Approved Sheet Cyrillian Nohorin

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    Basic Information
    • ♢ Anglicized Name: Cyrillian Aredeth Nohorin bel Ivaëlle
    • ♢ Formal Altalar Name: Saë'yallrain Aredethylla Vallérö-Hosra anaë Nohorindor bel Tanaar-Ivaëlle í Ivaëlle-Lyna'aayn
      • ⬫ Nicknames: Saë, Cyrus (personal), Availlen, Nirh (Not widely known), Doctor
    • ♢ Age: 389 Years [x]
      • ⬫ Birth: December 27th, 80 B.C.
      • ⬫ Appearance: Mid 50s
    • ♢ Gender: Male
    • ♢ Race: Vitality Url, former Teledden Altalar
      • ⬫ Culture: Tanaar, Al-Url
      • ⬫ Aberrancy: None | Mundane
    • ♢ Preferred Weapon: Athame
    • ♢ Socioeconomic Standing: Wealthy Commoner
    • New Town Inventory:
      • Ornate Coin Purse: 210 Regals
      • Surgical Twine: There's a needle tucked into the spool.
      • Concealed Atheme: An ornately engraved yet minimalist weapon.
        • Blade of Loon-Solay, handle of darkened wood. Leaves a trail of mist when used. [100r]
    • Crookback Inventory:
      • Coin Purse: 50 Regals
      • Surgical Twine: There's a needle tucked into the spool.
      • Alchemical Substance: [Tallow Base], [Rubyflower Effect] | Label: <Mo-A> Mending
        • A pinkish cream set inside a container the size of an Ailor's palm. To be applied. [20r]
      • Alchemical Substance: [Vocadine Base], [Lady's Shine Effect] | Label: <Mo-A> Curing
        • A faintly blue fluid within a mid-sized vial. To be drunk. [20r]
      • Alchemical Substance: [Tallow Base], [Poppy Milk Effect] | Label: <Mo-A> Numbing
        • A beige cream set inside of container the size of an Ailor's palm. To be applied. [20r]
      • Concealed Atheme: An ornately engraved yet minimalist weapon.
        • Blade of Pattara, handle of Allú'tornë wood (white color). Smells like grass and flowers. [100r]
    Skill Information
    • 50 (Age) - 20 (Sorcery) - 6 (Arcanology) = 24 Core + (10 Hobby) + (10 Talent):
      • Core:
        • ⬫ Sciences: A long life well spent in his craft.
          • 20 Medical Sciences (+20 from Core)
          • 3 Linguistic Sciences (+3 from Core)
            • ̶P̶r̶o̶t̶o̶-̶D̶a̶e̶n̶ --> d’Ithanie
        • ⬫ Melee Combat: This surgeon has branched his steady hand into other skills.
          • 1 Dagger Combat (+1 from Core)
      • Talent:
        • ⬫ Command Skill: Rebuilding after a virtual apocalypse teaches a man about people.
          • 10 Statecraft Command (+10 from Talent)
      • Hobby:
        • ⬫ Visual Art: Mother's teachings didn't go to waste, after all. A handy relaxation mechanism. Yet, a new activity finds the doctor's attention.
          • 5 Painting Art (+5 from Hobby)
          • 10 Pathfinding Art (+5 from Hobby, +5 from Race)
    Abilities
    • ⧰ Racial: Url
    • ⧰ Arcanology: (6 pts)
      • ♢ Arken Knowledge
      • ♢ Curing Knowledge
    • ⧰ Sorcery: Exist Sorcerer of Order & Lightness (20pts) [INACTIVE]
      • The initiation of all abilities is marked by white mist falling from the Sorcerer's eyes.
      • Travel Abilities:
        • ⬫ True Path I - Cyrillian takes the form of a flurry of silvery sheets of paper, quills, and tomes. When slipping through tight spaces, they leave scratches and clean slices on surfaces which fade within moments. No effect on skin or flesh.
      • Combat Abilities:
        • ⬫ Magic Bolt I - The projectile appears as a pair of crossing buzz saws made of bismuth. When in contest, they take the form of metal needles - thousands of them flying in a precise orderly fashion. Cyrillian's eyes blaze silver while in contest, as steel seemingly spiders down his hands and arms the longer this goes on. The steel harmlessly - but violently - blasts off once the spell is canceled.
      • Aesthetic Abilities:
        • ⬫ Magic Sight II - Lantern typically takes the form of an orb of light he is capable of making simple shapes out of. Cyrillian's eyes glow white passively. His blood glows when drawn.
      • Support Abilities:
