact that he'd constantly insult the woman staff and do some rather disreputable things that no normal person should agree with. He was eventually turned in missing around the time of the Reliance's crash, presumed that he was torn to shreds by hounds that had apparently escaped from a neighbouring town fourteen hours prior to the report, though it was presumed.

    Due to the families reputation being held down due to religious and racial hatred, people would often refuse to buy and sell from them and that did not help the family not one bit. This resulted in days they would have no heating, no food nor clean water, this resulted in the children becoming rather sick and vulnerable to the dangers of the winter months. This is one of the reasons that led the house into such a damaged state, people refusing to sell building materials to them and such, people turning down jobs of paid work just because they'd be working for a 'knife-eared heretic family.' Maybe they realised that this would be a better method of punishing them, maybe they were afraid of a possible backlash. Nobody in the family knew why they continued nor wanted to ask why, yet this continued for a rather long time. Throughout her childhood, actually influencing the family to begin working on shipwork with Miorrsen as they were rather friendly towards them but from an experience like that, almost everything normal is friendly. Due to the loving nature of the town, they failed to recieve education until very late in their teenage years or at least it would be if they were human, they'd be around sixteen or seventeen when they began learning anything properly serious by the Jonathan Wolfshowl when they got the time to learn. She originally signed on when she was fifteen though they would not let her be a properly useful member of the ship. She was trained in medical and ship repairs and she was greatful for this, even if it was just a business choice.

    As she turned seventeen, she had technically finished the training that she had been attending during that time and began voyaging on the SS Reliance with her brother and mother alongside as workers, her mother serving as medical with her brother serving as an assistance, she worked as an engineer towards keeping the ship apart, the Reliance crashed on an unknown place to her in New Ceardia away from civilisation, during this time. During this crash which was influenced by an unknown ship, heavy cannon fire as the ship was defenceless which caused it to sink and retreat into a storm in an attempt to lose them which well, did not end very well. This caused the loss of life in about 55% of the crew, including her father and brother. This stuck with her a lot emotionally and still to this day, the fact that she failed to save or protect her family, something she presumed impossible. This moment changed her character entirely, the faith that she had put into her captain and her family was destroyed. She did not ever grasp the idea that the ship might crash, as stupid as it might sound and well, this made her very uneasy from almost everything which did not help her at all

    She realised that it only takes one wrong move lose somebody you love, somebody you respected and somebody you yourself would die for if it came to it. Even if you think about it, how only half the crew died when it could have been the entire crew if they stayed in that conflict long enough, she still hates herself for not helping at least a little bit more, maybe it would have been her instead of her father. Her brother. Something that had rose a few suggestions was it was a Qadir-registered ship, taking fire at the ship for no reason or just a privateering crew, aiming to steal their cargo even though it'd be a rather idiotic idea, it's bloody ice. Not gold, not diamonds. Ice, just ice.

    During that time of being lost, she was found by a fishing vessel that was navigating the coast to find a more decent area to fish and was brought back to civilisation where contact was made with the employers and they were sent back, after she worked off the debt that was made bringing her and her mother back, by nineteen. She had began going into a rather unliked practise but she saw it as a method of making money and that was prostitution, something even she regrets as she looks back on it now though to her, it was her only method of making money after her father died. She continues this for two years and a half years until she turned twenty, beginning to try and find a better idea for herself. With her siblings and mother finding new love to try and keep themselves alive, she failed to. She was still broken by the fact that she lost her a significant part of her family and was amazed how they could continue as if nothing ever happened, or at least thats how she saw it. She didn't know how they were coping emotionally nor was she brave enough to ask, even though that would have been a rather good idea in the long term, something that even she recognizes now yet she won't admit it.

    Trying to find work after all she had encountered, she decided to sign up for the S.S. Odyseuss to try and gain her confidence back of the sea. After everything that happened with her brother and father, she wanted to make them proud beyond death and well, she believed she had completed that. She stuck with the ship for around seven years until it encountered some rather unusual creature which she failed to see, center of the middle of the sea with a leaking hull they attempted to make it back to the nearest land possible and were met with the harshness of Jorrhild. During this, a significant amount of the crew died from harsh environmental hazards and well, from the eighty manned ship she was on, only eleven made it out. Including herself, from this; she was amazed that she survived this event, maybe seeing it as some sort of calling that she could do some good in her further life. After she had grown tired of this, all the bullying as she returned and she did not want to continue dealing with it, she could not continue dealing with it so she moved to Regalia at 27 in hopes for a new and better life, it may be the center for all this chaos but at least she could just keep quiet, maybe they might ignore her. She began working in a bar and everything was working far better than it was in Ithania for her until, the one, the only. Qadirs sieged Regalia. Yay.

