Conf Ladveer

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  1. Conflee

    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    Basic Information (Required)

    • Full Name: Conf Ede Ladveer
    • Age: 34 (Born on July 8th, 270)
    • Gender: Male
    • Race: Ailor (Etosian)
    • Main Ambition: Power, and stability. To push liberal ideals in Regalia.
    • Special Permission: Field Officer
    Basic Information (Expansion)
    • Position: Conf has been in Regalia for nearly a year now, building up his influence slowly- mostly for stability sake. As he has the tendency to get stabbed, having many friends in many places is very useful (You don't have to get carried as far to get treated) . He moved to Regalia after him and his now fiance Raven /totally had nothing to do with Koura's ship sinking/. Since then, they have lived in a very tall, tower-like building in the Graygate District. Conf currently works as a Political Advisor for Jakkios.
    • Upbringing: Conf was raised by his mother and uncle- the later or which also served as his tutor , whom schooled him and trained him in swordplay. Up until recently, it was debatable who his father was- it was believed to be Lord Arim Helethium.
    • Secondary Ambitions: Conf is currently very concerned with surviving in this "Void blasted city". Beyond just the fact that something majorly deadly seems to occur every few days, he also has an inexplicable tendency to get stabbed. Always. Constantly. This makes survival quite the task for him.
    Skill Information (Optional)
    • School: The School of Leadership, Discipline of Tactical Command
    • Level: Learned (Two years in the Academy, 3 and a half years of tutoring)
    • Source: Conf began his unofficial education under his Uncle, and in the field as a mercenary. However, his formal education comes from his two years in Academia Della Arti Militare in Montania, and his three and a half-ish years of Private Tutoring.
    Visual Information (Required)
    • Eye Color: Emerald Green
    • Hair Color: Dark Reddish-Brown
    • Hair Style: Short and Perpetually Messy
    • Skin Color: Slightly Tanned, Very Faintly Olive
    • Clothing: Numerous Outfits. Primarily either his sewn up, patch work maroon jacket, or his fancy Purple Coat.
    • Height: 5ft 7in.
    • Weight: 138 lbs.
    • Body Build: Sinewy
    • Weapon of Choice: Short Swords, Daggers, and mainly his Wits and Tactics.
    Visual Information (Expansion)
    • Face: Conf has slightly feminine features, with a slight upturned nose and smallish ears. His messy hair is parted to his left, covering a portion of his forehead, and he often has long "sideburns" (Not so much sideburns as long hair that hangs down there?) . He also has a small scar on the left side of his mouth, as if someone tried to sew it shut, and a longer more noticeable scar on his left cheek down from his cheekbone to his jawline where he was injured in the Battle of Regalia (The battle to reclaim Regalia from Lo and the Deathlings). His most... glaring... Scar however has to be the one around his neck, where it would seem he was hanged at one point in his life. Because he was- by himself. It is also worth noting that at no point in Conf's life has he ever been seen with facial hair, or shaving for that matter.
    • Body: Conf is very thin, not from lack of food but rather his exceptionally fast metabolism (of course, the knowledge of how this works is most likely not known in Roleplay because Medieval and all that) , however, he is fairly fit from his years on a ship and as a mercenary. His body hair is sparse, and he has very notable tan lines at his arm and chest. He also has a large circular scar on his left abdomen where he was run through by the spike of a Lantern Shield, a large scar from his left collarbone to his right rib cage where he was slashed with an arming sword, and several scars on his right arm from various weapons. On top of this, he is very obviously missing his entire left arm from the shoulder down.
    • Fashion and Items: Conf's standard garb as of late is a dark purple coat with silver trimming. It is surprisingly practical, despite its outrageous color, being thick to withstand the cold and cushion blows. His second coat, the one his is more known for, is a thick and padded maroon colored coat with gray trimming, known mainly for the numerous sewn up holes and countless patches from where he has been stabbed. He also always wears his chainmail shirt underneath. He also carries with his a medium satchel, with numerous books, files, maps, and medical supplies within.
    • Personal Items: Conf always carries various personal trinkets and such, all with personal meaning to him. He wears his mother's ring- a simple gold band engraved with something he has been unable to have translated [A]. A silver wristband with a variation of the symbol of Liberty- instead of two dirty hands clasping the ends of a chain, it is two hands holding two links of chain with shattered ends, as if the hands broke the chain . A single golden coin engraved with a raven on one side and a crown on the other [C]. And a silver necklace with a small yet technically functional compass fitted with various gemstones- a gift he had given to his late fiancee [D].

