Rejected Sheet Louis Delmotte

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    » Full Name: Louis Bernard Delmotte
    » Age: 45
    » Gender: Male
    » Race: Imperial Medavinti Ailor
    » Faith: Unionism; Sancella of Union
    » Preferred Weapon: Longsword


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    » Total Points:

    Base Points
    ❈ 20 Sword Combat (20 Age) (7 Age)
    ❈ 5 Dragon Warden Abilities (5 Age)

    Hobby Points
    ❈ 10 Husbandry Art (10 Hobby Boost)
    ❈ 7 Hunting Art (7 Age)

    Linguistics
    ❈ Anglian Language (3 Age)

    Arcanology
    ❈ Artifact Knowledge (3 Age)
    ❈ Archblood Knowledge (3 Age)

    Schooling
    ❈ Imperial Regalian Marshal Academy (3 Age)
    ❈ Collége de Guerre et État (3 Age)
    ❈ Regalian Statesman Academy (3 Age)


    » Body Shape:
    Body Stat: 20 Sword Combat
    Body Type: Muscular
    Body Fat: Low Body Fat

    » Languages:
    ❈ D'Ithanie | First Language | Fluent & Literate
    ❈ Anglian | Fluent & Literate

    Common | Fluent & Literate
    » Special Traits/Spells/Mutations:
    ❈ Dragon Custodian Abilities
    Eye Mutation I - Constant Passive: The eye of the User is changed in some way, either by changing the eye whites, or the iris, or the pupil. Eye Mutation I cannot be hidden or obscured by any Ability or Mutation except by a higher Eye Mutation (II, III). Color rules are recorded on the Ability itself.
    Primal Sight I - Toggle Passive: The user is able to detect a Dragon Soulcore, Dragonsoul, or Dragon Powercore, if it is present within Emote Distance. This Ability is not constant, and must be activated to sense, but has also no cooldown and is instant.
    Body Scripture I - Toggle Passive: Grants the user the ability to manifest Dragon Scripture in any quantity anywhere on their body, which appear like tattoos of glowing lines. Color rules are recorded on the Ability itself. The color will never glow enough to produce light in a dark room.
    Armour Flux I - Trigger Passive: The user has a constant proportional Armor effect. This proportional armor inverts the amount of armor worn by the individual and optimizes mobility and agility. Simpler put, the less armor the user is wearing, the stronger their skin and body becomes. Wearing only a set of pants and shirt is the equivalent of their skin being as strong as Plate Armor, where-as wearing a set of actual Plate-armor causes the body to be as strong as if they were only wearing a set of pants and shirt (though they are of course still wearing armor). The protection effect is only skin deep, and blunt force trauma still translates like normal, as well as Artifacts of any make.
    Wall Climb II - Toggle Passive: The user can climb up or down any vertical surface with walking speed, and hold onto the wall with one hand stopping and resuming at any spot. The movement can only be directly up or down, not diagonal or sideways. This Ability includes a falling-damage mitigation, meaning that regardless of height, the character does not receive falling damage, and can jump from a suspended position halfway up the wall.
    Omniaware I - Constant Passive: The user cannot be taken by surprise from behind, below, the sides, above or from far away. If any (Mundane) attack or harming Ability is used on them, a sixth sense will trigger making them aware of an attack that would otherwise take them by surprise. This does not grant additional dodging or avoiding mechanisms or guarantees, so standard Combat Roleplay Logic must still apply to dictate whether or not the user would be able to fairly block or avoid an incoming attack. This Ability purely gives the knowledge of such an incoming attack.
    Primal Reversal I - Primal Power: While within Emote Distance of a target, the user can revert only the damage from one single (Mundane) attack or harming Ability that was inflicted on the target (or self), as long as the target was harmed by that attack or Ability, or as a direct consequence of that Ability (for example being knocked off a wall by an Ability and breaking an arm). Any additional effects (or non-harm effects like debuffs) are not removed or mitigated. The damage must have been applied in the last 24 hours. This Ability can be used twice per 24 hours. This Ability can be used on self.
    Primal Defense I - Primal Power: The user can, if any Dragon Intendant, Dragon Benefactor, or the Matron of the Glass Spire is within Emote Distance, and they are being attacked or targeted by a (Mundane) attack or harming Ability, instantly leap towards them and intercept the (Mundane) attack or harming Ability. If the Ability has an Area of Effect or some sort of splash damage, the target also becomes immune to this radius damage, all of it transferring to the user instead. This Ability can only target one person per day, however after the first use on that person, this Ability can be reused up to 4 times within a 24 hour timespan on that person only, before it is reset and can be used on anyone again.
    ❈ Medavinti Lineage Abilities
    ❈ Honed Skill II - Constant Passive: Choose any Hobby Group Proficiency. As long as 5 Proficiency points are invested in this Proficiency, gain another +5 for free. If this Ability were somehow removed from the Character, the Proficiency Point bonus is also removed. This Boost does not break the Proficiency Cap. If the chosen Proficiency is already boosted from any other source, it cannot be boosted by this Ability.
    ❈ Rogue Gift III - Constant Passive: The Character can, if they have seen any writing from a specific person, perfectly imitate that person’s writing and signature on any piece of writing.
    ❈ Honed Skill IV - Constant Passive: The user can hide messages inside anything they physically produce from the Hobby Group Proficiencies, hiding a message that can only show up under certain conditions (through the technique the information was hidden). If anyone is told these conditions, they can read the message from all the user’s crafts, for the ones this specific technique for hiding messages was applied. Once created, messages cannot be edited or removed.

