Played Character Khalil Al-makir

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    Character Information
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    ◈ Full Name: Khalil "Naaji" al-Makir ibn Nabeel min Al-Alus
    ⬦ Vasar Name: Kisher
    ⬦Alias: Qarīn (kar-een) - The Jinni of Reflected Self

    ◈ Race:
    Eronidas Half-Qadir (Zabar, Qadir Dominant)
    ◈ Age:
    Thirty | Born June 6th | ♊︎
    ◈ Gender & Pronouns:
    Cisgender Male | He/Him
    ◈ Occult: Mundane
    Occupations
    ⬦ Workshop Owner | Bazaar of Machina
    ⬦ Serpent's Hollow Member| Descendant
    (Discreet)
    ⬦ Scribe Guild Member | Fact Checker

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    Core Concept: || A hybrid between societies of reason.
    ⬦⬦ Role | Philosopher Mechanic | A Qadiriq technician and Zabar polymath who is loyal to Al-Alus. He specializes in the invention of protective Automata; sentinels that provide security rather than robotic assault squads. While seeking to bring about meaningful discussion with others, Khalil will rarely initiate combat on his own, preferring other means to find resolution.
    ⬦⬦ Character | Chaotic Good | Someone who smiles more often than not and makes an honest attempt to stay principled. Khalil is a gentle person with lots of compassion for others, but his benevolent intentions are often accomplished through deceitful and sometimes criminal behavior. What feels right is probably right, no matter what the rules are.

    ⬦⬦ Religiosity | Al-Asir Unitarianism | Limited daily piety; without turning to the gods to remove his problems, Khalil attempts to stay true to what Al-Asir has taught his people. He has almost no personal interest in the greater Unionist pantheon taught by Regalians. That being said, Khalil is prepared to use religious jargon to reach a certain audience of thinkers and holds religion as great philosophical resource.
    Appearance Information: || The form of a technologically enhanced strongman.
    ⬦⬦ General Appearance | An Eronidas halfling supporting about 6' of outstanding muscle volume with a considerable body fat percentage. The Human dominance in his mixture lends itself to making Khalil's appearance in essence: a very large Qadir with tusks. Khalil has a warm dark complexion and curly black hair with a short beard. His Sirr al-Hayat is yellow and when powering his machines, it glows bright with arcing solar flare effects. Any other time, it only glows enough to outline itself when immersed in darkness.
    ⬩ Disguise Skill Pack | Qarīn | An Aranatech juggernaut. It has four swept back horns, a wild black mane, claws, and only one eye. The suit has a long but heavy crocodilian tail and features a digitigrade design on hooves, serving to make Khalil seem taller (6'5"). Its appearance and themes are inspired by non-Islamic, but rather traditional Arab folklore.
    ⬦⬦ Anomalies | Khalil sometimes has four arms. These secondary arms are roughly the same size and shape as his natural set and are made from Esratech. When not in use, they retreat into mechanical muscles making up where Khalil's latissimus dorsi used to be.
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    Proficiency Information
    14/14 Points Used
    | Bold = Category/Heritage Bonus Pack
    ⬦ Design: Khalil plays a defensive support role and uses Constitution as defense with Intelligence as attack. ⬦
    ◈ Strength | 01
    ⬩⬦| Athletic: Break Down
    ◈ Constitution | 05
    ⬩⬦| Shielding: Cover, Block, Wall
    ⬩⬦| Tank: Tank Stance, Hero, Slam, Rush
    ⬩⬦| Mounted:
    Familiar Disrupt
    ◈ Dexterity | 01
    ⬩⬦| Roguery: Disguise Pack
    ◈ Wisdom | 00
    ⬩⬦| Chem: Technique Parry
    ◈ Intelligence | 07
    ⬩⬦| Adapt: Safeguard, Wardrobe, Oceanic
    ⬩⬦| Tech: Charge, Exchange, Livewire, Resist
    ◈ Strength | 01
    ⬩⬦| Athletic: Break Down
    ◈ Constitution | 07
    ⬩⬦| Shielding: Cover, Block, Wall, Phalanx
    ⬩⬦| Tank: Tank Stance, Hero, Slam, Switch
    ⬩⬦| Mounted:
    Familiar Disrupt, Rolling Armory
    ◈ Dexterity | 01
    ⬩⬦| Roguery: Disguise Pack
    ◈ Wisdom | 00
    ⬩⬦| Chem: Technique Parry
    ◈ Intelligence | 05
    ⬩⬦| Puretek: Blessing, Wrath, Antimagi
    ⬩⬦| Tech: Charge, Exchange