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    • Voice: Conf has a fairly refined voice, being somewhere in between commoner and noble-sounding in his inflections. When he is trying, or in higher company, he is fully capable of sounding like he was noble born and raised. However, recently, due to his hanging, his voice has taken on a slightly gruffer tone. Not very noticeable, almost like he has a slight cold, but it is there. He is known to slip into the more cliche "Pirate Accent" on occasions, especially around the old crew, along with slipping into an Etosian accent and spouting off random snippets of Theodoran when distressed. Conf is fluent in Common, Theodoran, Modern Elvish, and Ithanian, and he has a fair understanding of Tekree and Evokk.
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    Personality and Abilities (Required)

    Personality Traits


    • Level-Headed: Conf is slow to anger and even when he is he rarely shows it. Growing up believed to be the bastard son of a Lord can lead to a lot of hate and bullying. He used to explode at people, but over time stopped caring and mellowed out. This allows him to almost always be able to remain calm in even the most dire situations and come up with the best method to deal with them. He is also very quick to forgive many grievances.
    • Impulsive: Though he tries to follow his mind, he often times gets swept up in the action and acts on instinct. This often lands him is sticky situations. He will leap into a situation head-first and stumble out of it wondering 'what the hell was I thinking?' - Edit: To clarify, while he prefers to think and plan everything out, in the heat of the moment he is not above acting on impulse- for better or worse.
    • Planner: Conf likes to plan ahead whenever possible, despite his sometimes impulsive actions in the heat of the moment. He likes to gather as much information on whatever he is about to do and tries to come out with the best option he can. That being said, his morals can cloud this at times- the stereotypical 'save the one you love or a few strangers' would be a very hard one for him etc.
    • Team Player: Conf can be more of a follower at times- he knows to listen to a good idea- going along with what people suggest without much complaint. However, he is also not unknown to the concept of leading a group, and has actually had great success in this on countless occasions, even leading a force of nearly 120 Loyalists against the Usurpers in the Battle Of Regalia. He usually takes suggestions and ideas the others give him and uses them as well as his own plans though, so he is a little back-and-forth with this. (Can follow or lead depending)
    • Drinker: Conf has seen a lot of crap in his short life. Battles and death and crazy stupid crap that defies explanation. As such, he tends to be a bit of a drinker. And he is very bad at it. He can hardly handle a single Brunnoss without getting tipsy and by the second he is gone. All caution and tactical thinking goes out the window when he is drunk, as per usually, and he seems to become very affectionate when he has had a bit of alcohol in him.
    • Independent: He dislikes relying on others in his personal life. He keeps his emotions carefully shelved and tries to avoid attachment to others emotionally- mainly due to his experiences with the mother of his child 'losing' the baby. He likes to do things by himself, or at least make an effort, rather than asking for help first. That being said, he is not an idiot, and if he needs help is is not opposed to asking.
    • Overconfident: Conf often times falls victim to his own ego and pride, believing he is more than capable of handling something that is far far more than he is really able to deal with. He has succeeded against all odds in situations that should have meant certain death, and this has filled him with this false belief in his own ability. In reality, much of these situations were down more on luck than any planning or skill on his own part. Nonetheless, he continues onwards, certain he will be victorious.
    Strengths


    • Charisma: Conf finds himself in unfavorable situations very frequently, but he is usually able to talk his way out of them. He is able to quickly make friends- and sometimes enemies if that is the intent- , especially over a bottle of Brunnoss. He is very outgoing and vocal, especially when those he knows, or drinks, are involved. He has put this skill to good use on countless occasions, swaying would-be enemies, and recruiting for the Crows- or his own personal groups.
    • Forgiving: While some may question whether this is a Strength or not, Conf certainly sees it as so, and it has aided him in the long run on numerous occasions. Conf is very forgiving of most things, hardly being able to hold much of a grudge for more than a day. Even the worst of people can be redeemed in his mind, given enough time and effort.
    • Tactics and Strategy: A bit of a self-fashioned tactician, Conf has picked up a very wide and varied amount of knowledge on tactics and battle. Some might say he is even a natural at it, and though he lacks the refinement needed to excel, he is being tutored further in the Tactical Discipline. He has a good mind for abstract thinking and planning. Much of his knowledge on tactics and battle in general come from experience, as he served as a mercenary for several years. He is also an avid reader, and has picked up and studied many books written my generals of the past, successful or not, to learn from their successes and failures.
    Weaknesses

