General Information ✮Full Name: Oscar Theodard ✮Age: 35 ✮Gender: Male ✮Race: Alior, Breizh ✮Sexuality: Heterosexual ✮Faith: Unionist ✮Preferred Weapon: Long Swords Skill Information ✮Total Points: 50 ✮ Sword Combat:13 ✮Shielding Combat:12 ✮Greatsword Combat:5 ✮Perception Training: 5 ✮Hobby: Husbandry Art: 10 ✮Hobby: Construction Arts: 15 (10 Free Hobby Points+Point buy.) Racial Abilities: ✮Omniaware 1 ✮Wall Climb 1 ✮Destined Body 2 ✮Body Shape: Muscular ✮ Body Fat: Average ✮Body Stat: 30 (13 Sword Combat Skill + 12 Shielding Combat Skill + 5 Greatsword Combat Skill) ✮Languages: ✮ Breizh ✮ Common Physical Information ✮ Eye Color: Brown ✮Hair Color: Brown ✮ Hair Style: Smooth ✮ Skin Color: White ✮ Clothing: Usually wears steel plate armor, but underneath it is simple tunic and clothing. ✮ Height: 6'6 Personality ✮Character Alignment: Lawful neutral A lawful neutral character typically believes strongly in lawful concepts such as honor, order, rules, and tradition, but often follows a personal code in addition to, or even in preference to, one set down by a benevolent authority. Examples of lawful neutral characters include a soldier who always follows orders, a judge or enforcer who adheres mercilessly to the letter of the law, and a disciplined monk. ✮ Character Personality Type: The Logistical ✮ Religion: Unionist. ✮Scale: 5 (Use to be higher when he was still in The Order) Life Story Oscar Theodard was born in Carentot to a fairly wealthy family, not royalty, but not a lowly person. While his family wanted him to study and go to school, he was entranced and fantasized knightly code and following the Emperor and the Spirit. He read book after book of knights, how to become one, and amazing fights they had. His parents took notice of this and after confronting him and finally backing down, they payed and allowed him to go to the highest and most orderly School of Knights, the Viridian Order. Oscar was overjoyed and ready to join, to become a knight of legend. But sadly, it was not as glamorous as he hoped it would be. The Castle was harsh, since Oscar was not really...disciplined in his youth, he had to be in the Order...forcefully. He was treated as the lowest of The Pages, learning basic sword training and staying around the confines of the castle. He was new to this, he was scared and hurt all over, physically and mentally. But wanting to become a knight to protect all, he moved on, his determination, his will power, and his resilience pushed him on wards over the years. From becoming a pasty, boy, to a determinate, learner. He didn't see his parents that much, for he was so far away. But because he of his sheer focus onto his training, he got into The Squire ranks. And finally, after years of training, he was awarded The Man-at-Arms. After putting on the armor he always wanted since he was 10, and grabbing a great sword and shield, he served the Emperor and his Kingdom against any threat. But after years and years, he was never able to get to Paladin, this was because of his inability to horse back riding. And while he was the top of his ranks, he left and set out for new adventures. Now working under Thomas Weisman, he is still deciding his loyalty to The Viridan Code and Emperor, and dedication to Thomas. But of course...his story does not end here, now him seeing The First Clicker attack and several others. He raises his sword and shield not just for Thomas...but for the Spirit and The Emperor. ✮Progression Talents: ✮Warrior 2 ✮General 1
Hi Sunshine! Not staff, but I thought I'd give you a quick peer review! You have got an extra 5 points to spend here if you would like! You should include your Physical Stat Calculation here as well! Your character won't be allowed to wear plate armour in the city without a permit, so you might want to include something else here! You can apply for Mercenary Rights to wear armour in the city here: https://forums.massivecraft.com/thr...aration-rights-and-permits.82011/#post-950342 While you included their religion under Basic Information you should include your character's Religion here, as well as how devout they are on a scale of ten to make things easier for your reviewer. Hope you get approved soon!
Hello, thank you for the edition suggestions and I have changed them, but one of them says I should get a permit, and while I do agree with this, I think someone who was in the Viridin Order already would have a permit to wear armor.
Thank you to @BiBiBirdie for getting this review started! You've mentioned Body Shape twice. Please remove one of them. As Birdie pointed out above, be mindful that, even as a knight, you cannot wander the city in armour without a permit unless you seek conflict with the guards. Reading your backstory, it feels as though this is a small bit low on the religious scale. I'd ask you to consider increasing it to at least 7/10 and adding a sentence or two justifying such. Please make these edits in Purple, and tag me when complete @minecraftsman03!
Just a small thing that Viridians are actually among the knights that may openly wear weapons and armor without permits Unless of course it’s used for illegal things “ Regalian Knight Law The following Knight Orders may open carry non-military grade weapons and up to Plate Armor: The Viridian Order The Bloodcast Order The Darkwald Order”
Whoops this was overlooked by me. Thank you @Chapstxcks. Please neglect that statement about this @minecraftsman03
@Mollymock I believe I did do the edits you requested, fixed the changes, but in the life story it did say that Oscar did leave the Viridin Order to work for Thomas Weismann, does the Knight Order law still count or no?
If your character is an ex-knight, this law will not extend to them. Just one small thing you missed out, being to add a sentence or two explaining Oscar's faith in their Personality section then we're good to go.
@Mollymock I believe I did explain it. If I did not then please tell me how, bit confused about it. Sorry
One last thing, sorry. Please include a calculation explaining how you came to this value. For example: Physical Stat: 40 (+25 from Blades Combat Skill +15 from Shield Combat Skill) Tag me when you've done this then we're all done and dusted @minecraftsman03!
@Mollymock I am deeply sorry to @ again, but I do need an update on my character sheet considering the situation of the rp.
Please in future list whatever changes you've made on your sheet. Is there any specific reason for investing 5 points in perception at this moment?
Sorry about that, the changes I made where in red. And for the perception I believe it will be useful because as a guard, not being pickpocketing will be very good, as well as being immune to other thieving/rogue abilities overall.
