Basic Information Full Name: Kharzug “Khar” Longscythe, of the Strongwall Harrkh, of the Dark Iron Tribelands. Age: Twenty-Seven Gender: Female Race: Orc Gorr Main Ambition: Meet new people, do new things. Spoiler: Basic Information Basic Information (Expansion) Describe your character’s position in Regalia. Why are they there? How long have they been there? What is their occupation and living situation? Describe your character’s upbringing. Where were they born, to whom? How many siblings do they have? What about their extended family/noble family? Kharzug was born to her mother Vrigka, and father Yugug. She was raised in the typical manner of her race, learning useful skills like unarmed and armed combat, and raid tactics. Describe any secondary ambitions your character may have. Short term ambitions, or ambitions that may not be related to your character’s main goal in life. Visual Information Eye Color: Yellow. Hair Color: Black. Hair Style: Shaved sides, leaving a thick strip down the middle. This hair is put into braids, then swept back. Skin Color: Orcish green. Clothing: Simple, wearing little more than hide trousers and a tough leather plate over her breast area. Height: 6’5” Body Build: Muscular Weapon of Choice: Her fists, an Orcish scythe, and three waraxes (Two to wield, one as backup). Spoiler: Visual Information Visual Information (Expansion) Describe the Character’s facial features, like the shapes of their eyes, mouth, ears, the size of their forehead, what kind of expression they usually carry, any freckles, scars etc, hair color, hair style and more. This description is purely for the head (and by extension neck) alone. Describe the Character’s body. Go into detail about height, weight, the color of their skin, the size of their bones and muscles, their amount of fat, any physical disabilities they may have, their amount of body hair if applicable and more. This description is purely for the body. Describe the Character’s fashion appearance and accessories. Talk about what kind of clothes they usually wear, preferred colors, what jewelry they have, weapons they carry on them or any item of note that they may always have on them. Describe the character’s voice. How do they speak? What is their typical tone and speed? Do they have an accent or a tendency to stutter? Any quirks about their voice listed here. Maybe also add a list of the languages they can speak. Personality and Abilities Personality Traits Dogmatic - She’s a fierce believer in the Call of Vakgar. Ordinarily, devotion to a religion wouldn’t cause much problems, but the Orcish religion calls for the hearts of her fallen Orcs to be eaten, certainly not something found in a civilized religion. Kharzug doesn’t believe in cutting corners, so this is a must. Her devoutness in religion also drives her to commit dangerous acts, such as facing a larger, stronger opponent head-on. It’s just dangerous thing to believe in, overall. Attention-seeking - Kharzug wants to prove herself, and can’t do that when nobody’s there to see her actions. This often causes her to act out when those she feels the need to show off to, mainly other Orcs and Jin-Tao members, nearly always ending in more harm than good. Racist - She has a general dislike and distrust of the more intelligent races as they’re the ones to insult and belittle her the most. These races are Al-Allar, Altalar, and Slizzar. She dislikes Shendar for a different reason, simply because they’re tainted with “Wumu”, or Magic. Kharzug treats these races worse than most, frequently threatening to break their backs or pouring ale on their heads. Honest - Aside from the occasional false pretense, Kharzug never lies. And even when she does, she makes sure there’s at least a scrap of truth in there. After all, to lie is as bad as to wear a fake beard. If put into a position where she can’t tell a lie and incorporate the truth at the same time, she will simply refuse to answer. Social - Even to those damn dirty Elves, Kharzug will try to make smalltalk. Sometimes this is only to satiate her need for conversation, but often it’s out of a genuine interest in other people’s lives. Although Orcs aren’t exactly known for their social graces, this one attempts to gain real friends that she can trust with anything. Proud - “No one bests an Orc!” Kharzug has a strong pride in her ancestors who were the final nail in the Elven Empire’s coffin. In her ancestors who claimed and established the Dark Iron Tribelands. She sees those historic acts as a legacy to live up to, and claims nothing but death will stop her from continuing her race’s name as the biggest and the baddest. Strengths Experienced- Life in a Harrkh exposes you to all sorts of bloodshed. Kharzug’s skilled in combat from a lifetime of fighting, and unfazed by violence. What she lacks in finesse, she makes up for with raw strength and ferocity. Strong- She’s a terrifying sight, and above average, strength-wise for her race. Kharzug uses this appearance and strength to scare off any would-be attackers, her savage roar certainly helping. Also, what rational human would want to fight someone who regularly throws anvils over her head in Orcish Chess? Strategist- Kharzug’s knowledge about war makes her valuable to any group of fighters. From plotting ambushes to cutting off supply chains, years of trial and error in the conflict between Avanthar and Orc have made her learn from her mistakes, and from more skilled strategists. Her skill isn’t as great as those who went to actual academies, and may seem inhumane at times, but she’ll do what it takes to have her people come out on top. Weaknesses Bullet out the character’s weaknesses with at least three sentences expanding on each. Three weaknesses minimum. Ignorant- She