        • ⬫ Light Mend I - When being cast upon, these wounds beam with white light and heal. The mist in his eyes fall out over his cheeks like tears for a few moments during and after casting.
        • ⬫ Light Mend II - While being channeled, Cyrillian's hands glow white. If using the more intense variant, the mist from his eyes is thick enough to hit and collect onto the floor around him.
    Body Shape
    • Physical Stat: 1 (Combat) + 5 (Pathfinding) + 20 (Body Morph II) = 26
      • ⬫ Body Shape: Ripped
      • ⬫ Body Fat: Average
    Languages
    • ♢ Ïsursa'ïos: Mother Tongue [Cultural]
      • ⬫ Empire (Middle) Altalar: First language, strongly held onto.
      • ⬫ New (Modern) Altalar: Adapted over the years to be understood.
        • ⬫ Isursaal: Begrudgingly accepted among literacy skills.
    • ♢ Common: Studied for sheer frequency among non-Altalar. [Free]
    • ♢ d’Ithanie: Once understood as Proto-Daen, Cyrillian has since forgotten the gibberish of slaves and has developed his dialect through the generations alongside now friendly Ithanian Ailor. [Linguistics]
    • ♢ Oortal: Ingrained following Symbiosis. [Free]
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    Visual Information
    • ♢ Eye Color: Fiery Orange
    • ♢ Hair Color: Honey Blonde w/ Silver streaks
    • ♢ Hair Style: Mid-back in length in various styles.
    • ♢ Head Shape: Alpine Ibex, Warmlands clade
    • ♢ Skin Color: Fair, capable of tanning.
      • Tattoos:
        • Magilex - White, back of the neck: "Lightbringer”
        • Holy Scriptures I - Faith of Estel, Altalar Pantheon: White epics and hymns all over back, chest, and on remaining arm.
    • ♢ Clothing: Flashy and noble of Tanaar; often with Ithanian jewelry.
    • ♢ Height: 7 feet
      • [Body Morph II]: 6 feet, 7 inches
    Personality
    • Character Alignment
      • Lawful Neutral
        • Cyrillian, to his best ability, practices what he preaches in what he believes is the natural order of things in a civilized society as an Est-allorn. Whether or not these values may bring ill for some is not of as much importance as maintaining order itself, but he does not lack a conscience. Not an overly selfish man, but not quite generous despite what others might think of him as a physician.
    • Personality Type
      • Assertive Logician? (INTP-A)
        • This man has a hard time seeing things through a lens of sentimentality and his decisions are based on gathered information, yet since symbiosis he questions this line of thinking. For now, his personality is in a state of metamorphosis with his Oorl's influence.
    • Religion
      • Faith of Estel, Altalar Pantheon - Ammu-Loa | Piety: (9/10)
        • Traumatized following year zero, Cyrillian reacted artfully if violently. Steeped in an all-crippling fear of experiencing such hellishness again and in a bid to atone for what sin caused the Gods to abandon he and his people like so, he became so strongly devoted that he got himself inked to the Exist and back with holy scripture and also acquired a number of Exist-borne mutations just to be more in touch. This terror driven evangelicalism lasted something of two whole centuries, before Cyrillian finally wound down enough to mildy regret his tattoos. Nowadays, faith still plays an important part of his life, but it tends to be a highly personal venture where he is tasked to assure a death is painless, good, and dignified.
    • Likes
      • ⬫ Symbolism: Cyrillian enjoys peering between the lines of imagery and literature to find implied meaning, whether this was the intent or not; he likes to think so.
      • ⬫ Rarity: Market value is not always what is important to Cyrus, rather the sheer uncommonness of the object in question. He likes to keep or at least take in-depth notes of whatever or whomever he comes across.
      • ⬫ Tart Tastes: Fitting of his personality, Cyrillian prefers bitter, tart, or sour tastes in food rather than sweet. He especially enjoys cranberries and gladly eats them on their own.
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    ⬫ Life Story ⬫

