Deo Dei Termini

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    Basic Information

    Name: Deo dei Termini
    Age: 55
    Gender: Male
    Race: Returned Dressolini Ailor (Previously Url)
    Sexuality: Bisexual
    Main Ambition:
    To piece together the fractioned measures of his lives and reclaim himself and his tomorrow that he has searched for.

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    Skill Information
    Total Proficiency Points: 85 Points; 50 Core, 10 Hobby, 10 Talent, 5 Racial, 5 Lineage 5 Honed Skill
    -Core Proficiency:

    10- Rapier Combat (Core)
    5- Sword Combat (Core)

    -Talent Proficiency: 35 Core +10 Talent + 5 Racial + 5 Lineage= 60
    10-General Command (5 Talent 5 Honed Skill)
    10-Frontline Command (5 core, 5 Racial)
    10-Statecraft Command (10 core)
    10-Siege Command (10 core)
    10-Conning Rogue (10 core)


    -Hobby Proficiency:
    -10 Theater Arts (10 Hobby)
    -10 Husbandry Arts (5 Talent 5 Lineage)

    Languages:
    +10 Common (Childhood)
    +10 Dressalo (Childhood)

    Visual Information
    Eye Color: Emerald Green
    Hair Color: Salt and Pepper on the top.
    Hair Style: Curly hair on top of his head.
    Skin Color: Muted Olive Toned
    Clothing: Militaristic
    Height: 6ft
    Body Build: 10 Rapier +5 Sword= 15
    Having 15-19 Physical Stat means your Character can bench press up to 110% of their body weight, which is considered slightly above average.


    Weapon of Choice: Soldiers

    Special Traits/Spells/Mutations
    • The Mountaineers (+10 Frontline Command): The Mountaineers are a Heavy Siege Infantry unit with thick torso plating and helmets with the Voulge and Falchion as their primary weapons of choice. Best used in the scaling of walled structures and a lengthy endurance, this unit is one that was made to last. In its various iterations The Mountaineers have been anything from the military Body to Police force within the Termini Region, their current format and training revolves around the invasion of walled Cities and traversing difficult terrain.
    • Drahl Ailor Lineage (Chosen Bird is an Ceardian Long Talon named Dominus.)
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    • Spirit Familiar I Description: Deo has feathers that have grown behind his ears in an arching fashion. He has also acquired a collection of long black feathers that are speckled throughout his hair.
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    Personality and Abilities
    Deo is perceived by others in a very unique to the individual sense of communication. He generally wears three different faces depending on who he is communicating with, the face he wears for those who serve him and the family is one of a more orderly and strict disciplined nature. The second face is the one he wears for his family which in truth is his much more relaxed and natural state of being, fairly sarcastic yet overall nonchalant when in idle or social environments and interactions with them. The Third face he wears is the one he wears for the newcomer or the stranger, this is one of subtle temptations and sly suave communication, generally using a silver tongue ESC. Style of befriending or beguiling an individual depending on their necessity within his life or the welfare of his family.

    Inside Deo feels rather free, perhaps from the fairly catered lifestyle he leads to the freedom he has had so far regarding his leading style for the Rainbow Company. In the case of his family, while he believes them all capable of handling their own at most points he worries in the manner a protective sibling would. Finally, in regards to his friends, he grows worried simply for the fact that he does not wish to lose them. Deos’ confidence stems from experience, he feels far more comfortable with the known than the unknown, venturing further to say that he would be apprehensive towards the unknown. Despite these facts, Deo sees himself as a rather smooth and collected individual, his ego aiding his mannerisms.

    To Friends, Deo acts as just one of the boys, drinking his fancy assortment of beverages, making jokes and telling stories, singing songs and playing music with them all the while he is with them if this group of friends is into that sort of thing, however indifferent friend cliches he will still tend to act positively and generally approachable until faced with a situation of opposition. To his family, he is usually the center of military questionings and puns. He tries to remain as lighthearted and enthusiastic in the company of his family. Depending on what sort of Lover this may be and what type of relationship they have. All of this differs especially from Strangers due to the fact that Deo becomes much more personally attached to those he knows rather than the passerby or unknown individual entirely.

