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  1. Keldo127

    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    Basic Information (Required)
    The following is required when filling out your character application. Please use a Bullet Point list. Try to keep the information here as simple and confined as possible, it's supposed to be a shortlist.
    • Full Name: Keldo Artimis
    • Age: 24
    • Gender: Male
    • Race: Qadir Nationalist
    • Sexuality: Yes. Straight
    • Preferred Weapon: Crossbow, Fists, Clockwork, Greatsword
    Inventory Information (Optional)

    ( Will be done at a later date sadly. )
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    - Sariyd Attendant

    - Skill Information / Skill Points -

    50 points (Base) + 10 (hobby)


    Utility Ranged Combat: 12
    Greatsword Combat: 8


    Finecraft Metallurgy 3
    Armor Metallurgy 3 ( Got the extra one from the Racial Ability known as Honed Skill 1. )
    Weapon Metallurgy 3
    Clockwork Metallurgy 3
    Bronze Family Metallurgy 3
    Rich Family Metallurgy 3

    Iron Family Metallurgy 3
    Farad Family Metallurgy 3
    Daen Family Metallurgy 3


    Rouge Gift 4 ( costs 3 points )
    Wall Climb 3 ( costs 3 points )

    Hobby List Theatre Art: 10 (hobby points)

    Body Shape
    • Physical stat: Theater 5 + Metallurgy 10.5 + Unarmed 6 + Utility Ranged Combat 6 + Greatsword Combat 8 = 35.5 (Maxed at 30)
    • Physical stat: Theater 5 + Metallurgy 9 + Unarmed 3 + 20 Greatsword Combat = 37 (Maxed at 30)
    • Body Shape: Muscular ( Has a humanoid body structure making them have similar body shapes as one say Alior )
    • Body Fat: Average
    Languages
    • Common
    • Faraddi
    Special Traits/Spells/Mutations
    • Spells
    (All Racials Below!)
    - Sayrid Gift 1
    - Sayrid Gift 2
    - Sayrid Gift 3
    - Sayrid Gift 4
    - Sayrid Gift 5
    - Home Enchant 2
    - Home Enchant 3
    - Home Enchant 4
    - Honed Skill 1
    - Honed Skill 4

    - When gains abilities when Cratos below -

    (Vampirism Spells, Cratos btw)
    - Afflicted Life 1
    - Blood Eyes 1
    - Blood Curse 1
    - Vampiric Form 3
    - Cursed Soul 1
    - Machine Lord 1
    - Machine Lord 2
    - Machine Lord 3
    - Machine Lord 4
    - Machine Lord 5
    - Machine Lord 6
    - Wall Climb 4
    - Sorcery Skill 2

    - Magic Sight 1 (Sorcery Skill 2)
    - Elemental Control 4 (Sorcery Skill 2)
    - Darkness 4
    - Darkness 5

    - Mutations -

    - Void Threlwar Mutations -

    - Void Horns ( Only Left Side )
    - Void Claws ( Only Right Hand )
    - Void Pigmentation ( Right Arm And Near Left Eye )
    - Void Scale ( Right Arm And Near Left Eye )


    - Visual Information -

    The following is required when filling out your character application. Please use a Bullet Point list. Try to keep the information here as simple and confined as possible, it's supposed to be a shortlist.
    • Eye Color: Sandstone
    • Hair Color: black, now dyed orange - blond
    • Hair Style: Fluffy, and wavy.
    • Skin Color: black - brown
    • Clothing: A cloak, as well as gentleman-like clothing underneath.
    • Height: 6'2
    Keldo's Face: His face is rather charming and handsome, being in his early 20s. He is missing an eye, (Lost in the battle with the mage) being covered up by a clockwork monocle. His hair used to be fully black, though dyed blond - orange after as he stated, "not suitable for my style."

    Keldo's Body: Keldo has smooth skin all over except his hands, which are rough and ridged. Being toughened up after all of the fights he had been through. Keldo is about average height with an extremely Athletic physique. After all of his bounty hunting, he is in good shape. Along with two large stitch marks on his left arm.

    Keldo's Clothing: It is quite light and fashionable, having a robin hood-like vibe to his clothing. He has a ton of pockets full of an assortment of items like knives, knives, and more knives. With his cloak is a brownish-red hue with a couple of rips and tears. It feels very course and quite rough to the touch.

    Keldo's Voice: He has this thing with him where he can go from a quite fluent accent with a light tone of voice. Was able to talk in a high voice, not as high as a woman due to his talent in the theater. All the way to be able to talk in a deep voice.