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    Mechanics & Hobbies & Themes
    Khalil
    ⬦⬦ Combat Rolls: Defense - 15 | Attack - 17
    ⬦⬦ Persuasion Threshold: 10
    ⬦⬦ Heritage Mechanics: Qadir - #1, 2, 3, & 5 | Eronidas - #4
    ⬦⬦ Advanced Roleplay Mechanic | Ability Alteration - Puretek Antimagi, New Mechanic

    ⬩ Hostile Override | Counter Technique | Emote Range | Khalil is an expert belonging to a society championing superior technology. He is capable of Staggering one Ability from: Tech Point Buy. If the Target attempts the same Ability again within 3 Turns, Khalil gains +2 Attack. When utilized, Hostile Override goes on a 1 hour Cooldown.
    ⬩ Esratech Limbs | Mechanic | Khalil has retractable arms that extend from his back. They are as strong and as coordinated as his natural set, have sensation, experience dull pain, and have a supernormal range of motion. They can be used if Khalil's natural arms are somehow out of commission. For example, broken or restrained. Additionally, they can be used to interface with technology in unique ways with tools, ports, and jacks built into each hand.
    ⬦⬦ Hobbies: Technology, Athletic
    ⬩ Technology | Khalil is a highly accomplished engineer who can modify/create/repair most things and work with most Branches.
    ⬩ Athletic | Khalil has remarkable strength, achieved through a mixture of dedicated training as a Polon militant and semi-inhuman genetics. He continues to be a hobbyist strongman.

    Mech Automata | Al-Jabha

    ⬦⬦ Tech Ghost | Khalil has come to Regalia accompanied by two Al-Jabha, Qadiriq Automata of his own making designed specifically to combat Songaskians or Ordial Undead/Necromancer summons. They are equipped with highly complex intelligence and while they don't have personalities, they can reason and conduct themselves like (rigid) people.
    ⬩ Al-Jidar | Clockwork | A war giant with forward-facing horns and blue light fixtures.
    ⬩ Samita | Clockwork | Designed after a human swordswoman with swept back horns and lilac light fixtures.
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    Mounts
    ⬦⬦ Esratech Stallion | A mechanical draft horse used for out-of-combat situations.
    ⬦⬦ Hoplastec Bull | DWM.02 - Maur | A mechanical bull the size of a car whose armored body and poetry-engraved horns are a ferocious representation of Pol warfare. Bundles and scrolls of Eronidas poetry dangle from pommel bags on its rump. This model has more of a "personality" than the rest.

    Languages

    ⬦⬦ Household Languages | Zahram, Common
    ⬦⬦ Scholarly Investment | Vasar, Sofaal, Ibeth
    ⬦⬦ Special Cases | Additional stipulations in roleplay settings.

    ⬩ Shalota, Altalar: Only read, spoken & understood in highly formal and/or scholarly cases.
    ⬩ Pannarokh (Katharic): Only read & understood when in his Aranatech suit. Cannot speak.