    Childhood & Adolescence (80 - 60 B.C.)
    • Toddlerhood | Within the family lineage of House Nohorin, Saë'yallrain is brought into the world in already crowded Tanaar Ivaëlle, the first of two siblings. In the beginning, the child's hyperactive attention-span was occupied with his mother's painting lessons when he wasn't in the midst of childhood shenanigans and less than kind interactions with the other children.
    • Temperament | As a theme he would carry on for the rest of his childhood and adolescence, Cyrillian is quite deceitful and contemptuous of his peers. He exploits these peers and doting adults alike whom he frequently finds ways to manipulate. Said adults are not entirely oblivious to Cyrillian’s caustic nature, as they, instead of punishing him, fluently funnel that potential into more positive outcomes. Cyrillian’s overall childhood is carefree and nostalgic, as despite all this he was a member of a number of good friend groups.
    • Craft | At the cusp of adolescence, Cyrillian’s engrossment in the topic of the body and healing is heard by his family. In these times however, little to no energy is spent building upon the medical sciences. Instead, he is educated on matters of unnatural affliction, mutationism, Arcanology, and healing through an ancient Lightness Mage-Master called Olaynö’nya. As a young man, he takes to these lessons as recommended, although the mundane afflictions strangling the lower-class slaves stirs his interest yet again.
    • Sorcery only went so far, and alike with the vast majority of his people was no Mage. With this in mind, he began developing his craft of encouraging one’s own biology to mend itself instead of relying on magical assistance; at first, he did this only to rouse the slaves whose value depreciated as they diminished. As tomes and tutors on the matter were either scarce or inaccurate around his home, and the Princes found it more worthwhile to cull rather than cure, this would mark the start of Cyrillian’s rather hands-on method of learning as he works on injured or ill slaves and travels around frequently to be one of the few willing to get close to afflicted members of society. What was first an interest in preserving investment and appeasement of the Breaker of Misery became a passion and life-long craft.
    Adulthood & Fall of Allorn (60 B.C. - 1 A.C.)
    • The Trial of Be'saith | Upon reaching the age of thirty-two, a young Cyrillian is launched into holy trial to choose his patron-God. With few exceptions, he reacts very poorly to the ritualistic hallucinogens and requires a hand in remaining grounded, not to be completely lost in drug-induced terror. He manages to power through this short Hell, making it to the Hall of Wonders. There he surmises his dreadful visions must direct him to Ammu-Loa, Compatriot of the Dead.
    • Omens | The doctor is entrusted with increasingly high risk and costly procedures where common Sorcery could not quite reach, along with treatment investigation. He prides himself on the accomplishments he's achieved in his field, going above and beyond not to be dependent on the arcane, but on his own capabilities and hands. Yet, as the nature of magic itself begins to change and the Nenya send forth the very first precursors of Yanar to warn and protect the Empire, Cyrillian now in his eighties is sure of himself enough to join them among the voices of fellow concerned Arcanologists and professionals - to be promptly ignored by proud Allorn leaders.
    • Disaster & Cowardice | The Cataclysm came whilst Cyrillian was living abroad with his partner, away from the very beginnings of a quickly losing war. The existential horror of the situation gathers momentum as he rushes home alongside called upon warriors to be met with destruction and demonic anarchy, yet rushes to heed his calling in serving his people and Empress. A much needed doctor in the wake of massacre, he attempts to preserve as many lives as possible. As a reward for his valiance, Cyrillian is injured and sickened by a mixture of conjured miasma and fallen debris of his home. Ultimately, the sheer magnitude of danger and chaos forces him to make a difficult decision and he retreats, taking no one but himself for the time being. This decision ultimately is what preserved his life, but plagues him with guilt continuously in the future.
    • The Wildering takes a slowly recovering Cyrillian by surprise as forces he recognized once as friendly lash out in fury, just as he'd hoped the global torture had ended. He nearly does not make it out alive, suffering an intense lashing across his face, viscerally cutting it open from mouth to right temple and leaving a ghastly scar which he hides behind Olt'vven ritual today. With a Magestorm raging, he is unable to rapidly recover despite a number of Sorcerers and surviving Mages around him.
    Reconstruction (1 - 281 A.C.)
    • Picking Up the Pieces | Cyrillian emerges from his hiding deeply disturbed and struggling to come to grips. With the worst of the wrath from both Void and Exist seemingly over with, he returns to his birth place to foremostly mourn, then salvage what is left and organize efforts to rebuild and rescue what souls had managed in spite of his cowardice. He witnesses and once again manages to survive when the slave uprisings erupt. This is thanks to select souls who remember his name as a mercy for perhaps not them, but their ancestors and families. With his life spared, he spends the vast majority of it alongside his sister in tirelessly attempting to preserve what is there and reconstruct what was lost. At some point, he marries and has offspring of his own.
    • Bodily Horrors | Met with new and horrible afflictions as a result of the extra-planar chaos, Dr. Nohorin is at the forefront of discovery and therapy for these things to see older and newer versions come and go. He spends innumerable hours taking part in sometimes horrific to witness and perform trials and treatment, as he despairs behind a veil of cold professionalism. His character grew resilient and callous as a result, not always to the liking of others. With a new batch of physiologies freshly developed both naturally and unnaturally, he takes to learning them up close and personally, regardless of his very colorful opinions of them. The Oath of No Harm is quite foreign to this Altalar, and so characteristic of them this research is illuminating yet at times macabre and ill-gotten. It was during this time that Cyrillian founds one of the first major Altalar-run academies of mundane medicine settled in what would be Ithania. Today, known as Académie Mains de Répit. It's also around this time when his first grandchild is born at 266 years of age.
    • Family Reunion | Upon hearing of this, Cyrillian drops everything and finds himself in the city of Hyä-Monh. He's close to the upbringing of his grandson and lives near he and his parents, even after Beriaal in his teen years strikes out to live with another of his children. Whilst focusing on his continued endeavours in the sciences, Cyrillian is happy to lend networking and otherwise aid the continued education and achievements of his descendant. Gradually, his own wanderlust falls back into effect and he returns to his adventures abroad.
    Present Day (281 - 308 A.C.)
    • A Lesser-Run State | As just another stop of many, Cyrillian seats himself within Regalia once more to see it having been developed by Ailor-kind to a tremendous degree. The constant flow of medical oddities both mundane and arcane to account for his extended stay, along with the presence family.
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    AFFLICTION
    Because not even the doctor is immune.
    Currently inactive.
    SANGUINISM [COLD RAGE]