    Keldo's Right Arm: The arm that had been made over time. Having revered motor controls. Yet still being able to function as a normal hand to an extent. The iron cast is used as a cover for the arm. Forever reminding him of that traumatic experience.

    - Personality -
    The following is required when filling out your character application. To explain the character’s personality, you may choose between two optional sets of questions. The Question List is meant to make you think out of the box, which is something useful for people who are more comfortable thinking further on their character design, or you may choose The Core List, which sets out the basic relevant data, though requiring a bit more reading on the part of the app maker. Choose one of the following two options for your required Personality section, and ignore the other.

    Character Alignment: Chaotic neutral or Chaotic good

    Character Personality Type: The Architect

    Character's Religion:
    Esrah Alwattah, Djjwa Ifirti, The Thousand Eyes

    Weaknesses: Ranged Attacks

    Character Personality: From the outside, everyone would look at him thinking he is a wonderful gentleman, with the kindest outlook on life. With a very fiery passion for fighting. For those who think that they are correct. Though... That's not the only version of him. As his backstory proclaims, he was savage, brutal, not knowing an end to his mad fury. Over his adulthood, he had learned to control it. He can unleash his savagery if he can suppress his humanity enough. Once he is in this beast-like form he knows no bounds to his limits, not feeling any pain due to pure ruthlessness. When in certain states he loses all sense of a person and becomes a beast, relying on his instincts alone. An unstoppable force of nature, lasting until he is knocked out cold, killed, subdued, or his Saryid Attendant is destroyed. If he is subdued or his Saryid is destroyed he will be in a state of lag swapping between his gentleman-like state as well as his beastly personality. To sum it up, Keldo can go between uncontrolled and controlled with his personality differentiating between the two.

    He is also just extremely talented at origami and only origami. He loves to show off his strength and resilience as a fighter. Keldo had also learned how to keep his 'other' side under check, taking theater for acting purposes.
    For a man who has been through quite a lot, he is still as light-hearted as ever.

    Likes

    - Fighting, toy making, forging jewelry, orange juice, hugs, vanilla ice cream.

    Dislikes

    - Himself.

    - Alias: K3 -

    Keldo had recently joined a group that is not affiliated with the law or government. A group of vigilantes known as, "The Pale Orchid." A group who decided to take matters of the world into their own hands. Fighting what evils plague this world in secret. Keldo because of this group, had to wear a mask to hide his face during missions. Becoming what is known as K3, which was built as a slightly altered personality of Keldo.

    - Life Story / General Information -

    Keldo Artimis had a rough childhood growing up, being born into this world without knowing his hometown or parents. Living in the rough sands of Farah'deen. He was much bullied as a kid, with destitute living environments. As he grew up he learned how to survive, picking up a crossbow as a weapon. As well as having many fistfights as a kid. Since being poor he learned how to manipulate and steal, even go as far as to sometimes kill a person. Keldo had no parents. No friends. Only focusing on his survival.

    As a teen Keldo had a lot of trouble learned how to speak since not knowing his parent and talking a lot while speaking. Learning how to make money by bounty hunting. Taking many bounties yet being cheated out of many deals. Still having an animalistic like nature, picking up a few words to learn how to survive. He was basically a slave, not being promised the money he has been told in deals. Keldo had his arm scarred badly with many deep wounds. As well as his eye mutilated while he was being broken out of a deal by a mage. Only surviving by sticking an arrow through his neck. As Keldo scrounged around with clockwork to try and remake his arm the best he can. Learning how to read being self-taught has forced him through the pain to fix his arm. Becoming quite the sniper with the crossbow, modifying a few arrows to fit his needs. Still refusing magic as a fix, due to what the mage has done to him...

    Keldo in his adult years added engravements to his arm. Along with building himself a monocle, made with the fine crafting skills he had acquired from his now many years in metallurgy. Learning how to weld metals together. Now able to talk more, ridding himself of his animalistic ways for a more humane way of thinking. Taking on acting as a hobby to mask his animalistic nature. As well as perception and stealth training. Still bounty hunting but less due to realizing the many dangers. Now having a better life than previously when he was a teen. The pain and traumatizing nature of losing his arm still affecting him to this day. Though dealing with it better. Though, growing an intense hatred for magic. Vowing to never use it.

    With current day Keldo, he had become fairly wealthy, making it to Regalia he had learned how to become a gentleman, quitting bounty hunting. Still holding onto that hatred of magic. I no longer hating mages, just honestly disliking them and their ways. Becoming situated as a member of the Pale Orchid in secret. With also finding a job at Nook & Cranny, the Leaping Ksai, Burning Clinic, and Square Go.

