Approved Sheet Myantha Leoleth

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  1. Karthadon

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    Character Information

    • Full Name: Myantha Leoleth

    • Race: Life Isldar
    • Age: 37

    • Sex: Female

    • Gender: Cisgender Female

    • Sexuality: Probably straight?

    • Eye Color: Blue
    Core Concept

    • Myantha believes in dragon worship, specifically Saaima, the white sky.

    • Myantha is an Isldar woman who operates as a skilled alchemist and light fighter. An animal lover at heart with hopes of helping both animals and family around her.
    Proficiency Information

    12/14 Points used

    2 Strength
    • Short blades pack
    • Unarmed fighting pack
    1 Constitution
    • Thread Craft
    5 Wisdom
    • Common Alchemy
    • Healing Alchemy
    • Obtrusive Alchemy
    • Morphing Alchemy
    • Affliction Arcanology
    0 Dexterity

    4 Charisma
    • Mount Husbandry
    • Pet Husbandry

    Ability Information

    Alchemy

    Life Isldar Racial Abilities

    Short Blades and Unarmed Fighting Packs

    Languages
    • Common (Free)

    • Sulvaley (Parent)
    Appearance Information

    • Myantha has pale pink skin, bluish-grey scales on her forehead and cheeks, as well as on her arms, legs, and back. She has clawed feet and hands, and a prehensile dragon tail. She has blue eyes and ivory hair.

    • Myantha is of above average strength, and stands a height of 6’3.
    Life Story

    • Mya was born to two Isldar in the Isldar home of Ellador. She was rather quiet, much less outgoing and confident than her sister, Erenia.

    • She spent a lot of her time taking care of Wyverns or reading, not getting much practice into the social life.

    • As an adult, she took more time into learning to be a caretaker of animals, educating herself with books and research on various animals. As well as this, she made an effort to gain medical knowledge.

    • She moved to Regalia, knowing that there were noble houses there who could use stable hand work.
     
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    #1 Karthadon, Jan 22, 2022
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  2. FireFan96

    FireFan96 Imperial Bloodhound Staff Member Lore2
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    @Karthadon my review:
    • I have a hard time believing that a shy Isldar younger than me is a master bladeswoman despite having only picked it up as a side hobby. If you were to add the progression talents to the character, this character would be Warrior 2, Support 1. Based on the rest of the app, this does not make sense whatsoever. I would suggest capping Sword Combat at 5, and perhaps maxing out Gardening art and something else. And event then, I don't think the character should be a warrior at all, since they seem more like a vet than anything else.
    • The life story needs a bit more expansion since it is creating some compliancy issues:
      1. The first point is fine, though a location of birth would be good to add if it isn't the Isldar territories of Ellador.
      2. The second paragraph makes little sense if we assume they were born in Ellador, as Ellador is a frozen wasteland. The only animals Isldar would even encounter are Wyverns and Skrunklehogs. Horses would die from the frozen climate. As a result, a location of growing up needs to be added, and it won't be in Ellador due to the reason above.
      3. The third paragraph is strange based on the character identity of the shy vet. Why would someone pick up training with a sword when there are warriors they can rely on instead. Especially when caretakers tend not to rely on weapons that are designed to kill rather than treat. Look into revising this paragraph to focus on learning how to be a caretaker, since that seems to be what the character is designed for.
      4. Fourth paragraph is fine.
    Once you have made these changes, tag me for approval.
     
  3. Karthadon

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    @FireFan96 Made the changes! Let me know what you think.
     
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    FireFan96 Imperial Bloodhound Staff Member Lore2
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  5. Karthadon

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    @FireFan96 reworked proficiencies to the new system!
     
  6. Caelamus

    Caelamus Sir Honeybear Staff Member Lore1

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    Claimed for review.
     
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    Caelamus Sir Honeybear Staff Member Lore1

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    Approved.
     

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