    Deos morality tends to stray more towards the Family moral idea rather than any other. While he may have the tendency to lash out violently against those who wrong him he will tend to be far more positive in his actions rather than the inverse. In truth, Deo is perhaps far more justice-oriented than others in his own personal way, meaning that while he does have a sense of justice, it is tainted by his own personal views of the subject that will lead him towards making decisions based off of heart at some points. For those who do not actively work to serve the Empire and the Great Way, have no purpose being met by future generations.
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    Life Story
    Childhood:

    Was born in the great province of Termini to a loving and supportive mother and father by the names of Maria and Mario II.

    Was taught how to count regals before he learned how to write the full alphabet at the age of five.

    Had been enrolled in the Academia dei Termini at the age of 10 and was taught the arts of Sculpting, and instrument playing, soon developing his own voice to be harmonious with his favorite instrument the Guitar.

    At the age of 12 his studies shifted at the behest of his father towards a more militaristic route, rescheduling his time from music and literacy lessons to add in more combat training and Military Drill and Ceremony, excelling more so in those than the swords and rapiers they attempted to teach him with.

    At the age of 15 found a great deal of favor with the Mace and made use of it as his weapon from that point onward.

    Adolescence:
    Grew more proficient with his chosen weaponry until being sent to the School of Marshalry at the age of 16 in the Crown Isle, spending eight years of study at that point where he graduated fully as an Officer within the Regalian Army.

    Adulthood:
    Over time by the age of 25 he began to work more towards his personal talents, Literacy was a reborn gift he had adopted mixed in part with his own harmonious voice, he soon had a custom built guitar built that which he learned how to play extremely well over the years, mixing it with his own vocal prowess.

    Now at the age of 55, he has proven to be confident in his command capabilities, capable of holding his own in combat. He hopes that by this time next year he will have attained the highest honors or very close to it and will be recognized as a respectable war master and General of the Regalian Military at large.

    Recent:
    Has grown older with time and has since found himself with the companionship of a new lover, though his call for the battlefield draws him back to the Capital once more as the aging Vanilla Scented man heard word of new campaigns being mustered by the higher noble families within the City. Even more recently, the dei Termini found himself stricken with a great deal of sickness, after returning to Termini for a Work Vacation he found himself under the effects of poison! His body had begun to deteriorate rapidly and could not find a means to aid himself through Magic or Medicine quick enough. He had thus resigned himself to the idea of going to Jorrhildr to retrieve an Oorl Worm so that it may save his life and he may be able to live on to continue to serve and Love. Though eh soon came to find what he sought after was within Regalia itself and after a brief conversation, was given Thuu, the Oorl Worm from the Veteran Url named Ingemar.

    Deo after a bit of time as an Url in the Goretaan and subsequently after was removed of his Urlhood by Quin and returned to being an Ailor at this time then.

