Lazarus Lupenzi

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    Lazarus Lupenzi
    "It's better to be on hand with ten men than absent with ten thousand."

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    Tunes:
    Lazarus - David Bowie
    And She Was - Talking Heads

    I Talk To The Wind - King Crimson
    Furr - Blitzen Trapper
    Blood On My Name - The Brothers Blight
    Come and Get Your Love - Redbone
    Ambience:
    The Glory Days - Michael Giacchino

    Enterprising Young Man - Star Trek OST
    The Last Of Us - Gustavo Santaolalla

    Kaer Morhen - Marcin Przybyłowicz

    Young Lazarus Masc by Joyshake
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    Lazarus, Male-presenting by Katzeko
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    ֍Full Name: Lazarus Lupenzi
    ֍Age: 47
    ֍Gender: Non-Binary
    ֍Race: Half-Cearden , Half Velheim Ailor


    Core concept:
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    azarus for all intents and purposes is a simple person. An eccentric, often goodly aged knight and war veteran who feels like they've just about seen it all. Now trying to live for the finer things in life, though an itch for adventure brews in them.

    Proficiency:
    13/14 points used
    Strength: 4
    • Blades Pack
    • Large Blades Pack
    • Improvised Weapon Pack
    • Polearm Pack
    Constitution: 4
    • Light Shielding Pack
    • Heavy Shielding Pack
    • Brute Force Pack
    • Woodcrafting Pack
    Wisdom: 0
    Dexterity: 0
    Magic: 0

    Charisma: 5

    • Empire Linguistic Pack
    • State Commander Pack
    • Stupid Luck Pack
    • Mount Husbandry Pack
    • Pet Husbandry Pack
    Languages:
    Common (from youth)

    Empire Linguistic Pack (linguistics)

    Special Traits/Abilities:
    ֍ Stadder Horse (Advanced Mount)
    Appearance Information:
    ֍ Lazarus is a reasonably tall ailor, stormy blue-eyed with greying blonde lockes. More often than not seen with a warm, inviting expression at the ready. A mostly well-kept physique fit for a past life of knighthood, war and adventure.


    Life Story
    • Lazarus was born an only child to a humble single Ceardian bar maiden. An absent father; Though quickly into their youth the two found themselves in the city of Regalia, Old Town.
    • Failing to provide for her child as she'd have hoped, a silver lining came in the form of a Bloodcast knight, willing to take Lazarus under their wing as a schilder, a knight in training.
    • They spent years growing up among a ragtag group of other children, gaining enough experience under mentorship to eventually leave on their own travels as a Bloodcast.
    • Throughout their life, they went on to serve in a number of wars, some as a simple soldier, others positioned as a frontline commander.
    • Since then... Lazarus has entered what they like to think of as a pseudo-retirement. Living out most of their days making wine with their partner and hound in a small keep near the town of Rothburg, trying to find satisfaction in the peace and quiet of rural life where they can.
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    #1 ZiggyStarDusted, Sep 17, 2018
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    Claiming this second slot for laterrrr.. ~
     
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    Claimed for staff review.
     
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    @ZiggyStarDusted

    Please remember to make your edits according to the new Proficiency system before I continue with this review. Tag me once you've completed the appropriate edits!
     
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    Getting to that right now, just-- getting my head around it all properly! Bare with.
     
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    @Dosier I'm ready!

    Changelog:
    • Proficiencies changed to new system.
    • Body Shape added.
    • Life Story partially changed to adapt to the new requirement of years for school attendance.
    • sexified further
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    @ZiggyStarDusted

    Thanks for your substantial patience! I appreciate it. I’ve read through your application and I find the character to be an interesting, well-developed one. There are a few of things I’d like you to tackle before getting this out of the barrel:
    • Racial bonuses do not factor into the “Body Shape” stat. Thus, your total stat is 30 rather than the 40 you would receive if you added the Velheim racial bonus.
    • Your dates in your “Life Story” should start at 266 AC if you are 40 (306 - 40) rather than 277. This will shift the timeline of your story and affect the events in it.
    • Please identify specifically where you were born.
    • Schools take 10 years to complete - you list your character going to train with the Bloodcast at age 10 and completing his training by age 14. Please change this. You will need 6 additional years.
    • You mention that you were in the Vigilant Shield in 305 AC, but that you left in your twenties - however, the current date is 306 AC. Please change these times and shift your life story accordingly.
    Please 1) make the edits in a different color and 2) tag me when you’ve finished.
     
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    Hey @Dosier , so I've applied the changes in RED ,

    The only thing I'd like to dispute is this, which was recently changed sp I figured I'd best show you.
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    Marty Changed this alongside the proficiency update here.
     
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    @ZiggyStarDusted

    Thanks for the heads up there buddy, appreciate it. :) Without further ado, consider this one right out the barrel and approved. Look forward to seeing you in-game.
     
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    @Dosier
    • Finally got around to adding on the new format for his personality/ abilities
    • aged up 5 years
    • proficiencies raised accordingly
     
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    B u m p

    Overall hall to make the app look nicer, moved to the new proficency system and... wrote down his tediously long divorce life story.
     
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    Well written and very well done! This is approved.
     
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    OK. ZOOMER.
     
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    @booette It's that time of year again.

    -Changes have been made in a obnoxious bright green!

    Thanks as always for the re-reviews.. :)
     
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    Hey @Caelamus need a quick re-review to account for the proficiency update as well as the removal of knight perm cap increase.

    Changes made in green. Thanks!
     
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    Dearest @Caelamus I requireth your re-reviewing capabilities upon my character app. Pwease.
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    Caelamus Sir Honeybear the chronic druid main

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    Approved.
     
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    @Caelamus needs re-review after proficiency update.

    Life story overhauled too! :)
     
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    Approved.
     
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    Changed and summarised for new prof system
    Needs a new reviewer, thank you!
     
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