hasn’t interacted with non-Orcs that much, aside from raiding the Cielothar and Avanthar. She knows little about the other races of the world, or any magic beyond what she’s encountered from her limited experiences. This makes it difficult for her to counter less obvious types of magic, such as Hex, or Slither. Or racial abilities, such as the Solang’s Imitation, or the Dwarf Seedling’s sleep powder. Poor Self-Control- The Orc never thinks things through, so she’s been known to speak her mind when a more sensable individual would keep her mouth shut. Also prone to give into her own instincts, she’ll become overexcited and accidentally destructive. Slow- Being her size and weight, she’s certainly not fast. Kharzug can easily be outrun by a common Ailor, making her useless in a chase. Even when compared to other Orcs, she’s a little less than average, having a heavy, lumbering pace. Spoiler: Personality and Abilities Personality and Abilities (Expansion) Describe any number of Character Quirks your character has, strange behavior that they exhibit in certain situations. For example, a character rubbing a beard when nervous is a quirk, or a character biting their lips when doing math is a quirk, or a character shuffling their feet when talking to someone is a quirk. Quirks are not mandatory and may be left out if the writer doesn’t want to include them or can’t think of any. Describe your character’s skills; abilities they’ve developed, but not necessarily put at the forefront of their lives. For example, if your character is a good cook, but not a chef, or if they are a good horse rider but not necessarily a competition racer, you would mention them here. Feel free to mention multiple skills but try to keep your character from becoming over skilled. Describe your character’s talents, their inherent abilities that truly set them apart from the common population of Aloria. These talents are the kind of abilities other people would want to go to your character for to teach them. These are things they haven’t specifically developed, but have a natural affinity for. Likes Describe three different activities, things or items that your character loves to see, do, taste or smell. Generally speaking these are things that make your character happy and in a good mood when they are near them/doing them. Go into detail why they love these things and then also explain how it makes them feel. Dislikes Describe three different activities, things or items that your character hates to see, do, taste or smell. Generally speaking these are things that make your character annoyed or angry and in a general bad mood when they are near them/doing them. Go into detail why they hate these things and explain also how it makes them feel. Spoiler: Relationships Relationships (Optional) Add Relationships to NPC and player characters. Write this list of relationships with a bullet point. Describe what their current relation to one another is, and how they originally met. If you want to, you can add flavor by @tagging the player behind the character next to the character name. Relationships are a great way to socialize with other players! Speculate on relations, ship characters and create lasting friendships and nemeses! This section, while optional, is especially recommended if you want to create a social feel to your Sheet. Life Story (Required) Kharzug was born to the Warchief of the Boulderfist Harrkh. Being the daughter of the Warchief, she had multiple half-siblings from her father’s harem. her early childhood was spent with her father with the other Orclets spawned by her father, until she was five, and could be left on her own. At this point she began basic training, wrestling with the other children of her tribe and going on “raids”, which resembled capture the flag but with the risk of broken bones. At nine, she had already proven herself as one of the stronger Orcs of her father’s brood, coming out shining compared to her siblings and half-siblings. She began official training with dulled weapons, and learned to wield the battle-axe and Orcish Scythe. By the time she was thirteen, Kharzug was allowed on her first raid with the warriors of the clan. The chosen target was the nearby Irontusk clan. The attack lasted a few hours, looting and brawling against the enemy Orcs. This is where the young Orc first experienced real bloodshed, and relished in it. With each passing year, she grew stronger, and more skilled with her weapons. When she was seventeen, she set out on her own, and joined the Strongwall Harrkh, a large Chief Hold located in an Elven ruin near the borders of the Dark Iron Tribelands. She soon found her place as a both a raider and defender, the position of the Harrkh making it a common target for Avanthar horsemen. Kharzug even began to respect the Avanthar for their determination in combat despite rarely breaching the ruin’s walls. Of course, the Elves were still the enemy. Disaster struck after a few years, the Warchief struck down by Avanthar archers. Ordinarily this would cause no problem, a new Warchief stepping in to fill the role. But this time, two would-be Warchiefs claimed leadership over the Harrkh. One, the Chief’s oldest son. The other, a warrior who had challenged the old Chief for leadership and lost. The situation quickly turned into a three-way battle for the fort, the rebels, loyalists, and the Avanthar who wanted to claim the fort as their own. The loyalist group managed to hold out for several months, making makeshift barricades to hold off the rebels. Eventually, though, the rebels won and seized control over the fort. The loyalists were killed, save the few that escaped. Kharzug, having escaped the massacre, made her way to Daenshore, and Regalia from there.