    For christ sake, choose another empire you pricks.

    When the attack started, she fled towards the sewers with a few co-workers and her boss while attempting to avoid direct conflict, they knew if they were to engage in a fight, they'd be killed. From the seven that left her work to take refuge in one of the worst places to stay, they arrived with four. When they reached an area of safety, they managed to find another group that they teamed with. They were constantly under attack by the horrors of the sewers, never managing to have a leader as they were all scared of being snatched up just for being a person of strategic importance. Throughout the attack, the group slowly declined due to the constant attacks often involving those infected with Vampirism and an inability to cure this, resulting in the group falling apart due to resource management and religious differences, funnily enough; this group was nearly torn apart by one of her co-workers; Amara Abdul, who attempted to sell them out to Qadirs in a rather stupid attempt that was rather easy to see and expect. She was halted in a rather rude manner by Rosaline, attempted to take her another group member as a hostage and due to a lot of pressure influenced by the Vampire members, Amara killed the prisoner and that lead Rosaline to kill her. It was around this time when she was possessed, influenced by the traitorous actions of somebody she had once trusted and the mass deaths of Regalian troops and civilians as the Qadirs stormed their homes.

    After the war fell into a more sustainable state, she failed to get excorcised out of fear and well, avoided all contact with anybody that could cause her harm. Now, alone and afraid she tends to fear almost her every move. She wants to begin making herself more known to Regalia yet her physical appearance and mental injuries do not assist this, she may not be the same as she was before the day she was posssessed or the day she was forced to survive in Jorrhild but she can maybe fix what she has become, then again, those thoughts are rational and the things that go through her head are far from rational, they're rather insane quite frankly.

     
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  2. Jack_Castle

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    Well for starters your life story probably exceeds the 800 word cap, I would put all the Expanded parts into spoilers for ease of reading as currently there is a lot to take in. I would add at least two more personality traits, as while you have elaborated greatly on them there are only 6. As for the Strengths and weaknesses, you have listed 2 psychical strengths and a mental one but not a personality strength; however, the weaknesses are in order.

    Last I checked Possession was a special permission.

    This is a very well written character app, good job!
     
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    Hii, there are a few things I'd like to point out.
    • Athletic isn't a personality trait as much as a strength. I suggest you go and replace it with something else.
    • Also, not to seem nitpicky, but perhaps refrain from so much swearing in the application? Some of it's blurred out, but not all of it. Once or twice in my opinion is fine, but in my opinion it just seems a bit excessive here. Sorry if I seemed harsh :C
     
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    Thank you towards @Fillyjonk and @Jack_Castle for the assistance on this. All have been changed, just wanted to say thanks.
     
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    I am here to review this application!
    • First off, please put all of the expansion material into a spoiler, on most apps it would be allowed to sit on the main application but you have quite a lot and it really makes the thread appear crowded and daunting.
    Basic Information
    • Keeping her main ambition short is a what I request of you here please, shed it down to a sentence or a few key words.
    • What possession she is is not clear at the top of the page, make it clear by saying "Betrayal possession"
    • What is the giant paragraph beneath that?
    Personality Traits
    • Why is there the use for the first person in the first trait? Also, it makes very little sense, remove lyrical or morph it into something else and change the header name
    • Those possessed with betrayal "often become underhanded troublemakers. They wish to see friends fight, lovers break up, and parents abandon their children. They whisper rumors and vile thoughts into the ears of others." I see no trait here that demonstrates this possession.
    Please do these edits in green and get back to me with a tag.
     
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    Updated it though some things may have no been completed as wanted.
    List of things changed is below:
    • Headers to the Basic Information Expanded, to clear confusion with the unknown paragraph and future ones.
    • I have used a spoiler for the expanded story as suggested.
    • Removed Lyrical from personality.
    • Added a Possession Trait to personality.
    Thanks in advance.
     
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    What I meant was that due to her possession, traits such as deceitful, amoral and other more negative ones would more easily come to the surface, thing of what traits make up, as the wiki says, "underhanded troublemakers". She can't have the personality trait if possession either, that makes no sense. Tag me once these edits are complete.
     
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    Made the edits, sorry for it being so late. I have added three traits which have been coloured in green, the grey one is there which will be removed sooner or later.
    • Amoral trait added.
    • Deceitful trait added.
    • Troublemaker trait added.
    Thank you in advance, I hope this is up to standard.

     
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    What I meant by my comments is that at least ONE of those should exist in their character pool, two of those are nearly the same thing. Please remove two.
     
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    Alright, so. Very sorry for the issues caused by my lack of direction and I believe I deleted the right ones. Thanks for being patient and such on this. @The_Shadow_King3
     
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    Approved.
     
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