Basic Information (Required) Full Name: Otto Ludolf Bergmann-Jäger Age: 24 Gender: Male Race: Alt-Regalian Ailor Main Ambition: To settle a good family. Skill Information (Required) The following is required when filling out your character application. Please use a Bullet Point list.Try to keep the information here as simple and confined as possible, it's supposed to be a short list. Also be sure to use a bolded header to separate Culture Points from Proficiency Points and languages. 24 +10 in Short sword, Drixon spear, and small shield (School of Tenpenny) +12 for General Command (Points/A-R culture boost) +7 for Commanding Speech Cultural +13 in Architecture +10 in Carving Languages Alt-Regalisch (Native Language) Imperial Standard Common Visual Information (Required) Eye Color: Blue, but often appears black in certain lighting. Hair Color: Black Hair Style: Short but Neat. Skin Color: Ailor pink Height: 5’12 Weight: 192 pounds Body Build: Toned Weapon of Choice: Short Sword Personality and Abilities (Required) First Paragraph: Otto appears dutiful and at ready. He is generally in a good mood and will always tackle the problem with a zeal that is often unmatched. Otto's loyalty to his family and the Empire is to be admired, However he seems stubborn in accepting ideas and opinions from other equals and inferiors. He will often shut you out if you speak ill of something he holds dear or respects. When meeting him for the first time, one would think he’s arrogant and yet a soulless machine, obeying any command from his superiors yet looking down on those below him. Second Paragraph: Otto is set in his belief that everyone has an agenda, owing to the fact that he grew up during the Regalian Pessimism and lessons from his Father, who lived during the Drachenwald Crisis, He desires and craves to be of value to his superiors, lest they forget about him and his loyalty, and demands respect from his equals. Third Paragraph: Otto has a good relationship with all of his family except his Father, who like his father before him kept nothing more than a mentor/apprentice type relationship. His father believed that the father's duty to his son was simply to teach him about the world. Nothing more, Nothing less. Yet hypocritically, Heinrich showed more favor to Otto's elder brother Rudolf during their childhood and still to this day. This has made Otto somewhat bitter towards his father and has made Otto critical of hypocrites and liars whom he considers scum. Around friends whom he has known long enough, he is much less serious and can take a joke more easily. Building a comfortable life for themselves is something Otto's siblings have made into a competition, Likewise so was attempting to earn their father's favor. Fourth Paragraph: As a Unionist, Otto believes and follows the Creeds set forth by the Spirit. It is his belief, that all Aloria will one day be guided by Humanum and the Spirit. Seeing as the Spirit is infallible, whenever War comes, Otto will always believe in Victory for the Reich and will shout down defeatists and anti-expansionists that dare think that Regalia would lose. Otto is Neutral-Good, He will generally try to do good to his fellow Human, but when given orders he will have no qualms carrying them out. Fifth Paragraph (OPTIONAL): Otto is a conservative in every sense of the word. Raised in the Great Way, he supports the Kaiser and his Reich. Being a conservative, Otto constantly tries to maintain the Status Quo unless the change would be to the benefit of the Reich and Humanum. He dislikes people who agitate for change without valid reasons, and absolutely despises Rebels, Anarchists and other scum of Aloria. Personality and Abilities (Expansion) The following is not required when filling out your character application. You may use bullet points or paragraphs, and are welcome to add more or less information as you see fit. The information in this section will not be reviewed. Want to be extra helpful to your reviewer? Use the Spoiler feature to make the content hidden so readers can read it when they want to, or skip it! Quick: Otto has a surprising gift. He is always able to get the job done quickly, although it is granted that the speed changes depending on the job, seeing as he's only human. He is quick in getting right to the task at hand and tries absolutely to bring speedy results about. Obedient: Otto spent his entire childhood and teenage years taking orders from his father and his mentor. Otto has become so obedient that when he is given an order from a rightful authority he obeys and carries it out without thought or hesitation. Whomever earns his loyalty would most likely have a loyal man in Otto for life. Intelligence: Although Otto may jump the gun and assume sometimes, he has a talent for sizing up the situation when it is paramount to his survival or to lend a hand to his bosses. Quirks Metathesiophobia: Otto fears change, this goes back to when the Chrysant War was declared. He was so used to the Pessimism that the sudden change made