Needs Re-Review Hastra Ebonsoot

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  1. FolkFume

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    Character Information
    • Full Name: Hastra Ebonsoot
    • Race: Half Fin’ullen Half Ailor (Fin’ullen Dominant)
    • Age: 110
    • Gender: Male
    • Eye Color: Dull Blue
    • A woodcutters axe.
    • Dagger
    • Hunting knife.
    • Pack of garettes.
    • A pack of Siggs infused with Yuntia Cactus.
    • Steel flask.

    Core Concept
    • Hastra is Blackmark from the beginning of the company’s rise and now a solider of the Von Kerle legion. He seeks to drag the world of Aloria into its next stage of greatness through the Void’s Power.
    Proficiencies
    • Strength: 6
      • Duelist Pack
      • UnyieldingPack
      • Pursuer Pack
      • Frenzy Pack
      • Skirmisher Pack
      • Heavy Pack
    • Constitution: 4
      • Bastion Pack
      • Block Pack
      • Metallurgy Pack
      • Counterplay Pack
    • Wisdom: 0
    • Dexterity: 1
      • Disguise Pack
    • Magic (Void): 3
      • Blessings Spell Pack
      • Mimicry Spell Pack
      • Casting Spell Pack
    • Charisma: 0
    Abilities
    • Vampirism:
      • Breaking Spell Pack
      • Afflicted Cursemaster Pack
      • Afflicted Evasion Pack
      • Afflicted Predator Pack
    1. Smoke Element
    2. Fire Element
    3. Dueling Brand
    4. Rune Smithing
    5. Prison Break
    6. Chain Break
    7. Dark Element
    8. Heat Immune
    9. Surfwalking
    Languages
    Common (Free)
    Fordic (Native)

    Appearance Information
    • Hastra appears as a Mundane Fin’ullen.
    • Hastra appears as a early to middle aged Fin’ullen with fair skin, black hair and a set of dull blue eyes. He keeps his hair in an organized, short-cut fashion, though it is drawn into a decorated bun when he wears it longer, usually in winter. His ears bear a few pieces of silver-colored jewelry, most notable of all being a circular silver mold right around the ear-tips where they had been clipped (Hastra's ears used to be pointed like an elf's). His body is relatively shaved clean of body hair as opposed to the usual style of Fin’ullen, and features many shallow scars. Hastra appears rather muscular all across his body in a uniform fashion while also standing tall at a height of 6’5”. His expression is often worn in a very stern and judging demeanor, even when he is just neutrally disposed.
    • Vampiric Form (Steros): Hastra’s vampire form resembles that of a skeleton, only its body has been charred into a mix of hollow blacks. Embedded into his skull, one can see the malevolent pinpoints of red light burning in his eye sockets. If Hastra were to don armor in this transformation, his body would fuse with the armor.
    Life Story
    • Childhood: Hastra was first born in the year of 200 AC on the Eve of December within Varminth, one of many petty kingdoms on the Continent of Ceardia. His mother, Dellene Hannoor. A Fin’ullen hailing from what few of the Nelfin Population still remained on Ceardia since the Cataclysm. His father, an Ailor, native to Ceardia and a blacksmith to one of the petty lords of Varminth. Unfortunately for the young Hastra, only a few years after his birth, his mother would be the victim of Ceardia’s rampant distrust of the Nelfin within Ceardia and was killed.

    • Adolescence: The years of Hastra’s Adolescence were unfortunately very harsh ones. With the Warlord Wars in full swing and violence at an all time high, people took to taking Hastra’s Half-Fin’ullen heritage as a means to mistreat him. This mistreatment in combination with a bad home life, led him to being involved in small-time gangs and petty crime. Hastra was, however, eventually caught for one crime and sentenced to have a hand removed, a punishment he narrowly avoided due to his father’s influence as the local lord’s blacksmith. This did, however, scare Hastar away from crime, at least against the kingdom of Varminth.

    • Early Adulthood: Devoted much more time to his father’s business as a forge worker, though he’d have to begin working it alone soon. Hastra’s old man was only getting older and the responsibility of running the forge began to fall to Hastra. The locals of the kingdom and the lord himself, didn't enjoy the idea of a half-elf inheriting the business of a lord’s personal smith and thus, Hastra’s livelihood was thrown into question. In order to combat these ideas, Hastra clipped the points on his ears and pledged himself to Blackmark Companies of Carl Blackmoor, Petty King of Varminth.

    • Advanced Years: Hastra served as a Blackmark of Carl until Wulfryc Hestaingh disposed Carl Blackmoor as leader of Varminth, at which point he continued to serve Wulfryc as a blackmark, but also began to take out contracts from off Continent, eventually breaking away from the kingdom to serve a house in Regalia. Eventually Hastra was issued a contract to bodyguard a young boy during his Sabbatical. The boy, young and brash, enlisted into the Regalian army. Hastra, to continue his contract, offered his service as a mercenary to the Regalian Military during the Boy's time among them. By 268 AC however, Hastra found himself back to work at his old home Cearida, the Destruction of Old Ceardia had begun, and Hastra was sent to aid in the relief. After seeing the entire continent of his home torn apart, assumedly by the Void, Hastra had an idea of what true power looked like. He turned to investing himself in the Void then, traveling off to the forces of Von Kerle in Calemberg to pledge himself to yet another Warlord.

    • Reason for going to Regalia: Hastra eventually heard about the attack by the Bralona on Regalia, heart of the empire and chose to travel abroad to the city, in hopes that he might be able to use the chaos to claim it for Vampire kind.
     
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  2. AshenRoman

    AshenRoman Local Holy Knight Supremium

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    Peer Review!

    Note: I am not staff, just wanted to offer some friendly advice from what I noticed while reading through the post!

    Race

    You haven't specified if the Ailor or Nelfin half is the dominant side of the character, I'd recommend doing that so you can select which racial's they have.

    Proficiency

    I noticed your points were off, more importantly, pertaining to the magic tab. You've allocated 2 points, but taken 3 packs. Additionally, you haven't specified the dimension from which your character draws their magic from (Exist or Void).

    I haven't noticed anything else @FolkFume, hope you enjoy the character!

    <3
     
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  3. fantuinn

    fantuinn most honest biped in athens Staff Member Lore2

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    Claimed for review.​
     
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    fantuinn most honest biped in athens Staff Member Lore2

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  5. FolkFume

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    @fantuinn
    Gave Hastra a few minor changes with the removal of vandalism and addition of all the fancy Link Powers.
    Removed Volacrum and bought Fire Magic.
    Removed Shadow Magic and bought Cosmic Magic.
    Removed Breaker Magic from Vampirism points and swapped with Metal Magic
    Added Arcane Magic with the point that freed up.

    All changes highlighted in Violet, have a good one!
     
  6. Scribbe

    Scribbe Scribma Male Staff Member Lore1

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    This looks fine, approved.
     
  7. FolkFume

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    @Scribbe I've went ahead and updated Hastra's app in line with the new Spell Point system. I took 2 points from Magic and put them into Constitution for Counterplay Pack and Tradeoff Pack. And have generally just reswapped the points with no other changes. All changes highlighted in Violet, have a good one!
     
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    gnomery avery, local they/themmie Staff Member Lore1

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    @gnomery Blip blop, update numero 2. With the new Technique update I've re-arranged Hastra's stats a bit and renamed the abilities. In his backstory, I also removed all mention of my other character Reynard Benac from it and replaced the mentions with just "Young Boy". This is due to the idea that I may update Reynard's background in the coming weeks to better fit the concept he has become. All changes highlighted in Pink, have a good one!
     

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