    Choice Vampiric Mutations: Zikiel Bloodline
    • ⬫ All Common Abilities
    • ⬫ Lich Mastery | Void Sorcerer of Darkness & Chaos [20 pts] | [Constant Passive]
      • Travel Abilities:
        • True Path I
        • Astral Being I
        • Wall Climb II
      • Aesthetic Abilities:
        • Element Control I
        • Element Control VII
    Lich Form:
    Synnr the Seething Lich | Description | Deep down and especially in his Vampiric state, Cyrillian is an angry soul. His affliction has manifested this in his Lich Form, granting his shape an insidious and seething air about him. His resting body temperature stoops far below normal, so much so that his flesh is ice cold to the touch. If extracted from him, his blood maintains freezing temperature indefinitely until dried. His skin is a bloodless pale. While in this form, he is incapable of maintaining a neutral attitude when speaking, always with implied venom, spite, and/or arrogance. Synnr is recognizable as Cyrillian.

    • Clothing:
      • ⬫ A rich black and blue robe missing its torso section to leave a skeletal figure bare to see. A cream fur mantle over his shoulders, paired with a silver tiara. Pants? Shoes? No need.
    • Upper Body:
      • ⬫ Hair becomes jet black and manifests a floating quality.
      • ⬫ Eyes become solid black save for a tiny blue pinprick of a pupil.
      • ⬫ Jaw is entirely exposed bone which may puff harmless cold flames.
      • ⬫ Speaks without mouth movement. If speaking with his mouth, a shrieking, hysterical woman's voice is heard overlaid with it. This voice is his mother's.
      • ⬫ Space between pelvis and collar bone entirely exposed bone. No visible organs.
      • ⬫ Blackened hands, which are constantly wet with a deep red (almost black) and cold ink-like substance, develop dangerous talons of ice instead of fingernails. This ink is quite permanent on paper, but drips and fades off of anything else. Touching it causes mild pins and needles. The Lich can will its evaporation for a time, but it always returns to flow.
    • Lower Body:
      • ⬫ Legs are entirely missing and replaced with a wisp of white, frosted air akin to a constant little blizzard. The Lich has the ability to hover in his way, though never higher than what his usual height would be. This however can still be snared through Ability means and springs traps.
      • ⬫ His spine extends to form a long, spiked, skeletal tail.
    Personality Shift
    • Character Alignment
      • Lawful Evil
        • Cyrillian sees law and order as a means to exploit those around him, deriving immense satisfaction from puppeteering the honor-bound and righteous to do as he sees fit for his own benefit. Bound by his own code of honor as a physician and scholar however, he is not above negotiation and plays clean and fair, else he risks scuffing his own hard-earned ego. Prone to cruelty, a Vampiric Cyrillian releases his steam on the undeserving.
    • Personality Type
      • The Commander: ENTJ-A
        • This man has a hard time seeing things through a lens of sentimentality and his decisions are based almost entirely on gathered information. This trait lends him the frequent tendency to callously brush off the feelings of others as unimportant. The elder feels an urge to lead and direct others. Cyrillian prides himself on this, believing it the ideal to go about things, encountering no good rational to change.
    • Religion
      • Corrupted Faith of Estel - Aish-eia | Piety (9/10)
        • Cyrillian continues to regard these deities as admirable figures worthy of emulation, but now sees them as ones he's welcome to manipulate and steal from; they're just batteries to meet his ends. He feels the same for the Voidal entities, as well as Draconic ones. He continues to deny the existence of the Unionist Spirit and is loyal to the Allorn Empire and Talea, despite his stripping of her blessing.