    • Trusting: He is far too trusting or people, due to his forgiving nature. Often times, he must be betrayed several times before finally losing trust in person fully. His swiftly made 'friends' are often simply abusing his trust for their own gain. This has mellowed out over his time in Regalia, though it is still a fault he can not avoid.
    • Strength: Conf is not very strong, often only managing enough to barely hold his own against an opponent around his age. His strength lies in his legs more than his upper body, and those hardly count in a fight. Especially coupled with his lack of an arm.
    • Loud: Holding many strong beliefs about many controversial topics, it is hardly a surprise that this may result in one finding themselves in hot water. So, it should stand to reason that one with his dilemma would learn to hold their tongue, but Conf has never managed this. He is very open about most of his beliefs, and when he gets on a tangent it is often hard for him to shut the void up. Or control how loudly he is speaking.
    • One Arm: During the Great Sewer Boom, Conf was trapped by falling rubble, his left arm up to nearly the shoulder pinned under a large rock, which also pulverised most of the bones in the arm. Conf , as a result, was left with two options. Sit and hope somebody stumbled across him, risking starvation or further collapse of the unstable tunnels. Or, to cut off his own arm. As you do, he chose the latter. He used his short sword to cut through what was left of his arm, leaving him with a slight stub at his shoulder.
    Personality and Abilities (Expansion)


    • Quirks: Conf often rubs his chin when thinking, despite his lack of not only facial hair, but the ability to grow facial hair. He also often sits with his legs curled up to his chest, (think L from Death Note- its something I do in real life so eh.) when in a more personal setting.
    • Skills: Conf is a decent cook and is very knowledgeable in the layout and function of a boat- the parts and such.
    • Talents: Conf is a natural runner, being a smidge above average in speed and endurance.
    Likes


    • Pasta: Conf LOVES pasta. All pastas. Cheesy, tomato sauce, Alfredo, lasagna, spaghetti, everything. He would sit and eat pasta all day if he could.
    • Drawing: Conf enjoys sitting down and drawing thing as well- usually people. He is not overly skilled, but they are somewhat good. You can easily recognize who is he drawing that the least. He is terrible at backgrounds and perspective though, so he rarely draws them.
    • Socializing: Conf is a very social person. He enjoys talking to people, seeing people, dancing, drinking, listening to music with people, etc. He loves hearing people's stories and tales- even the obviously made up ones- and sits in the tavern for hours just talking and listening. In recent times, after the Crimson Purge and the fall of G.R.R he has become more reserved, though he is still very social with his friends.
    Dislikes


    • Discrimination: Conf is very much a social justice warrior- hence his revolution- and he hates seeing anyone judged based on gender, sexuality, race, culture or anything. This is one of the few things that will actually anger him and can motivate his to fight someone. He would go against a group in a fight on his own over certain things.
    • Spicy foods: Spicy foods and Conf have never gotten along. His uncle always cooked a spiced fish dish that was hot enough to make his nose run for hours and he HATED it. Any time he smells spicy foods or overly seasoned foods it makes his stomach do a little turn.
    • Rain: He hates the rain, he dislikes getting wet and then being cold and having to change and then sitting inside while its all dark and meh out. He thinks it is loud and annoying. He will do anything to avoid going out in the rain if he can.
    Relationships (Optional)

