Rejected Sheet Hy'riss

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    I WATCHED AN EMPIRE FALL
    I STORMED THE GATE AND SCARED THE WALLS
    CHARACTER INFORMATION > REQUIRED
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    FULL NAME Hy’riss (Formerly Hessolis / Helious)
    NICKNAMES Hess / Solis / Hel / Hy
    RACE Voltalar Isladar (Born Power Kathar)
    SEX Female
    AGE Forty-Two (Birthdate Unknown / Unofficial Jan. 24)
    SEXUALITY Bisexual
    GENDER Non-Binary (They/Them)
    EYE COLOR Blue
    CORE INFORMATION > REQUIRED
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    CORE BELIEFS
    A devout worshiper of Ifrit has long centered their beliefs around the Dragons. Building their life on the core values on the teachings of Ifrit. Continuing their efforts against Vampires.
    CORE IDENTITY
    Groomed into a deviously clever draconic warrior Hy’riss follows a chaotic line between all essences in the world. Harboring a boisterous ego and intent on forcing a place for themselves in the hierarchy of the world, the Voltalar is extremely focused on setting forth their goals. Using mutations, literature and magic to justify twisted beliefs that continue to develop as they struggle to find a new place for themselves.
    CHARACTER INFORMATION EXPANSION > OPTIONAL
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    CHARACTER ALIGNMENT Chaotic Neutral (Bordering Chaotic Good)
    CHARACTER LIKES Olives / Dragons / Vanilla
    CHARACTER DISLIKES Pomegranate / Restraints / Mind-Altering Drugs
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    THOUGHT I TOLD YA

    NOT TO FUCK WITH ME
    PROFICIENCY INFORMATION > REQUIRED
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    TOTAL PROFICIENCY 50 Core / 10 Hobby / 8 Unused

    CORE PROFICIENCIES
    > 17 Fist Combat (12 Points Invested / 5 Racial Points)
    > 8 Spear Combat (8 Points Invested)

    TALENT PROFICIENCIES
    > 5 Perception Training (5 Points Invested)
    > 3 Medical Training (3 Points Invested)

    HOBBY PROFICIENCIES
    > 10 Theatre Art (10 Hobby Points)
    > 3 Writing Art (3 Points Invested)
    > 2 Needlework Art (2 Points Invested)

    POINT-BUY PROFICIENCIES
    > 6 Sorcery (6 Points Invested)
    > 3 Linguistics (3 Points invested)

    PHYSICAL STAT 30 (17 + 8 + 5 = 30)
    ABILITY INFORMATION > REQUIRED
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    VOLTALAR RACIALS
    > Isldar Common Kit (7 Abilities)
    > Voltalar Subrace Kit (2 Abilities)

