Full name: Jaylen Kate Amorax -Age: 45 -Gender: Male (But gets mistaken as a woman a lot) -Race: Cielothar -Sexuality: Bisexual Skill Information Total points: 50 + 10 Hobby points +15 Dancing Arts (Age + 5 Hobby) +15 Cooking Arts (Age + 5 Hobby) +10 Instrumental Art (Age) +10 Vocal Art (Age) +10 Body Art (Age) Bloodline: Alais Physical stat = 10 Body Shape: -Athletic body shape, Average body fat Languages: -Common -Plains Elven Visual information: -Eye color: Green -Hair color: Brown -Hair style: Long and straight -Skin color: Tan -Clothing: An off the shoulder green top that stops above his belly button and a skirt that's longer on one side, adorned with dangling bells and chains. -Height: 5'9 Mutations: Void Horns Alignment: Neutral -Personality: Defender -Religion: Void (4/10) Backstory *Child hood* -He was raised in Daendroc along side his five sisters. His father was never around and he developed a taste for more feminine clothes. -He grew up in a small village that traded with other villages for survival. -He was constantly mistaken as a girl in his younger years due to his longer hair and effeminate appearance. -He took a liking to cooking, singing, playing guitar, and dancing. -He didnt get much of an education, so he focused on dance and song. -He constantly got attention from both adults and his friends by his dance and song, which lead him to develop a sort of need for it. *Teens* -He began bar tending at the tavern in his village. -He took a liking to entertaining, singing, playing guitar and dancing for the patrons, though he was very discriminated against. -He dreamed of moving to Regalia to open his own bar, a bar where unique people like him could go and not be treated harshly. -He also took up the hobby of hanging around people just to confuse them, as people could rarely tell what his actual gender was. *Adulthood* -He ended up with a slash-like scar across his stomach when he flirted with a man whom assumed he was a woman and was attacked once they found out he wasn't. -He got very sick but continued working through his illness. As one of his older sisters was a doctor they helped him get better and continue on. -He started saving up money, working non stop into his adult hood, saving half his pay for the future and half for his family, eventually saving up enough to move away. -He moved to Regalia after saving up quite a bit of money and began searching for the perfect place to start his life -He'd made many friends and got a house. -He then got kidnapped by a member of a coven. -He was afflicted and joined the coven, making close friends with one of the members, and was now living his life as he wanted *Present* -After a nasty break up, and the death of someone he cherished closely, he decided to return home for a few months to spend time with his family. -Before he'd left, he got a tattoo of initials above his scar with a heart next to it to remember that who had passed. -After spending some time recharging his social battery and learning body art, he decided he was ready to return, and made way back to Regalia once more.
@Depressed_Bean Please give more detail to your backstory. Explain where she was born, maybe elaborate more on his childhood and travels.
@Depressed_Bean Your backstory is still incredibly short. Maybe add a couple more sentences describing the jobs he took to get money.
@Depressed_Bean There must've been some interesting things that are spread out across his life. That's still an almost 30 year gap described entirely with bartending and entertaining. I'll say give it two more sentences.
I added a new section called adulthood, moved the last sentence from teens into it and added two additional points to the section
@fantuinn Tagged for re-review, changes made in red Changes made: Added 3 new lines to the present story Changed religion from Estel to void Added affliction and mutations