    - Cratos & Vampire Arc -
    Had recently become quite successful as an individual. Though, success comes with its many costs. As many eyes of Covens were on him. During the tail end of the Blood Moon, he had been turned without realizing by a Cratos. The Tech Prince Rhys, leader of The Collective. He only realized when he visited The Collective to hunt down the man who turned him, where his ideas changed.. As he went back to his family of the Pale Orchid. They had realized Keldo had became somewhat strange. As they planned for his curing. After Keldo had realized this he ran into the forests of Regalia. Disappearing amongst the foliage. Then returning back to The Collective. For an attempt to kill the Tech Prince... He failed. Terribly. Being struck down by a defender of the Teched Prince. Earning a major concussion along with a terrifying fracture. As he floated down the sewers once more.. Agony jolting through his body. As he was sent out of the sewers on the outskirts of Crookback. Crawling as far as possible in great pain. Many infections through all of his open wounds. Laying by a tree to die. Thinking as life fleeted him. "Is... This how I die, so be it." Keldo remarked crying. As he.. Was out once more.

    - Memories Arc -

    ~ Act 1 ~
    He was laying there for quite a while. Sitting there under the tree with a pool of blood below him. As he was found by Stray and another. Being spruced up once again, waking up to the sight of them once more.. He attempted to run, though failed misribly. Being sent back to be cured once more. Though... Something. Was off about him this time. He.. Wasn't his usual self. Almost.. Like a child who had no memories. It was probably from the strike to the head from before, affecting him still. As he had many people looking for him still but when they found him, they found a shell of a man. Someone who had no recollection of their previous self. Yet, they have not given up on him. With everyone trying to help the poor boy. The emotionless doll known as Keldo. Got a second chance.

    ~ Act 2 ~
    Keldo was... Going through his usual routine at this point, trying to figure out who he was. His thoughts were.. Slow. He was still that shell of himself. Though.. His body on the other hand. Had remembered. He was trying to figure out himself when the rain started. Some bone chilling lullubys were going around, echoing in his mind. His body had gone into a defencive frenzy, acting on its own accord. Though.. Keldo's mind had no clue what was doing, and before you know it he was put to sleep by a spell. Waking up. He seemed to have.. An awakening of sorts. His once weak and frail body seemed to have been activated. With Keldo realizing he had way more strength than before, becoming more confident in his speech as well, as a piece of him has been restored. Yet, emotionally, Keldo had not figured out his foregone emotions. Still a procelain doll. Face of no emotions, still looking as if were a lifeless manaquin.

    ~ Act 3 ~

     
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  2. KrakenLord01

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    I will be taking this app for Aspirant Review!
     
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    • The 5 extra points and the 5 points from birth are the same thing, meaning you only get an extra 5 points and not an extra 10. Readjust your total points and your currently invested Proficiencies accordingly.
    • You are able to choose from a list of available Racial Boosts where if you invest 5 Proficiency Points into that skill, you automatically get another 5 points in that skill. https://wiki.massivecraft.com/Proficiency
    • You can also add the language of the race/culture you come from, assuming they weren't raised in a purely Common-speaking household.
    • Clarify what Proficiencies are going into your Physical Stat calculation.
    • Qadir do not have Peach skin, Blue eyes or Orange-Blond hair. They are almost uniformly with dark brown skin, brown eyes and dark hair (unless they use hair dye or have Mutations that affect eye color). https://wiki.massivecraft.com/Qadir
    • Specify more on where the character is from.
    • Keep in mind that Clockwork can replace basic functions for limbs and is usable even with one eye, but replaced limbs would not be usable in combat and it does not restore function to the lost eye.
    Make changes in Green (or at least a noticeable color) and tag me when finished.
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    Question for the clockwork part: So if you add clockwork to your character, as for the gauntlet you can add cores to make it have special uses like blue and white would make a shotgun type weapon. As well the gauntlet would not be able to be used as a like sort of metal prosthetic limb? Like if it gets punched it would technically fall off immediately? If so, is there any way to counter act the fact it has no combat capabilities. For the visor part, if Keldo were to wear it to cover his scar of his missing eye would that be fine in a sense? Also just a rather weird thought, so if my character is blind in one eye, and uses the combination of cores ( Yellow x white ) that allows him to see through the eyes of another person. (if the person is wearing a visor the same combination as well.) Would he technically get his vision back with one eye looking where he is and another looking through the other wearer's eye? If so, would the other wearer be blind due to Keldo's eye being blind? Curing his vision with a very messed up view of two people's perspectives? ( both people must be touching the cores in order for this to happen )

    -Sorry if this message is rather bothersome
    -Keldo127
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    I have also finished my re-evaluation of my character.

