ᚠᚱᚬᛘ ᛘᚬᚬᚾᛋ ᛅᚾᛏ ᛋᛏᛅᚱᛋ ᛏᚱᛅᛋᚢᚱᛁ ᚢᛁᛚᛚ ᛒᛁ ᚠᚬᚢᚾᛏ Character Information Full Name: Ollie Ahhutel Aldor Child of Peox Race: Qadir-Dwarf (Dwarf Dominant) Age: 24 Gender: Female Eye Color: Sandstone-like Core Concept A truly ambiguous individual who prefers the company of hoods and treasures which shine like stars, over that of friends or family. Always sitting on the edge of discovery, Ollie finds themselves addicted to the mysteries of artifacts and magical items. Each discovery brings about more questions than before. Proficiency Information ◙ Strength: 0 ◙ Constitution: +3 [One Free from Masters of the Anvil] ◘ Metallurgy Craft Pack ◘ Thread Craft Pack ◘ Wood Craft Pack ◘ Earthenware Craft Pack◙ Wisdom: +2 Scholarly Point Buy: ◘ Mineral Wisdom Pack Artificer Point Buy: [Servotech] ◘ Tracker Pack SPECIALS: ✧ Servo-golem Patent ✧ Hair-chem Patent◙ Dexterity: 0 ◙ Magic: +4 [Exist] ◘ Enchanting Spell Pack ◘ Materialism Spell Pack ◘ Breaking Spell Pack ◘ Alteration Spell Pack SPECIALS: ✧ Sanctum Vessel ✧ Rune Smithing ✧ Scan Sight ✧ Pocket Scan ✧ Emote Infuse ✧ Star Power ✧ Lunar Power ✧ Celestial Element◙ Charisma: +5 Calvary Point Buy: ◘ Rearguard Pack Presence Point Buy: ◘ Mount Husbandry Pack ◘ Stupid Luck Pack State Point Buy: ◘ State Dignitary Pack Language Point Buy: ◘ East Linguist PackAbility Information ✧ N/A Languages ✧ Common (Free) ✧ Dwarven (Parent) ✧ East Linguist Pack (Linguistics)Appearance Information Stands at 4'2" with sandstone eyes, white-blond hair styled in a shag ponytail, and ruddy brown skin; they are lathered in robes and hoods to conceal their face. The curtains of these garments appear like pajamas and have stars or other celestial objects stitched into them. Life Story Child of Peox Ahhutel, a descendant of a second generation to arrive in the Crown Isles. Their mixed family was a consequence of the Dwarven Diaspora in the Qadir confederated Hadrityas. Later on their parents moved to Regalia with promises of cultural and religious freedom, to start a family. As a mixed family, Ollie experienced a wide variety of learning and craftsmanship including some magic arts passed down by their Dwarven father to enhance their craftsmanship. Though their Qadir mother was against this and often scolded Ollie for actively practicing and studying such, they experienced little pressure in Regalia. Though due to this fact, both the customs of Dwarven culture and Qadir culture are scarce. Ollie is more alike to the general populace of Regalia's denizens, being born in the city themselves. First came their love for gemstones, then their love for celestial stars. The two shared a close resemblance, and as such most of Ollie's skills and abilities revolve around their taste for both bodies of earth and the cosmic bodies above. Ollie has spent most if not their entire life in Regalia. Any venture outside of the country was for the sake of trade and nothing else.
You have a good app going on here. There are no errors here that meets the eye. As the Dwarves lack a large playerbase, I'm glad to let you proceed with an approved application.
@Jouster Added an inventory section to store pixelart items I've made for my IC jewelry store that are usually on this character's person. There is only one item as of right now, but I will gradually fill it up with valuable jewelry. The focus of this character is to make them a prime target to be robbed, forcing me to rely on other characters as body guards or for protection!
@PapidaCarrot Understood. Optional sections aren't reviewed standardly, but any egregious rulebreaking will of course be mentioned. In your case, you're 100% in the clear so be free to add optional sections without the need for a re-review. If you do change anything within the mandatory sections, be free to ping me.
@Jouster Application was overhalled to the new template due to the removal of genetics and artifactism. The character will keep their fragile and weak build and stay non-combat focused however in regards to proficiency points.
Proficiency Information The new template organizes Point-Buy purchases differently. Instead of listing every individual purchase there, you just have to put the total of how many points you've spent on the point-buy. For your character Ollie, format it as "+21 Metallurgy." After that, you list each pack you purchased in Ability Information, like this: Metallurgy: Rich Family Metallurgy Iron Family Metallurgy And so on and so forth. Ollie's physical stat should be 11 (Rounded up from 10.5) unless you're choosing to make him weaker out of your own volition. These are the only edits I have to point out. Once you've corrected them, change the color of the edited text (If any) and tag me in another post. If you have any questions, direct them through a forums conversation or a Discord RP Community Ticket.
@Jouster changes made in red, not sure why the bullets are messing up. Tried to fix it several times and it doesn't appear to correct itself.
Have you tried backspacing the white bullets to the black one? Honestly, I don't know how to solve it myself. It's no big deal anyway; Ollie's approved again, and you can revert the colored text to default.
Also: You should have 11 Phys Stat from the 21 Metallurgy investment, and 5 Proficiency Points left unspent. If you'd like feel free to invest those into something and tag for another review!
Hello @Yurs or @Staff Roleplay , Apologies for the tag. It's been a while since this application was revised. There have been several changes to bring it up to date with the new system. Thank you,