Hiya @Beetletoes! You’re app was nicely detailed and easy to read through. I’ve listed a selection of points down for you to implement into your application but then we can look to getting this approved for you. The height to weight ratio for Kharzug is off. They seem very big and 376 pounds is just too much, even for an Orc. Tall Orcs would most likely tend to be slightly lankier than their shorter brethren (obviously not lanky by definition, but in comparison to other Orcs, they wouldn’t look as bulky). To balance out the character, I’d say lower their height and weight to keep the ‘built like a tank’ as you’ve described. Or keep the height, lower the weight and refer to them as not necessarily lanky, but certainly spindly compared to the average Orc. I’d remove the “She’s a difficult opponent by just about any standards, except maybe the Viridians.” line from Kharzug’s experienced strength. It sets an unfair precedence if you later use this application once approved to show that you can beat just about anyone in RP. It hints at potential powergaming. If you intend to combat rp, match each opponent against your character realistically and then work from there. The strength attractive, as you’ve described is not valid because attractiveness as a concept is relative depending on the person. I’d remove it and replace it with something else as it doesn’t really belong anywhere else on the application. You mention that she knows Deafening Lyre throughout her life story but you don’t list it in her weapons of choice point, be sure to write it in there. Also keep in mind that even if she spent many years to get to caster level in Defeaning Lyre, battle mages are always going to be average at both combat and their chosen form of magic. I’d either remove her magic if you want to keep her on par with the strength of other Orcs, or I’d list in her experienced strength that comparable to those of her own kind, she is weaker. Add her Deafening Lyre skills as a separate dot point in her strength section if you intend to keep it and then add another weakness to balance that out. That’s all! Please highlight any changes you make in green and tag me when you’re done!
Sure, I'll lower the height. Actually that title was a bit of a joke. By saying she's attractive by the Orc standards stated on the wiki, I'm saying that she's strong and tough. Not intending to imply that she was attractive. But I'll change the title. Oh, thank you for catching that! I actually intended to remove that, but forgot halfway through.
@JarlJade I would like to bump her weight from 250 pounds to 300, as I believe an Orc, given their natural muscle compared to a human, it's likely that she would be considered fairly "obese" by BMI standards, while 250 lands her in the "overweight" category.
Going to pop in and mention that for an Orc, 300 seems more average than exceptional. Even with their more advanced respiratory systems, a 300 pound Orc hardly even compares to advanced modern day strongmen like Hafþór Júlíus Björnsson or Louis Cyr. Who I feel compare very well to Orcs. I personally believe that the average Orc would weigh between about 300 to 330, where stronger Orcs go to 370, and the true tanks go to 400 and above (I've seen plenty). By placing an above average Orc at 250, it makes it unreasonable that races such as ailor can't reach the same level. And most strong Dakkar would easily attain Orcish strength.
@JarlJade Reading @KiddingAround 's input, I believe I will change from the previously said 300 lbs to 368.
After doing some more research it's reasonable to have your Orc at the weight listed. In future, even though you did tag me, make sure to make it clear that you'd like the application under review again after changing important details. The way you went about it made it seem like you were changing your application with assurance from a player which is not allowed.
I am really sorry if it came off that way, I just wanted to plug information that I was using in my sheets. Sorry to be a nuisance.
When you make changes to your sheet, you must set the tag back to 'needs reviewer.' I have done it at this time and it will be reviewed ASAP.