Rejected Sheet Elvira Treji Hood

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    ~ Basic Info.

    • Full Name: Elvira Treji Hood
      ~ Elvira of Redford
    • Age: 26
    • Gender: Female
    • Race: Cielothar (Circle of Suriiel)
    • Sexuality: Straight
    • Preferred Weapon: Fists and spells
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    Skill Info.

    • Total Points: 31 prof (10 hobby)

    • Fist Combat (+5) (Life)
    • Needlework Arts (+10 Hobby)+5 (Life)
    • Bodycare Training (+5) (Talent)
    • Stealth Rogue (+5)(Talent)
    • Drawing Art (+5) (Life)
    • Sorcery (+16) (Life)
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    ~ Body Shape
    5 x 1 = 5
    5 x .5 = 2.5

    • Physical Stat: 8
    • Slim
    • Low Body fat
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    ~ Languages

    • Common (Free language)
    • Modern Altalar (Learned in Regalia)
    • Plains Elven (learned from the Orphanage caretakers)
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    ~ Racial Abilities

    • Lightblessed Familiar
    • The Wind's Cradle
    • Sense of Compassion
    • Light-Blooded
    • Animal Instincts
    • Timeless Breeze
    • Familiar's shape (Wolf)
    ~ Spells
    • True Path I (Light-Blooded)
    • Flux Shift VII
    • Light Mend II
    • Magic Sight I
    • Element control VII

    ~ Mutations

    • Pagan spring
    • Pagan Horn
    • Pagan book
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    ~ Visual Info.

    • Eye color: Blue
    • Hair color: Brunette
    • Hair Style: Long and Straight. (Wears hair up a lot)
    • Skin Color: Tan
    • Clothing: Simple dresses
    • Height: 5'5
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    ~ The Core List

    • Character Alignment: Lawful neutral
    • Character Personality Type: Adventurer
    • Character’s Religion: Estel - 4/10
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    ~ Likes

    • Loves raspberry scones, Sparring, and being with friends!
    ~ Dislikes

    • Hates seeing loved ones being harmed, being lied to, and being manipulated.
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    Life Story


    0-5 years

    El began life in an Orphanage run by a few Cielothar who began to teach her thread work as a way to earn a living in Regalia. She was always enamoured with sewing, drawing, and nature even from her earliest years. El even learned Plains Elven during her time in the orphanage with the other Cielothar.


    5-10 years

    El, having lived in close proximity to the streets, began to explore the city and it’s darker parts. It was there she met a young crimson named Aykut, he was kind and they looked after each other. From this connection she grew closer to the kind crimson witch who she began to learn the blade to protect. During this time she was adopted by an Arcanum Guard for a time who served as her caretaker. During her time with her caretaker, he would bring her books plenty of books to keep her entertained. The books were mostly about adventures and different cultures. The books that fascinated El the most, were the books on The Pagan Cultures. El continued to research more on the Pagan culture, but stopped after some time.


    10-15 years

    As she grew up she honed her sewing skill to sew for her friends, then she met a Ailor named James larkson. The two bonded and he would come to be a close uncle to her by the time he became an Url. She had grown to follow the Old Gods like her uncle deciding to also become a ritualist, Thus beginning her research on The Pagan cultures once again. This research and her Uncle teaching her more about The Pagan Cultures, she came to understand Old Makdth. After she turned 15, El decided to leave the caretaker who had abandoned her in the year she turned 15 and asked her Uncle to give her Mutations which would denote her wish to join the clan of her Uncle and become a member of the Clan of Treji.

    15-20
    During her next few years she had been adopted by Coen Hood and his fiance Ingrid. El was over joyed that she was finally adopted and had parents. Her adoptive father taught her how to wield a dagger for self defense since she was prone to getting attacked. A year or so passed and her father had to move way to help his parents. Elvira and Ingrid were able to visit him, but it was hard.

    20-26
    Elvira had decided to spend a few years with her father away from regalia to learn new sewing techniques and how the fashion was where her father was. After a while of being there she had finally decided to come back to Regalia.
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    Elvira decided to drift away from the Old Faith and decided to believe in Estel. She started getting more in depth to that religion, wanting to be more like the race she was born as.
     
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    @xXFizzyFoxXx
    Make the following edits in RED. Then tag me when the edits have been made.
    • First thing I need you to do is raise the height of your character to at least 5'5" as that in the minimum height requirement of the Cielothar Race.
    • Secondly, please be sure to include and be specific about where your proficiency points are being allocated.
    • Expand life story to atleast a paragraph and a half minimum.
     
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    @Anarchizm
    I fixed what you asked. I hope I did the second thing correctly.
     
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    Approved.
     
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    @Anarchizm - I aged her up and forgot to add the points, Their text color is blue!
     
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    Re-approved.
     
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    Thank you!
     
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    @Anarchizm , Changes were made in blue!! Prof update time!!
     
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    I need a new re-viewer! This is an old character that I re-did up.
     
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    I'll be picking this up for review. Expect a follow-up shortly!
     
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    @BeaneyBaby Here is my review. Please make the following edits and tag me once complete:
    • Needlework not Needwork in the proficiencies section
    • Personality type needs to be as described in the template
    • The 5-10 section seems too young for what you describe. She's trying to rob guards at what, 8 years old? I'd also take out the part about dating in 10-15
     
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    Fixed.
     
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