Rejected Sheet Fiorella Peirgarten

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  1. CanadianNeighbor

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    ‒〚 Fiorella Peirgarten〛‒

    ‹⋅ "Some women fear the fire, while others simply become it." ⋅
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    ‒〚 Resurrect Me - Trouble - Everything or Nothing 〛‒
    -=- Cold Blood - Angry too - Dangerous -=-
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    "That's the price you pay,
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    Character Information 〙
    • Full Name Fiorella Beatrix Peirgarten
      • Previously Known as Fiorella Vicieux
    • Nicknames Fio, Ella, Fi
    • 〖 Race 〗 Hinterland Ailor
    • 〖 Culture 2/4 Anglian, 1/4 Leutz-Vixe, 1/4 Ithanian
    • 〖 Age 22
      • 〖 Day of Birth 〗 June 12, 287 A.C.
    • 〖 Sex 〗 Female
    • 〖 Sexuality 〗 Demisexual
    • 〖 Eye Colour 〗Emerald Green
    • 〖 Religion 〗Unionism (10/10)
    • 〖 Preferred Weapon 〗 Polearm and Anglian Longbow
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    Core Concept 〙

    Having grown up with a strong Unionist influence of a father, Fiorella upkeeps her practices to this day, her beliefs unwavering. She enjoys topics related to the religion, and holds prejudice for those who deny its validity.

    A calm and practical, and at times insensitive, enforcer who goes through life with a head-over-heart attitude, Fiorella pushes herself to do what she believes must be done, with the intention of defending her values and family at all costs. With little time spent on finding her own ambitions, she's now caught exploring life's many opportunities.

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    "Just another product of today,
    Rather be the hunter than the prey"

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    Proficiency Information 〙
    Proficiency:
    • CORE PROFICIENCY50 Total《 0 Unspent 》
      • +12 Spear Combat (+7 Invested, +5 Seizing Innovation)
      • +16 Heavy Ranged Combat (+16 Invested)
    • TALENT PROFICIENCY
      • +10 Perception Training (+10 Invested)
    • HOBBY PROFICIENCY10 Hobby
      • +5 Husbandry Art (+5 Invested)
        • « Leon » Anglian Shepherd
      • +15 Hunting Art (+10 Hobby, +5 Racial Boost)
      • +6 Drawing Art (+6 Invested)
      • +3 Engineering (+3 Invested)
        • Weapons Pack
      • +3 Linguistics (+3 Invested)
        • Leutz-Vixe
    Body Shape:
    • 30 Body Stat
      • 12 Spear + 16 Heavy Ranged + 5 Seizing Destiny
      • = 33, Capped at 30
    • Ripped Body Build
    • Low Body Fat
    Languages:
    • Common | 10/10 〗Learned throughout her childhood.
    • Anglisch | 9/10 〗 Grew up in Anglia.
    • Leutz-Vixe | 6/10〗Linguistics.
    • Ithanian | 7/10 〗Racial special.
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    〘 Ability Information 〙
    • RACIAL ABILITIES
      • Ailor Familiar
        • Alette Hinterlandic Raven
      • Dark Empathy
      • Seizing Destiny
      • Seizing Innovation
      • People of Many Tongues
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    "And you're standing on the edge,
    Face up 'cause you're a natural,
    A beating heart of stone"

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    Appearance Information 〙

    Fiorella has no abnormal physical qualities as of right now.

    Fiorella has a stoic demeanor as her constant display, her mannerisms only softening for those she deems herself close to. Her appearance is well looked after, with her long, medium blonde hair rarely out of a tight bun. She stands at a towering height of 6'6", and has muscle definition along her arms and legs, her build that of a fighter. She sticks to darker tones, for the most part, her love of red shining through in many of her outfits, which she often pairs with gold jewelry. Although comfortable in gowns, she has a preference for trousers and boots, the part Anglian adding a pelt to her style whenever possible.