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    » Eye Colour: Violet
    » Hair Colour: Auburn
    » Hair Style: Millimeter cut with a neat beard.
    » Skin Colour: Ailor White
    » Clothing: Imperial fashioned attire with a Delmotte flair.
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    Height: 6'5

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    » Character Alignment: Lawful Neutral: "A lawful neutral character typically believes strongly in lawful concepts such as honor, order, rules, and tradition, but often follows a personal code in addition to, or even in preference to, one set down by a benevolent authority. Examples of lawful neutral characters include a soldier who always follows orders, a judge or enforcer who adheres mercilessly to the letter of the law, and a disciplined monk."
    » Personality Type: "'The Commander' An ENTJ’s primary mode of living focuses on external aspects and all things are dealt with rationally and logically. Their secondary mode of operation is internal, where intuition and reasoning take effect. ENTJs are natural-born leaders among the 16 personality types and like being in charge. They live in a world of possibilities and they often see challenges and obstacles as great opportunities to push themselves. They seem to have a natural gift for leadership, making decisions, and considering options and ideas quickly yet carefully. They are “take charge” people who do not like to sit still."
    » Religion:
    Unionism: 5/10
    Blue Crown Dragon: 5/10



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    Louis-Bernard Delmotte was born on the 24th of June in the province of Irvelle to Baroness Katriane Delmotte and her husband Jean Argent. The following years would witness the birth of his younger sisters and brother; Emeline and Jean, Julienne, Fleur, and Margot, aged oldest to youngest respectively.

    When he turned five, Louis' grandmother on his mother's side, being the ex-baroness of Irvelle and a practiced stateswoman. took up the responsibility of caring for and educating him and his siblings for the next few years. In between lessons of etiquette and other measures to ensure he would be an upstanding member of the peerage, he enjoyed horseriding as well as hunting and even excelled at combat sports. To temper his otherwise rowdy hobbies, Louis' grandmother saw fit to enroll him into the Regalian Statesman Academy of Vixhall at the age of twelve, acquiring his mother's blessing and sending him on his way. Louis spent three years in Vixhall studying the bureaucracy and administration behind running a state and the implementation of effective legislature, graduating at the age of fifteen.





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    A few months after all the Delmottes settled into the city they hosted a masquerade in an effort to better mingle with the other peerage who were present. It was there and then that Louis would run into his first flame, Agatha Harhold, and competed against his brother Jean for her interest. The two shortly after became friends and eventually something more, with Louis successfully petitioning her father the Duke of Vlissinghelm for her hand in courtship.

    The bond they held was kind and loving and would remain as such until the courtship was brought to an abrupt end, with Louis being put aside in favor of the Count of Brilonde for the simple fact that he was a titleholder and could offer a powerful military alliance. Louis was bitter and heartbroken and began to develop resentment for the Houses of Harhold and of Brilonde.

    In a stroke of irony, months later Louis ascended to the status of a titleholder, inheriting the County of la Cresse from his sister after she chose to abdicate, citing depression as her reason for doing so. It didn’t take Louis long to act with his newfound power, making a name for himself by igniting the Veer war against House Tyrannian.

    On December 23rd, 307 AC, Louis Delmotte was elected to the position of interim Lord Chancellor over a provisional government with overwhelming support. His mandate was to correct the damage left behind by the previous Lord Chancellors, and during his tenure, he managed to resolve three separate rebellions against the State and Empire. On February 24th, 308 AC, his tenure as Lord Chancellor was reaffirmed in a noble assembly where he managed to attain an unprecedented unanimous vote to continue his service. His new mandate was to tackle the Clicker Crisis; An assault on Regalia by invisible void demons who were terrorizing the Empire. With great diligence from both himself and external actors, Regalia was delivered from the crisis, and the Clicker threat was vanquished.

    Louis' last act as Chancellor was to spearhead the trials of Hengest Harhold and his associates, both of whom were complicit in a treasonous plot to seize the Chancellor and other representatives of the Regalian State in a violent coup. These trials were a very lucky success; Hengest Harhold was found guilty of treason and so were his associates. On the same day as the latter trial, June 1st, 308 AC, Louis Delmotte stepped down from the position of Lord Chancellor.
     
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    Shuffled a few points around, nothing significant though.
     
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    Updated with most recent art
     
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    New art, update to religion and adjusted hairstyle too. Nothing that would warrant the need for a rereview.
     
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    Louis has undergone a significant change that warrants the character-sheet a re-review. Louis Delmotte is now a Dragon Knight. @Carlit0o
     
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    Shuffled points around to better represent how I'm currently playing Louis. @Carlit0o

    Lowered Blades from 20 to 15
    Lowered Diplomacy from 11 to 6
    Increase General Tactics from 10 to 20

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    A few changes to note. @Carlit0o
    1. Louis' hair is now naturally Auburn
    2. Louis has grown 5 inches, making him 6'5.

    These changes happened in character.
     
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    I'm sorry but I'm going to have to deny your request to update this character application,
    • Please provide an example either here or through PM as to 'why' these changes occurred.

    Thank you for you cooperation in advanced.
     
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    Thank you, approved!
     
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    @Carlit0o Louis' proficiencies have been updated.

    3 Points from Blades Combat were moved to General Tactic
    1 Point from Diplomatic Case was moved to General Tactic
    1 point was added to General Tactic as I have preemptively aged him up so I don't forget to do so on the 24th
     
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    @Carlit0o Ailor Lineage Update. Lexxon Lineage
     
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    @Carlit0o Dragon Warrior update. Pretty sure I did everything right.
     
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    Please take 4 points out of your proficiencies to purchase your Dragon Warden abilities. @Arhbi
     
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    Everything checks out but one issue, He cannot have attended those schools he lists while being a Viridian Knight, that's all. @Arhbi
     
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    Just reject it. Ill put it up for review again if I decide I still want to play. @Carlit0o
     

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