    SHATTERISM [APATHY]

    Choice Werebeast Mutations: Raprann Soul-line
    • ⬫ Wisdom of the Raprann
      • Long Aging
      • Long Draining
      • Raprann Strength | Beastmode: 6 | Half-Shift: 1 | Normal Shift: 0
    • ⬫ Sharpsight of the Hawk
      • Glass Gaze
    • ⬫ Poise of the Heron
      • Compassionate Magi
        • No change from original kit aside from the loss of Combat Abilities. Replaced with:
          • Travel Ability:
            • Wall Climb II
    • ⬫ Song of the Glorybird
      • Eagle’s Call
      • Sanguine Featherlight
    Werebeast Shift:
    Nephlilus the Radiant | Description | Thanks to decades and later centuries of gruesome exposure, Cyrillian's soul has become jaded and hardened against such sights and experiences. His affliction has expressed this in his shifted forms and personality by producing an image of grandioseness, pride, and sociopathy. His purity as a Raprann has granted him a peacock-like, yet predatory appearance. Described below is his Beastmode Shift, with Half-Shift more or less being a toned-down version.
    • Upper Body:
      • His head transforms into that of a black-breasted kite as shown in the image below. He's also capable of producing peacock-like calls or the screeches of a kite.
      • His shoulders house black and gold feathers which fan outward to form radiant pauldron-like structures.
      • His body is consumed with black and gold feathers alike with the below image.
      • ⬫ Akin to a Lova Dynasty Sihai, his arms have many more feathers than the rest of his body and can thus give off the impression of being wing-like, as his hands are hidden under a thick layer of fluff unless in use or when he decides to reveal them. When visible, his hands are fair with black talons in place of fingernails.
        • Cyrillian's Exist Crown always appears with black and gold feathers instead of white.
        • Cyrillian's Exist Carry defaults to the smell of citrus.
    • Lower Body:
      • ⬫ Long tail feathers develop and drag behind him much like a peacock's plumage. They appear solid black when folded up, but reveal themselves as an entrancing incandescent gold/black pattern featuring many winding turns and wind-like patterns, featuring hints of green. This causes non-sentient fauna to stare, but has no effect on sentient beings and characters.
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    Personality Shift

    • Character Alignment
      • Lawful Evil
        • Cyrillian sees law and order as a means to exploit those around him, deriving immense satisfaction from puppeteering the honor-bound and righteous to do as he sees fit for his own benefit. Bound by his own code of honor as a physician and scholar however, he is not above negotiation and plays clean and fair, else he risks scuffing his own hard-earned ego. Prone to apathy outside of his own predetermined goals, a Werebeastly Cyrillian is not inclined to help anyone but himself - not even family outside of his pack.
    • Personality Type
      • The Logician: INTP-A
        • This man has a hard time seeing things through a lens of sentimentality and his decisions are based almost entirely on gathered information. This trait lends him the frequent tendency to callously brush off the feelings of others as unimportant, only perpetuated by his affliction.
    • Religion
      • Raprann Sense of Importance - 10/10
        • Cyrillian's prior faith has been withered down to nothing as his infection has progressed, leaving him entirely dismissive of figures once respected, instead fearlessly rebelling against them. Worshipping only himself, he has developed an overwhelming desire to tear down the Vampiric specifically and latches onto Werebeast packs to meet this end.
     
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    Katiesc Not The Skinner Ur Looking For

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    Sup there! I'll be picking this application up for staff review, expect a review shortly!
     
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    PuffyPigeon The puffiest damn pigeon of them all..

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    @Katiesc It's been over a week with no review, so I'll just put this tag here as recommended.
     