    VOID SORCERY
    > Super Self 1
    > Element Control 4

    LANGUAGE INFORMATION > REQUIRED
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    KATHAR ALTALAR Native Tongue (Fluent)
    COMMON Learned Language (Proficient)
    SULVALEY Learned Language (Learning)
    PROGRESSION INFORMATION > OPTIONAL
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    PROGRESSION TALENTS Warrior Level 2 / Sorcerer Level 1
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    I PULL OUT EVERY TRICK
    I DON'T REGRET A THING
    APPEARANCE INFORMATION > REQUIRED
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    VOID MUTATIONS
    Hy’riss resembles a humanoid dragon that is enhanced by their already natural features. Due to their race, they already are graced with wine purple taloned and scaled arms and digitigrade feet, along with a large lizard-like tail coated in the same scales and a circle of spikes at its end. Additionally, they have developed a large set of scaled horns, along with multiple spikes and flaps traveling along their back. Steam constantly floods from their nostrils as if they are harboring a heat source inside of them.
    CHARACTER APPEARANCE
    Hy’riss towers at a total of six feet and one inch tall, balancing on long scaled digitigrade feet. Their excessive training has left them with an athletic body build that is bordering on being ripped. Wine purple scales adorn their body in various places, covering up an excessive amount of scarring. Though in an attempt to cover them a prominent Allar bite remains visible on their cheek and chin. Sharp elven facial features match their cleverly neutral expression. Their fair skin is highlighted by their straight yet slightly wavy black hair that has blue stripes going through it in various places.
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    DAILY INVENTORY
    > Spare Regals
    > Dragon Statue
    > Cigarettes / Lighter
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    GOT NO SELF-CONTROL
    IT'S THE ROOT OF MY EVIL
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    BIRTH AND CHILDHOOD
    Hy’riss was born sometime in 258 B.C as a power Kathar in Rokh Ösaal. No recollection of this life exists however, as their earliest memories take place in Rokhara. Taken or sold from their parents at a young age to become a slave raised to fight for entertainment. Unaware of their birthdate and name they had to forge their own identity.
    ADOLESCENCE AND ADULTHOOD
    Their adolescence was spent training in unarmed combat to make them into a competitive warrior. They were allowed the luxury of learning sorcery and medical care to give them the proper advantages they needed to fight. Along with natural traits of observation and manipulation they soon became rather favorable to their owners. It was their owners who introduced them to the Cult of Evolution which eventually led them to Draga Ifrit. Through the knowledge they’d been granted they were eventually able to escape and leave Rokhara. Heading back to Rokh Ösaal with intentions of learning more of the cultists there. From this they gained mutations, ritual knowledge and a hunger to become a beacon for Draga Ifrit.
    REGALIA AND AFTER
    After leaving Rokhara completely the Kathar stumbled into the Regalian capital by complete accident. Finding themselves immediately entangled with a local Kaahl. After the death of their leaders, Hy’riss picked up the mantle and forged a new area for Cult of Evolution Kathar. After the first primal invasion of the void the death of their friend Coren shattered their faith. Motivating them to use the Garden of Everchanging to start a new life as a Voltalar.
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    ADOPTIVE FAMILY
    Osira (Partner) / Aeurisia (Daughter) / Coren (Deceased)
    OLD FRIENDS
    Rennyn / Lucrece / Camilla / Wasa / Sage / Cazna / Cal (Deceased) / Zambezi (Deceased) / Adea / Tullion / Neri / Theo
    NEWLY FOUND FRIENDSHIPS
    Fae / Narla
     
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    Hello I will be claiming this for staff review!
     
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    UPDATE 4/20/2021 (Proficiency Update)
    UPDATE 6/8/2021 (Overhaul + Racial Update)
    UPDATE 8/18/2021 (Skill + Life Story Update)

    UPDATE 11/13/2021 (Templete + Overhaul Update)
    UPDATE 1/27/2022 (Racial Change + Overhaul Update)
    UPDATE 2/15/2022 (Cahalism Update)
    LATEST UPDATE 2/26/2022 (Cahalism Rewritten + Kathar Update)
     
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    @Caelamus Updated to fit new proficiency update.
     
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    @Caelamus × Overhauled smaller sections pertaining to new Kathar ability rework. ×
    • « Basic Information: » Changed Subrace & age.
    • « Skill Information: » Changed Proficiencies (+2 Sorcery Spells & +1 New Volcurism Pack). Added new Racials. Added new Mutations. Changed languages to reflect new Subrace change.
    • « Visual Information: » Changed to reflect Subrace change.
    • « Life Story: » Changed to reflect Subrace change.
    • « Flavor: » Updated Basic, Visual, Personality, and Relationship Expansions.
     
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    @Caelamus A complete re-review is needed. The main changes are in the Skill Section & Life story, but also some additional touch-ups to all other sections.
     
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    Updated to new templet and general rework. Going to hopefully do IC learning into engineering and more spear just as a heads up.
     
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    Approved though on the caveat that those points cannot be taken from sorcery, the sorcery investment should stay permanent. They can come out of and be retconned from your mundane sources.
     
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    100% the plan! The points used are being set aside for IC learning!
     
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    Massive update due to racial change. Everything was updated to fit the new character archetype I'm going for.
     
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    @Caelamus

    I didn't make any crazy changes but I figure it still has to be reviewed. The character was turned into a Cahal.
    (Main areas updated: Abilities, Proficiencies, Basic Information, Appearance)
     
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    UPGRADES PEOPLE UPGRADES
    @Caelamus I added Cahalism in a hurry because I was excited to start RPing that path. I've had a chance to sit down and update beliefs and Cahal form since then. I've also updated life story to match the new Kathar update. Not sure if it needed a complete re-review but the updated sections are listed below!


    BASIC INFORMATION
    Ex-race updated.
    CORE INFORMATION
    Both paragraphs updated to religious change + Kathar update.
    APPEARANCE INFORMATION
    Updated Cahal form.
    LIFE STORY
    Updated to match new Kathar update.

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