Approved Sheet Llura Llov'loria

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  1. Aphellon

    Aphellon Divine of the Sword

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    Llura Llov'loria
    Basic Information:
    Name: Llura Llov'loria
    Age: 50
    Race: Moon Vault Isldar
    Preferred Weapon: Bow or Longsword

    Skill Information:
    Total Points: 50 (+10 hobby points) (+10 talent points)

    Core Group Proficiencies:​
    +20 Sword Combat
    + 12 Medical Science
    +3 Arcanology (Curing Knowledge)
    +3 Ritualism
    - Ritualist-Servant Hex (Ability)
    - Ritualist Exorcism (Aesthetic)
    +12 Sorcery
    - 2 Lightness Sorcery Abilities + 2 Lightness Sorcery Aesthetics
    - 2 Order Sorcery Abilities + 2 Order Sorcery Abilities

    Talent Proficiencies
    + 10 Perception Training

    Hobby Proficiencies
    +5 Circus Arts
    +5 Baking Arts

    Body Stats​
    Physical Stat: 23 (= 20 sword proficiency + 2.5 circus arts)
    Body Shape: Ripped
    Body Fat: Average Body Fat
    Languages​

    - Common (Free)
    - Sulvaley Elven (learned in childhood)
    - Modern Altalar (learned from grandparents)

    Spells / Traits / Mutations

    Racial Traits:
    - Frost Voice
    - Frost Song
    - Frost Ward
    - Frost Summons
    - Frost Harrowing

    - Crescent Arrow
    - Crescent Light
    Lightness sorcery:
    - Healing Grace (ability)
    - Burn the Unburned (ability)
    - Hope’s Beacon (Aesthetic)
    - Light in Home (Aesthetic)
    Order sorcery:
    - Deny Entry to Chaos (ability)
    - Prevent Chaos (ability)
    - Restore to Perfection (aesthetic)
    - Perfect Purity (aesthetic)

    Visual Information​
    Eye Color: Blue
    Hair Color: White
    Hair Style: Long and loose
    Skin Color: Pale pink
    Height: 5'8
    Clothing: Loose-fitting thick sweaters and robes

    Core List (Option Two: Personality)
    Alignment: Neutral Good
    Character Personality Type: Defender
    Religion: Dragon Worship (5/10)

    Backstory
    Llura grew up in the frozen Glacial Palaces with many other Moon Vault Isldar like her parents. Her mother was a medic and her father a fierce swordsman. She inherited skills from both parents, whom she loved. She never once dreamed of leaving the Holds. Until the fateful day her mother was attacked and infected with vampirism. Her mother killed her father in her bloodlust before she was caught and cured. Llura was forever changed by the event. She swore from then on that she would join the effort to purge the horrible curse of vampirism from all of Aloria.
    Llura left her home to travel to another Hold where a powerful medicine worker could tutor her in the arts of medicine. She learned sorcery to aid her in her practices from a gentle Yanar, and she poured herself into her studies. But she quickly learned that medicine alone would not suffice, and in order to be the achieve her goals she would need to acquire means through which to be on the aggressive.
    So she journeyed even further, and soon found herself in a position to join the School of Bloodcast. She agreed with their standing, to uphold good morals and to protect the wellbeing of the greater good, and she became proficient in ways of the sword. She still holds these values to be valuable truths- justice, equality, charity, and righteousness. She began to stray from the beliefs she grew up with, but could never completely let that part of home go. And still she strived to define her own future, and eventually, to grow beyond her desire for revenge against the vampires.
    She has traveled now to Regalia, where she is living with people she barely knows and struggling to pay for rent. She hopes to join the guard as well as to become a valuable part of the Regalian medical forces.
     
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  2. Yui_Drax

    Yui_Drax Loong Worshiper and Sihai Enthusiast Premium

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    Hello there! This is a peer review which means what I say is just advice or pointers, I am not a staff member!

    Unfortunately the limit on combat proficiency is 20 even with racial boosts. But that also means you save on 10 points!

    I would just add these to the Spells information since your spells amount to eight.

    Probably mean talent, whoops!

    Moon Vault Isldar have a stat limit of 25 which means 5 has to remove, unfortunate. Also, some reviewers also like to see the calculation of body stat like ; Body Stat: 25 (20 Sword Combat + 2.5 Circus Art). Also I've noticed that you added the full 5 points from Circus Art in your stat, circus art along with other proficiency are halved when counted towards stat calculation, so your total stat would be 23.

    Also just a quick reminder that your character is 60, not much story for a 60 year old. Add on so I can read more!

    Now, this is the end. Again, I am not a staff member and happy roleplaying! Welcome back if you were gone for a long time and hello if you weren't!
     
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    HydraLana The Very Gay Walking Talking Lore Encyclopedia Staff Member Lore3

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    The above player review is correct, please follow its points and tag me once the work has been done @Aphellon
     
  4. Aphellon

    Aphellon Divine of the Sword

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    Thank you so much for your review!
     
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