Rejected Sheet Esfir Afsoun

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  1. Karthadon

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    Character Information

    • Full Name: Esfir Afsoun

    • Race: Wylathar Kathar

    • Age: 36 ( May 15, 273 AC )

    • Sex: Female

    • Gender: Cisgender Female

    • Sexuality: Find out IC ;-)

    • Eye Color: blue
    Core Concept

    • Despite having the knowledge that there are many religions, Esfir has decided that the concept of religion is not anything she worries about or cares of.

    • Esfir is a bit of a troublemaker. She does whatever she wants, regardless of the morals of it. All of her actions are on a whim.
    Proficiency Information

    • +15 Dagger Combat

    • +5 Baking art

    • +10 Dancing art (+5 hobby)

    • +10 Vocal Art (+5 Hobby)

    • +10 Instrument Art

    • +3 Sorcery Point-buy

    • +3 Roguery Point-buy

    • +9 UNSPENT POINTS
    • 20 Physical Stat
    Ability Information

    • Sorcery:
      • Flux Shift 6

      • Light Mend 2 (Sorcery Skill 1)
    • Roguery:
      • Rogue Gift 4
    • Kathar Racials (Wylathar):
      • Kathar Binding 1

      • Kathar Binding 2

      • Arcane Mastery 1

      • Arken Speculate 1

      • Sorcery Skill 1
    Languages

    • Common (Free)

    • Katharic (Parent)
    Appearance Information

    • Esfir stands at 5’3. She is bottom-heavy, having more weight in her legs and abdomen than in her arms and chest. She’s not very muscular and is rather small. She has purple hair with she lets grow, which is mostly straight but somewhat wavy.

    • Esfir has gray horns that grow out of her temple, and glow purple near the tips.
    Life Story

    • Esfir was born to a wylathar woman in Daendroc.

    • Esfir got along decently with her family, but constantly argued with her three brothers and two sisters. She was the oldest of her siblings. Esfir was always known for speaking whatever came to mind.

    • As Esfir got older, she made the wrong friends. The people she bonded with were criminals and lowlife scum, consistently getting in trouble with the law.

    • Trouble eventually caught up to Esfir, and she had to flee. After working at various bars as a dancer and singer to evade the spooky guards, she was found out, and sneaked to regalia on a ship.
    • Esfir found herself giving birth to a kathar boy named Arlon, unsure who the father was.
    • As she struggled to raise Arlon on her own, she got into drugs and spiraled down into unpredictability.
    • Shortly after Arlon became an adult, Esfir found herself in multiple fights with her child's friend's mother, Erenia Leoleth.
    • During one of these fights, things got out of hand, and Erenia accidentally killed Esfir.
     
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    #1 Karthadon, Mar 9, 2021
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    Approved.
     
  4. Karthadon

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    @Arhbi I rewrote my proficiencies due to the proficiency update. Highlighted in blue
     
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    Last edited: Apr 20, 2021
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    @Lizmun Please mark this sheet as rejected. I no longer wish to play them. Thank you!
     
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    @Lizmun I would like to have my character reapproved, but I'm not sure what needs to be worked on, if anything.
     
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    Claimed for review! Expect a reply shortly
     
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    Howdy! The app looks good for the most part, but there's a few edits that need to be made before I can give it the greenlight:
    • You're currently using the old app format. I would recommend changing over to the new version, as it is significantly less work on your behalf and marginally easier for staff to review.
    • Please include your Physical Stat calculation in your Phys Stat section.
    Go ahead and tag me once you've made the necessary changes. Thank you!
     
  12. Karthadon

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    @Yurs How does this look?
     
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  14. Karthadon

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    @Caelamus Hey, could you reject the sheet as this character has been permanently killed by @ghosta_babes :)
    Thank you
     
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    Caelamus Sir Honeybear Staff Member Lore1

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    Ok
     

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