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    ➣ Full Name | Joseph Cecil Soryn-Grimm
    ➣ Aliase(s) | Eigoth Latimer
    ➣ Age | 35
    ➣ Gender | Male
    ➣ Race | Altalar/Ailor Halfbreed
    ➣ Sexuality | Heterosexual

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    Total Points | 50
    ➣ 20 Greatsword Combat
    ➣ 15 Fist Combat
    ➣ 8 Heavy Ranged Combat
    ➣ 3 Linguistics Knowledge



    Hobby Points | 10 + 4 invested
    ➣ 5 Writing Arts
    ➣ 5 Hunting Arts

    ➣ 4 Instrument Arts | Invested




    Body Shape | 25
    20 + 15 = 35 Physical Stat ( Capped at 25)
    Strongman body shape & Low body fat


    Languages | 4
    Common/ Learned / Fluent
    D'Ithanie/ Parent language / Fluent
    Modern Altalar/ Parental language / Fluent
    Réginyelv / Learned/ Fluent

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    ➣ Eye Color | Sea-blue
    Hair Color | Auburn
    Skin Color | Anglian pale
    Clothing | Szabadok mask, typically paired with dark, fine clothing and a red scarf at times
    Height | 6'4

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    Alignment | Chaotic Good
    Personality Type | The Outlaw
    Religion | Bacchan Unionism 3/10

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    Childhood



      • Joseph is born to Nlaea Soryn and Jonathan Grimminger as their third child in the Soryn-Grimms’ living room on December of 281 AC.
      • Quickly after, the couple moves to Ithania to escape the Holy City, due to some bad experiences within each of their own pasts there and wanting to provide a fresh start for their child.
      • Joseph’s life settles in Havenreach within Ithania, spending precious childhood days there, him being the center of attention for the first two years of his life.
      • Joseph’s third (and final) sibling Nlossae is born a little over a year after his own birth.
      • Joseph is loved and cared for by his parents, who give him attention at any second they are able to, him being the ‘baby’ of the house even after Nlossae was born for a short period of time.
    Adolescence



      • Joseph spends his days running around with his many friends, play fighting and getting into all sorts of trouble with them.
      • The child finds out that his sister is being verbally bullied by the next-door children and whatnot when one day when he finds her curled up in a corner crying in her room, after comforting her he storms out and goes to confront the kids using the small amount of knowledge he gained from play fighting he ended up beating the children to the point of bleeding. Because of this he’s sent to spend a few months with his Aunt and her family in attempts to rehabilitate him so to speak in attempts to prevent anything like this from happening again.
      • While at his Aunt’s house he learns various techniques to cope with his anger, the most notable being music. Joseph learns how to control his vocal range and play the lute. This sticks with him to this day, although he’s far too shy and embarrassed to display his music to anyone.
      • Joseph comes back and finds out that his sister has been getting bullied yet again once she comes home with her arm broken and covered in bruises. In all his childish innocence, he decides the best thing to do is to get away and not be trapped in their house - which is achieved by attempting to move their living location without parent permission at age fourteen. -- And generally explore the world as they do so!
      • At the age of fifteen he stumbles across the Feer-Drakken school in Magnaar and begins training with the students and begins his journey as an eventual warrior in the school. At first he began learning how to swing a heavy weapon, quickly realising this was no place for his fourteen year old sister he makes the decision to contact his parents and has them take her back home, him already quite far in his training his parents decide to let him stay. Keeping as much in contact with his immediate family as he could, even scrounging together money for the occasional visit back home to stave off creeping homesickness.
    Adulthood ♜