    Allian Smith - Conf was briefly with Allian, whom he had a child with, when he first visited Regalia. She abandoned the child while he was away, and on learning this he left again.
    Marra Ladveer - Marra is the child that was abandoned. After returning to Regalia he was reunited with her, and they now live together in the Koura Tower.
    Raven Vitae - Raven served on Koura's ship with Conf, and they became very good friends. She drags him around on her adventures often, usually leading to trouble... Especially if Conf drinks- in which case random shit, like him waking up with no shirt on the piano in the Noble Lodge, happens. They were recently engaged, and are in the process of planning the Wedding. However, the Deathling Beck Grave murdered her, and had her severed head sent to Conf.
    Kokoura - Koura was the captain of the Pirate Crew Conf was a part of for several years. Later, in Regalia after he and Raven Totally. Had. Nothing. To. Do. With. Her. Ship. Crashing. She lived with them in the Tower.
    Tara - Tara was more or less Conf's only friend growing up, as both of them were outcasts in their own way- Conf being the rumored bastard son of a Lord, and Tara being a Dakkar. Over the years, the duo found themselves in trouble frequently- Tara starting fights, Cond trying to talk them out of them... Eventually, Tara and Conf both found there was onto Captain Kokoura's ship, where they served for several years together as pirates, before Conf left for Regalia. Tara soon followed, after hearing Conf has found her sister there, and Tara now lives in the Kokoura Tower with Conf, Raven, and Zara (and a few misc Klein and Yanar and Vampires).
    Zara - Zara is Tara's sister, and they have known of each other for some time. Conf only began to form what he considers a friendship with her however after finding her in Regalia, after she had been essentially skinned alive by the Hammers. Conf and Tara are both in the process of teaching her Common.


    Uncle:
    Kendritch Ladveer - Age 63.
    Mother: Allia Ladveer - Age 32, Deceased.
    Me: Conf Ede Ladveer - Age 34.
    Fiancee: Raven Vitae - Age 35. Deceased.
    Daughter: Marra Ladveer - Age 17.



    Life Story (Required)


    Childhood: (Growing up in Etosil)

    Conf grew up in a decently sized port town on the western coast of Etosil. He was raised by his mother for the first several years of his life, constantly the focus of scrutiny due to his questionable lineage. He earned a particular love for apples at this time as well- see, there was an Apple Orchard just a short walk over the hill from their Conf and his mother's home. He used to sneak up their and steal baskets of apples- at risk of losing a finger- and his mother's solution for "Disposing of the evidence" was to bake them into pies. Needless to say, he was a bit of a shit.

    He was constantly harassed by the other boys of the town, to the point of coming home injured many nights. This lead him to be fairly anti-social in his youth- but it also lead to the development of one of his closest friendships, through unconventional methods. The only person any of the boys treated worse than Conf was a young female Dakkar, named Tara. Conf took the route many children did, and thought to insult her as he had been. What resulted was a broken arm two black eyes, and too many bruises to count. However after this point, they forged an awkward alliance with their tricks on the other village boys, that grew into a full fledged friendship. They, slowly, taught each other their languages Conf learning Tekree and Tara learning Common.

    Unfortunately, his mother fell ill, and died shortly after Conf turned 12. He moved in with his uncle, who was an old soldier and teacher, soon after. There he began his formal schooling, learning mathematics, history, and other major subjects. After nearly a month of pestering, he finally convinced his Uncle to teach him the basics of swordplay, on the condition he not let up on his more conventional schooling. He never faltered in either, putting his (almost) full attention towards training and learning. "Almost", because at the end of the day, literally, Conf was still a little shit. He continued to stealthily wreck havoc on the village boys, who had moved on from tormenting Conf and put their efforts towards Tara. On one such occasion, he sought to steal the anvil from the smithy that one of the boys worked at. He quickly realized this was a dumb plan. However, after nearly being caught by the Smith, he darted into a side room that happened to be the boy's. After nicking many valuables, which he later tossed into the ocean, he hit him in the head with a hammer- knocking him unconscious but causing no serious damage- and bolting. He was never caught for it either.

    Young Adult: (Mercenary and Pirate)


    When Conf was 17, he left the island on a ship, to become a mercenary. He did succeed in that area, to a certain degree, however he only served in the band he was with for three years. While the group was in Regalia dealing with the necessary paperwork, Conf fell for and eventually impregnated a woman in the city. He was pulled away on a mission just 5 months into the pregnancy. He returned around 7 months later, to find that the child, a girl she named Marra, "Lost", and that she had spent their money on opium and hard alcohol.

    He left the city shortly after, where he met up with Tara, and her sister Zara, and the trio joined Captain Kokoura's Pirate Crew. Conf's romances did not improve much there- Tara believed it was unnatural for a human to not have a mate by his age, and as such attempted to set him up with literally everyone on board the ship. Most of the crew were female, but there were several especially awkward instances that rose from this.

    Conf eventually overcame this embarrassment, and managed to make several friends. One of these was most certainly NOT Raven Vitae. During Tara's match-making efforts, she managed to get Conf to walk in on Raven. Which resulted in him nearly being thrown overboard- thankfully this was stopped by an angry Tara, who was sure it was Conf's fault somehow, and that he must be "Doing it wrong." . Over time however, mostly due to the required proximity of all the crew, Conf and Raven resolved their differences, and became good friends. To the point of eventual romantic feelings developing- to which Tara whispered "I did tell you so yes?" .