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    Katiesc Not The Skinner Ur Looking For

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    Sorry bub! I’ve had a full work and school load, plus I am sick. I’ll be getting around to apps real soon.
     
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    Katiesc Not The Skinner Ur Looking For

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    Sorry for the delay on this application, things got busy! But very well written, wonderful job on the proficiency points.

    Approved. @PuffyPigeon
     
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    PuffyPigeon The puffiest damn pigeon of them all..

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    @Katiesc Changed power ring in favor of a better symbolic representation of this character. From Ulley to Ellea with a large owl familiar.
     
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    Katiesc Not The Skinner Ur Looking For

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    Re-Approved!
     
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    PuffyPigeon The puffiest damn pigeon of them all..

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    @Katiesc My lad got infected and his proficiency and personality has thus changed. I'm also uncertain as to whether or not the timing is right for Middle Altalar to be his native language.
     
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    Katiesc Not The Skinner Ur Looking For

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    Sorry for the wait, just got back from camping! Re-Approved.
     
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    PuffyPigeon The puffiest damn pigeon of them all..

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    @Katiesc Proficiency changes as per the Vampire update!
     
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    Katiesc Not The Skinner Ur Looking For

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    Looks great! Re-Approved.
     
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    Please tag your reviewer in the future whenever you make any edits to a character application, especially in this case with the Proficiency Update. For now, tagging your reviewer, @Katiesc
     
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    Katiesc Not The Skinner Ur Looking For

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    Looks good! Approved, but also you have an extra point that you have not used so you can use that if you'd like to.
     
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    Worship and ring changed. Change and explanation of such in life story and personality is written in lilac. @Katiesc
     
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    Katiesc Not The Skinner Ur Looking For

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    Hey there! It looks like you're five points over your limit! The Altalar are allowed 65 points from their age + 5 from their boost! Please adjust (It should come to 70 instead of 75).
     
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    PuffyPigeon The puffiest damn pigeon of them all..

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    Fixed
     
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    Looks great! Approved.
     
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    PuffyPigeon The puffiest damn pigeon of them all..

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    @Katiesc Updated with Altalar and magic rewrite, heavily influencing backstory, personality, and proficiency.
     
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    Katiesc Not The Skinner Ur Looking For

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    Hello, here's a shnazzy review!

    • Proficiency Points:
      • You're five points over the limit. Altalar only gain up to 60 points (+5 boost included into the sum of 60) plus the +10 boost for being mundane (aside from Sorcerer). Please adjust this, @PuffyPigeon.
     
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    PuffyPigeon The puffiest damn pigeon of them all..

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    Katiesc Not The Skinner Ur Looking For

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    COOL. Approved!
     
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    @Katiesc Was just approved for Ancient Character. Sorry to have you stare at this app yet again. Life story entirely rewritten. I'm also uncertain if the timing is right for his native language to be Middle Altalar.
     
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    Katiesc Not The Skinner Ur Looking For

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    HELLO. First I'd like to say congratulations on your permission! But let's get to work.

    My Review

    Skill Information
    • Magical Knowledge: Demonology is no longer a magical knowledge option that you can pick from, please review the new list.
    • Languages: You've got a stack of free languages growing (Middle and Modern Altalar are a fair addition due to the perm). D’Ithanie feels out of place without linguistic points, so either remove this or add proficiency points.
    Please make these changes and then get back to me!
    @PuffyPigeon
     
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    @Katiesc Done. You marked me approved anyway, but I made the changes.
     
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    @Katiesc Put into a new family! Proficiency and personality radically changed.
     
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    @Katiesc Update made to vampire mutations as an Alais! He isn't one atm, but I do have the traits in order right below the actual application. You know.. just in case. It's under the Sanguinism spoiler.
     
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    @Katiesc Updated with Altalar lore. My poor, poor ginge..
     
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    @Katiesc Point and ability overhaul, including Werebeastism and Shatterism described just below initial application.
     
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    @ I don't have a reviewer anymore. Katie noooo...

    Updated Sorcery. Also updated the Sorcery in the afflictions section beneath the original application.
     
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    A reminder, when you lack a reviewer, set it to Needs Reviewer. Not Needs Re-Review.
     
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    @PuffyPigeon After reviewing your application, everything seems to be in order. Approved.
     
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    @Follower Url things have taken place. App readjusted in the proficiencies department, and a bit in personality.
     
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    @PuffyPigeon Everything seems to be in order, Approved!
     

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