      • After finally completing his schooling he eventually had relocated to the city of Regalia and began searching for whatever work he could manage to stumble across.
      • Soon after this relocation he met his on and off lover, Abrielle Corlisse, whom he’d eventually have his first child with some time later, although he wasn’t aware of this for at least a year due to the fact that he gets kidnapped by his Aunt and Uncle in attempts to cope with the poor health of their brother and vent their anger in general.
      • After finding himself in his aunt and uncle’s attic, Joseph is forced through various types of tortures in the dank space - isolated within there for an entire year straight as some sort of torture slave before being released. This time in that dark attic leaves ghosts for him to revision the experience - scarring his mind with mental and physical trauma.
      • Tragedy would soon engulf Joseph’s life as his father’s deteriorating health would eventually lead him to finally pass away of a broken heart almost immediately after the brutal murder of his mother Nlaea at the hands of a past friend of his. An event in which Joseph personally witnessed first hand.
      • Soon after in his time of grief had he been met by a newly found personal friend and now employer, Chen Jia, as a hired muscle of sorts while he’d begin trying to start a budding career as a sellsword.
      • For a while, he and his lover Abrielle fluctuate in closeness due to her straying to others. The duo is on and off for a while, at one point choosing to house separately.
      • Just as things start to get better Abrielle leaves to visit her family in Ithania for what was supposed to be a few short months, only to not return as originally planned. Not hearing from her whatsoever he’s forced to give up hope that she’ll return and raise their son on his own.
      • For a brief time, he’s employed under the Howlester’s as a house guard, before finding himself needing to take more and more time off, costing him his job. It’s because of this that he once more takes up his position as a mercenary for hire, which had lead him under the employment of Iladar Eolora.
      • After suffering the loss of his left hand Joseph entered a self imposed retirement for some time, soon after entering a downward spiral of isolation and self pity. However after having his motivation and confidence rekindled by the encouragement of his closest friends he has now found himself taking up arms once again and now within the ranks of The Crimson Lions upon the recommendation of a close friend.
      • Inevitably, the life Joseph made for himself devolved once more into chaos. Resentment and frustration with his place in life finally boiled over when faced with the loss of those he once knew and even loved. Broken down and vulnerable, too weak for the fights that were now practically all he had left, he ultimately faced a decision - stay as he is and try to patch together his life once more, or accept an offer, and become an Url. Where once there would have been abject refusal, now there was only a reluctant acceptance. Submitting to symbiosis, Joseph underwent perhaps the most dramatic shift in his life, reconstructed in both body and mind. Now letting go of his old name and taking up the moniker "Eigoth".
      • Eigoth, using House Latimer funds, enrolled into a private Marshalry academy for a brief period of five years, learning the basics of commanding a private battalion, coordinating movements with larger forces, and leading from the front lines to better aid the patriarch's war efforts against other groups.
      • Eventually his life would take another unexpected turn, now stripped of his Urlhood, Eigoth is at yet another crossroads in his life. Now uncertain of his purpose, and his identity still..

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    Just a note: He will have decreased combat ability as a result of not being a strongman build.
     
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    I'm aware, I was fine with the penalty since it couldn't be much worse than trying to use a hand-less, eye-less character like the last.
     
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    me and cat helped a shitton reminder
     
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    Couldn'ta done it without ya. Thanks for putting up with my verbal garbage fire.
     
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    "W-Why did you name your sword, Joe?"
     
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    Review

    Basic Information
    • Remove the half Altalar, reading through the application there is no reason to have the Altalar half and doing so would result in a completely different character personality wise and such.
    • It appears you are the brother of the other character I reviewed. I advised them to change their character to a Qadir, but I want you two to figure out a culture logically and make sure it adheres to that culture. Ensure that all names match up and the upbringing of the two.
    Make the above changes and tag myself once completed @12wolfen15_
     
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    I changed him to be a Half Cielothar, That good? @Wumpatron
     
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    Yes, consulted with the other person. Thankfully you both were under my reviewage. Approved
     
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    @Wumpatron Edits made in regard to new half-race and proficiency update
     
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    You will need to specify that they are Half-Ailor in the race section. But since that is a minor addition I will not withhold your approval.

    So approved
     
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    Hello! I'll be claiming this app for staff review!
     
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    ayy sweet, thank you.
     
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    @Caelamus Asking for a re-review. Made changes body shape and added to life story. Changes are marked in blue
     
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    @Caelamus Made changes to proficiency points as well as updated to include racial bonus. Also added to life story. Changes were made in BluEeee
     
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    Ayy thanks! You the real mvp
     
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    OH, also made updates to profs and age. forgot to lead with that @Caelamus
     
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    @Caelamus Heyo it's me. I changed some proficiency's around and adjusted bodystat what with the new update and kept these changes in BLUE.
     
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    @Caelamus Howdy, gonna be the LAST time i bug ya for a re-approval so soon i swear. Just updated age to reflect how long I've had the character as well as 86'd ritualism since I never really used it to begin with other changes were to profs. Changes in BLuEEEe
     
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    @Caelamus Made additions to life story and proficiency to reflect character's change to Url. Changes made in BluUEEeeE
     
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    @Caelamus Ayy gonna have to be a pain in the ass again SRY. Added Marine Tactic to profs to reflect tutoring. Changes in the Same ol same ol
     
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    @Caelamus Realized I was missing 5 points. Adjusted accordingly in blue man group
     
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    okay LAST time for a while i promise (kinda)
    @Caelamus Updated the title and put aesthetic shit, just need a quick re-approve


    shoutout to @Valorist for fixing it up all nice and pretty
     
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    @Caelamus Howdy, made edits to age and profs to reflect ic language tutoring, changes in crystal blue pursusasion
     
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