Approved Sheet Laurel | The Witch Goblin

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    • Full Name: Lau’rellalehkh Marranahk Shozaalirn Rokh-Rana Raz-Wyldenaar,
      • Lau’rellalehkh Shozaalirn praised offspring of the Wildering’s Blessings, who is noble and of the Cult of The Wyld, from the Warped Woods
    • Nicknames: Lau
    • Age: 21,
    • Race: : Wyld Kathar
    • Religion: Cult of Wyld--Faith of Odella
    • Gender: No
    • Sexuality: Yeah
    • Eye Color: Black with glowing red flecks (Crimson Witch)
    • Dimensional Alignment: Void
    Skill Information
    Proficiencies
    • Strength: 1
      • Flexible Pack
      • Short Blade Pack (free from Kathar)
    • Constitution: 0
    • Wisdom: 4
      • Affliction Wisdom Pack
      • Dimenthist Wisdom Pack
      • Volacrum Wisdom Pack
      • Common Alchemy
    • Dexterity: 3
      • Stealth Pack
      • Vandalism Pack
      • Trailing Ranged Pack
    • Magic: 3
      • Water Magic Pack
      • Storm Magic Pack
      • Glamor Magic Pack
      • Arcane Magic Pack (free from CW)
    • Charisma: 3
      • State Saboteur Pack
      • Mount Pack
      • Extra point here as a treat
    Special Traits/Spells/Mutations
    • Kathar racial kit
    • Crimson Witch mutations kit
    Marril is a skittish, half-Solvaan of moderate height, wearing a plain matte white coat with unkempt long hair and tired eyes. intentionally a much more sophisticated persona that more people would listen to.
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    Visual Information
    Laurel, at a base level, would appear like a much grayer Xieloth, standing at the diminutive height of 4'10 with large and expressive eyes, black with glowing red flecks dotting the dark sclera like stars on the night sky. However their body appears to be naturally decorated with numerous abnormalities and evolution of the wyld, first are the long, sharp, and fuzzy moss-covered droopy bat ears that tilt and twitch with their emotions. Splotches of moss and alien mushroons covering their body, especially their hands and feet. Their teeth are all large, sharp, shark-like and glowing amber like the thorax of a firefly. Last but not least on his head and easily poking through their curly rat nest of a head of hair are a paiur of red glowing moth antennae.
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    Personality & Abilities
    • Once a zealous follower of Qarrakh and Korroth. Laurel has walked through life and found themselves seeking a purpose greater than violence for the sake of violence thus turning to the teachings of Odella and Eloblina, seeking to distribute the freedom of knowledge they acquire by any means necessary to anyone who would listen to them.
    • Lau is a deeply loyal person with a strong desire for familiar connections. They find comfort not only in the corrupted plants they surround themselves in, but also in the abnormal peoples they adore.
    Life Story


    Lau’rella was born in Wyldanarr, abandoned, like every Kathar is, and adopted by Na'salliou, a sweet-matron and mage of considerable magical power. His diminutive size disheartened his adoptive mother somewhat. As the youngest, he had very little expectations centered around him, granting him the freedom to pursue what he wished.

    He finds the most enjoyment out of sorcery, learned quickly off his mother, and medical practices. The apothecary became one of his frequent prowling grounds, whilst he studied anatomy through picture-books. He attempted to reverse engineer the practice of dissection, and learned early in his life how to sew together wounds. He even smashed fruits together in bowls, to create lovely slushes he called food. He was rather unhappy when he found out neither of these practices were things he created.

    The positive of learning such was that he could find tutors. By age twelve, he approached an instructor on how to do medicine. He studied for the next decade, making frequent trips back home to enjoy himself with partying and feasting.

    Eventually he began to travel out with his family, intent on spreading the Warp of their home to the nature and fauna they came across around the world, as to make it so that it may thrive under the influence of the Void rather than wilt. Eventually they made their way to Regalia, seeing fit to take a pause here, however one fateful night Laurel’s mother was ambushed by a rival they gained whilst in the city, forcing them to, whilst in their aged state, to keel over and perish from a heart attack in shock of the terrifying surprise before the werebeast could lay a claw on her. This forced Laurel to begin to seek out his own allies, as he was now on his own and with a newly found need to become independent.
    Upon realizing that everyone he had loved and been close to in the past has died or left the city one at a time, Lau found himself seeking a higher purpose, thus turning to the teachings of Odella, through Rennyn. Eventually taking up the offer given to join her cabal.
     

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    Claimed for review.
     
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    • List your magic cap alongside proficiency total. With four spells, this should be 40.
    • Void Script is not an applicable language.
    • Being Saivale/Shenath, I feel the character's height is a little on the lower side. Also, I'm going to ask that you draw the body build back to toned at most.
    • Formal and not formal do not belong anywhere near each other. If he puts on a professional face when around strangers, then put that in paragraph one. It doesn't belong where it currently is.
    Mark your edits in red and tag me when you've made the appropriate changes. @Slicerofsilver
     
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    Made the edits, but isn't toned a higher-bodyfat sinewy in terms of massivecraft body/character sizes? @AptlyRatley
     
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    More muscle, less fat. Jandar Shenath are capped to toned/lanky where Saivale are capped to skinny/lanky. Approved.
     
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    @Bagley_ I have completely overhauled the character's spellset.
     
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    @Bagley_ I had once more made an adjustment to the spellbook and proficiencies on the sheet, I wasn't sure if it needed re-review because of such a small change but I decided to tag you anyways.
     
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    @Bagley_ Adjustment to personality.
     
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    @Bagley_ small edit to proficiencies
     
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    @Bagley_ Overhauled a few things with the character, might require a re-review, also requesting the thread be cleaned up of previous comments/reviews.
     
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    @Bagley_ I have added the proficiencies to my sheet
     
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    @Bagley_ requesting re-review and for the thread comment section to be cleaned up
     
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    @Bagley_
    • Requesting the comments and previous reviews on the thread to be cleared.
    • I have updated the character sheet to fit in with the recent update to Kathar lore.
     
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    @Staff Roleplay
    I'd like to request a rereview since my current reviewer is no longer a lore staff member.
     
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    @Carlit0o requesting a rereview and for the thread to be cleaned up of all old comments!
     
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    approved, do it yourself
     
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    @Carlit0o after talking with a few people who I rp with frequently I’ve decided that laurel’s personality much better fits to the Rage Sire than Want
     
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    @Carlit0o adjusted my sheet for icly becoming Carl’s sorcerer acolyte! Changes in blue
     
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    @Carlit0o i updated my proficiencies to match the new system finally
     
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    @Carlit0o updated my sheet in line with the Kathar rework
     
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    @Carlit0o god rid of the proficiencies that no longer exist
     
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