Lazarus Lupenzi "It's better to be on hand with ten men than absent with ten thousand." ╔═━────━▒ ۞ ▒━────━═╗ Tunes: Lazarus - David Bowie And She Was - Talking Heads I Talk To The Wind - King Crimson Furr - Blitzen Trapper Blood On My Name - The Brothers Blight Come and Get Your Love - Redbone Ambience: The Glory Days - Michael Giacchino Enterprising Young Man - Star Trek OST The Last Of Us - Gustavo Santaolalla Kaer Morhen - Marcin Przybyłowicz Spoiler: Art Gallery Young Lazarus Masc by Joyshake Lazarus, Male-presenting by Katzeko ╚═━────━▒ ۞ ▒━────━═╝ ֍Full Name: Lazarus Lupenzi ֍Age: 47 ֍Gender: Non-Binary ֍Race: Half-Cearden , Half Velheim Ailor Core concept: Lazarus for all intents and purposes is a simple person. An eccentric, often goodly aged knight and war veteran who feels like they've just about seen it all. Now trying to live for the finer things in life, though an itch for adventure brews in them. Proficiency:13/14 points used Strength: 4 Blades Pack Large Blades Pack Improvised Weapon Pack Polearm Pack Constitution: 4 Light Shielding Pack Heavy Shielding Pack Brute Force Pack Woodcrafting Pack Wisdom: 0 Dexterity: 0 Magic: 0 Charisma: 5 Empire Linguistic Pack State Commander Pack Stupid Luck Pack Mount Husbandry Pack Pet Husbandry Pack Languages: Common (from youth) Empire Linguistic Pack (linguistics) Special Traits/Abilities: ֍ Stadder Horse (Advanced Mount) Appearance Information: ֍ Lazarus is a reasonably tall ailor, stormy blue-eyed with greying blonde lockes. More often than not seen with a warm, inviting expression at the ready. A mostly well-kept physique fit for a past life of knighthood, war and adventure. Life Story Lazarus was born an only child to a humble single Ceardian bar maiden. An absent father; Though quickly into their youth the two found themselves in the city of Regalia, Old Town. Failing to provide for her child as she'd have hoped, a silver lining came in the form of a Bloodcast knight, willing to take Lazarus under their wing as a schilder, a knight in training. They spent years growing up among a ragtag group of other children, gaining enough experience under mentorship to eventually leave on their own travels as a Bloodcast. Throughout their life, they went on to serve in a number of wars, some as a simple soldier, others positioned as a frontline commander. Since then... Lazarus has entered what they like to think of as a pseudo-retirement. Living out most of their days making wine with their partner and hound in a small keep near the town of Rothburg, trying to find satisfaction in the peace and quiet of rural life where they can.
I just wanna let you know, that this was last done by @HydraLana over here : https://forums.massivecraft.com/threads/lazaruz-dsoleil.61925/ But it's quite significantly different to the original, and has been polished immensly so.. Yeah.
@ZiggyStarDusted Please remember to make your edits according to the new Proficiency system before I continue with this review. Tag me once you've completed the appropriate edits!
@Dosier I'm ready! Changelog: Proficiencies changed to new system. Body Shape added. Life Story partially changed to adapt to the new requirement of years for school attendance. sexified further
@ZiggyStarDusted Thanks for your substantial patience! I appreciate it. I’ve read through your application and I find the character to be an interesting, well-developed one. There are a few of things I’d like you to tackle before getting this out of the barrel: Racial bonuses do not factor into the “Body Shape” stat. Thus, your total stat is 30 rather than the 40 you would receive if you added the Velheim racial bonus. Your dates in your “Life Story” should start at 266 AC if you are 40 (306 - 40) rather than 277. This will shift the timeline of your story and affect the events in it. Please identify specifically where you were born. Schools take 10 years to complete - you list your character going to train with the Bloodcast at age 10 and completing his training by age 14. Please change this. You will need 6 additional years. You mention that you were in the Vigilant Shield in 305 AC, but that you left in your twenties - however, the current date is 306 AC. Please change these times and shift your life story accordingly. Please 1) make the edits in a different color and 2) tag me when you’ve finished.
Hey @Dosier , so I've applied the changes in RED , The only thing I'd like to dispute is this, which was recently changed sp I figured I'd best show you. Marty Changed this alongside the proficiency update here.
@ZiggyStarDusted Thanks for the heads up there buddy, appreciate it. :) Without further ado, consider this one right out the barrel and approved. Look forward to seeing you in-game.
@Dosier Finally got around to adding on the new format for his personality/ abilities aged up 5 years proficiencies raised accordingly
B u m p Overall hall to make the app look nicer, moved to the new proficency system and... wrote down his tediously long divorce life story.
@booette It's that time of year again. -Changes have been made in a obnoxious bright green! Thanks as always for the re-reviews.. :)
Hey @Caelamus need a quick re-review to account for the proficiency update as well as the removal of knight perm cap increase. Changes made in green. Thanks!