him scared. It takes some convincing for Otto to accept the change that has happened and this can lead to him not adjusting to his new reality sometimes. Otto likes Order, and the Daily rhythm that goes with his life. Likes Working/having a job to do A good Bier The Regalian Empire Dislikes Extremely vain people Laziness Disrespectful people Relationships (Optional) Family Heinrich Bergmann-Father to Otto and his siblings. Aged 68 (NPC) Elise Bergmann-Mother to Otto and his siblings, Wife of Heinrich. Aged 63 (NPC) Rudolf Bergmann-Older brother of Otto and in the Regalian Navy. Aged 32 (NPC) Traudl Bergmann-Younger sister of Otto and still lives in Büchner. Aged 14 (NPC) Acquaintances Dietrich Drache-Current employer and Liege. @FireFan96 Ulric Typhonus-Former employer and Commanding General.@TyrolleanEagle Life Story (Required) Life Story Birth ~ 283 A.C Born on March 12, 283 to Heinrich and Elise Bergmann, in the City of Büchner within the Region of Dragenthal. Childhood 1-10 Raised by his mother and father who cultivated the Alt-Regalian culture and way of life into him. Kept to himself when it came to his sibling, Rudolf. At 8 years old, his sister Traudl was born. Learned early on from his brother how to read and write. This was encouraged by his father. The Chrysant War begins when he is 3 years old, Witnesses the end of the Regalian Pessimism. Becomes a Patriot and an avid supporter of the Empire. Upon the end of the War, Otto comes to believe that the Empire is unstoppable. Teenage Years 11-15 Continues his education, focusing mainly on the subject of History. Began apprenticing under a store owner who often worked with merchants. Began thinking of putting his services to the local house. Began to be more friendly with his brother Rudolf, whom was preparing to join the Navy, while already having a healthy relationship with his sister. With warming relations with Rudolf, Otto began to learn Tenpenny tactics as a way to grow closer with his brother. Later Teenage Years 16-19 Finished his apprenticeship, learning how the local economy worked, along with the sense to haggle. Began helping out his father who was a mover of goods as a scribe to keep the business ledger updated. After seeing his brother off to his new post with the Navy, Otto becomes a supporter of the Imperial Navy. Recent Times 20-Present Moved to the Crown City seeking a better job and to experience, in his mind, The Glorious Imperial City. During the Lo occupation, Otto went back to Büchner and spent the duration of the occupation with his family. Upon the end of the Lo occupation, Otto returned to the Crown City and took up a job as Bartender of The Den of Dragons, a House Drache owned entity, thus fulfilling a desire to work for the House and in the Imperial City, no less. With the advent of the Bone Horror Crisis, Otto refuses to loose faith in the Great Way, instead he sees it as a challenge Humanum can pass, but when the other races are spoken of, Otto takes a more racist stance saying that Ailors' are of higher value than say an Elf or a Tigran, thus keeping with Unionist thought. During the Masaya Takeover, Otto's sense of self preservation kicked in, making him keep his head down and avoid the looters. However, afterwards Otto became very angry at the fact that non-humans were able to loot the Capital and now argues for a stronger military to prevent this from ever happening again. Otto has been serving as a Drache Retainer for some time now and sees no reason to quit. During the same time however, Otto rose up the ranks of the Bluesteel Order and became a Captain before resigning with others to join the recently formed Ivory Warden Inquisition headed by William Coen. Starting at the beginning of November 305 A.C., Otto began service in the Typhonus House Guard and as a Steward. In addition to this, Otto also serves as a Professor of Combat Training at Elizabeth Black's School for the Public. Otto was recently on the front lines of the Elven Conflict and witnessed with General Ruyter and Commander Drache the slaughter of 17,000 men by Prince Laefel. This has had a profound effect on him. Otto now has an even brighter burning hatred of Elves, and will barely tolerate the ones serving Ailors.
Sorry about the wait. Let's get this review started then. Proficiencies Enrolling in the school of tenpenny would grant him +10 points in short sword, drixon spear and small shield. Make sure to write this down and put in parenthesis the 'source' of the allocated points. EX: +20 Anglian Longbow (+10 School of Wapnbog, +10 Anglian Culture Boost) Personality Strengths What exactly /is/ Otto quick at? Please elaborate. Please make your edits in red and tag me when it's ready for another look. Good luck, friend!
@Jonificus I have updated the Tenpenny points and hopefully satisfied the elaboration on being Quick. I have also updated his age since his birthday recently came and went making him 24 now. This has given me an extra point to which I have promptly put in Commanding Speech, bringing it up to +7.