    -Keldo127
     
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    A gauntlet won't break immediately when punched with, but if the cores make forceful contact they will break/explode, and the clockwork does not work as a result. A gauntlet will not give any punching advancements. It will probably break after a punch or 2-3. A visor is see-through glass, so you can 'hide' a missing eye behind it. With the yellow-white visor, he would not get his vision back, as you need working eyes to see them through the visor. The other person would see the world from his perspective though, because it is from the point of the visor.
     
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    Approved, just remember to list the Proficiencies going into Physical Stat. Also, welcome to Massive!
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    I have redone my previous changes for the proficiencies. Due to it being well over outdated.
    -Keldo127
     
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    • How is he able to go from Ripped to Strongman "due to Ailor similarities"? There are no listed Abilities here, either Racial or otherwise, that imply he can do this.
    Make changes in Green and tag me when finished.
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    Yo, I have changed it to where since Qadir is humanoid figures like Alior, they should be able to have the same body shape as Alior. If that makes any sense. Thank you for reviewing my character sheet! @KrakenLord01
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    Making a tad tweak noticing that there is something added that is not needed with the proficiency.

    ( I did my math wrong apparently Theater Art is 0.5 so I added that I wondered why there was an extra 5 there. Making my 23 Physical stat to 28 physical stat.
     
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    Sorry for the delay, approved!
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    Due to the entire metallurgy being redone I now had to redo most of my skillpoints. As well as how finecraft is now nonexistent and only in metallurgy. I have finally redone all my points for a long needed makeover. Thank you for when you review this, and have a great day!
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    Going to be redoing my character sheet a bit. The backstory no longer matching Keldo's current stats. Along with changing weapon metallurgy for armor metallurgy. Also, when you review this make sure to have a great day :D
     
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    • Becoming skilled with a crossbow isn't really viable for someone with only one functioning arm, as they need both to use that sort of weapon.
    Make any changes in Green and tag me when finished.
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    Sorry if this is quite bad as a repost. Feeling quite under the weather. Still have a great day as usual. Thank you for reviewing this. @KrakenLord01
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    Yo, I've done the new proficiency changes along with storyline for Keldo. @KrakenLord01 Have an amazing day!! :DDD
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    I'm still not sure how I want to play Keldo, so I am re-arranging some of the points to see what best fits. Also, yes re-review :D @KrakenLord01
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    Yo! New Qadir updates mean a new char sheet update! (Mainly stuff for the update.) @KrakenLord01
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    @KrakenLord01 Yo, wondering if it is ok if I can add vampire stuff earlier. He is going to be turning into a Cratos vampire for the blood moon event for a vampire arc. So yeah, just adding he is going to be a Cratos vampire.
     
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    This is fine if there is a premeditated agreement for him to get infected, though I ask that you do not use Cratos abilities IG until the character is actually IC infected/turned. Make edits and tag me when finished.
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    I'm unsure on what edits need to be made as of now, though of course, I won't use the Cratos abilities IG as of now. So I'm just going to change all the green back into the black. Hope that is ok. And also changed Elemental 7 to 6 due to it being a miss type from before. @KrakenLord01
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    Keldo has been officially turned into a Cratos after being turned like, after three attempts! Though he doesn't like to hurt anyone, so quickly swapping from Elemental 1 to Light mend 3. @KrakenLord01
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    @KrakenLord01 Yo Yo Yo, getting a Sanguine Arc as well as overall Villan Arc for Keldo Artimis. If you were wondering about the mind change thing it was from Puppet Control 1 I think. And was agreed upon the change. As well as wondering if I can add void attachments in certain places instead of just generalizing it over a part of the body. Hope this gets to you, and have a great day :D
     
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    Re-approved!
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    @KrakenLord01 Ok so uhh.. Basically, I gave up on the Sanguine Arc. But I still plan on doing it in the future, so I turned the sanguine stuff red. And the normal changes of Keldo in green back where they were.
     
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    Keldo127 Hello I'm a kiwi bird :D

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    I forgot to add to the fact that Keldo still hasn't been turned back. Though having to schedule something for it sadly, Keldo is transitioning between the before and now for skills.
     
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    Understood, though you only need to tag and add those things for when he actually gets cured.
     
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    @KrakenLord01 Yo, I have added more onto Keldo's story along with trading a bit of Utility Ranged combat to Greatsword combat. Have a great day :DDD
     
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    Re-approved! Also remember that you only need to tag for re-review regarding Proficiency changes if more than 10 points total have been switched/changed since your last review.
     

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