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    "You gotta be so cold,
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    Life Story 〙

    On June 12, 287 A.C, Fiorella Beatrix Peirgarten was born alongside her twin sister, Alesia, in Anglia. Despite being the eldest by mere minutes, she accepted the role with a sense of dignity and responsibility. Her father, who had attained the noble title as Julius Peirgarten, devoted much of his attention to the two girls, especially during their younger years. Although growing up with four brothers, it was her sister she was the closest to.

    Fiorella was an active child, which sparked a sense of desire for investigation and curiosity within her. When it came to chores, she helped tend to the animals, and lived the farm life with comfort and ease. She placed her full admiration within her father, who was developing a commendable reputation in her eyes. Looking up to him motivated her to improve in her studies, and eventually piqued her interest in the art of combat and commanding. While she had originally intended on wielding a longsword, similar to Julius, her sights eventually narrowed on the usage of a spear. Grasping the weapon’s concept came effortlessly to her, allowing for her to pick it up with both contentment and resolution. Her reading continued to prosper, igniting the fondness of history and geography that she would cling to for times to come. She was eventually taught simple techniques relating to trap creations and tracking, her father allowing for her to accompany him on minor hunting expeditions, where she received her first Anglian Longbow.

    After her father's separation to the Peirgarten family, her surname, Vicieux, began to represent that of nobility, allowing for her to remain in the City of Regalia, much to her liking. She joined the Old Guard for a brief time and assisted during the Sendrassian War, under the command of her father. Shortly after, he was assumed dead, leaving her and her siblings to mourn. Her second cousin, Amelina, welcomed her and Alesia into the Peirgarten family, granting them with a new beginning.

    Fiorella often found herself visiting the Holy City as a child. With her father's flourishing reputation, she was filled with both pride and determination, the young woman preparing herself for a
    permanent stay in Regalia. Months after her father's disappearance, she ventured off, travelling and in denial. Unsuccessful in her search for him, she has once again returned, only now with the intent of remaining.

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    #1 CanadianNeighbor, Oct 14, 2020
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    Approved.
     
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  4. CanadianNeighbor

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    @Staff Roleplay
    Hello, just made some minor alterations to her proficiency points!
     
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    Lizmun yeah Staff Member Lore2

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    @CanadianNeighbor Taken for review! I'll give you a review thursday night or friday afternoon.
     
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    Lizmun yeah Staff Member Lore2

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    @CanadianNeighbor Here's my review:

    Basic Information
    - No issues​
    Skill Information
    - Please include a physical stat calculation next to the physical stat number
    - Please include your racial spells under the skill section​
    Visual Information
    - No issues​
    Personality
    - No issues​
    Life Story
    - No issues​

    Please make the changes in another color then tag me!
     
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    @Lizmun All changes made in red!
     
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    @Lizmun Just finished updating her proficiencies and adjusting her backstory to fit the changes. All edits made in red!
     
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    @Lizmun Hello! I finally updated her app to fit the new template, and just made changes to her profs
     
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    Claimed for staff review! Expect a reply shortly
     
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    Yurs real life catgirl Staff Member Lore2

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    Howdy! App looks solid for the most part, there's just a minor proficiency error that needs to be fixed before I can approve:
    • Honed Skill 2 can only be used to boost Hobby Category proficiencies, which does not include combat profs. An easy fix would be taking 5 points out of Dancing Art and putting it into Spear Combat, then having Honed Skill 2 apply to Dancing Arts. Up to you!
    Go ahead and tag me once you've made the necessary edits so I can review again. Thank you!
     
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    @Yurs All changes have been made!
     
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    Yurs real life catgirl Staff Member Lore2

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    Perfect!

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    @Yurs Hey! Just made some edits due to racial changes. The points gained from linguistics are now placed in hunting art
     
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    Looks great!

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    @Yurs After playing the character some more, I decided to change around just a few of her points! I switched the dancing out for drawing, took away any points invested into rogue, and added to strength training!
     
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    Looks good!

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  20. CanadianNeighbor

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    @Yurs Hi! I decided that the strength training didn’t suit the character as much, so I placed any points into heavy bow instead! Just a minor change
     
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