    In an unexplained event that Totally. Had. Nothing. To. Do. With. Conf. And. Raven. Koura's ships Inexplicably. Crashed. For. No. Reason. And did I mention Conf and Raven were not definitely were not involved. Totally. Not. At. All.

    This resulted in the crew being stuck in Regalia. During this stay, early on in fact, Conf discovered that his daughter was not only alive, but doing well- or, well enough for someone who grew up in the Sewers. She was taken in, though mostly raised by the crew. Her adventures since then have been equal parts fantastical and convoluted, with a mix of madness. She recently returned to the city, older and more seasoned in combat, and experienced with the world.

    Conf also spent two years in Academia Della Arti Militare in Montania, furthering his tactical skills. Despite what many would call a lazy attitude, he managed to pass through seemingly with easy, ranking very highly, and was easily able to find a private tutor willing to further his education.

    Early Regalian Years: (Criminal)


    Life in Regalia has been tough for Conf. He has developed very Liberal views over his life, especially on Koura's ship since most of the crew was both female and not of the Humanium. He had never been overly Unionist either for the same reasons. He frequented the Sewers, getting into trouble more often than not. He was down under during the Flood and subsequent "Crimson Purge". He witnessed countless defenceless men, women, and children of numerous races being slaughtered mercilessly by the Guards.

    After several strange situations, he even became a member of G.R.R for a total of four days. Eventually, he found himself with Jakkios and his band of "Shippers". Unfortunately, his friend and ex-crewmate committed suicide seemingly from a noble's influences. This further ingrained a general distaste for the way the city was run. And then the Deathlings came.

    Conf's Fiance, Raven Vitae, went missing leaving behind nearly no trace. That is until he received her severed head in a box... She had apparently been murdered by the Deathling, Beck Grave, whom she also managed to kill. After receiving the box , and destroying the majority of their home's interior in a rage, Conf had an attempt at ending himself, via hanging. The railing which he secured the rope to was damaged in his assault on the house however, and snapped just in time for him to continue existing. Though, he did come out of the affair scarred- figuratively and literally- by a thick scar around his upper neck from the rope.

    As if the gods had decided Conf had not had a terrible enough month, shortly after his finace's murder, we was caught in the Sewers during The Great Sewer Boom. During the Collapse, Conf's left arm was pulverized and pinned under a large chunk of stone. After awaking from having passed out- as you do when every single bone in your arm is simultaneously shattered to shards along with said arm becoming the world's most painful pancake- Conf was forced to chose between bleeding out and/or starving to death, or cutting off his own arm and only risking the former. He obviously chose the first. Conf now only has a very small stub at his shoulder where his left arm once was.

    The Battle of Regalia: (Tactician and Leader)


    Conf lost a great deal to the Tyrant Queen's rule. His Fiance. His Arm. A fair portion of his sanity... He was done. Conf began to draft up dozens of plans, contingency plans, and other related documents for how to reclaim the city under a variety of situations. He gathered his resources, built up stockpiles, marked chokepoints and escape routes... Until finally, the day came. The beginning of the end of Lo's reign was marked with a massive beam of light.

    Conf quickly began the initial phases of one of his countless plans, gathering intelligence. He learned that the Resistance was attacking, and he began to hear about smaller skirmishes from groups within the city. He gathered around a dozen able and willing Loyalists from the Sewers, and set out. Within the hour, he had increased that number to nearly fifty.

    Using his tactical and strategic prowess, he began a long battle against the Usurpers, cutting swaths through their forces. With two great victories At The Golden Willow, and The Way Into The Commerce District, and a force now numbering near the two hundred, Conf attempted an assault on a large gathering of Deathlings in the Shadow of the Azure Spire. However, this time they were evenly matched in numbers, out matched in equipment, and even slightly in skill as well, for the Usurper Captain was very skilled. However, as the Tyrant herself fell, so di the Deathlings, barely in time, and the group was victorious- albeit with heavy casualties.