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    Character Plot Hooks/Backstory
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    ⬩⬦◈ Years 280 - 303 AC | Khalil was born and raised in Qasr Al-Alus with a sister and brother, to which he was begrudgingly compared as part of a blended family. He would go on to serve as a member of the Qadir capital's national security force at the outer walls of its stronghold, where he occasionally communicated with representatives of the Songaskia Masaya.
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    ⬩⬦◈ Years 303 - 307 AC | Khalil would go on to volunteer in Kur as a war technician. He would then utilize a mixture of this earned rapport and academic achievement to find a place in one of the renowned Eronidas Lyceums, where he would become a member of the Scribe Order. He'd learn to love the art of philosophy and poetry.
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    ⬩⬦◈ Years 307 - Present | Khalil enters a Regalian Pol for a short time before being convinced to experience what the Regalian Empire's capital has to offer and becomes a Sergeant of the Regalian Metropolitan. Here, he becomes good friends with another engineer and eventually inherits his property, now called the Bazaar of Machina in the Arena District.
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    ⬩⬦◈ Present | Khalil becomes disillusioned with state law enforcement and dips his toes into the criminal underworld. He joins the Serpent's Hollow after proving his detachment from state interests and later becomes a criminal higher up within it known as Qarīn. Qarīn is an Undercity fence who specializes in technology and metallurgy.

    ⬦ Khalil has inherited a primordial fear of Avarr.
    ⬦ Khalil's hair was naturally beige up until 310, when an Arkenborn of Body permanently altered it.
     
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    I am claiming this character application for staff review!
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    ☼ Staff Review! ☼
    Hello, my name is Eccetra and I’ll be reviewing your app today.​
    • Without any points in Linguistics, Rasztaal can only know 2 languages: their birth language and common. Please remove Faraddi, or relocate 4 points to Linguistics.
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    • While not completely necessary at the moment, the life story is looking a bit beefy. If you ever need to update it or add more, you will need to shorten it. It doesn't have to read like a story; rather it should be a factual list of events with little fluff.
    Please mark your changes in another color and tag me when you’re finished!
     
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    @Eccetra

    Pulled from the application template regarding language: "If the Slizzar individual had "assimilated" parents, parents who adapted to a single culture, they can learn Zasta and whatever the majority language of that culture is. Additionally, Common as a language always comes for free without costing anything."

    I also shortened the life story to hopefully a high enough degree.
     
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    Ah, I wasn't aware of that! My apologies. In which case, everything else looks sound.

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    Updated with new Slizzar body adjustment.
     
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    Updated the personality section as well as relationships.
     
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    @PuffyPigeon Hello I'll be filling in for Eccetra!
    Also everything checks out! Approved!
     
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    Bump. Updates in the log.
     
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    @Caelamus Rewritten backstory. Swapped Wa'an for K’alatibiri, figuring that would make better sense considering that backstory. Also, see if you can remove the poll, please. I can't do it myself.
     
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    @Caelamus My guy got duped into eating someone. Good times. -- Updated with Capradeim. Changes in red.
     
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    Caelamus Sir Honeybear the chronic druid main

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    Approved. Sorry for delay have been sicky.
     
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    @Caelamus
    1. Prof update naturally.
    2. Aged down, having repercussions on backstory.
     
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    Caelamus Sir Honeybear the chronic druid main

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    @Caelamus Clockwork update came 'round and blew up my profs.
     
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    Please do not use bright colors as these are painful on the eyes. (I already had a headache when reviewing this.)

    Approved never the less, I couldn't find any issue.
     
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    @Caelamus Got infected with Sanguinism. Relevant proficiency changes are under an infection spoiler labeled Vamperic Infection.
     
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    @Caelamus Engineering update! Also, Cratos Vampirism retconned into Milot bloodline.
     
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    @Caelamus Updated to new format. Talent points invested.
     
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    @Caelamus Whale of a change! Race has been retconned to Qadir, but this character is still Slizzar-aligned and snakey. This has affected everything across the board.
     
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    Updated! Both prof and backstory.
     
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    Claimed for review!
     
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    APPROVED
     
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    Tech update tweaks.
     
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    Bump. I don't have a reviewer. :'(
     
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    BUMP MORE RAUGH

    Everything looks good, so I’ll mark this approved. Once your Custom Kit has the point cost assigned with it, you’ll just have to @Tag me to look that over. But, that certainly doesn’t mean you should sit here on re-review any longer than you have to!
     
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