    The Military History of Deo dei Termini
    • Battle of the Curag Fields: A Minor Officer in charge of a small sect of troops, nothing notable save for being an Offizer within the Regalian Military.
    • The Ranger Crisis: A Minor Officer in charge of a small sect of Troops, nothing notable save for being an Offizer within the Regalian Military.
    • The Anahera Dictatorship: Mercenary Coordinator, Deo tasked his cousin Barthalameu the Bull Headed with selling his services to Montanian Forces intent on capturing land in Calemberg, as Deo wasn't interested in taking the land directly but more so gaining profit from the whole affair.
    • Elven War of 302AC: A minor Offizer within the Vultarian forces lead by Tristan Lampero, Deo acted as such under a false name of Aggracius dei Galli, as he used the War as a means to better practice his craft and knowledge in battle and warfare in a similar format to his previous adventures.
    • Lo Occupation: Commander of The Mountaineers who defended Termini from the Bone Horror Invaders that attacked Montania.
    • Bone Horror Crisis: Commander of The Mountaineers who defended Termini from the Bone Horror Invaders that attacked the coastal cities of Montania.
    • Second Songaskian War: Served as Lieutenant Colonel under the command of General Garth Viduggla during this War, while having a large force they were battered relentlessly by Slave Armies and various forces from the Farahdeen Cities.
    • First Songaskian War: Served as a Field Offizer under the command of General Harhold, notably was injured by being the first up a Cliffside before being knocked off said cliffside by an Elven soldier, falling three stories onto a boat with multiple broken bones and wounds. Until summarily this said boat was blown up by Artillery fire from the Elven side, sending Deo into the Ocean a broken mess, only being rescued by a Neflin soldier who would later be referred to as Mass Chere.
    • The Dread War: Served as a Field General under the Command of Field Marshal Ardige Viduggla, notably received the High Gate and Sole Heart Medals for his successes and part played in the Capturing of Fort Threlwar and the defense of Merkars'arh, however was present for the latter half of the War as a Field General.
    Private Noble House Wars Deo has taken part in.
    • Served as the Private General of House du Pont, successfully conquering and sacking Lorhauser, the Peirgarten Capital and taking with him a great deal of their Loiree Wine, being paid around two thousand or so from the overall Occupation. Being promised as such by the Patriarch Edmund du Pont whom Deo respected verily.
    • Served as the Private General for the House dei Olzolli during their tenure, Notably he caused House Rote to essentially lose all the faith and support from their Manoral Houses by publishing of a Letter sent by their patriarch to the Patriarch of the House dei Olzolli, serving as a Bloodless War and a Victory in his eyes, despite the War being cut short by the Iron Peace.
    • Served as the Private General for the House Viduggla as they expanded their territory throughout Drixagh, ending in the conquering of the House Skarpsten and House Sterke-enn which paved the way to the present day position and stature of the House Viduggla. Being gifted a Spyglass from the House Viduggla for his service to their House.
    • Served as the Consul and Caesar of the Syndic House dei Vinicii during its tenure, having built the position up within their own form of organization within the Syndic House, Idomeneus, di Orazio, dei Olzolli, and dei Termini (dei Termini being the only Commoner Status House within the Syndic prior to its formation) Until it dissolved due to the lack of effort put in by the other Houses, save for dei Olzolli, this granted Deo and the dei Terminis the status of Aristocracy.
    • Served as the Private General of the House Reinards defensive Coalition against the aggression of House Harhold and Yates-Varley in defense of the Rourke Barons. During the Final Battle of this War, Deo led a combined force of Nine Thousand and Two Hundred Soldiers in a flanking move against the Harhold Forty Eight Thousand. Arriving on scene to the Battle and Flanking the opposing force, being granted leadership of the Entire combined Defensive Force of both the Rourke Baron Retinues, as well as the Reinard units. Ending with a dei Termini Victory and the War won in favor of the Defenders.
    • Served as the Private General House Reinard again in the present conflict created by Harhold and Od Albion in Anglia, has notably gotten extensively tired of Warfare and its practices because of the headaches that have been created by the Opposers and their Actions.
     

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    @BillyTheScroofy Updated it to the new format as far as I can see. Thank you by the way!
     
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    I will be reviewing this application