    Post Battle: (Recovery)

    After the battle, drinking and feasting were found aplenty within the city. With supplies trickling back in and the threat of starvation passing, the city was well and truly on the road to recovery... Conf attended several debates, as a debater even speaking in favor of his more Liberal ideals, though tactfully so. He has also expanded his knowledge on Urban warfare, given the way things are going and his less than optimistic view on life at the moment, he feels that is information he will need...



    TO BE CONTINUED! As events develop!


    Religious an Political Views (Extra)

    Conf is very, strange shall we say, from the perspective of the VAST majority of the population. He has come to the belief that all- or many- religions are right, and that they are simply separate takes on the same general concepts by different societies. He believes that most, if not all, of the gods exist in one form or another. Yet he chooses not to follow any. He believes the gods are selfish, greedy, and manipulative, only seeking to further their own ends.

    That being said, after years of disregarding the "gods", he has, eventually, found one that at least seems to suit him, though it can hardly be said that he worships them. While researching the Attribates, and the Elven Pantheon, he began to notice a series of discrepancies in regards to Liberty. Despite her depiction as favoring slavery of other races under the Altalar, all references to her outside to Elven writings- the few that suggested she was directly involved and the ones he pieced together as likely involving her- seemed to indicate the opposite, that she was fully and utterly opposed to slavery or the confinement of any in any fashion. Combined with her other morals that seemed kindred to Conf's own, Conf has decided that she is the closest he will find to a god suited to his morals, and has decides should she need his aid- as rare and absurd as that notion is- he would gladly give it.

    To Conf, the most important things in life are having an overall pleasant experience, helping others have an overall pleasant experience, and stopping those who would do harm to others for any reason.

    He is fairly easy going in that regard, not really protesting most religions, unless they are built on doing harm- physical, emotional, psychological, or otherwise- to others. Specifically, anything involving unwilling or brainwashed sacrifice, torture, murder, or racism will general be on his shit list. Which includes the majority of Void Worship and Unionism. That being said, in many cases, he is more likely to ally himself with a Unionist than a Void Worshiper, simply because Void Worship tends to be more direct harm, while Unionism is more indirect and less dramatic.
    Conf is most certainly a Jacobinist. He disagrees with a large majority of what the Regalian Empire does, for reasons that are fairly obvious if you read the "Religious Views" Section, as the Empire is founded on and based around Unionism, and racism, and oppression. In his earlier days, Conf was far more radical, suggesting and even collaborating plans to bring down the Empire. He got as far as uniting several of the larger groups and gangs of the time in a make shift alliance under him, before circumstances lead to that plan's abandonment- mainly the Flood and Purge, and the fall of G.R.R.

    In recent times, Conf has become far less radical, seeking the more subtle and peaceful solution. He does what little he can to keep the sewers peaceful- as they are the most accepting of his views, both political and religious. Slowly though, he inches up the proverbial ladder. Allying himself with many groups, making friends and enemies. He even obtained an Invitation to the Imperial Ball. Conf's life is very much a balancing act between the Surface and Sewers, fitting for the bastard son of some Lord in the lands beyond the city.

    Conf believes that all people, regardless of race, have the right to fair treatment by the court, and protection under the law. He believes that, even if they do not have equal representation, the needs of the other races, such as Orcs and Dakkar, should be accounted for and taken into consideration by the Law. He believes everyone, regardless of race, should have equal opportunity to rise in position both in the Government and Military is they prove adept. And he believes Regalia needs to end their war-driven ways, and that any culture based as heavily on conflict as the Empire is, is doomed to fall dramatically, as the Elven Empire prior did.
     
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  2. Beetletoes

    Beetletoes Regalian Prince

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    Only the Tarchlann can have purple eyes, but as it's clear you aren't playing one of them, I'd advise changing the color.
     
  3. Conflee

    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    Aight, changed to Green.
     
  4. FireFan96

    FireFan96 Ever present, Ever seeing Staff Member Lore2

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    This looks pretty good. I'll just post the few things that need deletion:
    • that little template directions below every section. It's not needed, since we can see exactly what it reads.
    • Remove the Special Permission segment if it isn't available at the current time.
    • delete "Thats the extent of his story up to the point of this being posted." in the life story. We know that that is the extent of his life until now.
    Onto the little things, more or less a semi-peer review:
    1. Calm and Brash seem to be opposite sides of the spectrum the way you describe them. The definition of calmness can mean not giving in to instinctual urges. Maybe see if you can fix the possible contradiction there.
    2. The same might be said about Follower and Independent. But I think just finding a different word choice is all that's needed.
    3. Love the sitting quirk. Mostly because I do that 70% of the time on on my computer.
    That's about all the advice I can give. More or less delete the template directions and change a few words around. Definitely a very nice app.
     
