@WildSages Please make the following edits and tag once complete: Break apart the core concept bullet points for ease of review. Also wouldn't hurt to add a bit more here Your visual information is in the wrong spot >:(
Claimed for review! Please clarify which abilities your character is getting from their vampirism, if any. Additionally, under the ability section, you mention Sleight of Hand point-buy. Please label whether this is from Vampirism or not. Thank you!
Looks good! Also, you have 'Total Points: 48 Spent + 10 Hobby' listed under proficiencies. Feel free to remove this, but it's minimal enough. APPROVED
Oh hello. Quick review! I would consider specifying what Sihai culture he adheres to! I envision that it is the Zhong culture, given he was born in Huo-Chang. Is this active, or inactive? In the Appearance Section it states that the Vampire form is "inactive", though with this listed it still appears as if he is infected. Which is it? If he is infected, just make sure to indicate whether or not you have selected anything with Commutable Point Buy. If he is infected, just put the color of his Vampiric eyes in parentheses. @Tag me once you've clarified whether or not he's infected and I'll approve give this the ole' approved.
I missed this before, but I think you may have accidentally deleted part of your Core Concept. What is Kurahe all about? What does he want? Just expand on this a little bit and I mark this approveded.