    General Application
    • Your dividers are broken, you may want to fix that for aesthetic.
    Skill Information
    • Deo cannot have +36 in Marshal Knowledge. The Maximum he can have is +30, as his culture does not allow him to go over the 30 point cap on that proficiency. The only proficiency he can have higher than 30 is Musical Arts. Change that.
    • Deo has too many languages. You get Common by default, then the languages of the parental characters. The only way to gain more languages is through the Linguistics proficiency, which allows 1 more language for every +6 points. Remove Alt-Regalian.
    Visual Information
    • He is toned. There is no 'toned bordering athletic'. Change it to toned.
    Personality and Abilities
    • Your personality paragraphs are too long, and usually length isn't a problem. the problem is you tend to repeat the point you wish to make over and over but with different wording. For example in paragraph two 'Deos’ confidence stems from experience, he feels far more comfortable with the known than the unknown, venturing further to say that he would be apprehensive towards the unknown, this may lead to delayed planning due to uneasy feelings regarding a certain route or confidence in the units underneath him and their capability to complete the task provided.' then a sentence later 'He does grow anxious when faced with dodgy actions and even afraid when it comes to completely unknown territory or scenarios that he hasn’t been pre-conditioned to handle or has seen handled by others..'. Condense these paragraphs and reduce the verbosity.
    Life Story
    • I dislike the thought of a five year old child knowing 'basic finance and sword fighting' at the age of five. Remove the mention of finance and keep the point to just 'learned to count regals at the age of five'. As for sword fighting, I think it would be far more appropriate for him to start at around the age of ten.
    • Military D and C courses? This is vague and foreign to me. Explain what this is in the life story or simply keep it to 'Military studies'.
    • Keep in mind that Generals within the Regalian Military Structure have to have been taught at the Regalian Academy for officers, and would have taken up most, if not all of Deo's time. It may also be worth noting that he would not have graduated in two years. It takes at the bare minimum, eight years to graduate the School of Marshalry.
    • The last few paragraphs of your life story need updating. The second last paragraph still refers to him being 33 with ambitions for next year, but the character is 43? Fix this.
    Make all these changes in blue then tag me @Mortisian
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    @BillyTheScroofy
    I cut out a great deal of text. DnC is Drill and Ceremony but I just wrote out the words fully so it could be understood.
    Reduced to 30, added 6 as Statesman
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    Resubmitted for Re-review.
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    Requesting re-Re-review. As I took away the Sanguine stuff, just going to make a separate character for all that jazz.
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    @LumosJared Need that big ol' re-review for Proficiencies
     
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    @Mortisian You're 10 points over your possible proficiency max. As a 45 year old, you gain 45 points from age and a +5 points base start addition making Deo's maximum proficiency 50.

    You are also adding Diplomatic Case study into your body type for some reason, it does not factor into that.

    Fix these then tag me
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    I updated his age to 55 and will take away the Diplomatic is body stat I don't know why I put it there either that's big dumb of me. @BillyTheScroofy
     
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    @Mortisian The characters age is still set at 45
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    Oh heck, I updated it on my Google Sheet not here, my bad.
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    @BillyTheScroofy Added the Mountaineers as a Special Trait thing on the App describing what they are.
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    <!> Updated with the Military History of Deo dei Termini at the bottom underneath the Backstory.
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    Added +10 Musical Arts Skill, Switched 5 Points from Command to General Command. General Tactic Skill is 25+

    ^Switched back.
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    <!> Also updated Deos' Military History with the latest Victory in regards to the War between Harhold and Reinards Barons.
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    Gotta Urlify Deo, this'll take a second, putting it up as needs re-reviewer.
     
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    Peer Review: Url don't have a prof boost to Command.
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    Proficiency boost didn't change since he was a Dressolini, with the established proficiencies of his past as an Approved Character, didn't change all the proficiencies as it wouldn't change his ability to lead 300 men being a Veteran Soldier as he is, when becoming an Url.

    That and he still is primarily a Progression based Warfighter. The Url Bonding really only took away the proficiencies that were for Combat oriented actions.
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    Bumping for re-review
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    Adjusted Regardless, Still need a Reviewer
     
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    Approved, but make sure you clarify and fix this error.
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    @Caelamus Switched Musical Arts to Dance Arts Skill.
     
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    Mortisian The Flesh is Weak, the Machine is Strong

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    De-Urlified Deo
    Updated Military History
    Updated Proficiencies
    Added Drahl Lineage
     
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    Your first artpiece is too saucy for the forum, however everything else checks out fine.
     
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