Kedrasis Juras Pelkebatsiuvys

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  1. indyfan98

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    Character Information

    • Full Name:
      • Traditional Name: Kedrasis Juras Pelkebatsiuvys

      • Regalian Name: Kedras Juras Batsiuvys
    • Race: Ailor (Zvorun Culture)

    • Age: 87

    • Sex: Male

    • Gender: Masculine

    • Sexuality: Heterosexual

    • Eye Color: Green
    Core Concept

    • A life-long follower of Wiaraja, Kendras follows his cultural norms heavily, and often uses them to judge others, who considers himself a priest of sorts, taking part in the keeping of the Amžina Świeatła.

    • Kendras is a faithful Shaman of Wiaraja, and seeks to enforce its teachings on others. He is scornful of others who seek to show off, especially women, and he wants the people of the world to know their place
    Proficiency Information

    6 Point Buy
    • 14 Wooden Art (10 from Hobby Points, 4 from Age)

    • 10 Instrument Art (5 from Age, 5 from Honed Skill 2)
      • Plays various ethnic instruments, including Lielspyrzrz in the temple. He keeps a Klakuk in his home to call back to this.
    • 10 Husbandry Arts (10 from Age)
      • Has a pet Common Farm Chicken from home and an Erkebin.
    • 10 Horticulture Arts (10 from Age)

    • 5 Axe Combat (5 from Age)
      • Barely able to fight much. This is a holdover from his youth.
    • 6 Metallurgy (6 from Age) [40]
      • Utility Metallurgy

      • Finecraft Metallurgy

      • Rich Metallurgy (Honed Skill 1)
    • 10 Construction Art [10 from Age)
    Physical Stat: 20

    Ability Information

    Ailor Racials
    • Honed Skill 1

    • Honed Skill 2

    • Omniaware
    Metallurgy
    • Utility
    • Finecraft
    • Metallurgy
    Languages

    • Tarkkin

    • Common
    Appearance Information

    • Kedras is an aging man who is losing his hearing as a result of his deteriorating health.

    • Average in height (5'10") and build for a man his age, Kedras has grown old and tired. His hair is grey, including his beard, and he is balding. He wears traditional clothes for his culture, including the furs men may wear. His clothing style can be considered plain and dull in color.
    Life Story

    • Born in a house under a cedar in Zavoria (Regalian Archipelago), hence his name “Kedrasis,” he was born to a family of cobblers. He grew up in a large household, filled with brothers and sisters. His parents were very strict with Wiaraja faith. He had many of his ambitions beaten out of him, often literally. However, one ambition remained: religious studies.

    • Kedras the multi-faceted faith of Wiaraja throughout his youth. He grew into the role of Shaman, and quickly began to tend the Amžina Świeatła, kindling the flame once a month. He led people in prayer to the gods and offered advice to those in need.

    • As his age progressed, he became a regular at the temple. His parents eventually died of the flu during the harsh winter months of his adulthood, despite their prayers to Gimdyziny. He turned to the gods of Wiaraja to help him mourn. He, despite tragedy, learned to cope, and soon married and took over the two fields of his family’s farm. He still had his grandmother with him, and took care of her in her later age.

    • Eventually, when travelling to the temple Wiarseta, a large mudslide came to hit his town. Most had already cleared out of the town, and few were lost beyond livestock and crops, thankfully.

    • With the loss of his hometown, he went onward to a new place: Regalia. Here, he went as he heard that the city lacked any place of worship for the Zvorun. He was old and partially deaf in one ear, but felt it time for the change, with all he had to tie him to home gone.
     
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  2. Jouster

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    Hi there. I'll be reviewing this character application. Complete all of the edits asked of you below before approval. If you have any questions, send them through a forums conversation or through a Discord RP ticket.
    • Basic Information
      • Write what culture Kedrasis is in "Race."
    • Proficiency Information
      • The bracketed numbers after the proficiencies make reading them confusing at first. It helps to know they add up to 50, but it makes understanding the formatting here difficult. Please remove them!
    • Ability Information
      • Format the three abilities (Which I assume are derived from the Ailor Racial Abilities) like this:
        • Ailor Racials:
          • Honed Skill 1
          • Honed Skill 2
          • Omniaware 1
    • Appearance Information
      • I'd like for you to specify your height to make sure that it stays within the lore canon range of your character!
    • Life Story
      • Kedrasis was born under a tree, but where was he born in terms of geographical regions/nations? Mention it for the childhood bullet point.
     
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  3. indyfan98

    indyfan98 I'm not narcissistic. I'm just better than you.

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    Done. Changes include:
    Specifying him ad Zvorun Culture
    Specifying height ad 5'10"
    Stating he was born in Zavoria
    Formatting as specified​
     
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    Thank you for making the edits asked for! I'll go ahead and approve this app with one last request. You're supposed to include how many points you spent in a Point-Buy underneath Proficiency Information (Which you did), but the actual listing of the Point-Buy abilities you bought goes under "Ability Information."
    Edit: Oh, additionally remove the +5 Cultural Boost for Axes. You can only invest in a core group racial/cultural boost if you've already spent 10 points in the proficiency, not 5. Don't forget to put your physical stat either.
     
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