Basic Information: Full Name: Cyran Akram Age: 41 (looks 25) Gender: Male Race: Avanthar Inventory Information: Broadsword Small Crossbow Skill Information: Total Points: 50 Proficiency Points. 10 Hobby Points. (13 Points Left) Greatsword Combat - 10 Points Fists Combat - 3 Points Light Ranged Combat - 4 Points Strength Training - 10 Points Husbandry Art - 10 Hobby Points Sailing Art - 7 Points Burglary Pack: -3 Points Racial Abilities: Cast of Mind: The Avanthar gains angular blue glowing lines from their limbs to their chest, in a pattern of their choice, and gain a temporary +5 to one weapon-based Melee Combat Category currently being used. In addition, the Avanthar gains immunity to Target Illusions, becoming unable to even perceive them. The Avanthar can change in and out of this Shift at will, but once they shift out of it, they cannot shift back for 1 hour. Body Shape: 10(Greatsword)+10(Strength)+3(Fist)+2(Ranged)= 25 Physical Stat Muscular Body Shape Average Body Fat Languages: Common Plains Altalar Visual Information: Eye Color: Blue Hair Color: Dark Auburn Hair Style: Very short on the sides but it comes out longer on the top and in the front. Skin Color: Tan Clothing: Short poncho on torso and hide pants with a metal ring on his right ankle. Height: 6’2” Personality: How would your character express Happiness and Contentedness? Cyran expresses happiness by smiling, cheering, and/or laughing if the event permits it. How would your character respond to experiencing Fear? Cyran has a gut instinct built up by his past to respond to fear with violence. How would your character respond to experiencing Stress? Finding a way to escape the situation if possible. If there is not a clear escape he can fight or try to talk it down. How does your character view Law and Authorities? He views law and authorities with a negative stigma, though he’s not quite sure why.. How does your character feel about Races other than their own? He feels that every race is equal. He does not care for dividing people up based on where they grew up or who they are. How does your character feel about Religion for themselves, and other faiths? He does not follow a religion and is not looking for one to follow. How does your character feel about the Arcane and Magical in the world? He dislikes magic. He feels that it is strange and he does not understand it, plus he doesn’t like the advantage it gives others in a fight. How does your character feel towards their family? Cyran does not care for his family in the least. What is your character the most proud of about themselves? Cyran does not have much memory so he doesn’t quite remember much about himself. What motivates your character to move forward and better their life? He wants to find a way to regain his memory. What is your character's biggest insecurity? He is insecure about the loss of his memory of everything in his past. What is your character's biggest fear? Cyran’s biggest fear is not being able to regain his memory. Weaknesses: He does not have any memory of his past. Life Story: His Past: Cyran grew up in a village in Southern Daen. His early life was that of any other. He got a horse at around 15 that he named Henry and he practiced greatsword combat. When he was 17 he started getting into trouble. It started with pickpocketing, then he moved on to robbery, then assault, Cyran was not a good person. One day he breaks into a man’s house. He steals while the man is sleeping and upon his escape the man wakes up. There was a long chase on horseback and the man eventually shoots Cyran’s horse with a crossbow, instantly killing it and throwing Cyran and the stolen goods into a nearby bush. Cyran is very angry at the man for this and wants revenge. He creates a plot to kill him. Upon the man coming home from work, Cyran ran from an alley and impaled the man through the back with a sword, killing him instantly. Cyran fled the scene but got seen by multiple onlookers, one of which was the man’s gladiator brother. Now this man knows violence like the back of his hand and perseus Cyran. Cyran on the other hand has every intention to leave Daen, seeing as he is now a wanted murderer. Cyran steals a large ship and sails in away, far away. The vengeful brother sees Cyran escaping and decides to pursue him in a smaller boat. Cyran decides to land in Regalia to start a better life for himself. Unfortunately for him, the man followed him and, when there was nobody around, hit him in the back of the head with a wooden club with enough force to shatter the club. Cyran collapsed instantly and the man, satisfied with his destruction and the implications about the rest of Cyran’s life, fled back to Daen. This event leaves Cyran collapsed on the streets, concussed and unable to remember anything.
@VenomMech Here is your review: Basic Information - This is general for your application, but you seem to switch between Cyran and Cyrus for your character's name and it's a little confusing. Like, your character application's name says Cyran and you have Cyran for his name in basic information, but in your personality and life story section you call his Cyrus. Change it to one or the other, or if his name has changed after his induced amnesia, make it clear in his life story.Skill Information - Please include unspent points in your point spread - Please include racial abilities in your skill section - Please include a calculation in your physical stat sectionVisual Information - No issuesPersonality - No issuesLife Story - I recommend giving Cyran sailing arts and Roguery given you mentioned he was a burglar and a pickpocket (both of which are packs in the roguery section), and that he was able to sail a boat on his own. Please make the requested changes then tag me!