  5. Conflee

    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    Thanks for the feedback, I changed it around a little to be a bit clearer what I meant- I originally had 'Follower?' with the question mark to show he was a bit in between but I changed it to Follower/Leader to be a bit more apparent lol. Also added a note on 'Brash' tp clear that up- While he likes to plan things out and act on logic, in the heat of the moment he does stupid stuff sometimes what what I was getting at, etc.

    Can't wait until it (eventually) gets reviewed- I have heard it takes a while sometimes...

    EDIT: Also planning on adding a sketch of the character to the post, someone suggested it. :)
     
  6. FireFan96

    FireFan96 Ever present, Ever seeing Staff Member Lore2

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    Alright, mini check:

    • I think Follower/Leader could be swapped to Team Player. This would prevent the possible contradiction with the two words, while still giving the same idea.
    • Maybe Calm to Level-Headed.
    • Brash to Impulsive
     
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  7. Conflee

    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    Alright I went through and tinkered with the wording on some things to make it more clear. :)
     
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  8. Conflee

    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    I went through and did a bit of grammar / spell checking too, found a few things wrong.
     
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    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    Edit: I updated the life story to include his reaction to the Emperor's new law about 'gold eyes'.
     
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    Tactical is a strength, not a personality trait. Remove it and add a new -personality- trait.

    Add one more non mini weakness

    Colour all changes in blue and tag me when you're done
     
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    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    Ok @Jared4242 I changed Tactical to Planner and added the Weakness 'Loud' (I didn't know what else to call it but it fits Conf, Especially after the Gold-Eye event) :)
     
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    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    Update: The coin was stolen, so I edited that on the sheet.
     
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    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    Update :

    A week prior to the Bone Horror situation, Conf received a letter from Lord Arim Helethium of the Etosian Isles verifying the circumstance of his birth. Thus, he has added Helethium to his formal name, "Conf Ede Helethium Ladveer" (though in game im just Conf Ladveer because that name is too damn long)
     
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    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    Update:

    I updated all of the information, adding bits, changed my body build slightly as he has been doing labor and gained some muscle recently, as well as adding his studies of Antimagic I have been doing IC for 6 months, and the Life Story was updated to include everything post-Crimson Purge.
     
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    Korgex12 Coming Soon

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    Aren't you supposed to tag your reviewer? Also, he kinda needs to be tagged to re-approve it officially anyway since editing automatically removes the "Approved" tag. :P
     
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    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    Oh crap I didnt even notice that lol. (Iv been doing Player Quests this whole time too LOL e-e)

    Tbh there werent a lot of major changes to the character himself, just added details, and him learning Antimagic which happened inagme so eh XD

    @LumosJared
     
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    Gfg.
     
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    Read over. Approved.
     
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    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    Updated Conf's backstory a little to fit whats in RP. Also, added a nice scar around his neck because he tried to hang himself.
     
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    Daekon gay

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    Isn't Tekree only speakable and understandable for dakkar??
     
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    -looks around-

    Hey.... I sense one too many arms...
     
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    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    Idk , I always justify it as, he had 12 years to learn and hes speaking at best broken Tekree. Plus it is being rewritten with the Dakkar rewrite anyway to not be scent based so eh. XD yolo!
     
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    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    Expanded Conf's backstory up to the current date, added a weakness:

     
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    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    A couple minorly major changes to Conf due to progression mostly. Gave him a more lore-compliant name, with his old name being a nickname now. I also removed the Strength "Swordsman" , added the Strength " Tactics and Strategy" , and added the Weakness "One Arm" because he well, lost an arm. He cant be a good swordsman now with, one arm, and it serves as a pretty heavy weakness given he cant cast anymore and has issues with other things. @LumosJared

    Im going to be updating his life story soon as well, but thats not really anything important enough to need re-approving lol.

    Iv also added the School of Leadership , Tactical Discipline.
     
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    Conflee Me an the bois at 3 am lookin for BEANS!

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    @LumosJared I bumped Conf's age up a bit to speed up his tutoring a bit, so that it might be usable in battles within a year instead of what would have originally been a 2 year IRL wait. I doubt this will be any issue but tagging just in case.
     

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